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The featured articles of the wiki are articles that represent the best Wookieepedia has to offer. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like.

So just what makes a featured article? Well, we've prepared a list just in case someone should ask that, and it is as follows.


An article must…

  1. …be well-written and detailed.
  2. …be unbiased, non-point of view.
  3. …be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
  4. …follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
  5. …following the review process, be stable, i.e. it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
  6. …not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
  7. …have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
  8. …have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
  9. …have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
  10. …not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
  11. …be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Wookieepedia:Sourcing for more information.
  12. …have all quotes and images sourced.
  13. …provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
  14. …include a "Personality and traits" section on all character articles.
  15. …ideally include a "Powers and abilities" section for Force-sensitive characters and a "Skills and abilities" section for non–Force-sensitive characters, where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
  16. …include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
  17. …pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
  18. …counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

For more information on what makes a featured article, see What is a featured article?


How to nominate:

  1. First, find an article you feel is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
  2. Add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating and save the page. NOTE: If the article you are nominating has been nominated for FA one or more times previously, you will need to specify a new subpage name as a parameter in the template (e.g. {{FAnom|Lorum ipsum (second nomination)}}).
  3. Open the redlink (in a new tab or window, if possible) and fill out the form according to the instructions provided.
  4. Copy the code provided to the bottom of this page.
  5. Purge the article to update the template.
  6. Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
  7. Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
  8. The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
  9. Be sure to place your signature in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.

How to vote:

  1. Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
  2. Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
  3. Please note that in order for your vote to count, you must have 50 mainspace edits.
  4. If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under, if possible. Failure to do so may result in your objection being considered invalid.
  5. As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
  6. Once the minimum nomination period has passed, an article that has achieved the required number of supporting votes and has no outstanding objections will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article." A nomination will be considered successful if one of the following criteria is met:
    • five supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • four supporting Inquisitor votes, plus two additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • three supporting Inquisitor votes, plus four additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week; or
    • seven supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least two days.
  7. Per Inquisitorius consensus, no Inquisitor may use their Inqvote on their own nominations.

Also remember to add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating.

Every day the next article in the queue will be highlighted on the Main Page as featured, marked with the {{FA}} template and removed from the list of nominations. The beginning of the article then appears on the Main Page via the {{Featured article}} template. Nominations that are inactive with outstanding objections for three weeks will be eliminated from the nominations list by the Inquisitorius.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by Inquisitorius vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Note: All reduxed articles require only four support votes to maintain their Featured status, at least two of which must come from Inquisitors. Reduxed articles will be subject to removal if objections are not addressed after a period of 4 weeks, pending the support of at least three Inquisitors.


Featured article nominations

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Revan

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:52, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 1) MULLET MAN FOREVAH 2) I'm incredibly sorry. 3) No, I'm not insane. 4) What can I say? I got bored.

(1 Inqs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Now, if only movie main character articles could be this smooth...--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 02:18, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
    • Only Lando's that smooth. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:57, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote ow my balls IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:15, October 27, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:43, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Quick look from the Council Chambers:
  • I'm going to take Jang's comment and make it a formal objection. The intro is way too long. I can tell that simply by the fact that I have a 1080p display, and I still have to scroll down to read the rest of the intro. For comparison, Wedge Antilles is over twice the size of this article, yet his intro is just 607 words compared to Revan's current 1,428. Based on that, I'd like to see the intro cut at least in half. Summarizing is the key here; notice how the Wedge intro handles three X-Wing novels with a single sentence about Wraith Squadron. Let the reader get the details from the body; in an article of this size, small details don't belong in the intro. Three to four paragraphs of the current size, maybe four to five if the paragraph size is reduced, should be the target here.
    • Cut down to four with 672 words. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:12, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • I may make a full review later if I get bored, but there's no guarantee. —MJ— Holocomm 22:57, June 21, 2013 (UTC)
SE decided to take a crack at it
  • Early life and Jedi training
    • In the first paragraph of this section, two sentences in a row are started with the, "The child" and "The Jedi Master" Would you mind switching one up a bit?
      • Uh... the first one is referring to Revan, and the second is the title of Kreia. I don't really see the need here.
    • Same with the second paragraph of that section
      • Same here. The two sentences are talking about different people. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:14, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
        • Looking at it now, i'm not sure why I objected to this :P Apparently you object to some wierd stuff when reviewing while tired :P Supreme Emperor (talk) 16:40, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
The crown jewel of WP:KOTOR
  • These following objections are preliminary, although this section of objections will deal with the article in full. In addition, I intend to make this review my finest, as the scope of this article and the subject in question will require that.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire: Now believing himself to be a Republic soldier… If you could source his position as a soldier, that'd be great. I know that the Essential Guide to the Force, a conversation with Onasi in-game, and the TOR Encyclopedia.
    • Done.
  • Upon entering the next hallway, the two soldiers discovered a pair a Sith troopers and opened fire on the boarders. Continuing through the ship… So what happened to the troopers?
    • Done.
  • until they happened upon a Jedi and a Dark Jedi battling each other. Please link the Jedi and Sith to their respective articles.
    • Bah. I even looked at their articles while looking through the KOTOR articles.
  • Throughout the "Searching for Bastila" subsection, the image captions are in italics. Could you correct this?
    • Currently, I am unable too; there seems to be a problem with the {{Gamemechanics}} family that italicizes image captions if they are on the next line after the template. I'll have someone look into this.
      • OK.
        • Fixed. The templates in that family all had a stray '' near the end of the code. Removing that solved the issue. —MJ— Comlink 19:56, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Did you check the CSWE for some information? I am only asking out of curiosity, because when I read through the article, I'll make a point to cross-reference. Nice job thus far, I'll continue later. I like how you handled my girl Yuthura.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:19, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yep. Read through all three volumes for any mention of KOTOR, and used all the entries to establish as much of the game as canon as I could. Thanks.
  • Returning to May and the others, Revan informed them of the terentatek's defeat, and the grateful students fled the shyrack caves to freedom. Please reference this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:21, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Don't forget to add that he used a violet blade in his duel with Malak, as far as Timeline 8 is concerned.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:26, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • I wouldn't call that a violet blade; it's really more blue to me. Besides, going by Shadows and Light, Revan has a blue blade during the duel.
  • I would also like to add, thank God that that Chee actually confirmed that "Mullet Man" was the facial model used in TOR. I've been bugging him for months about this issue.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:31, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • The 8th paragraph of the "Searching for Bastila" section needs to be referenced.
    • Done.
  • In the 6th paragraph of the same section, you mention Nord without giving any context, which is located in the following paragraph. Please fix this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:13, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Could you pipelink articles for the two brothers in the Outcast village?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:14, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not seeing any articles for those Outcasts.
      • Please create them.
  • Please comb through the article and correct instances of using first names as opposed to surnames. Only where needed, though.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:59, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done; I have left the naming of Bastila when her mother's involved, Mission when Griff is involved, Carth when Dustil is involved, and Canderous when his clan is involved. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:20, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm back, got my PC back. I'll continue where I left off. Been a hell of a few weeks.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 06:21, July 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • "At one of the nearby escape pods, an injured Republic soldier begged Revan for help…" An article for the infected Republic soldier would be good.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:22, August 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Revan, Shan, and Onasi then left the apartment only to be met by a Twi'lek messenger… An article for the Twi'lek would be great.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:47, August 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Still seeing some instances of first name usage as opposed to surnames, please fix where applicable. I'm reading through Tatooine.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 21:54, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Well, that section in particular needs more first name usage than the others—there's Mission and Griff, and Helena and Bastila. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:01, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
      • True, though I had caught the early mention of "Canderous" in the section's first paragraph. I wanted to inform you of where I was in regards to reviewing the article.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:18, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you create an article for the Sand People chieftan?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Linked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:21, September 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • You mention all the planets but Tatooine… Departing Dromund Kaas as willing servants of the Emperor, Darth Revan and Darth Malak followed the Dantooine and Kashyyyk Star Maps to locate similar Star Maps on Manaan and Korriban. Please fix. Possibly more to come.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:10, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • On Korriban, Revan single-handedly defeated a pair of massive terentateks… Revan single-handedly defeated Mandalore the Ultimate… Could you use a synonymous term for one of your uses of "single-handedly?"Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:15, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Sweet, I'll review some more and get back to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:38, August 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • Revan was approached by a Twi'lek named Senni Vek, who handed him a datapad and claimed that Revan had dropped it. The datapad contained a cryptic message asking Revan to meet Hulas on Manaan... Shouldn't this be near the end of the Tatooine events? I haven't played the PC version of the game, but I can't imagine it's too different in this regard.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 10:42, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, I'd like to see mentions of him defeating Darth Nyriss and his holding off multiple opponents in the Shadow of Revan storyline in the combat abilities section.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 05:58, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Tiny details
  • For Revan's homeworld, "Outer Rim" is technically not a world, so it should say something to the effect of "an Outer Rim planet (believed)".
    • Meh. Done, though it looks funky.
  • Also, some images appear small compared to those on most articles. Perhaps it's just me.
    • Maybe true, but I've gone for a larger number of images than most articles, so I've kept the sizes down.
  • A few little grammar things on image captions: the caption should say "Darths (with an S) Andeddu, et. al., and the caption saying "Revan wearing his trademark mask" should not have a period. For minute details like these, ask me if you just want me to change them myself as I find them.
    • Done. I could have sworn I added that Darths.
  • The fourth paragraph of the into mentions the "Jed Master".
    • Done.</s>

Otherwise, awesome job!--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 23:27, June 23, 2013 (UTC)

It is time for your circuits to fry!
  • In the Combat skills subsection of "Powers & abilities" you make no mention of his lightsaber skills and feats, you're simply describing Revan's lightsabers. Improve this.Winterz (talk) 14:51, August 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • His skills are highly customizable, and I'm not a fan of the "feats" section that lists every battle the guy's ever fought. However, I've added his two most notable duels. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
      • I have no idea what you mean with a "feats" section nor has what you mentioned anything to do with what I requested but anyway, your recent update was sufficient! Winterz (talk) 17:28, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
        • I was referring to the kind of P&A that existed before I wrote the article up, and the kind that are present on articles like the Skywalkers. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:58, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
          • You could've just said "the kind that will be terminated". Winterz (talk) 18:21, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
Clone fly-by
  • Is there no more information available on the deleted scene from "Ghosts of Mortis"? The Blu-ray edition of The Complete Season Three actually has an early version of the scene with 3D storyboarding, and while I don't have access to it myself, it should be detailed in the Bts somehow. CC7567 (talk) 21:35, September 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I've gotten all of the information I could get from online at the moment; I will ultimately get ahold of the actual Blu-ray by the time this passes. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:49, October 10, 2013 (UTC)
      • Please do. CC7567 (talk) 15:00, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
        • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:06, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
          • Even though the scene is cut content, can you take some more time to detail the scene? Treat the conversation as though it's in the IU part of the article in terms of the level of detail—among the missing details is the fact that the scene takes place in Mortis's Well of the Dark Side. It's all in the file that I emailed to you, so please expand it more thoroughly. CC7567 (talk) 22:11, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
            • Fair enough; expanded. Thanks again. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:20, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
Fundraiser
  • Having gone no farther than the ToC, I can tell that the companions section is missing a few subsections. I figure the droids deserve a subsection, at least. Also, I could be wrong, but I'm under the impression that there might be a few characters from the novel or TOR that qualify. Expand it or kill it in the name of equality.SinisterSamurai (talk) 06:00, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • T3-M4 done; I'm working on HK-47. There really aren't any other characters that need one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:22, December 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Request the image of Revan's potential female faces is re-added to the article. I don't entirely know why it was removed. It doesn't have to be a second image. Since mullet man is now highlighted with a box, you can probably just get away with re-uploading a version of Mullet Guy.png with this attached, but the final choice is up to you. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'd rather not, as it's not really important, and it'll simply make the image rather wide. There's no real reason to have it; Revan's been canonically confirmed as a male for quite some time, and the only reason the Mullet guy image is there is to illustrate the point that the text is making about which character model is canonical.
      • Does that length of time make the other male faces "slightly less non-canon" than the female faces now one face has been chosen? I figure Gender no longer plays a role in whether or not a non-canon face deserves coverage. They are the same canon level, they deserve the same coverage: Equal or none.
        • It's a personal choice whether to use any image, and it's my choice to use the male faces. It's not required to show all of the potential faces; it was simply useful to illustrate the point the text is making. There's really nothing else to this. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:55, January 7, 2014 (UTC)
          • If it's being voted on, it's a community choice, but at least the caption isn't misleading anymore. SinisterSamurai (talk) 04:46, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing anything how the troops and jedi Revan sent to Malachor were not "Revan's strongest supporters," much reference to Revan's use of psychological tactics/waging a war of beliefs as well as a physical war. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added some notes, but noted that it's only HK-47's opinion.
      • In this instance, HK's opinion is voiced in KOTORII, but is sourced to KOTOR. SinisterSamurai (talk) 03:58, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
        • What are you talking about? The sentence is sourced to KOTOR 2. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:07, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
          • Whoops! Totally right about that one! If you ctrl+F the word "break" the first instance should be the passage I meant. If HK-47 does voice an opinion about Malachor being used to break the Jedi in KOTOR1, then there's a citation just before it from the same source ([7]), and you can eliminate the center count and just source both to KOTOR with one reftag. Although, I have a vague impression that part of that, (the part about not wanted to repeat the devastation at Malachor), was also from KOTORII. I could be way off, though. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:48, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm scanning, but I'm only seeing one reference to the Sith Assassination squads, and no reference that Revan trained them. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • There was one, but expanded regardless.
  • In the infobox, you list Arren Kae as one of Revan's masters, but source it to KOTOR1. It's been a long time since I've played KOTOR1, but I thought the first references to Arren Kae didn't appear until KOTOR2. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Rise of the Sith
    • "As the title of Darth was previously unknown to the Republic and the Jedi, many scholars believed that Revan and Malak were the first Sith to use it, and they speculated that the title was derived from the Rakatan language." The part about the Rakatan language makes the positioning seem off, since as far as I know the Republic did not know about the Rakatan language at this point. The transition is a little too abrupt as well.
    • "The success of HK-47 led Revan to decide that more droids like him would help maintain galactic stability, and HK-47 became the basis for the HK-50 series of droids which were constructed on Telos." I don't think that this part can be sourced to the first game, at least from what I remember. The mention of them being constructed on Telos is a rather abrupt change since the last thing mentioned was the bombardment, which pretty much destroyed the planet. I believe additional context is needed if you are going to mention Telos.
    • I added redlinks for the Echani senator and the Elders' tome for this section.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire
    • "Continuing through the ship, Revan heeded Ulgo's recommendation to draw a vibrosword as they stormed the Sith-held bridge. When they were unable to find Shan, the two rushed for the escape pods so that they would not be caught in the Spire's destruction." I thought that Ulgo told him to use a vibroblade not a vibrosword, which are two different weapons in the game.
    • "Warning Revan to hurry, Onasi suggested that he use his stealth gear to bypass a nearby Sith patrol, and Revan quickly made his way through the next few corridors before Onasi contacted him again." I thought that scouts were the only class to have stealth gear at this point.
  • I will continue at "Searching for Bastila" later. (I had forgotten that I had already reviewed the first few sections of the biography.)--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 05:30, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching for Bastila
    • Doesn't the player encounter the bounty hunters and the merchant before they can encounter Largo or the Sith commander interrogating the Aqualish.
      • Not the way I played it.... I came out of my apartment and almost immediately ran into the Sith.
        • Not the one attacking the Duros, the one with the Aqualish where you get the uniforms.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • If the player defeats Twitch, Bendak Starkiller challenges the player to a death match. The light side decision for the player is to turn down the match. I think this would be good to mention.
      • Done.
    • You didn't mention the drunk guys or Gorton Colu anywhere.
      • Colu, check... drunk guys, though.... Do you remember when they show up?
        • I think the drunk guys show up when you first go to the elevator that takes you to the lower city.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if this should be mentioned, but Revan can find that Zelka Forn had hidden some dying Republic soldiers in his facility.
      • Eh, it's a valid thing about Forn, but not necessarily important for Revan.
    • What about Selven?
      • Weird. I remember writing about her.
    • "A woman named Hester was arguing with the gatekeeper Trewin, begging him to let her husband Hendar back into the village, but Trewin refused because Trewin was pursued by a rakghoul and he could not risk the creature infecting the villagers." I think you mean that Hendar was pursued by the rakghoul.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the Twi'lek who surrendered.
  • I will continue my review after you handle the above objections.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:08, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Escaping Taris
    • There are a few planet related things you might want to mention.
      • What do you mean?
        • This was just talking about the three entries below, since I wasn't sure where they should go in the article. I'm sorry I didn't make it more clear.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:31, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • It seems to me that you should mention T3-H8 at some point since Revan can buy him and then returns him.
      • Done.
    • Don't forgot this guy: Unidentified Ithorian (Upper City).
      • Done.
    • Gelrood, the pazaak player in Javyar's Cantina.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the receptionist, but you might want to change it since I can't remember if she was Twi'lek or Human.
      • She's Human.
    • Just making sure: Canderous meets Revan in the Upper City Cantina and then in the Javyar's Cantina. I was thinking that both meetings were in Javyar's.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:11, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Learning on Dantooine/A Jedi once more
    • Could you mention Crattis Yurkal and Karal Kaar at Aratech Mercantile near the landing pad?
      • Done.
    • There is also a pazaak player named Sol'aa at the Enclave that you could mention.
      • Done.
    • After leaving the enclave isn't there some farmer and his wife that you can talk to?
      • Done.
    • Outside the enclave there is a merchant named Adum Larp.
      • Done.
    • Doesn't Dorak give the player some lesson about comparing the war with Revan and Malak to Ulic Qel-Droma and Exar Kun?
    • Doesn't someone inform Revan about the crystal cave full of Kinrath? You might want to say that Revan went to the cave.
      • Done.
    • I created a redlink for Montagne's husband.
    • Elise's article says that she meets someone named Samnt in the Jedi Enclave and if talk to her there she will thank Revan for helping her get over her husband's death.
  • I will continue my review later.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sand of Tatooine
    • "...the soldier was angry about the way he had been left out of the loop lately" The "left of the loop" part seems a tad too informal for an encyclopedia.
      • Done.
    • "Revan either chose to repair Venn's K-X12 probe droids or simply left the man to his fate and continued into the Dune Sea." I think you should reword this; maybe reword to say that Revan had to choose between saving him and leaving him. Wouldn't rescuing him grant a larger reward to the player anyway?
      • Done.
    • There is a pazaak player named Kudos at the Hunting Lodge.
      • Done.
    • Apparently, if you get the krayt dragon pearl before going to the enclave, you can get the tribe's storyteller to tell you about the Sand People's history. Not sure if this should be included and I haven't personally encountered this, but I thought I would throw it out there.
      • Yeah, I've seen this, but it's rather contrary to the basic storyline, so I left it out. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:45, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • I added redlinks for the docking bay manager, Sharina Fizark's husband, and Fortuna's partner.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:45, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
    • There are also Furko Nellis and Junix Nard in the Anchorhead Cantina. Nellis plays pazaak and Nard is a vendor I believe.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:00, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Into the Shadowlands
    • There is a pazaak player named Fodo Medoo in the Czerka area.
      • Done.
    • I thought the poachers had sonic emitters, not sonic prods.
    • I added a redlink for the Wookiee that Dehno killed and the Wookiee guard.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:20, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • I should be able to continue my review this weekend.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:04, April 16, 2014 (UTC)


praguepride
  1. If Revan is not his real name shouldn't it use the nickname tag?
    • No.
  2. Pronoun confusion: "Revan was betrayed by his Sith apprentice Malak and captured by the Jedi Knight Bastila Shan, who saved Revan and formed a Force bond between them." Which two is them? Or is it all three of them?
    • Changed.
  3. "His mind wiped, Revan was given a new identity as a Republic soldier by the Jedi Council, but when Malak attempted to capture Shan aboard the Republic warship Endar Spire above the planet Taris, Revan joined forces with the Republic officer Carth Onasi and a number of other individuals on Taris to rescue Shan and escape the world before Malak destroyed Taris's surface." Run on sentence that should be broken up. I would recommend also putting the mind wipe stuff in the paragraph before as it deals with Shan's encounter.
    • Tweaked.
  4. (In the Revanchrist paragraph) Is "prowar renegades" direct from source as it should have a hyphon. If it is direct then add the [sic].
    • From the source, but the sic is not necessary. That's for seriously-misspelled words.
      • We'll have to talk about this via IRC.
  5. "But in reality, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause." - remove But.
    • Mhmm.
  6. "In the following weeks" should be [[week]]s
    • That's really a {{sofixit}}. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:18, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  7. more to come...
Manoof
  • Check your CSWECites, most are missing page numbers, and one (56) has the entry as the page number. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Early life
    • 2nd paragraph you mention "alek's friend" twice in quick succession. You could probably switch some of the references to Revan to separate these more. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Nope; Revan isn't his real name, and he hasn't taken the name Revan at that point. Changed it up though.
  • Bio - Mando wars
    • "The Mandalorian warrior culture..." makes it seem like the culture itself is invading, similar to Americanisation. Maybe change it to "the Mandalorians, a warrior culture, ...". Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Reworded.
    • "With the backing of Alek and his other followers, the Jedi decided to journey to the war front against the wishes of the Jedi High Council so that he could scout the enemy lines". Are we talking about the group of jedi with Revan or Revan himself? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Revan; changed to Jedi Knight
    • What were his findings on Onderon/Dxun? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Don't believe it's ever said.
    • "In reality, however, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause. However, Revan came up with a solution". Can I buy a synonym please? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Removed the first however.
    • "star cluster Jaga's Cluster," maybe rephrase to "Jaga's star cluster" pipelinking as necessary. I'm not too set on this though. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • The proper name's Jaga's Cluster, so nope. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:55, April 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • I must now eat and rejuvenate before continuing this review. You really are a sucker for punishment aren't you? :P Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Rise of Sith
    • "Amid the confusion, Shan rushed forward and delivered a Force push to the Sith Lord's chest, sending him flying, but Revan was critically injured in the explosions and the fighting that followed." The word "but" leaves me confused about this sentence, was Shan trying to save Revan? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Endar spire
    • From memory, you could equip a blaster when you storm the bridge, meaning you do not necessarily heed the advice... I'm guessing it thus needs a gamemechanics tag? Also I just replayed this section and he didn't say anything to me before storming the bridge. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Searching Bastila
    • The second paragraph could probably get the gamemechanics tag, since it implies you talk to Kadir, then Larrim, then Dia and later Gorton. Additionally, while you can't just walk past Kadir since he stops you when you get close enough, you CAN walk past the janitor and leave the apartment complex, bypassing those conversations. You can also ignore Carth when he wants to talk to you, so none of the mentioned conversations are required to progress. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
    • "Heading into the northern the pair..." Is this supposed to just be north or is there a word missing? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
    • "While exploring the cantina, Revan interacted with a number of local patrons, such as Jergan, Christya, and a young noble named Gana Lavin. While in the cantina, Revan spoke..." Since it's already established they are in the cantina, can you say something like "Revan also spoke..."? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
    • It may be worth mentioning some context on starkiller and his relation to the dueling ring. Glad to see you haven't given up on this! More to come. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • You have no life. On the other hand, amazing job. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • I can't really tell on this screen resolution, but that intro is ridiculously big (no, this is no joke). JangFett (Talk) 22:03, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Per dogma and Jang. Fe Nite (talk) 01:07, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well, I've asked around, and a lot of people believe it's a good length for the size of the article. A lot happens to this guy. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 01:13, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • I won't lie Cade. You scare me. Commander Code-8 You lost the game! 10:17, June 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if this is an objection worthy issue, but the segments dealing with the events shown in the novel read very differently from the rest of the article and seem more akin to a narrative than an encyclopedic article. I recall the article being marked for this problem in the past but the template appears to have been removed so perhaps I'm simply mistaken and this style of writing is permissible. Either way good luck with the effort; you carry the torch for all WP:KOTOR members and fans of KOTOR everywhere! JethLordMasterYing yang copy (Xia Order) 08:28, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Hey, thanks. As for the narrative/encyclopedic thing, the article was actually tagged with a Copyvio template because a user actually copied most of the second half of the novel into the article without making many changes. I wrote up the TOR:Revan events while reading the novel, and I guess the reason it reads differently than the KOTOR stuff is because I can go more in-depth as to what actually happened, unlike KOTOR's conversations and the character's feelings. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:44, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan married Bastilla not Shan. That needs to be changed. Unsigned comment by 71.196.255.127 (talk • contribs).
    • Wookieepedia common encyclopedic practice is to refer to characters by their last name in further mentions after they have been introduced. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:08, August 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan looks horrible in Star Wars: The Old Republic... IMO. Is there any chance that the image of him on this page could be changed to one of him wearing his hood and mask? That's the Revan I remember... A badass. Unsigned comment by 118.93.35.26‎ (talk • contribs).
    • As this is his canonical face, no, there isn't. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:03, January 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Observation: Friday will be Revan's one-year anniversary of nomination, and it still has only one support vote. Prediction: Revan will take longer than Wedge did to pass. :P
    Master JonathanJedi symbol.svgCouncil Chambers
    02:12 UTC WedJune 11, 2014
    • This is now the longest FAN ever on Wookieepedia, breaking the record set by Wedge. And it still has only two support votes. Over/under on date of passage: February 14, 2016. :P —MJ— Comlink 18:35, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not making it an actual objection, but wouldn't an image of Jedi Revan be more appropriate for the infobox as opposed to Dark Revan? I just would like the reasoning for the image, although he was Jedi (yes, I know what happened in the expansion's events.).—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 07:28, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • I second Jedi Kasra. That is a corrupted form of Revan and didn't even survive long, I suggest you add that one to the appropriate biography section and use as infobox image the previous one. Winterz (talk) 13:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • We should revert to his unmasked infobox image, and place this one in the appropriate section.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 14:43, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Dark Revan (and I totally love that the name is now a thing) is actually the final physical appearance of Revan, and is the final state of his body. However, I'm not necessarily set on using this image; once I actually beat him in the boss battle, I'll see if I can get a better image and reconsider the infobox. 15:09, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
          • I'm actually calling him Shrevan (short for Shadow Revan) atm, lol. But Winterz' points still stand, imo. It's up to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
            • Also, have you any idea who voiced Revan and Shrevan? Doesn't sound like Bennett.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:31, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • No, but I think Dark Revan and the spirit are voiced by different guys... Dark Revan sounds a lot different. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • Revan is played by Spencer Garret in the Shadow of Revan expansion.

Vote to strike Kasra's objections (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Been addressed for several months, and Kasra's long gone. CC7567 (talk) 14:59, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote RL calls JangFett (Talk) 15:28, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:30, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)


Dud Bolt

(2 Inqs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 00:56, November 13, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 06:08, March 1, 2014 (UTC)
  3. praguepride (Talk) 13:36, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:39, July 23, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:48, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Point IV
  • "Despite his rather rudimentary presence" - A rudimentary presence? Interesting turn of phrase, I think it might be a bridge too far though. Perhaps rudimentary "appearance"?
    • Mmm, maybe read it now.
  • Section, quote, sub-section doesn't quite work. Find a home for it in one of the subsections.
    • Must... Add... More-Quotes... To balance... Heh, but alright.
  • "Not in it to win it himself" - A bit informal and reads oddly, rephrase.
    • How about now?
  • "The Vulptereen's aggressive tendencies furthered themselves" - I'm not sure that tendencies can further themselves per se -- perhaps something like "amplified" would be advisable.
    • Thesaurus is always useful, though amplified does seem pretty good.
  • "Around 32 BBY, the next iteration of the Boonta Eve Classic on the Outer Rim planet of Tatooine was announced." - You've sourced this to TPM... strictly speaking this does not happen in TPM.
    • Well, strictly speaking, no it's not announced, per-say. I see your point.
  • "Sebulba found Dud Bolt having a drink, and promptly insulted the Vulptereen. Bolt took little offence while Sebulba explained it was only an act, meant to hide the fact that Bolt was working for him. Sebulba even claimed that he respected the Vulptereen pilot. As such, Sebulba cautioned Bolt to be extra careful of the contestants and to keep his eyes open for any signs of trouble or plotting. Meanwhile, only a few seats away in the bar the aging Devlikk pilot Wan Sandage had hired on the Glymphid hit-man Aldar Beedo, whom Sandage wanted to finish off Sebulba during the race." - Both PBP and extraneous in parts.
    • Condensed
  • "Fode Annodue, introduced the pilots, cheerfully welcoming Bolt and his podracer back to the Boonta." - It should be established earlier that Bolt has raced the Boonta Eve Classic, then.
    • Ok
  • "Jabba the Hutt, the host for the race, arrived in his personal viewing box soon after and exorbitantly announced the start of the race. The pilots burst out of the starting grid and raced onto the track with the Hutt's go-ahead." - Condense.
    • Condensed
  • "Two pilots, however, were left behind–Anakin Skywalker and the Toong pilot Ben Quadinaros. Skywalker was able to start off a little later after readjusting his pod while Ben remained grounded for the rest of the race." - Irrelevant, this is Bolt's biography, not a summary of the race.
    • Condensed
  • "Skywalker was able to catch up with the rear of the pack soon after, overtaking Bolt and several other podracers. Dud Bolt remained in the rear of the pack for the remainder of the race." - Repetition of "rear of the pack", break it up a tad.
    • How's that
  • A part of the article, namely Guo's removal causing difficulty for Skywalker is from the DVD-onwards incarnation of TPM. A separate cite should be used for this.
    • Mmm, okay.
  • "However, sometime around 24 BBY, Sebulba ejected Bolt from his job at the Dug's side" - An odd way of phrasing it. How about "Sebulba terminated Bolt's services as his in-race bodyguard"?
    • Mmm, how does it look now?
  • "Sebulba ejected Bolt from his job at the Dug's side and instead hired Aldar Beedo, the very Glymphid who was once hired to kill Sebulba, to work as Sebulba's new bodyguard." - Sebulba three times in the same sentence, break it up.
    • kay
  • You're going to need to provide a more detailed citation for Bolt's "presence" in AOTC.
    • Not sure what you mean, but I gave a source for the identification of that planet as Ando Prime (As otherwise it's never mentioned in the film itself). If you mean "Is it him", looking closely in the cockpit during the scene and in the new photo, the cockpit is clearly not empty, and the round shape of Bolt is in there, though shadowed. Look at the CGI podracer in the databank and note the the shape.
      • Screencap addresses the issue.
  • "In the end, however, Bolt was never able to completely finish off Aldar Beedo during a race, as Beedo was captured by a mercenary on Baroonda" - Repetition of Beedo. In general, try to break up the way that you refer to characters.
    • Okay
  • "As for Sebulba, his fate was not recorded, though he had both a son named Hekula, and a grandson named Pugwis." - Irrelevant.
    • Condensed, as we never know if Dud Bolt catches Sebulba or not, as Sebulba's fate is never revealed, or not yet anyways. Wasn't totally sure how to word it though, but I feel it should be mentioned, as he shouldn't just simply disappear from the article whereas we learn that Bolt never gets Beedo.
  • "though if his course demeanor ever slowed him down, his pod's boost package generally threw him back into the thick of things, where he preferred it." - A lot of informal phrasing, and "course demeanor" is doesn't really function well as a description.
    • Alright, how does it sound now?
  • "He did not care much for his pod's appearance and his track activities were obvious with the battle scars that his pod showed off." - Repetition of "pod"
    • Okay, er, now?
  • "After he was more-or-less double-crossed by Sebulba, an enraged Bolt vowed to destroy his old employer and his new bodyguard, Aldar Beedo." - This is out of place in the P&T, in the middle of a part where you're talking about how Bolt regards and treats his own pod. Split it up and rejig it.
    • ¿Qué pasa ahora?
  • "Bolt had rather short legs, which were quite dwarfed by his long arms, that were more than double the length of his legs. Bolt had yellow eyes and skin that was predominately grayish-blue, though it had areas of a much lighter blue that bordered the color of white, along with a yellow patch on his stomach." - Sentences starting the same way, repetitive.
    • Tried to vary it a bit now
  • Elements of the P/T that are describing the Vulptereen species have nothing to do with his personality or traits, which is that that section is for.
    • Alright, removed the echolocation info. Maybe it'd be useful if it could be related to his piloting ability.
  • "As such, Bolt held on to these traits." - Feels out of place and doesn't mean anything. "He had given skills and as a result he kept them."
    • How does it read now
  • "However, his skills weren't ubiquitous or all-consuming." - How would his skills be ubiquitous? Perhaps you mean "flawless" or even "impeccable" or even "indefatigable" or something like that, but certainly not ubiquitous.
    • Yah, that was the wrong terminology. How about now.
  • The skills section keeps talking about "skills skills skills" - Break up the descriptors a bit.
    • Okay, how does it look now?
  • How can the character have first appeared in a video game that came out on the same day as the film? Perhaps mention that he's in the film, and is a playable character in the tie-in video game that was released on the same day. This is especially so given that he's a puppet and principal photography was done in 1997 or something.
    • It's just that both appeared on the same day, which is mentioned. Now, if we wanna get real technical and just not use the tag, then we can go off the fact that TPM had a midnight release, thus meaning it opened before regular business hours for a store, as such meaning it was available to the public before the game was, even if they were released on the same day. I don't think principal photography really matters at all, because as far as I know (And if I'm wrong) the Appearances section is about release date, above all else. Unless that's not what you meant, in which case, I have no idea.
  • If the character truly appears and it's not just his pod in AOTC, a screenshot would be in order. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 23:35, November 7, 2013 (UTC)
    • Explained this further above, but I added the shot, replacing that awful old one, where Bolt wasn't even in the cockpit! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:50, November 10, 2013 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • Is it really proper to just refer to a podracer as a "Pod"? I've only ever seen the full term used.
    • I'm pretty sure I've seen this, but I will check again to see if the slang is used in any actual source.
      • Actually, I'm fairly certain Anakin refers to one simply as a "P/pod" in The Phantom Menace, when he's talking about he had managed to save most of his racer during his last crash. I'll have to watch it again, but I'll just note that here real quick. It might not be "proper," but it'd be in-universe slang. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:19, February 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • "Dud Bolt targeted the Nuknog pilot Ark Roose to knock out, and while he was successful in knocking Roose from the race," Double knock.
    • Fixed
  • Context on Teemto Pagalies.
    • Added
  • "hired the Glymphid hit-man Aldar Beedo to off Sebulba during the race" To "off" Sebulba is pretty nice mob lingo, but probably too colloquial for this.
    • Wan Sandage is Michael Corleone's third-cousin four times removed. (fixed)
  • "As for Sebulba, his life ended fatally in a fashion his enemies would've been pleased with," First off, "life ended fatally" is pretty redundant. Also, any info on this? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:49, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • Fixed redundancy. The NEGC is vague. It simply states he died in a way those who didn't like him would be happy with. There's nothing else I've seen that actually states when he died or how. I think the CSWE doesn't even mention it at all. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:49, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • A few preliminaries. First, unless he is consistently referred to "Dud Bolt" (and not "Bolt") in every single appearance/source, he should only be referred to as "Dud Bolt" at the start of every main section, and then "Bolt" each time afterward. The article calls him "Dud Bolt" almost every single time, which is unnecessary.
    • Finished this part. Yah, I seem to do that a bit, and I can't say I know why. Maybe because "Dud Bolt" is relatively short for a full name? I dunno. Anyways, this part, I think, has been addressed.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:17, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please check your linking. There are a few duplicate links and potentially some missing ones, so please give the article a thorough copy-edit. CC7567 (talk) 05:25, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
    • I only found one duplicate link, but otherwise I added links, fixed some spellings, etc... Link wise, I hope it looks good. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:37, May 23, 2014 (UTC)
  • Star Wars: Power of the Jedi should use {{HasbroCite}}.
    • Actually, looking back, I'm not entirely sure why Bolt is listed for that line. He never appeared as a figure, although if Sebulba had, he may have been mentioned. I'll add the cite for now regardless. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:20, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
      • Actually, per the last Mofference, templates like {{HasbroCite}} shouldn't be used unless they specify more information and don't simply just add a logo to the source, so it shouldn't be used without more information on the set/pack, etc. In any case, please verify why it's listed. CC7567 (talk) 21:24, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
        • Hm, he may have been mentioned on a Sebulba toy? I know some of the PotJ stuff came with info pamphlets. Rebel Scum probably knows. (So really this comment is jist thinking out loud). --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:41, June 21, 2014 (UTC)
          • Okay, added information about the pack Bolt was mentioned in.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:32, June 23, 2014 (UTC)
            • {{HasbroCite}} with all parameters filled out was fine by itself; the addition of the {{C}} tag was a bit unnecessary, so I've removed it. CC7567 (talk) 05:02, June 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please thoroughly check your Sources list to make sure everything is in the proper publication order. I'm noticing a few publications that are out of order.
    • This still needs to be addressed. CC7567 (talk) 01:00, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
      • Sorry about that. This should be sorted now, with some notes: THe Nintendo Player Guide has nopublishing information that I've been able to find, other than some websites claiming 1999, which I believe the book states in its opening pages. THe book has no Month or day, however. Also, the Fact File didn't have a date, so I left it where it was. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:14, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
        • Toprawa has compiled a helpful list of approximate Fact File dates. While not official, it's the closest thing we have to laying down definitive publication dates for the Fact Files. CC7567 (talk) 01:15, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
          • Alright, fixed up the source order then, using that. I'll be sure to get to the passive voice thing soon. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:49, July 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • "Bolt targeted the Nuknog pilot Ark Roose to knock out": the use of "knock out" without a following direct object is rather awkward; please reword.
    • Should look better now. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:58, June 23, 2014 (UTC)
      • Please check your changes. "remove from the race" is insufficient without a direct object after "remove," seeing as it's being used as a transitive verb in this case. CC7567 (talk) 05:02, June 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • "Skillful and well known on the track, many hypothesized that on the occasions when Bolt lost": dangling clause; the subject of the first dependent clause ("Skillfull…") doesn't match that of the second, independent clause ("many…"). Please reword.
    • Does it look any better now? I just removed a bit that seemed like it was repeating earlier info. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:58, June 23, 2014 (UTC)
  • Would it be applicable to pipelink alcohol when you mention "drink"?
    • It's never made clear what he is drinking. In fact, the only character in that comic who appeared to drink alcohol was MArs Guo, whose drinking isn't even mentioned in the article. If we want 'drink' to simply link to something, okay, but otherwise it's never actually stated what he's drinking. It could just be water for all we know. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:20, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • The article varies between "Fode Annodue" and "Fodesinbeed Annodue." I'd suggest picking one and sticking with it.
    • Fodesinbeed should be used when referring to the two heads, and Fode when it only applies to the red head. As for the TPM Game quote, I'm using that as seen on other articles that the quote can be found. I actually can't say if Fode speaks that line or Beed. I'll try to look through some more lets plays though on youtube. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:58, June 23, 2014 (UTC)
  • "Already during the first lap had Sebulba smashed Mawhonic apart in the Mushroom Mesa, and later roasted the engines of Holdfast with an illegal flamethrower before knocking Guo out of the race by throwing a piece of junk into Guo's engine intake,[5] a move that almost dispensed of Skywalker as well." This can definitely be split up.
  • Please avoid using words like "ill-fated" and "lucky." Unless we have conclusive evidence that something is related to an individual's luck or destiny, it's POV-oriented wording.
    • Removed ill-fated. As for lucky I thought it was used/referred as in the NEGC? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:12, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
      • Even if it's from source material, I personally treat it as POV-oriented. I'd prefer to limit any direct references to luck unless there's clear, indisputable evidence that something is "lucky." CC7567 (talk) 08:19, June 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • "During the next race, Holdfast was killed by Beedo on Sebulba's behalf during a race on Coruscant." Please avoid using passive voice, i.e. it should be "[x] killed [y]" instead of "[y] was killed by [x]" so that there's a clear relationship between the subject, the active verb, and the direct object. Please thoroughly check for this in the rest of the article as well. Also, you mention the race here twice, which is unnecessary.
    • I haven't checked the rest of the article, but that example should be good for now. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:12, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'm not seeing a change regarding passive voice—it needs to read something like, "Beedo killed Holdfast and xyz happens." CC7567 (talk) 08:19, June 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • "Bolt ended up having the chance to down Beedo after the collision, but was unable to do so." I'm rather confused by this, since at this point, it's already stated that Beedo has died, and yet now it's stated that Bolt has the chance to "down" Beedo after a collision. What exactly was the chain of events—collision, Bolt getting the chance to down Beedo, and then Beedo dying? I'd suggest rewording this so that it matches the order of events as much as possible.
    • Er, Beedo never died. In fact, it looks like you just contradicted what you pasted above. :P Holdfast was killed by Beedo. Beedo never crashed, having only bumped Holdfast. In truth, the sentence should be reworded... --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:20, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • "though it was never revealed if Bolt had been the cause": this isn't definitively stated in the cited source. Also, since we should be writing from an IU perspective, we shouldn't be making these kinds of conclusions unless there's explicit evidence from a published source.
  • "as after he was more or less double-crossed by Sebulba": first, please fix the passive voice here. Second, the use of "more or less" is confusing—either Bolt believed he had been double-crossed, or he didn't.
    • The passive voice portion of this objection still needs to be addressed. CC7567 (talk) 01:00, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
      • This should be fixed by now, as well. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:47, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
        • The passive voice was still present, so I went ahead and took care of it myself. It needed to read something like, "Sebulba double-crossed him" instead of "he was double-crossed by Sebulba." CC7567 (talk) 22:51, August 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't think it's necessary to go into the level of detail in the Equipment section regarding his Podracer. In particular, the vehicle's colors don't seem to be directly relevant to Bolt himself—what's more interesting is the fact that he didn't care about maintaining his vehicle's appearance. Details that are specific to the vehicle and not to Bolt himself should belong in an article about the vehicle.
    • Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.... Added information about his flag. Databank mentions that flags colors were chosen to represent a homeworld or because they simply liked the colors. Regardless of why Bolt has those colors, his Podracer colors match his flag colors. This makes the colors relevant, in my opinion. In addition, the game guides seemed to act as if some of those vehicle traits were specific to Bolt's vehicle. THe amount of damage on his would probbaly have an effect on his vehicle, making it different than the stock vehicle. Also, while it can be argued as game mechanics, the stats are different between Racer and Revenge, thus leading to more of a personalized vehicle (In another argument, we can say that we have no idea how a stock Vulptereen 327 acts). --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:12, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • The first sentence of the Bts is a run-on and can be split up.
  • The Bts uses both self-sourcing and direct sourcing via refs. Please pick a single method and use it consistently.
    • I might need some clarification on this one. I try to just source bits of facts that can't be self-sourced, like I imagine appearances don't need to be sourced. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:49, July 2, 2014 (UTC)
      • After giving it further thought, it's acceptable as it is. CC7567 (talk) 01:00, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • No mention of Kinect Star Wars in the Bts? CC7567 (talk) 20:44, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • As I've already said, please thoroughly check the article for passive voice (e.g. changing "[x] was [verb] by [y]" to "[y] [verb] [x]") so it can be eliminated where it's unnecessary. Also, there are several objections that have exceeded the three-week limit for inactivity. I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt and avoid starting a removal vote for now, so please take care of them as soon as possible. CC7567 (talk) 01:00, July 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Alright, went through it again, now, and tried to correct as much of this as I could find. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 23:30, July 13, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • The Unlicensed tags should be removed. As they stand, they imply that Star Wars Kinect is an unlicensed product which is not the case, and that the information contained within was released without LFL's knowledge or consent. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:15, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
    • I thought that the Kinect story was ambiguously canon? I mean, the Podrace story mode is seperate from the more confusing stuff, and doesn't seem to contradict anything (Unless the fighting on Felucia was a clone fight, in which case it does contradict with the fact Aldar Beedo was incarcerated before the Clone Wars, but the fighting troops didn't look like clones or droids much, so...), which would make it canon then, and thus no tags should've been necessary in the first place? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:41, June 21, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • "constant warring on the track" - what do you mean?
    • Guides cite him as very aggressive. He picked a lot of inflight fights with other competitors, thus he was always in conflict with others on the track (warring, in another word).
  • "Decidedly not participating to win races," - same here. Was he not trying to win before Sebulba recruited him?
    • He may have been. One of the guides, on its Malastare 100 page, cite that Bolt has attempted, and achieved, record times. But, once hired, he was there to make sure Sebulba was the one who got to win.
  • "Many hypothesized" - many what? Bit more context.
    • Oh, looks like I forgot a word.
  • Was Bolt one of the interviewees? If not, the discussion of the interview is rather detail-heavy.
    • Good point. I cut it down a bit.
  • The same goes for the race segment. Are all of these details about Sebulba's actions necessary?
    • Probably not in the detail I went into. I kept the Guo bit, though, as Seb and Bolt sabotaged him early on. Also, are the Phuii still the Phuii? Or are they Bardottans now?
  • Context on the Galactic Trials.
    • Ok
  • "racked up on the knockout charts," - racked up what?
    • I figured this was self-explanatory, as what else would one "rack up" on a knockout chart, although leaving it like that does seem a bit... I don't know, slangish?
  • "Bolt took well to the course" - that's a very awkward sentence. Please rephrase.
  • I'll continue after these. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:43, August 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • "faking to mock Bolt for not attending the talk show" - what?
    • See the quote at the top of the page. In the comic Sebulba goes on to say he was only feigning rudeness. Yah, there's probably a better way to word it than how I did. I'll see how I can make it better. But that's the context, anyways. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:55, September 7, 2014 (UTC)
      • Huh, I feel kinda dumb for not coming up with better wording than "faking" Heh, live and learn I guess. :P --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:45, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please fully reference your BTS. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, September 4, 2014 (UTC)
    • I never said it was done. A lot of these release dates elude me. I don't this game ever did have a page on the old LucasArts website, which I bet would have had a good date. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:45, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'd vouch that IGN is reliable for video game release dates. IN addition, the date on the game's review is dated for May 20, a day after the listed release date. Also added in the Kinect date (Which I admittedly did forget the first time around) and created some Racer Revenge refs. Unless I'm still missing something, which I don't think I am unless I need to source the film release date (I've noticed not everyone likes IMDB sources, so, uh, Rotten Tomatoes?) that should be the whole BtS. EDIT:Oh, and I'm not sure that the review author name needs to be there, since I'm directly linking to the review, but the Game's page, which has a small bit of writing written by Boulding. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 22:10, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Gonna need a source for that date of 22 BBY in the Racer revenge section. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:15, October 10, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • For the quotes from Episode I Racer, the Episode I video game, and Racer Revenge, may I ask if you are transcribing them from on-screen captions or dialogue files, or are they your own punctuating? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:14, October 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • The Vulptereen racer, Dud Bolt, is on the track today. Ho, he is gonna be tough to beat. and Dud Bolt has got a mean streak going on out there! were not captioned in either game. Without really knowing, I tried to base puncuation on how excited the voice actor was. Dax was excitable, thus exclamation mark, and Fode (In which case, shouldn't that quote be applied to just Fode? I thought it was that way, but I don't remember if I had it that way or someone else. I don't want to erroneously reapply Fode as the speaker) just seemed to state it, thus periods. So, those two are my own punctuating. The game quote from the Episode I Game is borrowed from the Ebe E. Endocott (It was there before my revamp), but having played the game most dialogue is captioned (Well, it has the option to be captioned if I remember correctly). Dud Bolt's tuant from EIR was captioned, though it didn't have a period at the end. However, certain taunts did have an exclamation mark. I figured it was an implied period. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 00:18, October 10, 2014 (UTC)
      • Please check the Episode I video game's captioning to ensure exact punctuation for the Boonta Eve Classic section quote. And please note that punctuation refers to everything: commas, dashes, as well as ending punctuation like exclamation points. I'm specifically curious whether it's "Ha ha ha," "Ha-ha-ha," or what. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:09, October 13, 2014 (UTC)
        • I'll have to scour YouTube videos. But, a question. I have a feeling this might be both Fode and Beed talking. If so, their separate lines would be formatted like two people talking, correct? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:54, October 14, 2014 (UTC)
          • Okay, so the quote is as it is. Fode is the speaker, however. So, I would just attribute this quote to Fode, and not Fode and Beed, yes? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:45, October 17, 2014 (UTC)
            • I don't think it really matters. They're both the same being. If you got this from YouTube, can you show me the video? I'd like to check this for myself. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:57, October 17, 2014 (UTC)
              • Here you go. It should start right as the quote in question shows up. Also, I thought that the commentary was just over the audio, but it seems like the audio is cut in half, so it's Fode's voice on the back half of the quote. If you don't think it matters, fine. But other articles, that I've done anyways, address whatever head the quote belongs too. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:06, October 18, 2014 (UTC)
                • It really doesn't matter to me. If you want to change the quote caption to Fode or whatever, fine. New question: the Kinect quote from the "Racer revenge" section; is that taken from a caption? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 08:13, December 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • What is Dud Bolt's role in Racer Arcade and Anakin's Speedway? I'm wondering why you place them at the top of the Appearances list. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:09, October 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • Uuh, they shouldn't be at the top if they're 2000 releases. Otherwise, Bolt is just an AI opponent. I didn't think events in the game were necessarily canon, although I suppose locations would be. Etti IV doesn't list the arcade as an appearance, though. In A:Speedway he's just a picture in the game files and the installation montage. He doesn't appear in gameplay. I suppose that requires a C caption. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:46, October 13, 2014 (UTC)
      • Wait, confused Appearance order with Sources order. I listed those two on top under the fact that, if anything, they take place before E1Racer and the film, as they both deal with Anakin while he's still racing on Tatooine, before he was picked up by the Jedi. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:52, October 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • The BTS image does not have proper sourcing. "Star Wars Databank" doesn't work. You'll need to find and link the proper DB entry. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 08:13, December 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • Whoops, that's actually outdated anyways since I uploaded a new version of the image, which is actually from the Insider's Guide. Fixed it. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:15, December 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • The final sentences of the second intro paragraph regarding the dates of his racing career are not worded very well. The article first says that Bolt "continued racing through at least 24 BBY," but then it goes on to say that he actually continued racing into 22 BBY. These statements are almost contradictory of one another. You should find a better way to present this information. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:44, January 13, 2015 (UTC)
    • How about that?--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:37, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
      • Well, now you have two consecutive sentences in that paragraph starting with the same word and structure. Please vary it up to avoid the repetition. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:08, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
        • Huh. I see... Er, didn't see, but now I do, but, you know what I mean. Tweaked it a bit without rewriting much. Technically, I guess they still say the same thing, but just with different wording. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:31, January 16, 2015 (UTC)
  • The first body image caption says that Dud Bolt wore a "notable" amount of gear. Do any sources actually say his amount of gear was "notable"? What exactly is notable about it? This idea isn't mentioned anywhere else in the article but in this image caption. "Notability" is an out-of-universe construct that we invented and have misused across far too many articles. If nothing calls his gear notable, we should avoid doing so. Moreover, that image caption is irrelevant to anything being discussed in that Bio section. You should reword it to reflect something being discussed in the section that it is illustrating.
    • Fixed this a while ago, forgot to note it here. The image captions should be more relevant now. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 16:05, March 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the first sentence of the Biography, the article sources the statement that Dud Bolt hailed from the planet Vulpter to that Wizards.com article. Although strongly implied by the context provided, the article doesn't explicitly say that Bolt's homeworld is Vulptereen. You should instead use a reference that says this outright, such as the Databank entry.
    • Actually, his homeworld being Vulpter has already been sourced to the Databank. The Wizards article is only sourcing Vulpter's placement as being in the Deep Core. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 22:10, January 25, 2015 (UTC)
      • Well, it didn't originally. The article originally had "Hailing from the Deep Core" all sourced to the Wizards article, which was incorrect. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:00, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • That Wizards.com article is also missing from the Sources list.
  • What is the purpose of putting the Sebulba Databank entry in a hidden reference at the end of the Biography? I've removed since, that DB entry doesn't mention anything relevant in regard to the sentence its attached to in this article. It actually says Sebulba's fate was unknown.
  • The P/T image caption does nothing for the reader given its placement. Try to come up with something relevant to the contents in the P/T section instead.
  • The first sentence of the P/T is completely unreferenced. Nothing in that sentence can be sourced to that Hasbro packaging.
    • The Nintendo guide describes Bolt as an aggressive "shameless toady," so I've added that note. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 04:23, February 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Please show me where the Nintendo guide calls him "aggressive" or that he funneled such a demeanor into his bodyguard work for Sebulba. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:15, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • Where in the world are you coming up with this? None of this is in Bolt's Databank entry. "...he readily accepted jobs to destroy the competition for others, accepting his employers' paychecks without hesitation."
  • This a common example of poor extrapolation that writers often make, and something that you should watch out for. The article says that "The Vulptereen would draw a blaster whenever he needed to defend himself." This seemingly says that there are multiple instances of Bolt doing this, as if it were a trend. Yet, in reality, there is really only one example of Bolt doing this, during that single Kinect Star Wars scene. You should rewrite this to avoid giving the impression that this was a trend and instead properly reflect it as the single occurrence that it is.
    • Good point. I'll try and keep that in mind for the future. I'll probably look for it any other articles, too. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:22, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • There's no reason to have two separate instances of the P/T discussing the shape of his nose. Move the initial mention of his shovel-nose to the end of the section with the rest of his physical description.
  • The Skills and abilities section comes off as if it's being forced in there for the sake of it. There's very little that's being said there that isn't just being recycled from the P/T, and very little is actually talking about his actual skills. Moreover, this is not a section that is typically utilized for all characters. The Layout Guide specifically notes its relevance for Force-users. I would suggest just cutting this out entirely, which would also allow you better alternating placement for the article's last two images.
    • I thought Powers and Abilities was for Force-users, while Skills and Abilities was for anyone else. I started to add the section on Podpilots because it's a demanding sport that requires a hefty amount of ability. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 22:10, January 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • The Equipment section would be better illustrated if you used the infobox image from the Vulptereen 327 article. It's much more effective than the blurry, crooked holoscreen shot from Episode II.
    • I was asked to include an image from Attack of the Clones. I'm not sure where else it can go, but I'll experiment with it for a bit.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 22:10, January 25, 2015 (UTC)
      • I added a second image, but I've kept in the other one in the same section. It doesn't look too bad. Like I said, I was asked to include it earlier. But, if you feel it should go elsewhere feel free. And while I doubt you'd contradict the above, I'd strongly suggest not removing it altogether. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:22, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nothing in the Databank entry this statement is being sourced to mentions anything of this sort. Either find a proper reference or ditch it: "...which often meant that the Vulptereen pilot would fall behind the main pack for a time"
  • Again, nothing from this Hasbro set suggests anything that is being stated by this sentence: "Bolt normally did not wear much in the way of clothing other than pants on occasion." I've just cut this out instead of the article trying to manufacture some flimsy claim about when he did or didn't wear pants.
  • I don't see how you can source this claim strictly to Episode II. Something else is needed here. If you can't provide any other reference that actually states this, you should just cut this out, since it certainly seems like this is just kind of you're own analysis: "...using the same computer-generated Podracer model that was used for distance shots in Episode I."
    • Well I sourced it to the DB article on Bolt's Podracer. It says that the V327 was in AoC and the model on that page and what appears in AoC is strikingly similar (Same for Boles Roor and Mandrell's racers). I suppose it's possible they created a new updated model... SO I guess I'll remove it. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 04:23, February 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Final reviewing notes: I've rewritten much of the BTS. It wasn't structured or ordered very well. I've grouped similar themes and appearances together to make it more cohesive, and I removed the long-winded detailing of the character's action figure accessories, which really isn't necessary for Wookieepedia. I've also removed the action figure image you added to the Sources list. There's no real reason for that to be there, and images should generally be avoided in Appearances and Sources unless there is a critical illustrative need. I have, however, left a Fact tag for the missing Hyperspace claim that you refer to below. We will need to find a way to properly reference that. This objection stands until that happens.
    • Any idea where I should start on this one? I'll re-check the Insider's Guide one more time, but I feel like I may have to look someone up. I got the image off of a Google search, but I doubt it's faked as there are several bits on there I haven't seen before. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 04:47, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
      • Update: I may have a kead on this, now, regarding the Hyperspace connection. I'll see how it develops. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:48, April 10, 2015 (UTC)
        • This objection remains unresolved, and, to answer your question below, I cannot help you reference this. I'm not even going to look at my other objections on this nomination until this is fixed, nor am I going to allow your delaying tactics to keep kicking the can down the road on this nomination. If you truly have a "lead," then show the evidence. I plan on starting a removal vote on this nomination one week from now if you do not demonstrate progress on this resolving this objection. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:26, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
          • Mm, yes. Because "Exclusive Fan Club Material Officially removed from the Internet = Deviously Lazy Delaying Tactic." Fortunately, the can never existed, but I suppose only I know that. The evidence isn't exactly... It's cache of the short stories. Unfortunately, that's all it contains. The source of it may have the other sections of Hyperspace. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:00, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
            • You said you found an image on the Internet. Can you show me this image? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:04, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
              • Here it is. I also had two threads about it, here and here, but got nothing (Possibly because I put them in the Senate Hall instead of the Knowledge Bank, which may have been a mistake). I found the short story collection via this thread. The image is from this blog. As I mentioned earlier, it's possible it is a fake, alas a sophisticated one. A lot of this concept art is nothing new, except for the middle one depicting an early look for Slide Paramita, here labeled as Teemto Pagalies. Paramita, on the other hand, has his name attached to another bit of art. In addition, I've never seen a colored version of that Aldar Beedo picture before, which intrigues me. There's more than just Bolt to deal with, here. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:51, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
                • That image is definitely not a fake. It most likely comes from the Hyperspace feature Galactic Gallery, but your guess is as good as mine which entry it was. I've added a reference note to explain what this information is and where it comes from. Outside of the original Hyperspace URL, this is the best we can do. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:04, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • The referencing for the BBY dates throughout the article is lacking. The following needs to be rectified:
    • "In 32 BBY, the next iteration of the Boonta Eve Classic on the Outer Rim planet Tatooine took place." 32 BBY cannot be sourced to Episode I.
    • "However, by the year 24 BBY, Sebulba had fired Bolt..." 24 BBY cannot strictly be sourced to any of the Racer Revenge material, because none of it explicitly states such a date. I'm guessing at best it says something like "eight years after The Phantom Menace," which is how you're extrapolating the date. Instead, you should create a reference note explaining how you arrive at this date.
    • Same for here: "For the new Podracing season of 24 BBY..."
    • Same for here: "...and became more aggressive than ever, topping knockout charts by 24 BBY."
    • Same for here: "For the 24 BBY racing season..."
    • Same here for 32 BBY: "By 32 BBY, Bolt's Pod had poor engine ventilation and lousy acceleration..."
    • Same here for 24 BBY: "By 24 BBY, Bolt upgraded the accelerator on the Pod..."
      • The dating for all of these should be fixed by now. My only question is if I should add an extra source after "For the new Podracing season" for Racer Revenge by itself, and then have the date and it's source stand by itself. Right now, the source is after "For the new Podracing season of 24 BBY." However, while the note explains the date, it also mentions Racer Revenge directly, and was wondering if that would work for the first part of that statement as well. Also didn't really know that each date needed to be referenced. I assumed that once was enough as the other dates could just be tracked to the first note. Thanks though for the correction. I'll have to fix that elsewhere. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:22, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
        • Every single part of every single sentence, down to the word, needs to be independently referenced, as you have done here for these dates. You cannot rely on a reference elsewhere in the article to apply to something said before or after. And you must maintain a formal voice in writing reference notes just like you do in the article proper. Never use pronouns like I, you, or we in formal writing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:15, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
          • Okay. I didn't know it carried over to the notes, as I thought I've seen that in status articles (we anyways), but I see that's just incorrect or a faulty memory. Thanks for the info. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:00, April 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • After looking through a few sources during this review, I notice you're missing quite a bit of information:
    • The Podracer Pilots section of New Essential Guide to Characters as a section for Dud Bolt that talks about how Bolt enjoyed an existence better than most members of his species. None of this is mentioned in the article. This section also talks about how Bolt didn't care about winning. Although this detail is included in the article, it's a glaring omission from the P/T section.
    • I added the info about Bolt not caring about winning in the P&T. As for the "although he did not completely dismiss the prospect [of winning]" part, I sourced this to the Prima guide, as per the original reference about that in the second paragraph of the body. I figured that was okay as opposed to a note explaining why, when this far down the article. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 16:12, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
    • The Byss and the Deep Core article mentions that Bolt is "famous" and talks about his reputation for talent in relation to another Vulptereen racer.
      • I seem to be having difficulty reaching this source, atm. The backup links take me to the main navigation page for the article, but selecting the Vulptereen portion takes me to a cached version of Wizard's front page. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 05:59, January 24, 2015 (UTC)
        • Still not able to retrieve this. How did you get it? As I said, I can't get past the main page on Wayback. Clicking any link takes me to an archived Main Page for Wizards. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:22, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
            • Hah, finally got it. Added the famous bit in P&T, as the article didn't really have a timeline for when he would be considered famous (Though I suppose we could assume the Rebellion era, as that seems to be the tense). However, reading the article, I'm not certain mentioning Lon Wert is really necessary for Bolt, as it really has nothing to do with Bolt, imo. It seems like information better suited for Lon Wert. Hm, maybe it would belong at the end of the bio (As well as the Famous bit) in some kind of Post-Clone Wars or "Legacy" titled section by itself? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:34, February 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • With this much missing information, I can only imagine what else might be missing. I strongly suggest taking the time to go back over every single Appearance and Source listed in this article and mine them for additional missing details. You don't want me to do that for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:44, January 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • I've rented a number of books from the library in the past week so I've updated where I can. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 04:23, February 9, 2015 (UTC)
        • You've updated "where you can?" That's a pretty pitiful answer, Clonehunter. If you're writing an article for status, it's your responsibility to cover every single source. Have you even checked everything to make sure the article is comprehensive? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:01, April 10, 2015 (UTC)
          • I have been checking every source. "Where I can" means I've been updating what needs to be updated. I don't know what's so difficult to understand about that. Currently, the only source I don't have is the Fact File. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 16:48, April 11, 2015 (UTC)
            • Fact File had nothing new. However, I see something called Podracer Punch Outs is in the source list. I'd like to assume it says nothing new, but surely that won' do. Hopefully the sole Amazon seller will come down on that price, or I'll throw a question into KB and see if anyone has it. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 04:01, April 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • Another reviewing note: If you're resolving objections, I suggest you address them here on the nomination page as you do so. I'm not going through your changes to try and guess what you have addressed and what you haven't. Unaddressed objections will result in nomination removal after three weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:00, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
    • I was just gonna cross them all off at once. But here, I went through to address what was down already. Hopefully I'll get to the rest sooner than later. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:22, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • All of these objections should be addressed now, with the sole exception of the Bozzie Barada information. You don't happen to know anyone here who has a good knowledge of the Hyperspace material, do you? I'll keep poking around, but right now it seems to be a fight to match up the image with an article title. Many of those HS articles have very nondescript names, which means the image could be from anyone one of those. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 16:05, March 7, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • Do we add Legends/Canon tabs? Bolt was named in The Phantom Menace. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:46, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • Eventually, all subjects that appear in both the films and TCW (with a few exceptions) will require Canon/Legends tabs. The current version of this article, as with Kam Nale, is the Legends version. CC7567 (talk) 18:48, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
      • So in other words, it's not time to implement them yet? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:13, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
        • No, the tab system CT needs to pass before anything can be implemented. CC7567 (talk) 19:14, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
          • O-oh, I see. I thought it did end up passing. My mistake. Thanks for the info, though! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:20, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
            • And, now that the Tabs are being implemented, we do that here too now? I figure though that the canon tab won't affect the nomination for this Legends article, and as such would be treated as its own beast, yes? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:18, May 21, 2014 (UTC)

Oh, and here's something I totally forgot. Has a Hypserspace logo, so it may be from a Hyperspoace article, but I do not know which, as I was never a member. According to this spread, Dud Bolt was at some point named Bozzie Barada. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:01, October 17, 2014 (UTC)

  • Any updates on this nomination? Also, still wondering if about the Hyperspace thing. I suppose, if there's no concrete solution or answer, we just ignore it? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 00:33, December 11, 2014 (UTC)


Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic (comics)

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:06, November 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An awesome comic series. I honestly don't remember why I started this; it and Revan will be my largest and probably only contributions to WP:KOTOR. Mr. Miller's production notes were a fantastic help. Also, yes, the article is 350kb in terms of characters, but over 100kb of that is references, images, quotes, and formatting—I've checked.

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  1. Apologizes for taking so long to finish looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:51, March 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:59, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

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Lee's charge
  • Exalted: Why is Rime Feeorin italicized?
  • Damn you, Cade, I don't have time for this. Will continue with Vindication. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:01, May 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Vindication: It is a little bit unclear why Q'Anilia dies. Is this said in the comic?
    • Explained.
  • That's it for the plot. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:12, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • Zayne: others rescue Jarael and a number of Jedi from Flashpoint.[29] After the group rescues Zayne's father Arvan from the Moomo Brothers on Telerath: Can you change one use of rescue? Plus is knighted really capitalized? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:32, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done, and yes, I believe so. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:26, May 27, 2014 (UTC)
So long -_-
  • Commencement: "...who are wearing red space suits identical to the foreseen Sith Lord..." Umm, when were they wearing the suits?
  • Commencement: Could you possibly clarify that T1-LB is the same Elbee that appears later?
  • Flashpoint quote: Shouldn't Zayne's name be mentioned first in the quote attribution since he speaks first?
  • I'll continue from Day's of fear later. 501st dogma(talk) 14:21, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nights of Anger: "...whose illness is growing steadily worse..." You might want to explain before that Camper is ill, or just reword it here to inform the reader for the first time that Camper is ill.
  • "... Mandalore explains that he has turned the Questioner into a martyr that has Mandalore and his lieutenant Cassus Fett helped spread the Neo-Crusader philosophy and armor throughout the Mandalorian ranks..." It's not really sounding right here. I'm pretty sure helped should be before Mandalore and not before spread, but remedy it however you see fit. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Knights of suffering. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Knights: "Upon recognizing Del Moomo..." Uh, since when was Moomo on Taris?
  • Still Knights: "...and Hierogryph keeps hold of the detonator as they flee..." Um, the detonator to what?
  • Exalted: "...Carrick has been in the Sanctum of the Exalted, he cannot be harmed by weapons..." Any particular reason? Is it a tribe tradition? :P
  • I'll start with Prophet Motive later. 501st dogma(talk) 22:35, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Swoop racing part: "Dyre is reinvented as the swoopduelist "Spikes," and Carrick is surprised when Goethar Kleej threatens and coerces him into protecting his son Aubin in the Tandem Open." Could you clarfiy if "Spikes" or Carrick was assigned to protect Aubin? It's vague at the moment.
    • Done.
  • Masks: Context on Wor Tandell?
    • Done.
  • "To her surprise, when she returns to the Hot Prospect, Jarael encounters Malak, and Carrick is surprised..." Could you kill a surprise?
    • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:47, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • Killed one of two encounters in close proximity.
  • Done up to Main Characters. 501st dogma(talk) 22:38, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Malak. 501st dogma(talk) 00:03, October 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Development. 501st dogma(talk) 14:38, November 9, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Article needs to be updated from the following:
    • The Insider 153 and/or 154 stuff. I told you many weeks ago that this needed to be done and you did nothing, so I can't remember which one it is now.
      • Nothing to update from either of those. 154 is just a general summary of Dark Horse; a KOTOR cover is the only thing related to KOTOR in that. 153 is just an offhand mention of KOTOR with no new info.
    • This. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
      • Added a mention. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 00:20, January 11, 2015 (UTC)

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  • We at WP:KOTOR appreciate your hard work and dedication, Cade. I'll review soon.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:02, September 16, 2014 (UTC)


CT-7567

  • Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Since this project is five years in the making, I felt it needed a preface, so please pardon the ramble. To put it simply, I believe this article's construction symbolizes the Wookieepedia community. There are many people who contributed to it (and still will), whether it was by providing images and audio files, hunting down obscure sources, or letting me bounce ideas off them. The article will never be perfect, nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article, but I hope it does justice to the character himself, who I think is one of the best that Star Wars has to offer—even after the Great EU Purge, because he's a strong character in every one of his appearances. Whether you've already contributed or will do so by lending your time and effort to reviewing the article, thank you for doing your part to make it what it is. So, in honor of May the Fourth and on behalf of WP:TCW, here he is.

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I agree. This article clarifies a lot of information from clone captain CT-7567. I have searched for information in this article many times and all my doubts have been anwered (except of course those that do not cover appearances of Captain Rex.) Unsigned comment by Generalfacu (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Less than 50 mainspace edits -- Cade Calrayn 23:02, May 13, 2014 (UTC))
  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:42, April 10, 2015 (UTC)

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Lee's charge
  • A number and a name: Is there a link for the engagement you describe in the last sentence? Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:30, May 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Battle of Teth: We have some kind of link for casevac team, however, as it currently refers only to one special case, I'll leave it up to you to decide about its inclusion.
    • Since "casevac" isn't a Star Wars–specific term, I don't see a need to link to it. Personally I also question whether the casevac team article itself is needed on the site, but that's another matter.
  • Battle of Teth: We have a problem with the remaining clone troopers of Torrent Company. I believe I talked with you about this years ago, but we don't know if CT-9932 is Coric, Del, Attie, Nax, Zeer or just another clone. Currently you say that five (including Coric) survived, but in the next paragraph you mention Coric, Nax, Zeer, CT-9932, Del and Attie as survivors—which are six. My theory is that there are five survivors, but while Rex checked them over comlink, one of the clones answered with his serial number instead of "I'm here" or something like that which is said in the novel. However, this is speculation. It's nitpicky, but a delicate situation. Thoughts? Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:01, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • The jump from six to five troopers (both times excluding Rex) is a discrepancy within the novel. When the troopers are about to report in, Rex states that according to the biosign icons in his HUD, "five of his men were still alive." However, when they individually report in via comlink, there are six, with only Coric and CT-9932 identifying themselves by name (so 9932 definitely isn't Coric). Then, for the rest of the sequence, it's back to five (Coric, Zeer, Nax, Attie, Del). Assuming that the six troopers checking in is an error, I think it's safe to assume that CT-9932 is either Zeer, Nax, Attie, or Del, so I'm removing any references to him, which should solve the problem. CC7567 (talk) 13:41, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Shipyards of Gwori: Nitpicky, but However, the battle droids overseeing the blockade detected the multitude of life forms aboard the stolen frigate and activated the radiation beam.: Wasn't that Juhm who ordered it out of frustration of his slaves escaping?
    • It was both; changed.
  • Outpost inspections: and Rex ordered them to take off their sunbonnets to verify that they were clones: Isn't "sunbonnets" rather colloquial?Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:27, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • JanFathal: After Pellaeon, an old acquaintance of his, permitted him to join Leveler's testing session, Rex departed to join the cruise with Tano, Sergeant Coric: Could you vary your use of "join" here?
  • Further campaigns: the blaster cannons, Tano threw a blaster battery at the cannons with the Force, and Rex detonated the explosive by shooting the flying target, annihilating the cannons: Same here with cannons. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:25, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Quell to Maridun: Just as Bly was docking their frigate to the Resolute, a Vulture droid attack inadvertently activated the frigate's hyperdrive: Wasn't that a duo of clone pilots?
    • Bly was at the controls, accompanied by a clone co-pilot. We have articles on the two pilots before Bly replaced one of them, but since there isn't enough info to distinguish them, I've opted not to link them within the article. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Orto Plutonia: that they were only there for his protection, not to fight his crusade against the Talz, the captain and his troops were forced into battle when more Talz appeared and ambushed them. After a Talz warrior and his narglatch forced him out of his Freeco swoop: Could you vary your use of Talz here, e.g. replace one with inhabitants? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:29, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't see a need to change it; three uses in two sentences aren't an extreme overuse of the word. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • I took the liberty of making a slight change here. If it annoys you, feel free to revert it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:30, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Blue Shadow Virus: Amidala reported that she and Binks had retrieved the missing bomb from LEP-86C8 in the arboretum, Tano and Rex quickly brought the bomb squad to deactivate the bomb.: Would you be so kind the replace one bomb with "explosive e.g.? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:52, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
Fan of the Core
  • Not so much an objection as an inquiry, under Battle of Teth I'm assuming you're using "casevac" as written in The Clone Wars novel? I know Traviss has a love affair with using military jargon without explaining it, but the average reader may not be aware it stands for "causality evacuation". It may be appropriate to either create an article for that term or simply spell it out. I believe it's also supposed to be all capitalized as a military abbreviation, not sure if she did in the novel or not, I only have a cheap txt copy so forgive me. :)
    • My apologies, I just saw this was already addressed. Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:38, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • I noticed in a couple of places you placed an "s" after adding an apostrophe to a name including Ventress and Grievous, I don't believe that's correct but wanted to double check if that was intentional.
    • Based on personal preference, yes. All uses should be consistent.
  • Excellent work, sir! Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:36, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

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  • For reference, this is the Legends version of the article. All canon material will be incorporated into that version once the tabs system is approved and implemented. CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • "nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article" It may very well be the site's longest FA when this review finally finishes, given that Wedge is on probation and I have no interest in trying to fix that mess. :P
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MK-09 (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ Meeting 63 due to undergoing complete rewrite as part of probation
  • Date added: May 20, 2014
  • Changes since last review: diff

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  1. Inqvote Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 05:01, January 9, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 17:00, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote A little too detailed on who said what, but otherwise ok. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:07, January 26, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 06:28, March 24, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:02, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Though I fixed a few instances of this myself, there is some infobox- and intro-exclusive information and linking. Infobox-exclusive info: masculine programming; intro-exclusive links: Galactic Civil War, the galaxy -- Darth Culator (Talk) 21:56, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

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Ace Azzameen (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ 64. (Sizable update/expansion)
  • Date added: June 30, 2014
  • Changes since last review: A lot. Check it yourself. Edits concerning update here.

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  • Added a link to the differences between revisions as well as one to the specifics of the update. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 02:49, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Even with the loss of RFAN, should reduxed FAs that were on the page still be showcased if they pass redux? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:43, January 19, 2015 (UTC)

Barsen'thor (Galactic War)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:41, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Only took me a year and a half to finish this. I've tried to make sure that this reaches the nomination page as smooth as possible, and I believe I have achieved the goal.

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Exiled Jedi
  • While often used informally, "they" and "their" are not proper singular pronouns in formal writing. Please go through the article and change all instances of this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:36, August 31, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Similarly to EJ's comment, "the individual" is also really not a good way to refer to the character. For one thing, you seem to by and large not mention the fact that the Consular's going to places with a companion. Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen, and the rest of the time it should be something like "the Consular and a companion" when you first introduce a planetary storyline. That then opens up several additional terms you can use besides "Jedi", "Consular" - duo, pair, the two. I'm still seeing quite a few theys in there.
    • "Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen," Not true. C2-N2 is technically a healer companion. Yes, his AI sucks and he tends to suicide a lot by trying to punch people with his bare fists, but he can be used, so we can't assume the player always runs with Qyzen until Tharan. I'll look at the rest of the objection later. Just wanted to get this part out of the way first. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:06, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it's safe to say that the in-continuity player characters never used their ship droids in combat, as the droids even say that they're not designed for combat. Their use as companions is really just game mechanics. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:10, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • All parts of the objection should be addressed now. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
          • I'm still seeing a number of "individuals", and also, the game goes out of its way to never call the Consular player a Knight, so I'm not sure it's appropriate to call the Barsen'thor one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
            • Alright, I have cut down the usage of "individual" considereably (from 88 to 22, at the moment). Out of those, a number refer to other individuals beside the Consular. The most part of the remaining instances are either at the start of the biography, where none of the Jedi titles apply to the character yet. I have kept some uses of the word later as well, just to avoid repetition between constantly referring to the character as a "Jedi", a "Consular" or the "Barsen'thor." Regarding the other point raised, I honestly don't see any reason why we can't call the character a Jedi Knight. We know he was promoted to a "full member of the Jedi order" or whatever the game calls it after Tython, but he was only promoted to Jedi Master at the start of Chapter 2. So what rank could he possibly have held in between Tython and the Fortitude? He was obviously a Jedi Knight even if the game doesn't explicitly state he was one. I'm not going to argue this case, and I've changed the article, but I honestly think it's a case of the duck test, IMO. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:47, February 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, a number of the images are only tangentially related to the character, like that Alderaan one. I'm currently playing through the Consular storyline, and will supply images from the game like I have with the Hero. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • The reason for that is that I decided to write this article to status only after I had already completed the class story. Naturally, I never bothered with taking screenshots as I was playing, and I wasn't going to to go back and play through it again with another character just to obtain images for the article. I decided that I could get away with whatever relevant images I could find already uploaded on the site, but if you have the ability to provide better images, that's great. Go ahead. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
      • No problem; you should've seen my original version of the Hero. I think I just used the Holonet images of planets. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:47, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • No mention of Head Jailer Tarinn in the Imperial Holding Facility on Balmorra? He's got a (silent) cutscene and everything. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Copycat! :P But anyways, great work. In the past few weeks, we've filled almost 300 redlinks, leaving us only 3200 left for TOR. I'll be sure to review this soon. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:28, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • Oh, actually, there's another cut thing from the files—during Corellia, the First Son originally was supposed to send a fleet to attack Sarkhai, causing Nadia to depart temporarily as your companion to go and help her homeworld. It's not entirely clear, but it looks like your actions (i.e. alignment choices) would affected whether Sarkhai won easily or only barely succeeded. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:31, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • May I ask why you use "They" or "their" when referring to the Barsen'thor? Winterz (talk) 00:03, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • Because we don't know the Barsen'thor's gender, singular they is used to refer to the character in a gender-neutral manner. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:19, August 23, 2014 (UTC)


Jaden Korr

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:28, August 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: So, to sum things up. He's a dude chasing a clone of himself, who gets killed by another clone of himself. He then gets his memories transferred into that clone's body, so he becomes a clone of himself. Oh, and he might have been a clone to begin with. And he also finds out about a potential clone of Xizor. Enjoy the cloneception.

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Soldier (clone)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The second of the three Jaden Korrs (Jadens Korr? Jadens Korrs?) running around in Riptide.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:24, February 4, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I'd like a mention in the intro about what the purpose of the Community was.
    • Hope it's more clear now.
  • "As they fled from the moon, Soldier and his brothers and sisters were influenced by the Lignan crystals scattered in its atmosphere as a result of the destruction of the Sith dreadnaught Harbinger." Any context on this event? More to come. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:07, January 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Context added. Thanks for taking a look at this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:30, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • "secret storage of Mount Tantiss on the planet Wayland." Secret storage what?
  • Context on Dr. Gray.
  • So Soldier is "Prime"? You don't explicitly link the two in the bio.
  • Same with Iteration, you need to slip in a few paragraph breaks.
  • "The two soon heard the sound of scuttle," Scuttle? Do you mean scuffle?
  • I don't think we need a full paragraph of examples of Soldier's rage in the P&T—one or two examples should suffice. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:08, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Like I mentioned in a response to an objection on my GAnom of Wry, I don't think these clones warrant a nickname template, since they essentially considered those to be their real names. If you have an argument to the contrary, I'm willing to listen. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)


Iteration (Jaden Korr)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:44, August 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Project Jaden Korr, Part 3/3.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:01, January 17, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I need some context on the Community.
    • Added.
  • Context on Mother.
    • Added.
  • Why did the One Sith want Soldier?
    • Addressed.
  • You've got some huge chunks of text, put in some paragraph breaks.
    • Addressed.
  • I think you should identify the space station as Mother earlier than you do, preferably the first time it actually appears in the bio.
    • Addressed.
  • Outside of the stuff about his appearance, there isn't much substance to the P&T. You just repeat some of the events that happen in the bio, without really going into what those events say about the character. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:08, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
    • Changed it a bit. Can't do much beyond that, as the stuff about him being uncomfortable about dying to replace Korr is speculation coming from Nyss Nenn's POV, and so it might or might not be true. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:53, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

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Anandra Milon

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:08, September 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first canon nomination

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  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:32, September 4, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Nivlacanator Talk 13:59, October 21, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Brandon Rhea(talk) 15:38, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:46, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

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Lee's charge
Brandon
  • Without having read the story, I can presume based on the opening quote that she was born 16 years before the Battle of Yavin. If I'm correct, you should add that information into the infobox.
    • Good point, I'm still not quite use to working without the BBY years yet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:22, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is there nothing that you could put into a "Skills and abilities" section? She seems to have some skills based on the events of the biography. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:41, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
    • There's not really any skill or ability she's implied to be particularly good or bad at. Anything I put would be kind of vague extrapolation that I'm not sure is necessary. Is there something specific you had in mind? Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:22, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
      • She wields a gun; how does she do with it? Then she was able to take on a stormtrooper and steal his gun. For a weakness, she then suffered injuries as a result. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:37, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
        • There are details on her outsmarting the trooper in personality and traits, and I'm not sure her getting hit several times is enough to comment on her skills or abilities. As for wielding the blaster she points it at the Mon Calamari and it says that it "twitches in her hands", which again isn't really telling us much although I've added it to the P&T. I still really don't think there's anything that gives us enough information to be worth having a skills and abilities section. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:52, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
SE
  • The article states Reffe was killed by stormtroopers in a riot, when he was in fact shot in the street while delivering his tirade. Please correct this.
    • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Please specify that he was shot in the street.
        • Added, although given the information is directly relevant to her I'm not sure such detail is required. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • The story says she took a picture of some signs advertising local entertainment on her previous visit to Level 1997. Please specify this.
    • It just says that she took a picture with a holocam, not what the image was of. Her taking the picture is already included in the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • It describes the signs advertising local entertainment then says she snapped their image with a holocam.
        • It describes the signs as she arrives there and then says when she was younger her friend
          • It says "Anandra had been to Level 1997 once before, on a dare with a schoolmate; they'd taken the lift down, snapped their image with a holocam, then returned skyward." Nothing in that sentence implies the picture was of the signs. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
            • I misread it the first time. After re-reading it, I think they actually took their own picture while on the level, because it refers to them taking a lift down together, then snapping "their" image with a holocam before returning skyward.
              • It doesn't necessarily mean that, as the wording could also just mean a picture belonging to them. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • Please specify that after Reffe's death, her mother tried to reassure them at breakfast.
  • The story states that while Alderaanians were being arrested in the streets, there was no HoloNet service, making it impossible to spread the news.
  • It also says the day after that, when the Imperials went door to door, they claimed that Rebels had been recruiting locals, and that anyone born on Alderaan needed to be taken in for questioning.
  • The story doesn't specify that her neighbor first informed her of the rumor, just that she repeated it with a cynical grin.
    • I didn't mean for it to imply she was the frist to tell her, so reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing where the story says her mother was arrested. All it says is she heard her mother open the door, and the static of a stormtrooper's voice before the cleaning unit carried them away.
    • I could of sworn it specifically said that somewhere, but double checking I can't find it. Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • They were told about Level 2142 before the run in with the Underworld Police.
    • Reordered. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Please specify that the family friend directed them to Level 2142.
  • Santiago didn't want to leave without their mother, and only Anandra and the close call convinced him.
  • Please reword it a bit to clarify that they arrived two days after the transport had left.
    • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Two days before she arrived at Hangra's Meat Shack, not arrived on the level.
        • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:24, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
          • Where does the story specify the transport left before they arrived on the level?
  • Finished the first two sections of the bio. After seeing how much detail is missing, I strongly suggest going over the story with a fine tooth comb to make sure you aren't missing more. I also strongly suggest going over any of your other noms from this story, as some of them are also missing information. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:44, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
    • Double checked through and reworded a few more bits to be more specific. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Where does the story specify the riots were broken up by stormtroopers? The closest thing I'm seeing is "The day after the stormtroopers shot Reffe, security forces began arresting anyone in the street."
    • I took that to be them breaking up the riots, but reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • The story specifies what kind of food the man gave them.
  • It doesn't say they slept as soon as they arrived on the level. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:08, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • I don't think the sentence in the article implies that either? Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Can you specify that the family friend directed them to Level 2142?
  • Can you reword the Centax 3 delivery part? The story doesn't specify a delivery from Centax 3, just "the" Centax 3 delivery.
    • I'm not sure of the difference but done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the P&T it says she wanted to attack the guy at Hangra's Meat shack, the story specifies she wanted to drag him over the counter and yell at him until everything was right.
    • Changed attack to drag over the counter. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
      • You make no mention of this in the bio.
        • Since she doesn't actually do anything I didn't think the specific details of what she felt like doing need to be in the body only the P&T. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:17, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • "After the transport had left Coruscant" You never specify which transport this refers to.
  • Please specify that the man at Hangra's directed them to Level 1997.
    • I actually totally missed that. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
      • You still don't mention that it was the man that sent them there. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:09, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • You don't make any mention of her snapping at Santigo in the bio. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:51, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
    • I thought having specific parts of conversations in the P&T was ok, but added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Intro could use some info on why the Empire was rounding up Alderaanians.
  • Should probably mention Santigo earlier on in the bio.
    • Added. Any earlier and we can't be sure he's alive yet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • "Anandra approached a stall named Hangra's Meat Shack where she asked the old man operating the grill about the Centax 3 delivery." There is absolutely no context as to why she would ask this.
    • There isn't any in the story either. I assume the Centax 3 delivery was the transport taking them off world but that's never stated. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • You're getting way too play-by-play. We don't need to know everything that they say.
    • Which bits in particular? Most of the info I'd consider play by play was added based on objections from SE and I don't want to undo his objections unless you specifically say they need to go. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • I'll speak with SE and get back to you. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:27, April 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • Take care of these and I'll give it another look. IFYLOFD (Talk) 02:30, April 9, 2015 (UTC)

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Finis Valorum/Canon

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Please do not call for a vote of no confidence in this nomination. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)

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  1. Emperor Jarjarkine MP-Mandalorian Senate Hall 23:42, October 3, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Exellent job. AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 03:40, November 7, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Very well detailed and sourced, I support it. ProfessorTofty (talk) 20:50, November 30, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote It's better than I'd expect a poocanon article to be. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:50, February 4, 2015 (UTC)

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Zuko's advice
  • Hi Brandon ! Here i'll give you my standart review. Could you use the code of Show Dupplicated links ? Because i think that, for every articles and mainly on the FA, there should be no Dupps. links. So, it would be good if you could look at this.--Emperor Jarjarkine MP-Mandalorian Senate Hall 23:32, October 3, 2014 (UTC)
Hanzo
  • As a prelim, note the Layout Guide establishes all infobox info must be in the article body itself, meaning his height, hair, eye and skin color. It seems standard practice to put these in personality and traits sections.
  • Will do a full review later. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:25, November 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please edit his behind the scenes to reflect how the Tarkin novel brought back that Legends first name of his. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:49, December 2, 2014 (UTC)
Culator
  • Indeed, even a lack of ability merits a skills and abilities section if that lack is made evident by the references and is relevant to the bio. In Valorum's case, I think these conditions are true. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:03, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

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Note: There was some disagreement over whether this article should have a "Skills and abilities" section, since no skills are outright stated. I could talk about how Valorum was unable to manage the bureaucracy and reign in corruption, and that Palpatine politically outmaneuvered Valorum—resulting in Palpatine's eventual tyrannical reign. If those who review this page think it should be added, I will be happy to add it. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)


Gorman Vandrayk

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 06:24, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Come on my friends, let's make for the hills. They say there's gold but I'm looking for thrills.

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  1. Very well written.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 12:43, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 16:42, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:22, March 24, 2015 (UTC)

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501st
  • Bio and intro don't mention his gender outright.
  • It might be good to give a better introduction into why he became known as Camper in the bio. Right now, you randomly refer to Gorman as "Camper" with no context as to who calls him that. Just using the intro's introduction for his Camper name would be fine.
  • "...at one point, Vandrayk, at the behest of small-time hood Marn Hierogryph, held conceal wanted criminal Zovius Mendu within a crate of dried dreeka fish to be shipped to Corellia." The held conceal part is kinda weird. :P
  • End of On the run: Do they pick up Zayne? It's kind off vague at the moment. Also, what was the envirosuit used for/by? 501st dogma(talk) 02:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • All fixed. IFYLOFD (💩) 04:12, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • The existence of the virus was a lie—what was ailing Vandrayk was actually molds and allergens running through the air circulation on The Last Resort, from which he recovered quickly after coming aboard The Last Resort. - should the second reference to "The Last Resort" instead refer to the "Arkanian Legacy"? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:10, March 16, 2015 (UTC)
    • Yes, fixed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:26, March 20, 2015 (UTC)

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Arkoh Adasca

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 07:43, December 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: It's an eminence front, it's a put-on...

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  1. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:59, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 00:34, March 2, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:48, April 14, 2015 (UTC)

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Toprawa
  • Please employ the {{Faraway}} citation template in the BTS.
  • I think I've asked this on other noms of yours. Isn't Journal of Doctor Demagol an Appearance? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:27, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

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Heist in Capital City

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:32, December 28, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The first FAN for Star Wars Rebels!

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  • I'll probably make the Ezra's Gamble article soon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:47, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

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Ayrehead
  • Instead of the previous mission being the conflict on Gorse, would the events of Ezra's Gamble be more appropriate? According to Star Wars Rebels: Rebel Journal by Ezra Bridger they short time before the heist and since both involve Bridger it seems relevant. I'm not sure if Gladiator Night would be a suitable article to include all of those events or if another more broad article would be needed like Hunt for Gronson Takkaro or something. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • Hmm. Gladiator Nights (or whatever the page ends up being called) could work if you wanted to go for Ezra-centric. On the other hand, we could go for rebel-centric (that was why I included Gorse) and could create an article for Sabine's attack on the TIE landing pat from "Art Attack." The Rebellion Begins mentions that Sabine got onto the Lothal most wanted list because of that attack, so it's notable enough (unlike "Entanglement" and "Property of Ezra Bridger," which happen after "Art Attack" and don't really seem relevant enough for an article). So when considering relevance to the rebels, since the heist was a rebel attack first and foremost, that seems like the most logical candidate. What do you think? - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • Either would work for me, and equally I think including both might be fine as well, I'll leave it up to you. The Gorse conflict just seemed somewhat distant. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
        • Added the airfield for now. Once something from Ezra's Gamble is created, I'll add that too. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 06:05, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • Should the Lothal Year date from the Star Wars Rebels: The Visual Guide be included somewhere? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • I could if you feel it's important enough. I try to shy away from using it's not well known to readers, and talking about the event's relation to the Battle of Yavin is much clearer. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • I've seen it in other articles and thought it might be consistent, but to be honest Yavin makes more sense, since we're probably going to be changing it to BBY soonish anyway. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • Quite a lot of linking is missing. In the infobox alone, Years, food and Lothal rebels need to be linked. The Lothal system may also need linking for the orbit of Lothal, but I'm not sure. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added the ones you mentioned (though linking to Lothal system seems a bit of a stretch). I'll fill in the redlink for foodstuff. If there's more then please feel free to add them. This seems like a sofixit. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • Anymore that I spot I'll add myself, but I thought since there were several it'd be worth pointing out. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • TIE fighters need to be included in the forces section of the infobox, and probably Yogar Lyste as well. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the quote for aftermath "could signify something more than the left of a few crates", is this meant to be theft or loss of a few creates? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • "The Ghost later to Lothal, scrambling its signal", I think you're missing a returned or something here. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the final paragraph of aftermath could you change the word rebels to something else in some of its uses, like the group or the crew of the ghost? It seems a little repetitive. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • Some kind of category for the various Rebel missions seems like it would be useful but I'm not sure exactly what it should be. Lothal battles could work, although not all of the events would necessarily fit. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • If a category was to be created, it would probably have to be something like "Missions of the Ghost." - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)

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Nom Anor

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM. After 1 year, 3 months, 8 days, it is finally done. I apologize in advance for length (40 k words ish) and realize that this will not be passed for a long, long time. Thanks go to all those who helped me with sources and whatnot, especially Cav, for tolerating my constant source requests. Also, if this article goes too in depth in places with unnecessary info, just call me out, as I had a little trouble determining what was relevant and what could get cut....

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Good job. I liked it. The article was descriptive and answered all of my questions. -Joe bob frank Unsigned comment by 70.172.240.61 (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Unregistered users ineligible to vote -- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:44, January 9, 2015 (UTC))

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  • Wavering Loyalties section has no quote because I literally could not find a quote that fit that section... 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)


Mission to steal Imperial disruptors

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:46, January 2, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I hope this nomination doesn't cause much... distress. Get it? No? Ok. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:46, January 2, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:19, March 5, 2015 (UTC)
  2. I think I'll support regardless of the Bay articles, because if it's a no then fine, and if it's a yes I don't think there's any question they'll be made and linked too. An entertaining article! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:38, April 2, 2015 (UTC)

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Clone tries
  • The outcome says that the Rebels handed over the captured disruptors to Organa, while the body states that the weapons were destroyed and that the Rebels delivered the droids back to Organa. So, did Organa get any disuptors?
  • Should Bay 7 and Bay 17 get articles? I imagine they would, under the same circumstances that we have articles such as Docking Bay 94 and the like.
    • Good question. Docking Bay 94 could be argued as having more notability. I'll ask what other people think as well. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:31, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, the Trivia guide identifies the locales as Garel City and Garel City Spaceport. While I'm not sure if the city needs mention, I imagine that the spaceport should be, as it's the location of the cargo bays. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:41, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
    • Created those pages and added them to the page. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:31, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

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Attack on Imperial Troop Transports

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  1. Inqvote IRC reviewed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:01, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Good work! Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:12, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

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Clone tries
  • I forget how the unidentifieds are being handled in Rebels, since obviously we don't want a page for every blithering stormie that walks across the screen, but is that Aqualish in anyway notable enough to have his own article? If not, nevermind.
    • I'm not necessarily opposed to it, but the unofficial rule I've always heard is that a character should, at the very least, have a line of dialogue to qualify for an article. I'm content to go with that. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:37, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
      • That might make more sense, unless, I suppose, some source fills in his background, because I don't know if anything labels him as an actual farm hand or employee, or just some random bystander or a friend who was visiting. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:46, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Since the TIE wasn't actually destroyed, I wonder if that should be mentioned, or at least inferred, that it wasn't destroyed.
    • In the intro, that is.
  • All of these mission articles are really good. That's not an objection, ofc. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:56, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, I wonder if the Aqualish should be mentioned as being detained along with Morad and Marida in the first paragraph of "the attack." --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:46, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
    • We don't know where and when he was detained - we never saw him on the farm except for already being a prisoner, as I recall - so there's not really anything we can say there. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:55, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

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Mission to Stygeon Prime

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 01:35, February 27, 2015 (UTC)

Calvin Schubert(talk) 06:14, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

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Cav
  • As with my objection to Attack on Imperial interrogator droids, why is Mandalorian not being linked to? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:47, March 16, 2015 (UTC)
    • It was decided early in our documentation of the new canon not to have a page called Mandalorian/Canon (you can see that it's protected from being created). The reason is that, in canon, Mandalorian is much different than Legends. The word is simply a demonym in canon. There would be nothing unique about Mandalorian/Canon compared to Mandalore/Canon. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 14:36, March 16, 2015 (UTC)

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The Last Resort

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:54, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Heaven sent the promised land, looks alright from where I stand.

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  1. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:41, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Brandon Rhea(talk) 01:58, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  3. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 03:42, March 7, 2015 (UTC)

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Tsoklo

  • Nominated by: Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 20:54, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The Rebel's Rodian (Not Tseebo) (With contributions from AV-6R7, Tsoklo's biggest fan)

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  1. As contributor. Let us toast spicebrew in honor of Tsoklo. - AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 21:01, March 23, 2015 (UTC)

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  • I posted this objection when the article Jho was nominated, and I'm afraid I'll have to post it again here. It's not one that I can strike without some significant convincing. The objection is based on the FA requirements, which say that an article must, "following the review process, be stable, i.e. it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars." Tsoklo is a recurring character in Star Wars Rebels and it stands to reason that he will continue to make appearances here and there. That means there can be multiple instances throughout the next season, as well as via book releases, that will require this article to be constantly updated. No single author/nominator can guarantee that they'll continue to be around to work on the article, and there's no guarantee that anyone else will necessarily update it either. And even if it was updated, there's no guarantee that the updates will be of sufficient quality to maintain the article's FA status. Because of that, this article is at risk of one day becoming a Former Featured Article, and I think it's best that we avoid nominations with that risk. I would encourage you (and everyone) not to nominate characters from Star Wars Rebels. Unlike events, which are mostly confined to one or two episodes, characters are recurring and will constantly need upkeep. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:04, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Good job on the article, though! Should've said that in my previous comment - I don't want my objection to be taken as a shot at the article's quality or overall worthiness to be made a status article. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:05, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
      • I had considered this issue, actually. But I was also making the assumption that I, or someone, could be stuck trying to keep the quality up week to week (which is admittedly insane), especially seeing that it's possible that Tsoklo may take quite some time to bring up to status, possibly by the start of Season 2 which would cause issues everywhere. Damn. It's an excellent point, though. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:11, March 23, 2015 (UTC)

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Azzameen Station

  • Nominated by: JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 18:49, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Long live Azzameen Home Base!

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