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Voorpee

  • Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Good article nomination that, quite simply, got too long. Well, in any case, before the nomination was closed, I had gotten support from one AgriCorp member and three regular users and didn't have any outstanding objections. Still, I'd be happy to address any other concerns that may be brought up. The original nomination can be found here. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

(Votes required: None. Required vote total reached, but current outstanding objections.)

Support

  1. It's nice to see a less serious article every so often. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:19, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 23:35, July 31, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:44, August 1, 2016 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote This... this is a thing. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:25, August 6, 2016 (UTC)
  5. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 17:31, October 30, 2016 (UTC)
  6. The Brave Goldfish (talk) 11:45, November 7, 2016 (EET)
  7. Great stuff! --Lewisr (talk) 01:10, January 25, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • The intro should be updated to include information about the cloning and talent show. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • I would reword the bts concerning Brown saying pets would appear in the third book as it is currently a bit confusing to read and not entirely clear that the Phantom Bully is the third book unless you follow the link. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is it clear if the original Voorpee is the one that is kept, or could he be amongst the ones returned to the zoo or the rescue organization? If it isn't clar you should at least mention this in the behind the scenes and maybe even in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, I tried something like that, but if you look back at Manoof's objections on the original Good article nomination, I ended up getting rid of it because if nothing is stated either way, then the custom is to not say anything at all. And the book really doesn't. After the whole mess happens, Voorpee himself isn't mentioned again at all. It's entirely unclear whether they ever even found the original Voorpee. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, July 22, 2015 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Can we get a timeframe in the intro?
  • "In the second semester, Novachez, who had been struggling with his friendships," What do you mean by this? Was he struggling to make friends or having issues with the friends he had?
    • Reworded to make it clear that he was having issues with the friends he already had. ProfessorTofty (talk) 23:21, July 29, 2016 (UTC)
  • No quote for the P&T? I know he doesn't speak himself, but I'm sure there are lines said about him. IFYLOFD (Talk) 01:08, July 29, 2016 (UTC)
    • Good idea. Quotation for the P&T section has been added. ProfessorTofty (talk) 23:21, July 29, 2016 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • The biography section needs to be subsectioned. Ideally, each section should have its own quote, provided there are enough quotes about Voorpee. I would think you could easily get at least three sections from what is there now.
    • Well, it was originally back when had nominated it for good article, but it was said that I didn't need them because the article wasn't long enough to merit it. I'll go ahead and get that taken care of. ProfessorTofty (talk) 22:40, February 11, 2017 (UTC)
  • If there are interviews with the author, it seems to me that you could add a quote to the BTS about Voorpee from one of them.
    • The interview in question is one that I did. Voorpee is only mentioned in one question and with the way that the question was answered, I don't think adding a quote is really going to enhance the article in any way. ProfessorTofty (talk) 22:40, February 11, 2017 (UTC)
  • If "This article is non-canon within the Star Wars Legends continuity.", then please mention this in the BTS and provide a source for it. If it is one of the books that state this, then just source it to the book in question. Without a source, it just looks like an assumption.
    • Added this to the behind-the-scenes and linked it to the previously mentioned interview, which references the fact that the story is not canon. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:20, February 12, 2017 (UTC)
  • You should try to limit the amount of times that you include a word in the main section in quotes. It doesn't seem necessary some of the times you are doing it. I think it would be easy to reword some of these sections to prevent the need for the quotes.
    • I can only find five instances of this and, I'm sorry, but in each case, it seems fitting. To explain further though, the character claim they are taking him for "walks," but said "walks" are actually an excuse to torture him. Another is "new pet," which again, I think makes more sense in quotation marks. Finally, I believe "commands such as 'jump' or 'roll over'" would be standard usage. ProfessorTofty (talk) 22:40, February 11, 2017 (UTC)
  • You have quite a few missing links in the article. Normally I would fix them myself, but there are a lot for an article this close to passing. For instance you are missing links to Torture, Week, Zoo, etc. You also have things that are linked in the introduction and not in the body. Everything needs to be linked once in the infobox, once in the introduction, and once in the body.
    • Everything done (and I think maybe one or two other things), except for "zoo." This is only ever referenced as "Naboo Zoo" throughout the article. Should I just link the "Zoo" at one point? I thought about adding something stating something like "a zoo based on the planet Naboo," but this almost seems like adding information that should be completely obvious simply for the point of getting a reference to "zoo" in there. Still need to do the sections - will take care of that later this evening or early tomorrow. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:20, February 12, 2017 (UTC)
      • Never mind on that last bit - I found a way to work in links for zoo that feel reasonably natural. ProfessorTofty (talk) 01:08, February 14, 2017 (UTC)
  • I realize that this nomination had enough votes to pass, but I believe that these deficiencies need to be addressed before it can be considered a featured article.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 00:01, February 9, 2017 (UTC)
    • Sure, I don't mind doing that. I'm all about making sure we have it as good a quality as possible. I just hope it can be handled with good speed since I did already have enough votes to pass. Anyway, gotta go right now, but I will take care of / reply to the rest before the end of the evening. ProfessorTofty (talk) 22:40, February 11, 2017 (UTC)
  • "Students at the academy were encouraged to care for Voorpee at the academy's care center, feeding him a preferred diet of live insects and keeping his soft fur clean." I'm seeing some of this information in the body, but some of it seems to be exclusive to the introduction.
    • Added an item regarding the care center and keeping his fur clean in the "Academy arrival" section. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • "arriving from the zoo with the other students at the beginning of the school year." This makes it sound like the students and Voorpee all went from the zoo to the academy at the start of the school year. Is this the case? If not, please reword this.
    • Ambiguous syntax, I suppose. I reworded it to just say that he arrived "at the Jedi academy" rather than "from the zoo," which is unnecessary since it already says he was on loan from the zoo. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • I believe you should keep the date consistent between reference 2 and the body of the article. In the reference, you have 196 BBY, while you link to 200 BBY in the body and introduction. You should probably just pipelink to 196 BBY in the body and introduction.
    • Hmm. Not sure what happened here, other than just trying to go with a nice round number Changed it to 196. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • If there are other quotes related to Voorpee from the novels, please provide those for the subsections in the biography section.
  • Does The Essential Atlas say that voorpaks are small, fuzzy creatures? That is what reference 3 seems to be saying in the biography right now.
    • No, you're right, that's only to source the fact that Naboo is Mid Rim. I changed that to reference from Return of the Padawan. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
      • You are still sourcing the fact that they are native to Naboo to the Atlas.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:29, July 11, 2017 (UTC)
        • How I am doing that? I now have the Essential Atlas reference directly after "Mid-Rim" and then have "planet Naboo" and following that, the reference to The Official Star Wars Fact File 106. Sorry, I'm just not sure what I'm missing here. ProfessorTofty (talk) 05:07, July 17, 2017 (UTC)
          • Right now you have "native to the Mid Rim" sourced to just The Essential Atlas. "Native" cannot be sourced to that.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:35, August 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • The third and final paragraphs of the biography would benefit from being reordered to present the events in a more chronological order. If would make sense to display the information in the current way if the article was about Novachez or someone else who found the information out in the presented order, but since this is outlining the events of Voorpee's life, a chronological ordering makes more sense. Just because a novel present the information in one order, does not mean that the article needs to as well.
    • Are you referring to the paragraphs "Return to school" and "Cloned chaos"? Because, if so, I'm not sure what you mean. Everything is in order both in terms of how it's presented in the novel and in terms of the actual chronology except for the very last sentence about how "It was later revealed that Cronah and Ronald Rinzler, a fellow student who styled himself as a politician, were responsible for the pranks, part of their continued effort to humiliate Novachez." Do you want me to move just the information in that sentence? Or is there something else I can do to make the timeline more clear? ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
      • What I am asking is for you to present the information in the order that it happens to Voorpee, not the order that it is mentioned in the book. You mention that Voorpee went missing and then reveal how that happened. You also mention the clones after you mention instances where the clones appeared. Writing it this way feels like a condensed version of the novel and not an article about the subject, which is what you should be aiming for.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:29, July 11, 2017 (UTC)
        • Ah, I got it now. Okay, how's that? ProfessorTofty (talk) 05:07, July 17, 2017 (UTC)
          • That is better. The second paragraph of Victim of bullying should be reordered in a similar fashion.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:35, August 24, 2017 (UTC)
            • Done. Only seemed to require a slight rewording, but let me know if you still feel anything's wrong. Otherwise, should be good to go. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:07, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
  • You should not use contractions in a Wookieepedia article outside of quotes.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:37, May 22, 2017 (UTC)
    • If this is true, I'd like to see a guideline in the Manual of Style or wherever saying such. I don't personally agree with this and I feel writing without contractions simply for no other reason than writing without contractions sounds forced and unnatural. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:38, May 26, 2017 (UTC)
      • This is actually a valid point, and until it is addressed I will have to withdraw my support as well. At the very beginning of our manual of style there is a reference that states "For information on the most basic writing techniques and styles, which are used here, see Wikipedia's Manual of Style." Encyclopedic writing is expected to follow basic rules of formal writing, and even putting aside rules imported from Wikipedia, avoiding contractions in encyclopedic/professional writing is a fundamental rule of style shared by APA, AP, IEEE, and other professional style guides. Contractions are only for informal/non-academic use. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 15:19, June 4, 2017 (UTC)
        • You didn't have to withdraw your support. I would have been happy to just corrected it. The only reason I did not do so immediately was because I did not believe it to be a rule. I did know that it was a rule on Wikipedia, but as we all know, Wookieedpedia is not Wikipedia. Nevertheless, it does appear based on what you're saying that Wikipedia's manual is considered to be the bedrock unless specifically contradicted, so I made the correction. I still retain my original opinion, but the rule trumps that. Anyway, I corrected it, though I feel the need to point out that there was only a single contraction of my own doing in the article to begin with. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:59, June 4, 2017 (UTC)
          • Thank you very much for being reasonable about this. And I mean that in a totally honest and non-sarcastic way that probably doesn't come across well in plaintext, especially given my reputation. ☺️ Disputes like this have historically tended to become entrenched, so I removed my support vote preemptively and that was probably premature. And WP:NOT is why I provided other references for standards of academic writing. I have unstruck my vote and look forward to this article's promotion. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 22:14, June 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • "It was not until towards the end of the school year that Cronah and Rinzler were the ones responsible for the prank." I think something is missing in this sentence.
    • Yeah, "were discovered to be the ones responsible." Fixed. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:07, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
  • The image quality for the images used in this article is pretty low. Were some of these images taken with a phone? In any event, the images should be replaced with higher quality scans.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:35, August 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • No, not with a phone, but perhaps not the greatest quality scanner. I've replaced three of them with images taken directly from the eBook version. I think the other two are okay, but if you feel otherwise, let me know, and I'll replace those as well. (The other two are the main image and the one showing all the clones, which I think is already from the eBook version.) ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:07, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
      • If I may interject here, to respond to Tofty's latest comment, it is now site policy that images added to articles be "as high quality as possible, as source availability and technical restraints permit." If you have reasonable access to digital eBook versions of this stuff, there's no excuse for any of the images in this article to be anything but. In other words, you need to be uploading digital versions of all of these images. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:34, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
        • And on that note, all images in this article now originate from the eBook versions. ProfessorTofty (talk) 14:25, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • "...trained here under Jedi Master Yoda and various other Jedi, including Mr. Garfield and Principal Mar." The last part of this sentence contains detail that does not seem to be important to the article subject. It would probably be better to just note that Yoda and various other Jedi trained the Padawans, rather than mention two of those Jedi.
  • If the class pet program was started by Gaiana, it seems to me that should be mentioned earlier in the article. This fits in more with the part about the Naboo Zoo loaning Voorpee to the academy.
    • How much earlier would you have me mention it? It's already in the first paragraph, right after I mention Gaiana and the school newspaper. Or do you think it should go in the intro? ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:13, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
      • I would mention the information about Gaiana with the information about him being temporarily on loan to the Jedi Academy. Since she started it due to her seeing voorpaks on Naboo, I believe all of the information should be mentioned together.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 01:19, September 30, 2017 (UTC)
        • This objection is still open.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 18:27, October 22, 2017 (UTC)
          • Oops. Alright, added information about the class pet program earlier in the paragraph. How's that now? ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:34, October 25, 2017 (UTC)
  • "...but per his own journal, he was not the culprit." Since you have already established in the article that he did not kidnap Voorpee, I don't think this adds anything.
    • Good point, that's a relic of when the order of events was listed differently. Removed. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:13, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
  • "Despite his anger and dismay, however, Novachez became disillusioned with the two bullies, whom he suspected did not really care about his feelings." Could you try and shorten this and merge it into the next sentence? You should note his motivations, but I do not believe that this level of detail is required.
  • "Lilly, a new student who was also with Gaiana and Roan, was not impressed by this teasing and asked Cyrus why his friend was so mean." How is this in any way related to Voorpee?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 13:07, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
    • I think I was just trying to explain the scene and give background, but yeah, it's not really related it, so I took it out. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:13, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
  • You have two different redlinks in the article currently. I see that the 195 BBY date is being discussed below, but there is also another redlink.
    • Yeah, that was the link for "year." I'm not even sure how that happened. Fixed that to link to "Standard year/Legends" before I had even read this objection. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:25, October 2, 2017 (UTC)
  • One thing is rather unclear in the end of the biography: Were they able to locate the original Voorpee or did they lose track and just keep one of them?
    • Well, this ties back to something that was being discussed in earlier objection. The book simply doesn't say and from what I understand, if the source material doesn't have anything to say about it, then we're not supposed to say anything about it either, right? I could put something like "it was uncertain whether the original Voorpee was ever found," but I was under the impression that it was procedure in a case like this to just not say anything at all. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:25, October 2, 2017 (UTC)
  • You mention that there were hundreds of clones in the introduction and in an image caption, but not in the actual biography. If this specific information is provided, it needs to be in the biography.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 01:19, September 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • Got it. Updated that section to say that it was hundreds. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:25, October 2, 2017 (UTC)
  • I think that the last several sentences of victim of bullying drift away from the topic of this article. Could you condense this information down somewhat?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 18:27, October 22, 2017 (UTC)
    • Condensed that down to a single sentence. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:34, October 25, 2017 (UTC)
  • There is some weird formatting going on with the article in the first section of the biography. Could you please correct this?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 20:58, November 10, 2017 (UTC)
    • Weird formatting? I'm not seeing it. It all looks A-OK on my end. Can you describe exactly what you're seeing or post a screenshot? ProfessorTofty (talk) 17:35, November 13, 2017 (UTC)
      • It was probably the whitespace in front of a paragraph, as seen here. It was causing the entire paragraph to be wrapped in <pre></pre> formatting. However AV seems to have fixed it. 1358 (Talk) 17:54, November 13, 2017 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The article can do a more precise job of dating the events therein. If Jedi Academy says Yoda is 700 years old, then that places that book in 196 BBY, not "approximately" 196 BBY, as the reference states. Moreover, the summary of Return of the Padawan clearly states that its events take place the following school year, which would be 195 BBY; and The Phantom Bully is the next year after that, 194 BBY. The article should affix these dates throughout the Bio with proper referencing for each date, modeled after the current date reference. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:57, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • Again, perhaps I'm missing something here, but if it states that he's 700 years old, how does that automatically place it in 196 BBY, or at least the entirety of it? For example, say that you know that a person was born on September 21, 1970. In our example, they're 46 years old, but that could make the current year either 2016, or the current year could be 2017, if it's January, February, March, etc., any date of the year before September 21, 2017. ProfessorTofty (talk) 14:25, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
      • Then call it circa 196 BBY, circa 195 BBY, and circa 194 BBY. Even that nails it down more narrowly than what the article is currently doing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:46, September 7, 2017 (UTC)
        • Alright, changed to say "circa" instead. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:13, September 9, 2017 (UTC)
        • Okay, I think I got it right now and changed it to 195 BBY. If that's still not it, could you just state straightforward exactly what it is you're saying or just make the change? Sorry, but things have been kinda hectic lately and I feel like I've just lost the thread at this point. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:25, September 21, 2017 (UTC)
          • P.S.: It appears we don't actually have a page for 195 BBY. Would you consider it worth creating a non-canon page for it, given that it isn't even mentioned directly, or should I just de-link it? ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:27, September 27, 2017 (UTC)
  • Let's start fresh on this one (we'll come back to the dating thing later). For starters, you don't need those two Amazon refs in the BTS. All of that information (publication year and author credit) is included in the books, so you can just use those same references. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:59, March 10, 2018 (UTC)
    • Got it. Amazon links dropped - now just referencing the books themselves. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:01, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • We have many articles for individual Jedi academies. Why not have one for this Coruscant academy? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:13, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • You know, that's a good question. Surprised it hadn't come up before now, but, yeah come to think of it, I can't think of any good reason not to have an article for this one. And, in fact I have now created that article. It's a stub right now, but I'll be working on it more tomorrow morning, including getting it linked up on other articles besides just Voorpee. ProfessorTofty (talk) 03:31, March 31, 2018 (UTC)
Furry Imperators
  • Please fix the backup links for the Databank citation and the Wizards.com citations.
    • I fixed the Wizards.com - however, what issue were you having with the Databank one? I just tried it myself and it worked just fine. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:27, September 27, 2017 (UTC)
      • Yes, that's because, fortunately for you, Xd1358 edited the DB template itself to the effect that the backup links should work automatically for most cases now. Imperators II(Talk) 21:33, September 27, 2017 (UTC)
  • Please add backup links for the Amazon citations. Imperators II(Talk) 20:59, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • I added one for Return of the Padawan, however, it doesn't appear that the Internet Archive has a backup page for The Phantom Bully. If you want, I could add a backup link for Internet Archive's page for the URL, but everything on there either clicks back as a redirect to Amazon's page or a broken link, not an actual backup page. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:27, September 27, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

Request to strike Exile Jedi's objections

Okay, this is why I start to get a bit irritated. I get distracted and neglect to check on the objections for jefflac for a little while and the nomination gets archived faster than I can blink. I know that you are supposed to be responsible for checking that and I blame myself too, but if I had just received a friendly note or anything, I would have been happy to take care of it. And I was in IRC several times last night also and nobody mentioned anything about it to me. I know there's procedures and all, but given the general apathy lately regarding the status articles process, it doesn't always pay to cling to procedure. Meanwhile, I've had these objections addressed for over three months and yet nothing has been done. If we're going to be so quick to enforce the one side, then the people who are responsible for doing the reviewing need to do their part too. In any case, before these objections came, I had the required votes to pass. I have addressed the objections and there has been no response. I am asking that the objections of Exiled Jedi be struck as having been addressed and un-responded, and if there are no other objections, then for the nomination to be passed. ProfessorTofty (talk) 14:45, May 18, 2017 (UTC)

  • After a conversation with Supreme Emperor, I have decided as a show of good faith to strike this request for now and give Exiled another chance to respond. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:01, May 20, 2017 (UTC)


G2 repair droid/Legends

  • Nominated by: Pyke syndicate AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:15, February 6, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: In commemoration for the 30th anniversary of Star Tours.

(0 Inqs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 Inqvotes required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 2 Inq votes required to pass.)

Support

  1. Sorry for the delay. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:01, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  2. Johnny 5's younger cousin. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:31, February 21, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead02
  • Where do the names A4-G2 and G2-7T actually come from? Looking in both sources they're referenced to, the images from their articles aren't named anywhere and I find it odd that both seem to have only first pictured listed in their appearances section. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • The opening sentence of the BTS seems to talk about a specific G2 not the series in general. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • "She went on to speculate that a G2's unending stream of conversation was responsible for problems with ships at Sluis Van Shipyards, out of which several ships had flows out of in the past several weeks, only to experience difficulty with one or more primary systems just after leaving the star system." This sentence needs some work, I assume flows out of is meant to just be flown? I'd also suggest changing up the use of several twice in a row. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
Imperators goose droid
  • Check your image caption punctuation.
  • Please make the captions of the last two images more varied and interesting.
    • Nothing to be done for G2-7T, but rewrote the latter. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • The non-canonical appearance in Apperances needs to be moved to a subsection.
  • Hmm, since you don't reference anything to G2 repair droid's CSWE entry, I have to ask if there even is one? If not, you should amend the CSWE listing in Sources to reflect which entries the droid was mentioned in.
    • There is, but IIRC, it is just a copy paste of TEGTD. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • Amazon backup link, please.
  • Hey, what's with the "in the galaxy" section? Can you rearrange the info so that there's no one-sentence paragraphs? And is there really no info on the last two G2 units mentioned in the section other than their names? Imperators II(Talk) 20:46, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • Fixed. The only reason we even have names for those droids is that they literally have them written on the side of their heads. So, no, we have additional context for them. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Some preliminaries: The introduction could definitely use some expansion. It's rather short compared to the body as is.
  • While there exists no LG entry for droid model articles, precedent indicates that a separate "Role" section could be employed and I definitely agree. The last paragraph in "Characteristics" seems to talk about what the droid could be used for rather than specific characteristics of the model.
  • As for the "G2 repair droids in the galaxy", I feel like it should be integrated into History rather than be its own section. It works well for species, but not so much for droids, I feel. Thoughts?
    • "ve started merging the sections, but I don't know how to handle droids like G2-7T, were we don't know where they exist in the timeline. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:50, March 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Do we not have a category for SoroSuub products? If not, I feel one should be created.
    • We do. The G2 cat is a subcat of it. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 00:49, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article is in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. Please fix. 1358 (Talk) 00:42, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have consecutive [2] references in "G2 repair droids in the galaxy". 1358 (Talk) 23:52, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Aesthetically, the article is a mess. I would recommend looking at it in Oasis if you haven't already to see what I mean:
    • The wall of text in the Characteristics section should be divided into at least two paragraphs.
    • Paragraph break(s), along with expanding the intro a substantial amount per ecks above (which I also would have objected to), will allow you to place that section's image in a less terrible spot. Currently, it's just sort of dropped awkwardly at the bottom of the section to avoid the infobox, which makes it bleed into the next section ("Role"). This should be avoided at all costs in every instance.
      • Done. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:01, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • That actually looks worse than what you had before. Images look particularly bad in Oasis if they're placed above a quote, especially if they're aligned left. The only way I can see this will work with the infobox is if you place the image before the second paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:05, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • Like so? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:19, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
            • Yes, that's the only place I can see it's going to look good left-aligned while working around the infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:24, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • The Role section could also use a paragraph break. Remember, this is Oasis formatting now, which means we have a much narrower page margin to work with. Ten-line paragraphs are not ideal.
    • The History section could absolutely use at least two subsections. It's typically a nice divide to place four-paragraph sections equally into two subsections.
      • As its set up currently, you have a natural divide between the histroy of the model and a synopsys of the G2 droids we know were out there. How about something like "Manufacturing history" and "G2 repair droids in the galaxy"? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:05, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • As long as it looks good, you can subdivide it any way you want. It would look best if you had one image per subsection there. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:05, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • Does that look okay? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:26, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
            • Why not use a subsection heading for the first half? Of course "History" is applicable, but that's why we use subsections, to tell us specifically what part of its history we're looking at for that portion of the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:59, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • The third paragraph of the History section is a 16-line paragraph in Oasis with the image there. Paragraph breaks are needed here. Implement them with the previous objection in mind. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:36, March 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Change reference 9 to use the more authoritative Penguin Random House site, along with the Penguin citation template. We should always be using information from the publisher where possible before resorting to Amazon. Remember that. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:14, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • I’ve cut the date down to 2006, as is the trend among featured articles as of late. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:29, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Where exactly are you taking the intro quote from (I'm guessing it's from some EndorExpress transcript)? Because it's particularly poor in terms of grammatical/punctuation formatting.
    • Yeah, it matches what we've got on our transcript. I'll listen to the clip and fix it up. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:59, April 1, 2018 (UTC)
      • Does that look any better? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:43, April 6, 2018 (UTC)
        • It's better. But it's customary to punctuate laughter with commas (example: ha, ha, ha, ha). And it seems to me just from looking at this quote (I don't know if there's audio for this or any other kind of indication) that it would be better to punctuate it as "Excuse me, please, but you'll have to check that excess baggage. Huh? Oh, I'm terribly sorry. I didn't realize that was your husband." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:23, April 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • The idea of an in-universe subject being "notable" is almost entirely an OOU construct that we have invented for ourselves. Unless a source explicitly says that someone or something is notable, we should not be applying this term on our own. Consequently, the intro should avoid referring to those two G2 droids as such if there's no basis for their "notability" in source material.
  • After dividing the intro into two paragraphs, I'd like to see each paragraph provide some kind of date time frame for its events. For example, the first paragraph can mention that the droids rose to prominence in the early years of the Empire, while the second paragraph can mention that the droid was discontinued in 12 ABY before being reintroduced two years later.
  • The 19 BBY-9 BBY dates are exclusive to the infobox, for one. And secondly, those dates can't be sourced to NEGTD, as they are not mentioned in the G2 droid entry.
  • That YouTube clip you showed me of G2-4T has enough witty remarks that you should be able to stick another quote in the "G2 repair droids in the galaxy" subsection. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:29, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
    • Found a quote that directly mentions the model. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 08:33, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does Scavenger's say this directly about the G2 droid, or are you extrapolating this from the book's R2 section? If it's the latter, I would recommend just removing this, as it seems kind of trivial otherwise: "...a little shorter than standard R2-series astromech droids."
    • It's directly from the G2 entry in the book. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 19:25, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I thought this was kind of unusual in the infobox, and now that I see it here, I'm going to question what does a "color trim" mean? We can't identify the color of this trim? "...featuring a color trim."
    • Was was referencing how G2-4T had a red time, or 9T had a blue tim. I can remove it if it's unecessary. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 19:25, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm not in favor of either of your two History subsection titles. A History subsection never needs to have the word "history" in it, which is redundant. And the second one really isn't specific enough for the contents of that subsection, as the first subsection also details G2 repair droids in the galaxy.
  • Why is the infobox sourcing SoroSuub Corporation to Strongholds of Resistance, and the History is sourcing it to NEGTD? Let's be consistent.
  • I think the BTS should make a brief mention that the droid was first featured in that 1986 Sunday Night Movie promo video, while saying that the G2 droids were identified as controllers and worker droids (IIRC). This sentence can go between the first and third sentences in the first paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:34, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I wasn't going to have you do so, but since you've opted to place the first-appearance tag on that promo video, I think you should also then place a {{C|First [[canon]]ical appearance}} next to Star Tours in the Appearances.
  • Plagiarizing another source is never permissible, even for one sentence. You lifted this sentence straight from that source. You'll now need to rewrite it. I'm aware you wrote this article prior to your official warning for copyright violation, so let this just be another reminder to you not to do this anymore. "G2-4T served as Star Tours' droid labor pool foreman, but he was given other tasks outside his intended programming, including handling ticketing, travel visas, and security checks."
    • Noted; rewrote several parts of the sentence, but kept his duties as is. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:32, April 23, 2018 (UTC)
  • With your recent edits to the BTS section, the two paragraphs of the "Continuity" subsection are extremely repetitive. Please rewrite. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:21, April 23, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • "The G2's most recognizable feature was its binocular head, which contained a vocabulator[2] capable of communicating in both Basic and Binary,[3] two auditory sensors, and a pair[2] of blue[4] or white[1] photoreceptors[2] whose improved sensor packages[3] included telescopic, microscopic,[2] darkvision,[3] and multi-spectrum capabilities. Each droid bore a unique ID number stenciled onto the side of its head[2] in Aurebesh[1] or High Galactic, a tool kit, and a diagnostics package.[3]" Could you restructure this to reduce the number of refs? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 19:21, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
    • Does that look any better? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 20:32, April 19, 2018 (UTC)

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Pelta-class frigate

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  • I think the article would benefit from a separate "Role" section. The "Starship and vehicle class articles" section of Wookieepedia:Layout Guide indeed recommends such a section. Just by glancing at the infobox, it seems there should be more than enough material for a Role section.
  • I don't suppose there's a reason why engagements is capitalized in the section heading "Early Engagements"?
  • Some of the paragraphs in the article are huge. Please split up some of them. I think the article could also benefit from one or even two more images in the history section.
  • The Behind the scenes section needs to be sourced.
    • Sourced--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:33, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
      • Release dates need separate sources.
        • Added! I was under the impression that they didn't, sorry about that--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:53, March 1, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article is currently in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. Please go through all citation templates and supply backup links. Instructions can be found on the template pages.
  • Please go through all dates in the article and provide a valid source for them. None of the TCW episodes mention "22 BBY", for instance. 1358 (Talk) 00:20, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please read the instructions for the different fields of Template:Starship class. What you have right now in "role" and "model" is incorrect.
  • {{Imagecat}} should be placed somewhere in the article.
  • The Description section definitely needs to include information about the interior, which, if my memory serves me correctly, was quite prominently featured in "Brain Invaders". 1358 (Talk) 23:05, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • Are there no relevant quotes for the currently-quoteless sections? It's been a while since I saw "Brain Invaders", but I bet something applicable can be found there.
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Full sentences get a full stop.
    • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:15, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • Please note that some of the captions you punctuated are actually not full sentences and do not get a full stop. I've fixed it for you. In these cases, the verbs are in present participle and work as modifiers for the nouns. This is a bit of a tricky case, but generally if you have a single verb that ends in -ing in your sentence, it's participle. Let me know if this is unclear. 1358 (Talk) 22:59, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • All applicable articles need to be linked within individual references.
  • There are definitely more fields that you can fill in your {{cite web}} references. Authors, release dates, etc. Please also note that the displayed title should match that of the pages you're linking.
  • I'm not convinced that listing different release dates in the Bts is really needed in this article. All you're doing is create a need for more references. Just stick with the release year. 1358 (Talk) 19:34, March 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 22 doesn't really work as is because "the events of this article" take place over a long period of time.
    • That's what's been used on all dates related to the first half of Rebels Season 2, should I still remove it?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:27, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
      • The logic behind the reference should be fine, but you can't say "The events of this article" because the article covers a large timeline. 1358 (Talk) 23:37, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • On a quick glance, I can spot at least two instances where the same reference is used consecutively within the same paragraph without any other references inbetween. Either one of those references is incorrect, or the first instance is unnecessary.
  • I don't think we can really assert that 900 was a standard crew size for Pelta-class vessels since the Databank instance explicitly refers to the Phoenix Home. However, we can include that Phoenix Home had a crew of 900.
    • Star Wars: The Rebel Files also states that it had a crew of 900, should I switch references?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:20, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
      • Does it say Phoenix Home had 900, or Pelta-class ships in general? 1358 (Talk) 23:21, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
        • Pelta's in general. It's in a section where the details of the frigate are listed like length and manufacturer--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:27, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
          • Yeah, switching to that sounds good. 1358 (Talk) 23:29, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
            • Done!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:31, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
              • For consistency, you should probably use the same references for length and manufacturer etc in the infobox as in the body. 1358 (Talk) 23:37, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
                • Removed the reference all together as Rebel Files has all that info--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:42, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm willing to bet at least some of the TCW quotes have audio files that can be added to the quotes. See Category:Audio files from Star Wars television series. 1358 (Talk) 22:59, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
    • Haven't found any relating to the quotes unfortunately--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:31, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 27 is throwing a citation error.
    • Oops, must have happened when I switched from the databank to Rebel Files, fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:16, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • This just reads awkwardly due to the tense: "TB-73 arrives at the medical station; however, with no one at the controls, it is in danger of a collision." Go with something like "TB-73 arrives at the medical station with no one at the controls". 1358 (Talk) 16:00, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • You should definitely work blockade runner 0-9-9 into the prose instead of leaving it as a link in a quote.
  • The "Escape craft" field in the infobox has infobox-exclusive information.
  • I'd go with just "Frigate" in the "class" field seeing as the "assault ship" part is really for the variant only.
  • You're missing probably more than a few Databank entries from your Sources section. Barriss Offee's and Brain Worm's entries both mention a medical frigate. I'm willing to bet there are more Databank entries that contain at least a cursory mention of the medical frigate. 1358 (Talk) 23:17, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
    • In terms of databanks, I could only find those two, however, the episode guide for the Siege of Lothal has a ton of concept art and information, so I added that as a source as well, and I'm going to be adding the information tonight--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:03, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • Added information and additional images to supplement expansion--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:04, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • Please go through every single relevant TCW episode guide and check for mentions in not just the synopsis but also the trivia/episode/concept art galleries. The guide for "Brain Invaders" mentions the ship and currently you only have the "episode gallery" feature listed in the Sources. We've also been treating the old TCW episode guides as Canon seeing as the episode guides were all adapted directly from the (Canon) episode scripts (see Krix for precedent) so you'll want to go through those as well and see if anything can be added to the Sources. 1358 (Talk) 16:26, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
          • Okay, do I only add the episode guides or do I also add the corresponding concept, episode, and trivia galleries along with the guide?
            • Just the guides; only get that specific when you add references in the article. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:02, March 24, 2018 (UTC)
              • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:18, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
                • You're still missing the old episode guides. "Brain Invaders" and "Shadow of Malevolence", if not more, mention the frigate. {{SWArchive}} is the citation template you'll want to use. 1358 (Talk) 23:32, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
                  • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:29, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
                    • You should check the biography gallery sections on the databanks too, I just added the Ahsoka one but Kit Fisto's and Poggle the Lesser's also mentions medical frigates --Lewisr (talk) 18:41, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • Some notes in regards to citation templates. You can remove the unused parameters in {{cite web}}, just as you wouldn't include empty parameters in any other templates. You should use first and last only; author is just unnecessary if we know both the first and last names. Furthermore, authorlink is for internal, not external links, so it's not applicable here. date takes the form of YYYY-MM-DD in accordance with ISO 8601; you don't need to include year and month. 1358 (Talk) 18:49, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
    • Do I remove all of the unused parameters or just the ones you mentioned?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:36, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
  • The Brain worm incident aboard TB-73 is major enough to deserve a mention in the intro, imo.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:26, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • This reads a bit awkward, specifically the "Serving in the capacity of a supply ship" part as you talk about supply ships in the preceding sentence, so it feels a bit repetitive. Maybe you could establish a timeline instead? "In the second year of the war, the crew of aboard the frigate TB-73 was infected by Geonosian brain worms" or something similar would be more informative than what you have now.
  • "During the Imperial Era, the early rebellion, and later the Rebel Alliance, fought against the Galactic Empire and used Pelta-class frigates as medcenters" This just reads awkward. I would recommend you reword it something like this: "During the Imperial Era, Pelta-class frigates were used as medcenters by the early rebellion..."
  • "One notable example of the retrofitted Pelta frigates was Phoenix Home" Notable according to whom? Unless a source explicitly calls the Phoenix Home notable, it's your subjective interpretation and should be removed.
  • Darth Vader could use a title or something as context in the intro.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:26, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Keep in mind that anything you add to the intro needs to be mentioned in the body as well, and if needed, separately referenced in the body.
  • I feel like you should make "War continues" a section dedicated only to the TB-73 incident and move the last paragraph to "Later campaigns". You could then rename "War continues" as something more appropriate. 1358 (Talk) 20:53, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The "Sources" list is arranged in chronological order, by real world publication date. Please double-check your ordering here. I'm not sure if the new epguides have publication dates, but the old ones sure do, as do some of the other sw.com articles.
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:33, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • No, they're not ordered by publication date right now. All the old epguides (those that use {{SWArchive}}) were published prior to the starwars.com revamp so they go before the {{SW}} entries. Aside from the new epguides, there should be a publication date on the page itself. You can also use internet archive to find out when a page first appeared. 1358 (Talk) 21:31, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have quite a few duplicate links in the body. The good news here is that there's a gadget to weed these out. Simply go to your preferences and enable the tool in the "Gadgets" tab and you'll see what I mean. 1358 (Talk) 14:51, April 1, 2018 (UTC)
    • Looks like I need Java Script or something because I don't see the highlights--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:25, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • You'll need to "Enable personal JavaScript" in the "Under the hood" tab. Any modern browser supports JS so it shouldn't be a problem. 1358 (Talk) 10:01, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Okay, I checked the box for enabling JavaScript and have the check on the gadget for highlighting duplicate linkgs, but I don't notice any highlighting. How are the highlights displayed? Maybe I'm just overlooking it--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:40, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • It's in the My Tools section of the bottom toolbar. The duplicate body links are highlighted with red boxes. See this screenshot. 1358 (Talk) 21:53, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Ohhhh got it now. This is cool, learn something new everyday :) Got a question, for example, if Darth Vader is linked in the intro and I link Darth Vader in let's say behind the scenes or somewhere else in the body, would the second instance still be highlighted? How does that work?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:01, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
            • I have no idea of how it actually works, but it ignores intro links. My guess is it starts searching for duplicates after the first heading. 1358 (Talk) 22:04, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think the Characteristics would benefit from a division into two subsections. How you'll name them is up to you, but the current second and third paragraphs could probably make up one of the potential subsections. 1358 (Talk) 00:52, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
    • Added, how's that?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:30, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
      • The reason why I suggested the second and third paragraphs was that they contained mostly stuff related to the interior, so you could simply name that section "Interior". "Trait", "appearance" and "characteristic" are virtually synonyms so the current naming seems a bit redundant.
        • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:55, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
          • I've taken the liberty of doing some rearranging here. Take a look. The "interior" quote is perfect, but the main Characteristics quote is kinda lame. Do you think something else could be found? Please also make sure to double-check my rearrangement for any weird referencing. 1358 (Talk) 21:25, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
            • Your edit looks good to me. I'm having difficulty finding a quote that relates to the characteristics of the vessel, I'll continue to look for another one--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:29, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
              • I haven't been able to find another quote of greater quality or importance--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:46, April 12, 2018 (UTC)
                • Very well. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • With the addition of a new section, you should see if you can find a quote for it, as well.
  • I'd also like to see the intro just slightly expanded. You could probably put a paragraph break after "food rations" and add some more stuff about battles where they saw use during the Clone Wars. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • The B1 battle droid informing Grievous about the escaping frigates, as featured in the lead quote, is technically intro-exclusive right now. You should sneak that information into the body, allowing you to remove the quote caption link.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:59, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • I was thinking about sneaking it into the body. You don't need to be that detailed in the intro. 1358 (Talk) 21:52, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • "...and a mercy mission to Aleen, which saw the use of Pelta-class frigates as blockade runners and supply ships." A cursory glance at the body seems to imply that the frigates weren't used as blockade runners at Aleen. Seeing as Ryloth, Christophsis, and Kaliida Shoals all occur in 22 BBY, you could probably move the Aleen mission to a later point in the intro.
  • "until it was destroyed by Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Vader." You could include here where it was destroyed and link the battle in question. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. Also restructured the final body paragraph to include where--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:59, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
AV

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A surplus of interesting information combined with images and quotes on a "popular" ship is just astounding. --B32(Talk)I-find-this-atire-appealing 16:38, December 23, 2017 (UTC)

Added and updated the article with Star Wars Encyclopedia of Starfighters and Other Vehicles--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:25, April 8, 2018 (UTC)


Zare Leonis

  • Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:39, December 18, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I've been working on improving and needling at this article for a long time and at this point, I think it's finally time to nominate it. Zare Leonis, lead character of the Servants of the Empire quartet and sure to be a crowning jewel of Wookieeproject Rebels if we can get it passed. If it does pass, I'd also like to state that Andykatib is welcome to share the banner for helping to promote it to featured status, as he did a lot of work on this article as well. In working on this article, I've tried to take what I've learned from my nominations of Holshef and Voorpee (both of which haven't yet passed, but are stable at the moment) and apply it, though I don't doubt there'll still be stuff I've missed, so have at it.
P.S.: I realize there is a small chance that Zare may still appear in the second half of the final season of Star Wars Rebels. I am subscribed for the show and if this does happen, I will make sure to update the page with all due speed. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:41, December 18, 2017 (UTC)

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  • Large swaths of the bio are devoid of any imagery. Please find images of something related to the prose if there are none of Leonis.
    • Alright, I've added a good seven or eight. Let me know if you think I need more. I want it to have good images for illustration, but I don't want to put stuff in just for the sake of having images. This is particularly true towards the final section, where it depicts a large swath of stuff never really covered anywhere book in the book The Secret Academy. Still, I tried to add in a few relevant images. ProfessorTofty (talk) 03:43, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Missing backup links. Page is currently in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links
    • Okay, I've swept through everything in both the Sources and the Notes and references, but it's still showing it as being in that category. So I don't know if maybe it takes time for that category to repopulate, but as far as I can tell, I've added archive links for everything that can be. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:47, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • Fixed. The culprit was the last databank template using archive instead of archivedate. To clarify, when it comes to citation templates other than {{cite web}}, you should pass either archivedate or archiveurl. If there's a working archived version on IA, then just pass the IA timestamp as archivedate=. If you need to use another archive website such as webcitation, pass the full URL of the archive copy as archiveurl=. Some citation templates don't support archivedate at the moment but that should be fixed eventually. Check out my edit and let me know if you need further elaboration. 1358(Talk) 22:28, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • I think it's all clear now. Thank you for your edits regarding that. ProfessorTofty (talk) 03:43, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Missing Equipment section.
    • The layout guide states that this section is for any "notable ships, weapons, or other equipment" associated with the character. He doesn't have a ship associated with him, his use of weapons is limited to generic blasters issued by the Empire (already described in his skills and abilities) and I don't think there's any other notable equipment unless you count the diplopod, but that's really more of a living mount. I'm just not sure I see a purpose for having this section in this article, but I would appreciate direction if you do think it would serve a purpose.
      • By no means do you need a gigantic section detailing every item he's ever used or worn, but at least the armor he uses seems to be featured quite extensively and you could also mention if there are any gadgets he uses frequently. 1358 (Talk) 22:28, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • Alright, I've gone ahead and added the equipment section. The stormtrooper armor was a good point, and I've also hit a few other highlights. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:04, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Following the recent Mofference, infobox fields with multiple items are restricted to one sub-bullet (*Foo **Bar is allowed). 1358 (Talk) 20:42, March 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • Alright, I went ahead and removed that, based on my read of that, though really specific seems more pertinent to me than general. Would it be better to include the details about his specific unit information instead? ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:47, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • It was agreed at the Mofference to not force editors' hands when choosing which affiliations to put in the infobox, but in this case I'd actually recommend going with *Galactic Empire **Unit Aurek. As a general rule, the "top level" and the "bottom level" affiliations are probably those that you'll want to use. 1358 (Talk) 22:28, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • Subjects in references should be linked as if each reference was an article on its own.
    • Do you mean even if it's been linked earlier in the article, it should still be linked within the reference? And, if so, this is new to me. Where does it say that we're supposed to do that? I couldn't find it in the Manual of style or any of that. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:24, March 28, 2018 (UTC)
      • No, this isn't anything new, Tofty. Look at how the references are formatted on Holshef. It may not be covered by policy, but there is a clear precedent for this, and it's common sense, too, given that it helps the reader with quick navigation while reading the article. Imperators II(Talk) 21:45, March 28, 2018 (UTC)
        • WP:S, rule 7. 1358 (Talk) 22:14, March 28, 2018 (UTC)
          • Thanks! That's what I was looking for. It does make sense, but it was new to me. Anyway, I went ahead and got that all linked up. I didn't link "world" within "real-world" or "universe" within "in-universe" because of the context. If anyone disagrees, though, feel free to link it. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:38, March 30, 2018 (UTC)
            • That's fine. 1358 (Talk) 19:58, March 30, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have a plethora of duplicate links in the body. There's a gadget for finding those; it can be activated in the Gadgets tab in your preferences.
    • Got it. Didn't think to check for that when proofreading those earlier sections that I didn't write. As far as I can tell, they're all gone now. That gadget's a useful tool. Thanks. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:00, March 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • The Bts would be better off starting with a mention of where he first appeared and a rough date for that medium.
  • Please check the Bts image caption; there's a redlink there right now.
    • I think that had to do with the trading card, but it's already corrected by the time I read this objection. ProfessorTofty (talk) 00:17, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
  • I don't suppose there's any available quote for the Early life section? No quote where he talks about his childhood or something?
    • Of course. Not sure why I didn't think to put one there before, but there is now. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:52, March 30, 2018 (UTC)
  • Missing {{imagecat}}. 1358 (Talk) 01:45, March 24, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have some infobox-exclusive information; I can't find any information about his weight and length in the body, for one.
    • Added both to the personality and traits section. As far as I can tell, everything else there can be found elsewhere in the article. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:59, April 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • Would it be possible to do some further subdivision within the Biopgrahy sections? For instance, if you look at L'ulo L'ampar, a recently passed FA, you'll see it has three "main" biography subsections: "Empire's end", "Black Squadron", and "Legacy". How you decide to execute the subdivision is up to you, but I think it would be good for navigation purposes if you split the current biography subsections into "main biography subsections". 1358 (Talk) 19:58, March 30, 2018 (UTC)
    • Good idea. I felt the best way for it was to leave the Early life section on its own and divide everything else based on the academies that he attended. It's not quite an even split, given how much less time is spent on the Junior Academy of Applied Sciences, but I think it makes the most sense logically as a way of splitting it. ProfessorTofty (talk) 03:12, April 5, 2018 (UTC)
      • I have yet to read the prose, but what exactly is the significance of the "future" in heading 1.4? Everything happened a long time ago, so saying "future" is a bit wrong. 1358 (Talk) 20:25, April 5, 2018 (UTC)
        • Well, "future" as in reference to his own future activities following his escape from the academy on Arkanis. Still, I can see how that would be confusing, yeah. I changed it to "Arkanis Academy and Garel." ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:58, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 12 is throwing a citation error.
    • Which will happen if you foolishly name the reference, but don't actually include the reference within it. Whoopsie. Fixed. Thanks. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:58, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 18 should utilize the appropriate citation template (like you do in the Sources section). Also make sure the formatting of the reference/Sources entry is correct. {{Topps}} has more parameters, including sformat and link, that you should be using. 1358 (Talk) 20:25, April 5, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done on Reference 18. As for those extra parameters, though, I don't even understand exactly what they're for. I checked a random sampling of a good half a dozen or so other pages that template is transcluded on, such as Chewbacca/Legends, and none of them use those parameters, both of which are listed in the template's usage description as "optional." Oh, I think you may have missed my response to your objection about the start of the Bts section. If you're still considering that no one, no worries, but you hadn't struck the objection. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:58, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • I was so kind as to format one of the instances correctly in this edit. The parameters are optional in the sense that the template doesn't throw an error if they're not provided, but they should be used when appropriate, nonetheless, as is the case here. Seeing as it's possible to provide a direct link to the card in the citation template itself, like I've done, the "see this image" text in reference 18 should no longer be necessary. 1358 (Talk) 21:42, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Ah, okay, so that's how it works. Alright, that's all taken care of. And thanks for showing me that. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:47, April 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • You're missing some sw.com entries in your Sources section. For instance, Leonis is featured in the episode gallery for Breaking Ranks but you only list the trivia gallery right now. In this case, you can simply list the episode guide as a whole instead of the individual sub-features of the guide. Please make sure to check this for other applicable material as well. 1358 (Talk) 21:42, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • That's done, and as per your suggestion, I did also find some other entries to add. I also rearranged some entries which I noticed were out of order by date. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:25, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
      • StarWars-DatabankII Ezra Bridger in the Databank (backup link) mentions him in the biography gallery so make sure to check that in case there's any new information before adding it to the list. 1358 (Talk) 19:33, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
        • No new information to add to the article (just the usual recap stuff), but that did clue me in to two more to add which I wasn't able to find using the search on starwars.com. Now I know not to rely just on that. Anyway, Zare Leonis is added (actually, Lewisr added it), as well as the other two I found. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:34, April 21, 2018 (UTC)
          • Very well. I will continue my review shortly. 1358 (Talk) 23:18, April 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does Star Wars Rebels: The Visual Guide explicitly date his birth to 19 BBY and 3258 LY? The current infobox reference feels a bit extraneous—if SWR:VG places his birth in 19 BBY, there's no need for further elaboration in that reference.
  • Expanding on this, "19 BBY" is currently infobox-exclusive as you only use the LY date in the body-
  • I feel like it would be helpful for the reader to establish a timeline for his birth and/or his enrollment in the academy in the first intro paragraph.
  • "The Empire claimed that Dhara ran away, but Leonis did not believe their claims." This sentence feels a bit disconnected from the rest and since you already establish his reason for joining the academy (her disappearance), I recommend you remove it. Instead, I'd like to see some material from subheading 1.2 featured in the intro as well. Right now you jump straight to his academy life.
    • Good idea. Removed that bit and added in info about those early activities. ProfessorTofty (talk) 22:14, April 24, 2018 (UTC)
  • "but a last meal offered to him by Chiron offered a chance to escape." The double "offered" feels a bit repetitive here. 1358 (Talk) 18:53, April 23, 2018 (UTC)
AV
  • I'd like to see an article created for this Topps Rebels set, and the card listed in the sources section. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:07, March 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • You sure we should? I'd excluded the idea under the Merchandise section of Wookieepedia:Notability policy based on the criterion for general merchandise that "has no canonical value with respect to the franchise's in-universe continuities." There's a lot of Star Wars trading cards out there and I don't think this one provides anything that would really merit its own article. Thoughts? ProfessorTofty (talk) 03:43, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
      • I know we cite this set on Maketh Tua, and I believe it was the first source to establish her homeworld as Lothal. Even if it's not being cited in this article directly, we have articles for other sets. Besides, this set still provides IU info. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:29, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
        • Alright, I created the page for the set. Is there a standard format for citing this? I'm not really too familiar with these trading cards. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:57, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • Never mind - located a standard citation format and added it as a source. ProfessorTofty (talk) 00:17, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
  • Dawn of Rebellion reveals what the Leonis family was up to after the series: "The increased crackdown on suspected resistance activity birthed a more formal resistance on Garel. Members of the Leonis, Spanjaf, and Statura families have helped to organize and lead the new Garel City cell and continue the resistance." Note that this is said to take place after Pheonix Squadron is driven from Garel by the Empire in "Legacy". - AV-6R7Crew Pit 16:23, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • Really! This is exactly the sort of information I was hoping they would release. Unfortunately, this is another type of product I don't really follow at all. Is that all it has to say regarding them? ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:57, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
      • All that I know of; that's from its blurb on Garel. I don't actually own the book, but a buddy of mine does. I can ask if there's any more info. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:18, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
        • Zare has a blurb; I'll write it up here later today. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 20:11, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • "An Imperial cadet and a resistance sympathizer, Zare Leonis came into contact with Phoenix Cell while a student at the Academy for Young Imperials on Lothal. He had enrolled at the academy to try and find his sister Dhara., who had disappeared from the same school previously. Following leads, Leonis feigned Force-sensitivy and accepted a transfer to Arkanis Academy. Throughout his search, he has remained willing to work against the Empire and aid Phoenix Cell. He has readily accepted the personal risks accosiated with working against the Imperial Academy system from within it." Jai Kell's blurb also menitons him: "Jai becames disenchanted with the Galactic Empire after discussions with fellow students Dev Morgan (actually Ezra Bridger, who was undercover at the academy) and Zare Leonis." That should be everything. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:52, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
            • Hmm, that doesn't really add anything not already in the article, but I've added the stuff about the family involvement in the Garel rebellion at the end of the biography section. ProfessorTofty (talk) 00:17, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
  • Could we get articles for the Garel City cell and the Statura family? The former will need to be added to the infobox, and U.O. Statura's invlolvement cannot be sourced to Dawn of Rebellion. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 01:47, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
    • Garel City cell was created earlier today. I just created and linked Statura family. Also took care of the bit about U.O. Statura by just removing it - since we don't have anything saying they worked directly with him, I figured it couldn't hurt to just not mention him directly. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:59, April 4, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Some of the BTS is unsourced.
  • Could we get some release dates into the BTS? Years should be fine.Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 21:18, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
    • Taken care of as part of the above objection. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:00, March 24, 2018 (UTC)

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Naga Sadow

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:22, January 2, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Let this one unfortunately lapse during a time of inactivity for me a couple months ago, to my shame. However, I believe I've addressed the outstanding objections from last time around and I really want to give this one another go. This time I guarantee I'll see it through.

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  1. Great job. The writing style makes him sound like an ultimate badass. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:26, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  2. I like it. – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 04:58, March 26, 2018 (UTC)

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Tm_T doesn't read previous reviews
  • In Intro: "Sadow killed Daragon and escaped back to Sith Space after a brief clash with Republic forces, only to immediately be forced back into another battle with Ludo Kressh, who had faked his death and raised a new army with Sadow away." I had to read couple times what "raised new army with Sadow away" means, maybe it's just me?
    • Tried to clarify it some.
  • In Bio: "Nominally in control of the world of Khar Delba,[11] he also constructed a secret stronghold on the dark side of the moon Khar Shian, where he found it better to further his research into the dark arts.[4] Khar Delba would serve as his decoy, while Sadow's true work occurred in private on Khar Shian." Almost like the same thing is written twice, I wonder if text flow would be better if these are combined somehow?
    • Combined them. IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:37, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • More to come – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 17:53, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • in Sadow's star war, "His vessel damaged but not destroyed, Sadow sent a transmission to Daragon, asking him to come to his listing sphere so they could meet face to face." What is "listing sphere?"
    • "List" as a verb means to tilt to one side, especially when describing a ship. The "sphere" is Sadow's Sith meditation sphere. IFYLOFD (Talk) 18:39, March 17, 2018 (UTC)
      • Ah, neat, although random reader might be as confused as I am (: – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 05:22, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • Bio gone through, good reading. (: – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 06:05, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • Equipment: "Through these crystals, Sadow was able to summon nigh-unlimited power," ...nigh? – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 10:59, March 16, 2018 (UTC)
    • nigh. Imperators II(Talk) 12:02, March 16, 2018 (UTC)
      • Yes I'm aware, just seems out-of-place there, I don't remember even source material having such vocabulary in use. – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 05:21, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
        • I mean, it's perfectly valid word choice. I don't think it needs changing. Same with the "listing" mentioned above. IFYLOFD (Talk) 22:34, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
          • Yup, no point dragging this further. – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:~$ 04:58, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
  • The emergence and subsequent destruction of the Harbinger in 41 ABY warrants a mention in the Legacy section, I think, seeing as it was a part of Sadow's force. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 20:12, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Ok, the intro is freaking huge. With the emergence of Oasis as our number one skin, article formatting needs to follow suit. If you look at the article in Oasis (append ?useskin=wikia to the URL), you'll see that the gigantic intro goes far beyond the infobox, which is really undesirable in most cases. Naga Sadow is no Anakin Skywalker or Wedge Antilles in terms of article length, so it definitely needs trimming with a heavy hand. I recommend chopping off as much as half the intro, with three equally-sized paragraphs remaining. Let me know what you think.
    • Damn, OK. I was kinda proud of the intro. Do you have any specific suggestions about what to chop off? IFYLOFD (Talk) 21:05, April 3, 2018 (UTC)
      • Honestly, I can't say I've read it, but I'm talking about context that isn't critical to understanding the main events of his life. For example: "A member of the ten-member Sith Council towards the end of Dark Lord of the Sith Marka Ragnos' reign over the isolated Sith civilization, Sadow became known as a progressive ideologue with little regard for Sith traditions, who loudly preached an expansionist philosophy that was at odds with much of the Empire's establishment." Is the composition of the Sith Council /that/ important? You already establish a timeline (5000 BBY) earlier in the intro, so do we really need to establish that it was during his reign? Something like "A member of the Sith Council under Dark Lord of the Sith Marka Ragnos, Sadow's expansionist philosophy put him at odds with much of the isolated Empire's establishment." would probably convey nearly the same information in a much shorter form. I hate to cite restrictions and limits where none exist, but the intro is currently about the size of CT-7567's intro—and that article is like nine times larger in terms of kilobytes. 1358 (Talk) 22:34, April 3, 2018 (UTC)
        • I chopped off a big amount of it, let me know what you think. IFYLOFD (Talk) 15:44, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
          • Much better. 1358 (Talk) 19:57, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • You're missing backup links in one or more of your citation templates. 1358 (Talk) 23:49, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Am I? Which ones? The only OOU source I cited has an archive link as well as the original link. IFYLOFD (Talk) 15:50, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think the article could definitely benefit from further subsectioning and splitting up some of the big paragraphs. Further subsectioning will allow more quotes and possibly more images. From a quick glance, the last two paragraphs of "Legacy" talk about his tomb so you could probably have a subsection within "Legacy" that's named something relevant. Some paragraphs are like 15+ lines (again, look at this in Oasis) and they appear like very daunting walls of text.
    • I split up Legacy. Do you have any specific examples you want me to split up? IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:08, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
      • I'm not really familiar with the source material, so I'm not really sure where subsectioning would be appropriate. However, paragraph splitting definitely would be appropriate throughout the article, particularly in paragraphs with an image. I see several instances where a paragraph is 15 lines on my screen. 1358 (Talk) 23:07, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have at least a couple of instances where the same reference is used consecutively within the same paragraph. "Claimant to the Sith legacy", last paragraph, has three consecutive [4] references. "Sadow's star war", paragraph two, has two consecutive [18] references. Please go through the rest of the article as well and double-check. 1358 (Talk) 19:57, April 11, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Unaddressed objection more than two weeks old. Imperators II(Talk) 07:11, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
    • Before you guys run this nom off the page, I just wanted to let everyone know that I've actually been extremely busy the last two weeks, but I'm back and I'm going to have this addressed within the next couple days. IFYLOFD (Talk) 15:29, April 9, 2018 (UTC)


Declaration of the Rebel Alliance

  • Nominated by: Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:59, January 6, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:The call to action for the alliance of the various rebel cells. The formation of the Alliance to Restore the Republic. Created the article, but decided that this is probably one of the most noteworthy events in Canon, so I decided to flesh it out and try to make it a featured article.

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QGJ
  • Context on the Ghost and Dantooine.
  • A little clarification on Cantham house meetings and the Ghorman Massacre. What exactly happened there?
  • The paragraph in "Relentless pursuit" can be split into two.
  • I have added a link to the Legends counterpart of this event, the Corellian Treaty. In the Bts, you can briefly discuss it. Something along the lines of "In the Legends continuity, the founding document of the Rebel Alliance was called the Corellian Treaty. It was first mentioned in yada yada yada..." QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 18:43, March 15, 2018 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • This is kind of an unprecedented type of article you've chosen to nominate, but I have some suggestions for the layout: One history section which contains Background, An alliance formed (probably rename this to The Declaration), and Legacy (and appropriately divide each section into subsections, of course). Alternatively you could go with the classical event/conflict layout: Prelude, The Declaration, Aftermath. I recommend moving the excerpt to after the Aftermath/Legacy section and renaming it to "Full text". You'll probably want to include |copyright=true in the excerpt template as that's a verbatim quote from copyrighted material.
    • Added |copyright=true to the template, and restructured the layout--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:37, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • You should probably create a separate section, "Full text", and put it after the Aftermath or something. 1358 (Talk) 21:04, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Full sentences get full stops, otherwise no full stops.
  • References go after punctuation.
  • Check your Encyclopedia citation templates. Right now only one out of three instances works properly in terms of the backup link simply because you have the entries' names wrong. Mon Mothma's entry is ...characters/mon-mothma (hyphenated) whereas Bail Organa's entry is ...characters/bailorgana/ (no hyphen). Please also pass archivedate= to each template even though the lack thereof doesn't put the article in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links.
  • Are there really no applicable quotes for the quoteless body sections? I'm sure you can find something.
  • Image caption linking: Please be consistent—either you link all applicable subjects or then you don't link anything. I recommend the latter. Right now Coruscant is linked in the Legacy section but the prose itself lacks a link even though it can and should be linked there.
  • Citation marks (" ") go outside punctuation, even if you have a compound subject within quotes.
  • What's the reasoning for the non-ascending order of references here? "several of which belonged to the Delegation of 2,000.[8][6]"
  • Right now the intro has absolutely no information about the aftermath of the event, instead focusing on listing ship models to show up.
  • References should be linked as if they were their own articles. All applicable links, that is.
  • More to come. 1358 (Talk) 23:27, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • The declaration is mentioned in Mon Monthma's DB entry and I suspect there might be a mention in other entries as well. Please check. 1358 (Talk) 21:04, April 13, 2018 (UTC)

Comments


Coruscant abandoned tower

  • Nominated by: Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:43, February 2, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Recently updating articles related to the Sith, saw this in an episode guide and just had a good feeling about it!

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  1. Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:47, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
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Object

Tommy
QGJ
  • Does "The" in "The Grand Inquisitor" needs to be capitalized in the intro?
  • In the year 22 BBY, following a duel between Count Dooku, leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems, and the Jedi in a hangar on Geonosis I think it would be a good idea to specify which Jedi we are talking about here.
  • Sidious was pleased at the news, as he had achieved another milestone in his plan to destroy the Jedi Order and rule the galaxy, soon stating that everything was going according to plan. Not sure if "soon" is needed here. Sounds weird to me, at least. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:28, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
Imperators abandoned tower? Coruscant abandoned Imperators?
  • Please get the missing backup links.
  • You should provide archival dates for the two instances of {{SWArchive}}, since the automatically generated backup links aren't working.
    • Could you help me out with this particular issue? I can't seem to correctly make it to display the archive link, I added the full archive link as a placeholder for now--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:38, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • What you should do is take the original, obsolete link and stick in here. Then browse through the archived versions of the page until you find one that works, copy the archival date from the resulting URL (you'll be looking for the YYYYMMDDHHMMSS part of the URL) and paste it into the |archivedate= field of the SWArchive template. It's exactly the same as how the Databank template works in the Sources section of this article. Imperators II(Talk) 15:48, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Category:Infoboxes with missing parameters.
    • Doesn't show up anymore--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:48, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Nevermind, it's showing again. Could this also be with one of the cite templates?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:51, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • No. Try reloading the infobox, i.e., going to the source page for the relevant infobox template and copying the template code to this article anew. Imperators II(Talk) 17:14, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Would it be possible for you to get audio files for the quotes? You could ask Ayrehead for help with the film quotes, at least.
  • Images should be below quotes.
  • Could you break up the longer paragraphs in "Breaking the Jedi Order" and "Imperial Era" into smaller ones? Remember articles have to be formatted for the Oasis skin now, and long paragraphs look really intimidating and unappealing to the reader in Oasis.
  • Please remove all duplicate links.
    • Done!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:06, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • Seven more links remaining. Imperators II(Talk) 06:49, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
        • How can I find them? I turned on the gadget for it but it doesn't highlight the duplicates--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Maybe it only works in Monobook? I can just tell the links to look for: "Clone Wars" in intro, "Works," "Coruscant," and "Galactic Empire" in "Bringing good news," "Works" in "Breaking the Jedi Order," and "19 BBY" and "Galactic Empire" in "Imperial Era." Imperators II(Talk) 07:00, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Okay, the BTS should be rewritten:<s>
    • <s>The first thing you should mention is that the tower was created for Ep II.
    • Then you should mention when it was first given its canonical name.
    • And only then you should describe the tower's first Legends appearance and history of naming.
    • You're using the tower's full name in every BTS sentence, which is extremely redundant. Please reword. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • Context for Episode II, and there's a missing comma in that sentence. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • Context for TCW. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • I fail to see how the tower's comic book debut is notable enough for a BTS mention. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • First sentence says the tower first appeared in the film, which directly contradicts the first sentence of the second paragraph saying it first appeared in the novelization. Please revise. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Now look at that sentence talking about the novel. Why does it end with a comma? Why do you use the full title of the film twice in such proximity? Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • For the "Sacrifice" part, you shouldn't lead with the fact that the tower appeared in yet another source—that's not notable. Start with the fact that the tower was first identified in the guide for the episode, for which you can then provide the necessary context. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • I don't know how exactly I can reword this. Do you mean to that I should state that it was identified in the Sacrifice guide before I mention that it appeared in the episode?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Yes. And you don't even need to mention it actually appeared in the episode. Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Reworded. I still mentioned that it appeared in Sacrifice but if you think it's best to remove the mention just let me know--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:44, April 12, 2018 (UTC)
    • For the last sentence, the wording "The Coruscant abandoned tower also appeared in [...]" is ineffective and misleading about the fact's notability—if you look at the Legends page, the building appeared in a whole bunch of other sources other than the film and the novelization, but we're not going to list them all, are we? You should start off with the critical information, which is that the building was provided it's formal name in the book. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Replace all instances of "during or prior" or any variations thereof with "by [date]".
  • Please clean up the quotes.
    • Make sure there are no spelling or grammar mistakes, and no extra spacing and such.
    • Write the quote attributions in a consistent manner, providing full names for the speakers in all instances.
    • Wherever possible, try to make do with just what the quotes say, instead of adding context in attribution. For example, in the "Breaking the Jedi Order" quote just noting the speakers is sufficient.
  • Why isn't {{FacebookCite}} used for reference 20? Imperators II(Talk) 09:31, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Note that punctuation goes inside double quotes. Imperators II(Talk) 06:49, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • In ref 1, please provide a source for Dooku arriving at the tower after the Battle of Geonosis. Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • And reword the reference so that it's not using "we." Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Breaking the Jedi Order" and "Imperial Era" could use more images. Imperators II(Talk) 21:25, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • s "derilect" in Sources your typo or the listed source's? Imperators II(Talk) 21:25, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • That wasn't my addition, I'm assuming it's a typo--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:15, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • You should be more careful with your referencing. Currently ref 10 implies that Yoda traveled to Moraband after Qui-Gon communicated with him, which you source to Episode I. Also, ref 14 implies that Episode III reveals who founded the Inquisitorius. Imperators II(Talk) 17:08, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
    • I think I fixed the issue with ref 10, but I'm not sure how ref 14 implies what you say. Ref 14 is for Palpatine becoming Emperor and that he was Sidious, and ref 4 is that he created the Inquisitorius and all. Could you elaborate further on what needs to be fixed and how? Thanks!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:51, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
      • You can only use the ROTS ref for the description of what Sidious was, i.e., "publicly [...]." The rest of that sentence needs to be sourced to a source that says Sidious founded the Inquisitorius when he was Emperor. Also, the "now" in that sentence must go, and you can't actually source the fact that Qui-Gon died "a decade ago" to Episode I. Imperators II(Talk) 18:57, April 20, 2018 (UTC)

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Imperial II-class Star Destroyer

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  1. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:52, February 10, 2018 (UTC)
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Ecks Dee
  • Please check your image caption punctuation.
    • Is that better?
  • Keep in mind while writing that references break up the flow of the text and make reading much less pleasant; references should be used sparingly. For instance, let's take this sentence: "The command bridge of the[13] Imperial II-class[1] was arranged[13] almost identically to that of the Imperial I class,[16] with a command walkway and two pits where Imperial technicians operated their console stations, which were arranged perpendicular to the central walkway.[13]" This is a single sentence but you manage to use reference 13 a whopping three times. If you rearrange the information, you can cut down that to one: "Almost identical to that of the Imperial I class,[16], the Imperial II-class[1] had a command bridge with a walkway and two pits where Imperial technicians operated their console stations, arranged perpendicular to the central walkway.[13]" This is, of course, not possible in every instance and you shouldn't reduce references at the expense of sentence construction, but this is something to keep in mind. Please go through the article and see if there are any other instances of reference crowding where rearranging could be a solution. 1358 (Talk) 23:43, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • I've cleaned up some sentences, and removed some unnecessary references to the Rogue One guide for the name.—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 17:35, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • Do we really need the alternative spelling of "Two" instead of "II" in the intro? Considering II means two, it's not really an alternative spelling. 1358 (Talk) 21:19, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • ~"The class served as the successor to the Imperial I-class Star Destroyer in the Imperial-class line, which was also used by the Galactic Empire." This sentence is a bit confusing. What was also being used by the Empire? The ISD-I or the Imperial-class as a whole? You could reword this to something like "Part of the Imperial-class line, the ISD-II served as the successor of the ISD-I, which was also used by the Empire".
    • Done.
  • The second paragraph of the intro, which covers the usage history, feels a bit skinny. I feel like you could at least establish some sort of timeline there, if nothing else.
    • Now expanded.
  • "which were located side by side in the forward wall of a large, open space in the ventral hull.[7]" I'm not sure that "large open space" is the best possible terminology for that thing. See if you can find something more suitable.
    • Okay, I think that's better than what it was.
      • Still not quite there, I think. May I suggest something like "in the anterior wall of a depression(/indentation) in the ventral hull". "Forward wall" is a bit ambiguous and "open space" doesn't necessarily describe the fact that there's a "hole" in the hull. 1358 (Talk) 22:45, April 3, 2018 (UTC)
        • Yeah that sounds much better. Added.
  • You could probably mention the apparent presence of Imperial officers since you mention technicians and pilots and stuff, in Characteristics.
    • I had already mentioned officers, but I hadn't mentioned technicians. I checked Shattered Empire, and all the people on the bridge are officers, with no technicians present.
  • In the "Bridge" section, you use the word "arranged" twice in the same section; maybe find another word for one of the instances.
    • Done.
  • You should probably mention that the people fighting against the Torment are part of the Rebel Alliance.
  • Per our IRC discussion, numbers higher than 100 should use numerals rather than being spelled out. 1358 (Talk) 21:03, April 2, 2018 (UTC)
  • Seeing as you use audio for some Aftermath: Empire's End quotes, I feel like it would be more appropriate to source those to the audiobook instead of the novel. 1358 (Talk) 22:45, April 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • OK, I honestly thought I was having a stroke while reading the quote caption of "Eleodie Maracavanya's find." I went back in the page history to find out who has managed to sneak in vandalism without it being noticed. Finding nothing, my second guess was some sort of meta-joke about the stereotypical German pronunciation of "the" as "ze". I'm talking about "zhe" and "zher", neither of which are recognized as words in the English language by a reputable dictionary. It turns out that the character is indeed canonically referred to as with "zhe" and "zher", and while my personal thought on the matter are best left elsewhere, I'm asking you to reword the section so that the readers don't end up suspecting they're having a stroke. Some clever writing can easily solve the quote caption, for example: "Eleonie explains the plan to the pirate crew". 1358 (Talk) 22:51, April 4, 2018 (UTC)
    • Okay that's done, I agree it was a bit strange to read before. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 07:06, April 5, 2018 (UTC)
  • I would prefer if the History section image caption was rewritten so that the subject of this article is the subject of the caption sentence as well: "The Torment was destroyed by the Restoration."
    • Done.
  • Do we know when the Devastator was built? If we have some rough idea, that'd provide a good indicator of time for the History section.
    • Done.
  • Before I begin a proper review of the History section, I'm noticing a glaring lack of context for a lot of subjects. Darth Vader - who is this guy and who is his employer? Battle of Endor - between who? Palpatine - the Emperor of what? Who is the Torment aligned to? Contingency and Operation Cinder - what are their purposes? Please go through the entire History section and add context as appropriate. 1358 (Talk) 20:39, April 5, 2018 (UTC)
    • I think I got all the glaring ones. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 07:33, April 6, 2018 (UTC)
      • Honestly, re: QGJ's objection below, I find the amount of context in the intro a bit excessive after your recent edits. The second sentence of the second paragraph is basically just a context sentence and feels disconnected from the rest of the text. Right now you have a ton of context but you don't actually talk about the ship itself. If I may suggest some rewording: "Following the death of Galactic Emperor Palpatine at the Battle of Endor in 4 ABY, the ISD-II Torment was dispatched to Naboo as part of Operation: Cinder, an order from the late Emperor to destroy Imperial planets with satellites. However, the plan was thwarted by the Rebels and the Torment was destroyed before it could withdraw."
        • I second this. This sounds much better. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 05:53, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
          • Yeah much better, added. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 07:05, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
  • "although they fled from the battle." It's not exactly clear here who the "they" is referring to. The Imperial IIs, the remnant or the New Republic? Please clarify.
    • Clarified.
  • I think the "it too must blah blah" references read really redundant and awkward, so I've taken the liberty of rewriting one of them. See what you think. If it sounds good to you, I recommend adopting a similar format for the others, because it feels really redundant to repeat "it too must have these features" a million times. 1358 (Talk) 19:24, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
    • So much better! Updated. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 20:04, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Duvat, assisted by Lieutenant Gulin, immediately set course for Naboo, and upon his arrival, deployed the satellites to create massive storms across the planet." It's not explicitly clear here that the Torment arrived at Naboo, since you phrase it as "his arrival". Please clarify.
    • Done.
  • Does the source show or mention TIE fighters being deployed? This part comes out of the blue, somewhat, since you don't say TIEs were deployed: "and the Star Destroyer's complement of TIE fighters."
    • It does. Now expanded.
  • "Just as the three starfighters were about to be destroyed by the TIEs" Wait, which TIEs? You just said they were destroyed.
    • Clarified.
  • "Maracavanya then elaborated on the decision" You should make it clear here to whom Maracavanya is elaborating the decision (the crew of the Liberty's Misrule, as per the quote caption?)
    • Done.
  • "However, in the new canon, it is not known if the class appears in in The Empire Strikes Back, not any other content that features Imperial-class Star Destroyers with communications towers." I'm not sure what this sentence is trying to say.
    • Okay, so that was put in there to clarify why ESB ISDs (and any any others with communications towers) aren't automatically ISD IIs like they were in Legends. It's just in there because I already know some people have been confused on why ESB and RotJ aren't under appearances.
  • I had a shot at simplifying one of the Bts references; please double-check that its meaning is unchanged. 1358 (Talk) 19:06, April 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'll catch you on IRC regarding a referencing issue tomorrow. 1358 (Talk) 23:16, April 22, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
  • The usage of "which saw" and "which was" in such succession creates a run-on sentence. See if you can reword this. In 5 ABY, three Imperial II-class Star Destroyers fled from the Battle of Jakku, which saw the last stand between the last major Imperial remnant and the New Republic, which was what the Rebel Alliance had transitioned into.
    • How does it look now?
  • However, it was actually under the command of pirate Eleodie Maracavanya What was under his command? The previous sentence references a fleet, a Star Destroyer and an Imperial remnant. This phrase can refer to either of the three.
    • Done.
  • I don't think we should refer to it as "new canon." There's no such thing as "old canon" and "new canon." There's only canon and Legends.
    • I think I saw an Inquisitor wanting it to be put into another article, which is why I originally added it, but I've removed it for now.
  • Who wrote the comics? Also the illustrators should be established earlier in the Bts, instead of the "Inconsistencies" section.
    • Done.
  • I'm seeing some contractions in the Bts and in citations. Please avoid using stuff like "wasn't" and "isn't." Those are only allowed in quotes.
    • Yeah that's a bad habit of mine. Gone.
  • Reiterating Ecks' objection, there is still lack of context in the intro. The purposes of the Contigency and Operation Cinder need to be clarified. The Battles of Endor and Jakku would also benefit from a brief context note. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:44, April 8, 2018 (UTC)

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  • From original nomination: "I know that this page is currently in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. I've tried to use [1] just as Toprawa suggested here, and I can get onto the page alright, but I'm stuck with an infinite loading bar once I try to search for [2] at the top. I have tried this on my Mac, my friend's Chromebook and my phone, whilst connected to my wifi, my work's wifi and my 4G. Does anyone have any ideas on what I'm doing wrong?"—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 19:39, February 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • Sorry, I forgot to mention the FA nom in my edit summary. This is the edit: [3].—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 21:04, February 11, 2018 (UTC)


Jaden Korr

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:28, March 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Unfortunately, I wasn't able to see the article through the nomination process the last time. However, I have put a lot of work into this and would really like to try nominating it again. I have made my best effort to address the outstanding objections from the last nom, as well as making overall adjustments to the article, mostly having to do with paragraph size.

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The Barsen'thor

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:57, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Because I don't like leaving things unfinished.

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  • Issues from the previous nomination have been addressed. Paragraph size has been significantly reduced, and some long sections have been split up. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:57, March 13, 2018 (UTC)


Tedryn-Sha

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:17, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I'll stop with all those noms, I promise...

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AV
  • Do we have any information on who voiced Tedryn-Sha is the audio drama?
    • No, we don't, unfortunately. Back when I was writing Xecr Nist, I was asking around people who actually owned the physical copy of the audio drama. Turns out, the only darksiders who are credited are Sedriss QL and Vill Goir. The voice actors for all the others are not listed anywhere.
  • Looking at how the article is formatted in Oasis, you should be able to fit a second image in the "Incursion" section of the biography. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:08, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • FAN Rule 14 now requires "images of the highest quality to illustrate the article, as source availability permits." What that basically means for comic book images is that you should be using digital versions of comic panels rather than the old scans that we've been using. All of Dark Horse's Star Wars library is available in digital format through one outlet or another. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:14, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Does The New Essential Chronology state that he died in 10 ABY? If it doesn't mention his death you will need to write a reference note for his death date.
    • Well, it does mention "Imperial commandos, who killed Jem Ysanna," which is why the NEC is listed as in indirect mention in Source. I guess that it doesn't necessarily mention Sha's death, so I've expanded the ref. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:47, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Right now, the date of Tedryn-Sha's death is infobox-exclusive. You mention when the previous clone of Palpatine dies, but you never really state when the events mentioned in the body actually happen.
  • As the BTS presents a different chain of events in the audio drama, shouldn't this article use Template:Twoconflicting?
  • What is the reasoning for him being in the category Jedi hunters? You don't link to the article anywhere and I'm seeing anything in the article that suggests he was tasked with hunting down Jedi on a regular basis.
    • Wouldn't participating in the mission to abduct Skywalker qualify Sha as a Jedi hunter, though? QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:47, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • In the article, you link to Imperial Advisor. If this is the case, the article should be in Category:Imperial Advisors.
  • "Skywalker was healed from the poison by the Jedi Vima-Da-Boda" Is the healing mentioned here: Force healing or just normal medicine?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, April 24, 2018 (UTC)

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Unidentified Gran (Rimmer's Rest cantina) (redux review)

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Toprawa
  • I believe the Bio would do well to be divided into two subsections of two paragraphs each. You can add another quote too if available. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:17, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. I also changed the second hireling from being a Rodian to being a Grave Tusken, based on that hirelings page. The game, afterall, is the only source that gives us an image of the character, so I think we should go off that as opposed to the novella calling him a Rodian (And none of the BG aliens in that illustration look anything close to a Rodian, so we can't say he's there, either). I don't know if any of this matters at all. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 22:56, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
      • Also, re-listening to the audio drama, 8t88 does actually call both of these guys "goons." Didn't recognize this clearly before, so I think the casting call can be accurately made based on that. The Gran is the first to speak. I want to know if you have an opinion on this before I do anything. I know what's sound to me can be (And often has been) faulty.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 23:02, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
        • Are you referring to the BTS, as in asserting that this Gran character is Goon 1 and therefore voiced by Tom Keith? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:37, April 23, 2018 (UTC)

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Attack on Korriban

  • Nominated by: Jace Onasi (talk) 07:36, April 10, 2018 (UTC)
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  • Sorry for stretching it out into this many nominations, I'm just too busy most of the time with study to worry about my nominations.--Jace Onasi (talk) 07:36, April 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • I updated the reference 16 citation template. Do you think it is sufficient?--Jace Onasi (talk) 07:36, April 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • Here's a link to the previous nomination.--Jace Onasi (talk) 07:36, April 10, 2018 (UTC)


Qeimet system

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 20:00, April 17, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: It was in this desolate area of deep space where the audience back in 1980 first saw the Executor, and, even more importantly, first heard "The Imperial March." Thanks go to Ayrehead, Tommy, Clonehunter, and Omicron for helping out with the sources and with the article itself, and, of course, to Toprawa for writing up the Executor. Imperators II(Talk) 20:00, April 17, 2018 (UTC)

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Code-8
  • Any article for the fight against the Rebels in the Hook Nebula?
  • I had a glance at Moff Kintaro's article, and from that page I got the impression that the character wasn't involved until 19 BBY, but here you put his involvement at the start of the war. So which is more accurate?
  • Might be worth adding the author and year of publication for the Special Military Unit Intelligence Update. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 05:04, April 25, 2018 (UTC)

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