Darth Revan's Sith Holocron

• Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:25, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Drew Karpyshyn really nailed Revan's teachings in Path of Destruction.

(2 Inqs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 22:25, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
2. —Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 22:40, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
3. Menkooroo 00:35, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
4. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 07:05, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
5. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 03:31, August 19, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Twin:

• I would suggest formatting this article like Asli Krimsan's holocron, our only holocron FA to date.
  • Done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:31, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
• I would also suggest using "Darth" Revan when talking about the holocron, because using only "Revan" could confuse potential readers into thinking that the holocron was created while Revan was a Jedi.
  • Agreed. Changed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:31, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
• Other than that, not bad.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 22:17, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, Tommy!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:31, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
• No problem, just a couple more. I would suggest removing the image of Darth Bane so that the article doesn't seem so cluttered with images.
  • Sure thing, done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:37, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
• I would also refrain from linking to Sith magic because, while "ritual" does lead one toward Sith magic, the thought bomb was never explicitly stated to be a part of.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 22:35, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • OK, removed the links. Thanks for letting me know.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:36, August 16, 2010 (UTC)

Trayus Academy

• Actually, I only saw one issue: you make no note of the fact that Bane eventually transcribed the flimsi recordings into the Telos Holocron, as noted in The Essential Guide to the Force. With that, you'll also need to note that Revan's teachings survived within the Holocron to later be studied by Sidious and then the New Jedi Order in 40 BBY.
  • Done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:31, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
• Other than that, very thorough and well-written. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 06:39, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, Trayus!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:31, August 17, 2010 (UTC)

Soresu

• KotOR and the Bane Trilogy together? How could I resist?
  • I couldn't, which is why I'm doing this!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:24, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• a Sith Master who trained more than one apprentice in the dark side was a fool, stating that multiple students would combine their efforts and overthrow the Master. Could be made more clear that apprentices working together is a bad thing, as each individual is weaker than the Master.
  • Done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:24, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• IIRC, I don't think Bane sensed the Holocron as much as noticed it with his eyes.
  • He did sense it, though before he removed the stone concealing it he didn't know what he sensed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:24, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • According to my copy of PoD, it says he noticed the light with his eyes, and simply used the Force to activate the opening mechanism. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 10:57, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
      • I believe it's referring to the violet hue given of by the stone in front of the Holocron, rather than the object itself. He's not looking at the Holocron itself at this point. I added that it was the power of the Holocron he sensed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:57, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• Is it said that the Jedi removed the artifacts from the Temple, and not some other group?
  • After re-reading it, the book doesn't exactly say, though in the previous chapter, it says that Lehon was closed off by the Republic on the Jedi's instructions. Maybe I could say Jedi and Republic forces, but it's probably not a good idea.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:32, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• The Holocron also explained the purpose and nature of ancient Sith rituals, which were considered dangerous for a Sith Master to attempt. Were all rituals dangerous, or only the ones he taught?
  • I put "some of which," because this is actually what the book says.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:24, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• I think that's it; interesting article. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 00:06, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:24, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
• Oh yeah, and the Holocron's last words the strong rule; the weak are meant to serve should have mention in the contents section. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 10:57, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Done. Thanks for the review!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:01, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • Before you sign off on the article, do you think I should add that Revan tells the user to take what he taught them and use it well?—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 03:32, August 19, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• Thanks to Menkooroo and Jonjedigrandmaster for pre-nom reviews.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:38, August 16, 2010 (UTC)