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Welcome <insert name here>: This is my talk page. If you have a question or a comment, please leave a message. I will try to respond to it in under two days. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 01:28, April 13, 2011 (UTC) CA Nom
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Thank you for the Article Count
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Thanks for pointing out the incorrect article count, sometimes I forget to increment the numbers. I have only nominated eight CAs though, unless I forgot to put one on the page. Please tell me if I forgot to put one in my portfolio.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 12:51, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
Whoops
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Sorry about that. I got it through Random Article and thought "Perfect. Something relatively simple" (In other words, this is Wikia's fault. :p). You can do the article if you'd like. My editing's claerly stagnated as of late, and I won't even be able to use the computer I'm on right now after next Monday. NaruHina Talk ![]()
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Fi'lang
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Slammer
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- "In 21 BBY, Slammer's squadron" I try to encourage some people to avoid this because this sounds like Slammer owns or has control of the squadron which isn't true. Not to mention later on you said Ahsoka led the squadron which could be confusing for some.
- Reworded
- I think it's best to not mention the starfighters in the intro because it does seem that you're saying Ahsoka was flying in a Torrent starfighter which isn't true.
- Removed
- You first say that Blue Squadron was assigned to destroy the blockade around Ryloth, but later on you mention that they were only tasked to destroy Tuuk's ship only. I think it would be best if you say Blue Squadron was assigned to destroy Captain Tuuk's blockade around Ryloth or something alone those lines. I think the later mentioning of Tuuk is what makes this confusing. See what you can do about this.
- How's that?
- IIRC it wasn't because Blue Squadron met heavy resistance from the droids to force Anakin and Yularen to order a retreat, but rather when the droids attacked the three Venator Star Destroyers, as well as the arrival of more Confederate ships that joined Tuuk's blockade. Also could you possibly mention that the Vulture droids damaged several of their fighters? You don't have to say that a clone died, though.
- Changed
- "Although Commander Tano at first disobeyed her superiors' orders, she and Blue Squadron eventually returned to the Republic's command ship, but not before all but two of Blue Squadrons' ten clone pilots were killed." This sentence is mainly focusing on Ahsoka's poi instead of Slammer. I think it's best to not mention that Ahsoka was a moron and rather mention that Skywalker and Yularen gave Tano the order to retreat, and then as they headed back toward the Resolute, and then mention the final surviving clones, which Slammer himself.
- How's that?
- "Trained as a clone pilot, Slammer learned how to pilot a variety of starfighters for the Republic Navy" Where in that databank entry does it say that Slammr learned how to fly a variety of starfighters for the Republic Navy?
- In the Databank, "The clone trooper starfighter pilots received broad cross-training with all the standard starfighters of the Republic." Can we not then assume Slammer was trained to pilot a number of different starships.
- I see a few instances of "Slammer's Squadron" in the bio.
- Tried to remove those.
- I think you could set up Blue Squadron again, but after introducing the Ryloth issue. I did remove the names of the group because it didn't quite fit where it originally stood. We don't know if Slammer served alongside them before 21 BBY. Possibly you could take a look at the Axe article.
- I added it back in. How's that?
- In the intro you say that Blue Squadron was assigned to destroy Tuuk's blockade, but in the bio you say that only Ahsoka was assigned to destroy it.
- Reworded
- "Realizing the battle was lost," Are you sure that it was implied this way?
- Made a factual correction.
- "Slammer, under pressure from the enemy fighters, was unable to help Axe when his squad leader called on him for assistance, resulting in Axe too being shot down." I think this is better suited for the P&T because you have to go into more detail and explain why Slammer couldn't help Axe. However, seeing as you did, could you possibly reword this.
- I'm not sure how I could explain it anymore.
- "Slammer was a clone pilot trained to handle a variety of starfighters for the Grand Army of the Republic," This goes back to my databank objection above.
- See above
- "but he was not skilled enough to save Axe when his squad leader asked Slammer for help during the battle over Ryloth." Who is this squad leader? As it stands, it's very confusing because it sort of conflicts with the bio's similiar sentence.
- See above.
- I'll go through the article again if you don't mind. :P JangFett (Talk) 18:59, August 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks Jang. Hopefully it'll look better now. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 20:04, August 17, 2011 (UTC)
Music pre-nom!!!
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Well, I think The Flag Parade is close to being ready for the GAN. You think you could drop by and give it a pre-nom? MasterFred![]()
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Jorran
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Hey Kilson! Could you look over Jorran for me? I just want to see what you find before I start polishing it. Thanks! OLIOSTER (talk) 13:37, August 27, 2011 (UTC)
84-U hunting rifle
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Deadeye Duncan FA nom?
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Hello, it hit me recently that I was not extremely thourough when I wrote the Deadeye Duncan article. I played the part of KOTOR over again and found that there was a decent amount of information that I had left out. After exapnding the article and explaining things better here and there I am convinced that I could try for an FA. If you have the time and don't mind, could you look over the article and see if the changes I have made are good ones? If you think I am still missing something please let me know. I would appreciate your guidance with this article, thank you for your time.--Exiled Jedi ![]()
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Graffiti-bomb
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Imperial long-range rocket rifle
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Barn burning
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Hey Kilson,
Do you have any interest in writing something on the barn burner for the Wookieepedia newsnet? If not, I don't mind writing one, but you definitely have first dibs after the fantastic job you did hosting it. Let me know! Menkooroo 05:58, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
Battle of Kessel
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Hey Kilson. I hope you're doing well. You've been away from the site for a while, but just a heads-up that a couple of objections to the Battle of Kessel (0 ABY) FAN are now eighteen days old. I'd sofixem myself, but one of them is a question that I don't know the answer to. Hopefully you can address them in the next few days. Cheers. Menkooroo 04:21, October 10, 2011 (UTC)
Braha'tok-class gunship
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Battle of Kessel (0 ABY)
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Congrats on another fine FA, Kilson. Whenever you return to us, I hope you'll keep 'em coming. Cheers! Menkooroo 06:52, October 19, 2011 (UTC)
AC meeting 40
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AC meeting 40 has been scheduled and will take place in the parlour, where gentlemen may partake in cigars and brandies. - Cavalier One![]()
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Just a reminder
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Hey Kilson, I just wanted to remind you about the AC meeting this weekend, as you are one of the ACs who haven't yet signed in the attendance section. As an American, you can disregard thedaylight saving time nonsense; the meeting will take place at 4 PM Eastern time just like usual. Cheers, and hope to see you at the meeting. 1358 (Talk) 13:17, November 4, 2011 (UTC)
Conjectural naming precedence
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Hello there. Do we have a precedence now for renaming conjuctural battle titles? For instance, First Battle of Kessel, Second Battle of Kessel to say, Battle of Kessel (1 BBY), Battle of Kessel (0 ABY}...? Because I was thinking of moving the Fifth Battle of Kessel to Battle of Kessel (11 ABY) if so. Corellian Premier![]()
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AC meeting 43
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Just reminding you that AC Meeting 43 is scheduled for this Saturday, January 7. See you there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:36, January 5, 2012 (UTC)
Meeting 44
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AC Meeting 44 takes place today at 9 PM UTC (4 PM ET). Please make an effort to show up, and apologies for the late heads up. 1358 (Talk) 18:23, February 4, 2012 (UTC)