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The featured articles of the wiki are articles that represent the best Wookieepedia has to offer. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like.

So just what makes a featured article? Well, we've prepared a list just in case someone should ask that, and it is as follows.


An article must…

  1. …be well-written and detailed.
  2. …be unbiased, non-point of view.
  3. …be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
  4. …follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
  5. …following the review process, be stable, i.e. it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
  6. …not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
  7. …have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
  8. …have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
  9. …have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
  10. …not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
  11. …be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Wookieepedia:Sourcing for more information.
  12. …have all quotes and images sourced.
  13. …provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
  14. …include a "Personality and traits" section on all character articles.
  15. …ideally include a "Powers and abilities" section for Force-sensitive characters and a "Skills and abilities" section for non–Force-sensitive characters, where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
  16. …include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
  17. …pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
  18. …counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

For more information on what makes a featured article, see What is a featured article?


How to nominate:

  1. First, find an article you feel is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
  2. Add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating and save the page. NOTE: If the article you are nominating has been nominated for FA one or more times previously, you will need to specify a new subpage name as a parameter in the template (e.g. {{FAnom|Lorum ipsum (second nomination)}}).
  3. Open the redlink (in a new tab or window, if possible) and fill out the form according to the instructions provided.
  4. Copy the code provided to the bottom of this page.
  5. Purge the article to update the template.
  6. Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
  7. Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
  8. The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
  9. Be sure to place your signature in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.

How to vote:

  1. Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
  2. Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
  3. Please note that in order for your vote to count, you must have 50 mainspace edits.
  4. If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under, if possible. Failure to do so may result in your objection being considered invalid.
  5. As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
  6. Once the minimum nomination period has passed, an article that has achieved the required number of supporting votes and has no outstanding objections will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article." A nomination will be considered successful if one of the following criteria is met:
    • five supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • four supporting Inquisitor votes, plus two additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • three supporting Inquisitor votes, plus four additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week; or
    • seven supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least two days.
  7. Per Inquisitorius consensus, no Inquisitor may use their Inqvote on their own nominations.

Also remember to add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating.

Every day the next article in the queue will be highlighted on the Main Page as featured, marked with the {{FA}} template and removed from the list of nominations. The beginning of the article then appears on the Main Page via the {{Featured article}} template. Nominations that are inactive with outstanding objections for three weeks will be eliminated from the nominations list by the Inquisitorius.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by Inquisitorius vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Note: All reduxed articles require only four support votes to maintain their Featured status, at least two of which must come from Inquisitors. Reduxed articles will be subject to removal if objections are not addressed after a period of 4 weeks, pending the support of at least three Inquisitors.


Featured article nominations

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Revan

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:52, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 1) MULLET MAN FOREVAH 2) I'm incredibly sorry. 3) No, I'm not insane. 4) What can I say? I got bored.

(2 Inqs/4 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Now, if only movie main character articles could be this smooth...--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 02:18, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
    • Only Lando's that smooth. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:57, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote ow my balls IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:15, October 27, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:43, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Impressive, most Impressive. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:57, April 29, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Manoof (talk) 00:49, May 23, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:36, May 27, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Quick look from the Council Chambers:
  • I'm going to take Jang's comment and make it a formal objection. The intro is way too long. I can tell that simply by the fact that I have a 1080p display, and I still have to scroll down to read the rest of the intro. For comparison, Wedge Antilles is over twice the size of this article, yet his intro is just 607 words compared to Revan's current 1,428. Based on that, I'd like to see the intro cut at least in half. Summarizing is the key here; notice how the Wedge intro handles three X-Wing novels with a single sentence about Wraith Squadron. Let the reader get the details from the body; in an article of this size, small details don't belong in the intro. Three to four paragraphs of the current size, maybe four to five if the paragraph size is reduced, should be the target here.
    • Cut down to four with 672 words. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:12, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • I may make a full review later if I get bored, but there's no guarantee. —MJ— Holocomm 22:57, June 21, 2013 (UTC)
SE decided to take a crack at it
  • Early life and Jedi training
    • In the first paragraph of this section, two sentences in a row are started with the, "The child" and "The Jedi Master" Would you mind switching one up a bit?
      • Uh... the first one is referring to Revan, and the second is the title of Kreia. I don't really see the need here.
    • Same with the second paragraph of that section
      • Same here. The two sentences are talking about different people. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:14, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
        • Looking at it now, i'm not sure why I objected to this :P Apparently you object to some wierd stuff when reviewing while tired :P Supreme Emperor (talk) 16:40, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
The crown jewel of WP:KOTOR
  • These following objections are preliminary, although this section of objections will deal with the article in full. In addition, I intend to make this review my finest, as the scope of this article and the subject in question will require that.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire: Now believing himself to be a Republic soldier… If you could source his position as a soldier, that'd be great. I know that the Essential Guide to the Force, a conversation with Onasi in-game, and the TOR Encyclopedia.
    • Done.
  • Upon entering the next hallway, the two soldiers discovered a pair a Sith troopers and opened fire on the boarders. Continuing through the ship… So what happened to the troopers?
    • Done.
  • until they happened upon a Jedi and a Dark Jedi battling each other. Please link the Jedi and Sith to their respective articles.
    • Bah. I even looked at their articles while looking through the KOTOR articles.
  • Throughout the "Searching for Bastila" subsection, the image captions are in italics. Could you correct this?
    • Currently, I am unable too; there seems to be a problem with the {{Gamemechanics}} family that italicizes image captions if they are on the next line after the template. I'll have someone look into this.
      • OK.
        • Fixed. The templates in that family all had a stray '' near the end of the code. Removing that solved the issue. —MJ— Comlink 19:56, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Did you check the CSWE for some information? I am only asking out of curiosity, because when I read through the article, I'll make a point to cross-reference. Nice job thus far, I'll continue later. I like how you handled my girl Yuthura.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:19, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yep. Read through all three volumes for any mention of KOTOR, and used all the entries to establish as much of the game as canon as I could. Thanks.
  • Returning to May and the others, Revan informed them of the terentatek's defeat, and the grateful students fled the shyrack caves to freedom. Please reference this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:21, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Don't forget to add that he used a violet blade in his duel with Malak, as far as Timeline 8 is concerned.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:26, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • I wouldn't call that a violet blade; it's really more blue to me. Besides, going by Shadows and Light, Revan has a blue blade during the duel.
  • I would also like to add, thank God that that Chee actually confirmed that "Mullet Man" was the facial model used in TOR. I've been bugging him for months about this issue.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:31, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • The 8th paragraph of the "Searching for Bastila" section needs to be referenced.
    • Done.
  • In the 6th paragraph of the same section, you mention Nord without giving any context, which is located in the following paragraph. Please fix this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:13, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Could you pipelink articles for the two brothers in the Outcast village?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:14, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not seeing any articles for those Outcasts.
      • Please create them.
  • Please comb through the article and correct instances of using first names as opposed to surnames. Only where needed, though.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:59, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done; I have left the naming of Bastila when her mother's involved, Mission when Griff is involved, Carth when Dustil is involved, and Canderous when his clan is involved. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:20, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm back, got my PC back. I'll continue where I left off. Been a hell of a few weeks.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 06:21, July 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • "At one of the nearby escape pods, an injured Republic soldier begged Revan for help…" An article for the infected Republic soldier would be good.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:22, August 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Revan, Shan, and Onasi then left the apartment only to be met by a Twi'lek messenger… An article for the Twi'lek would be great.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:47, August 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Still seeing some instances of first name usage as opposed to surnames, please fix where applicable. I'm reading through Tatooine.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 21:54, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Well, that section in particular needs more first name usage than the others—there's Mission and Griff, and Helena and Bastila. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:01, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
      • True, though I had caught the early mention of "Canderous" in the section's first paragraph. I wanted to inform you of where I was in regards to reviewing the article.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:18, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you create an article for the Sand People chieftan?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Linked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:21, September 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • You mention all the planets but Tatooine… Departing Dromund Kaas as willing servants of the Emperor, Darth Revan and Darth Malak followed the Dantooine and Kashyyyk Star Maps to locate similar Star Maps on Manaan and Korriban. Please fix. Possibly more to come.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:10, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • On Korriban, Revan single-handedly defeated a pair of massive terentateks… Revan single-handedly defeated Mandalore the Ultimate… Could you use a synonymous term for one of your uses of "single-handedly?"Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:15, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Sweet, I'll review some more and get back to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:38, August 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • Revan was approached by a Twi'lek named Senni Vek, who handed him a datapad and claimed that Revan had dropped it. The datapad contained a cryptic message asking Revan to meet Hulas on Manaan... Shouldn't this be near the end of the Tatooine events? I haven't played the PC version of the game, but I can't imagine it's too different in this regard.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 10:42, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Not according to our own article on the guy, and the image we have of him.
  • Also, I'd like to see mentions of him defeating Darth Nyriss and his holding off multiple opponents in the Shadow of Revan storyline in the combat abilities section.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 05:58, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Tiny details
  • For Revan's homeworld, "Outer Rim" is technically not a world, so it should say something to the effect of "an Outer Rim planet (believed)".
    • Meh. Done, though it looks funky.
  • Also, some images appear small compared to those on most articles. Perhaps it's just me.
    • Maybe true, but I've gone for a larger number of images than most articles, so I've kept the sizes down.
  • A few little grammar things on image captions: the caption should say "Darths (with an S) Andeddu, et. al., and the caption saying "Revan wearing his trademark mask" should not have a period. For minute details like these, ask me if you just want me to change them myself as I find them.
    • Done. I could have sworn I added that Darths.
  • The fourth paragraph of the into mentions the "Jed Master".
    • Done.</s>

Otherwise, awesome job!--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 23:27, June 23, 2013 (UTC)

It is time for your circuits to fry!
  • In the Combat skills subsection of "Powers & abilities" you make no mention of his lightsaber skills and feats, you're simply describing Revan's lightsabers. Improve this.Winterz (talk) 14:51, August 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • His skills are highly customizable, and I'm not a fan of the "feats" section that lists every battle the guy's ever fought. However, I've added his two most notable duels. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
      • I have no idea what you mean with a "feats" section nor has what you mentioned anything to do with what I requested but anyway, your recent update was sufficient! Winterz (talk) 17:28, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
        • I was referring to the kind of P&A that existed before I wrote the article up, and the kind that are present on articles like the Skywalkers. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:58, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
          • You could've just said "the kind that will be terminated". Winterz (talk) 18:21, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
Clone fly-by
  • Is there no more information available on the deleted scene from "Ghosts of Mortis"? The Blu-ray edition of The Complete Season Three actually has an early version of the scene with 3D storyboarding, and while I don't have access to it myself, it should be detailed in the Bts somehow. CC7567 (talk) 21:35, September 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I've gotten all of the information I could get from online at the moment; I will ultimately get ahold of the actual Blu-ray by the time this passes. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:49, October 10, 2013 (UTC)
      • Please do. CC7567 (talk) 15:00, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
        • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:06, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
          • Even though the scene is cut content, can you take some more time to detail the scene? Treat the conversation as though it's in the IU part of the article in terms of the level of detail—among the missing details is the fact that the scene takes place in Mortis's Well of the Dark Side. It's all in the file that I emailed to you, so please expand it more thoroughly. CC7567 (talk) 22:11, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
            • Fair enough; expanded. Thanks again. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:20, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
Fundraiser
  • Having gone no farther than the ToC, I can tell that the companions section is missing a few subsections. I figure the droids deserve a subsection, at least. Also, I could be wrong, but I'm under the impression that there might be a few characters from the novel or TOR that qualify. Expand it or kill it in the name of equality.SinisterSamurai (talk) 06:00, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • T3-M4 done; I'm working on HK-47. There really aren't any other characters that need one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:22, December 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Request the image of Revan's potential female faces is re-added to the article. I don't entirely know why it was removed. It doesn't have to be a second image. Since mullet man is now highlighted with a box, you can probably just get away with re-uploading a version of Mullet Guy.png with this attached, but the final choice is up to you. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'd rather not, as it's not really important, and it'll simply make the image rather wide. There's no real reason to have it; Revan's been canonically confirmed as a male for quite some time, and the only reason the Mullet guy image is there is to illustrate the point that the text is making about which character model is canonical.
      • Does that length of time make the other male faces "slightly less non-canon" than the female faces now one face has been chosen? I figure Gender no longer plays a role in whether or not a non-canon face deserves coverage. They are the same canon level, they deserve the same coverage: Equal or none.
        • It's a personal choice whether to use any image, and it's my choice to use the male faces. It's not required to show all of the potential faces; it was simply useful to illustrate the point the text is making. There's really nothing else to this. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:55, January 7, 2014 (UTC)
          • If it's being voted on, it's a community choice, but at least the caption isn't misleading anymore. SinisterSamurai (talk) 04:46, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing anything how the troops and jedi Revan sent to Malachor were not "Revan's strongest supporters," much reference to Revan's use of psychological tactics/waging a war of beliefs as well as a physical war. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added some notes, but noted that it's only HK-47's opinion.
      • In this instance, HK's opinion is voiced in KOTORII, but is sourced to KOTOR. SinisterSamurai (talk) 03:58, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
        • What are you talking about? The sentence is sourced to KOTOR 2. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:07, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
          • Whoops! Totally right about that one! If you ctrl+F the word "break" the first instance should be the passage I meant. If HK-47 does voice an opinion about Malachor being used to break the Jedi in KOTOR1, then there's a citation just before it from the same source ([7]), and you can eliminate the center count and just source both to KOTOR with one reftag. Although, I have a vague impression that part of that, (the part about not wanted to repeat the devastation at Malachor), was also from KOTORII. I could be way off, though. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:48, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm scanning, but I'm only seeing one reference to the Sith Assassination squads, and no reference that Revan trained them. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • There was one, but expanded regardless.
  • In the infobox, you list Arren Kae as one of Revan's masters, but source it to KOTOR1. It's been a long time since I've played KOTOR1, but I thought the first references to Arren Kae didn't appear until KOTOR2. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Rise of the Sith
    • "As the title of Darth was previously unknown to the Republic and the Jedi, many scholars believed that Revan and Malak were the first Sith to use it, and they speculated that the title was derived from the Rakatan language." The part about the Rakatan language makes the positioning seem off, since as far as I know the Republic did not know about the Rakatan language at this point. The transition is a little too abrupt as well.
    • "The success of HK-47 led Revan to decide that more droids like him would help maintain galactic stability, and HK-47 became the basis for the HK-50 series of droids which were constructed on Telos." I don't think that this part can be sourced to the first game, at least from what I remember. The mention of them being constructed on Telos is a rather abrupt change since the last thing mentioned was the bombardment, which pretty much destroyed the planet. I believe additional context is needed if you are going to mention Telos.
    • I added redlinks for the Echani senator and the Elders' tome for this section.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire
    • "Continuing through the ship, Revan heeded Ulgo's recommendation to draw a vibrosword as they stormed the Sith-held bridge. When they were unable to find Shan, the two rushed for the escape pods so that they would not be caught in the Spire's destruction." I thought that Ulgo told him to use a vibroblade not a vibrosword, which are two different weapons in the game.
    • "Warning Revan to hurry, Onasi suggested that he use his stealth gear to bypass a nearby Sith patrol, and Revan quickly made his way through the next few corridors before Onasi contacted him again." I thought that scouts were the only class to have stealth gear at this point.
  • I will continue at "Searching for Bastila" later. (I had forgotten that I had already reviewed the first few sections of the biography.)--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 05:30, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching for Bastila
    • Doesn't the player encounter the bounty hunters and the merchant before they can encounter Largo or the Sith commander interrogating the Aqualish.
      • Not the way I played it.... I came out of my apartment and almost immediately ran into the Sith.
        • Not the one attacking the Duros, the one with the Aqualish where you get the uniforms.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • If the player defeats Twitch, Bendak Starkiller challenges the player to a death match. The light side decision for the player is to turn down the match. I think this would be good to mention.
      • Done.
    • You didn't mention the drunk guys or Gorton Colu anywhere.
      • Colu, check... drunk guys, though.... Do you remember when they show up?
        • I think the drunk guys show up when you first go to the elevator that takes you to the lower city.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if this should be mentioned, but Revan can find that Zelka Forn had hidden some dying Republic soldiers in his facility.
      • Eh, it's a valid thing about Forn, but not necessarily important for Revan.
    • What about Selven?
      • Weird. I remember writing about her.
    • "A woman named Hester was arguing with the gatekeeper Trewin, begging him to let her husband Hendar back into the village, but Trewin refused because Trewin was pursued by a rakghoul and he could not risk the creature infecting the villagers." I think you mean that Hendar was pursued by the rakghoul.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the Twi'lek who surrendered.
  • I will continue my review after you handle the above objections.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:08, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Escaping Taris
    • There are a few planet related things you might want to mention.
      • What do you mean?
        • This was just talking about the three entries below, since I wasn't sure where they should go in the article. I'm sorry I didn't make it more clear.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:31, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • It seems to me that you should mention T3-H8 at some point since Revan can buy him and then returns him.
      • Done.
    • Don't forgot this guy: Unidentified Ithorian (Upper City).
      • Done.
    • Gelrood, the pazaak player in Javyar's Cantina.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the receptionist, but you might want to change it since I can't remember if she was Twi'lek or Human.
      • She's Human.
    • Just making sure: Canderous meets Revan in the Upper City Cantina and then in the Javyar's Cantina. I was thinking that both meetings were in Javyar's.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:11, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Learning on Dantooine/A Jedi once more
    • Could you mention Crattis Yurkal and Karal Kaar at Aratech Mercantile near the landing pad?
      • Done.
    • There is also a pazaak player named Sol'aa at the Enclave that you could mention.
      • Done.
    • After leaving the enclave isn't there some farmer and his wife that you can talk to?
      • Done.
    • Outside the enclave there is a merchant named Adum Larp.
      • Done.
    • Doesn't Dorak give the player some lesson about comparing the war with Revan and Malak to Ulic Qel-Droma and Exar Kun?
    • Doesn't someone inform Revan about the crystal cave full of Kinrath? You might want to say that Revan went to the cave.
      • Done.
    • I created a redlink for Montagne's husband.
    • Elise's article says that she meets someone named Samnt in the Jedi Enclave and if talk to her there she will thank Revan for helping her get over her husband's death.
  • I will continue my review later.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sand of Tatooine
    • "...the soldier was angry about the way he had been left out of the loop lately" The "left of the loop" part seems a tad too informal for an encyclopedia.
      • Done.
    • "Revan either chose to repair Venn's K-X12 probe droids or simply left the man to his fate and continued into the Dune Sea." I think you should reword this; maybe reword to say that Revan had to choose between saving him and leaving him. Wouldn't rescuing him grant a larger reward to the player anyway?
      • Done.
    • There is a pazaak player named Kudos at the Hunting Lodge.
      • Done.
    • Apparently, if you get the krayt dragon pearl before going to the enclave, you can get the tribe's storyteller to tell you about the Sand People's history. Not sure if this should be included and I haven't personally encountered this, but I thought I would throw it out there.
      • Yeah, I've seen this, but it's rather contrary to the basic storyline, so I left it out. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:45, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • I added redlinks for the docking bay manager, Sharina Fizark's husband, and Fortuna's partner.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:45, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
    • There are also Furko Nellis and Junix Nard in the Anchorhead Cantina. Nellis plays pazaak and Nard is a vendor I believe.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:00, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Into the Shadowlands
    • There is a pazaak player named Fodo Medoo in the Czerka area.
      • Done.
    • I thought the poachers had sonic emitters, not sonic prods.
    • I added a redlink for the Wookiee that Dehno killed and the Wookiee guard.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:20, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • I should be able to continue my review this weekend.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:04, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching the oceans
    • Out of curiosity, is there a reason why you place the trial before Revan going to the Sith embassy. From what the mysterious man says, it seems like it would be reasonable for Revan to go to the Sith Embassy before the trial.
    • What is your logic for choosing the access card as the party's means of entering the Sith base? Weren't there like three ways to get into the base?
    • "As the Selkath claimed to be a concerned friend of the Republic, Revan informed Niklos of the need to protect the Hrakert Rift facility, and a relieved Niklos promised to try and cover for the Republic if the issue came to light." Who is Niklos? I don't see the character mentioned anywhere else.
      • It's Nilko Bwaas, actually, who the player met earlier, but I've given a bit more context.
    • Is Visitor's Hotel capitalized or not? You have it both ways in this section.
      • The proper name's capitalized, so fixed.
    • Minor characters that were not mentioned: Jolan Aphett, Gonto Yas, Tyvark Luowan, Yortal Ixlis, Unidentified Republic soldier (Hrakert Station)
      • I'll get to this and the Korriban ones when I have access to the dialog again. Though Tyvark's just a random vendor, is that something that needs a mention?
    • Items that seem worthy of an article: Ahto City cantina
      • Added.
  • The heart of the Sith
    • "When he came across a group of Sith apprentices whom wanted to attack Revan as "sport" when they encountered him, Revan was able to persuade them otherwise, but another student who was threatening a woman attacked Revan when he intervened. Defeating the student, Revan took one of their medallions and brought it to Ban, who allowed Revan, Onasi, and another into the Academy when he claimed that his companions were slaves." This doesn't have to happen this way. It needs some kind of game mechanics tags.
      • According to GameBanshee and what I remember, the apprentice will attack you regardless, but I've moved the first encounter into LS tags.
        • I don't ever remember running into this encounter, and I've won the game three times.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
    • Aren't there some hopefuls in Dreshdae that you can persuade to leave?
    • I'm not seeing mention of Mekel until the tomb. You left out the scene with him and the hopefuls.
    • Minor characters that were not mentioned: B'ree, Toll Apkar, Mika Dorin and related information, Dak Vesser
      • From what I can see, Ziagorm's inviting you to visit Dorin requires not doing the Juhani stuff until after the Leviathan and a few other things that contradict with the established path, so I'm of the opinion that it's not needed in the article. Ziagorm's article should probably be rewritten though.
        • Where is Juhani's stuff is established to take place before the Leviathan? I am also curious what else it conflicts with.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
    • Items that might be worthy of an article: The spaceport manager, the Czerka representative? (I don't really remember this character.)
  • Trapped on Lehon
    • Is it possible to complete the Garn quest and side with the Elders? The article makes it sound like it is possible, but I never did it. If it is possible to do both, you might want to mention Garn in the article. I'm pretty sure the other Black Rakata quests can't be completed if you side with the Elders, but the article for this guy makes me wonder about this quest.
      • From what I can see, no. You'd have to head to the north beach and be friendly with the Black Rakata, which is counter to the established light side path. I've fixed that article.
    • Minor characters/items that were not mentioned: Orsaa
      • Done.
  • A final confrontation
    • I don't remember the game calling them Aurek-class tactical strikefighters. Please provide the source that gives them this name.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 04:07, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
      • Sourced.
  • Confronting evil
    • I think you should mention that Revan influenced the Sith Emperor to keep him from attacking the Republic in this section. You note this in the next section, but don't mention it here.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 03:56, August 6, 2015 (UTC)
      • Done.
  • Companions
    • Is there a reason you have T3-M4's name bolded in his section?
      • Left over from an early version, probably.
    • I was wondering why you mention the Cross of Glory in T3-M4's section and not in any of the other sections.
      • Ah, I meant to draw attention to the fact he was a droid; done.
        • Did HK-47 get the Cross of Glory too?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Behind the scenes
    • "While none of the player's dialogue features voice-overs" This is not technically true, there is some dialog used when you use the security skill. Please reword this to match.
      • Don't recall that, but done.
    • Do we know who did the voice acting for the female Revan from KotOR?
    • "As Knights of the Old Republic is a RPG with a great deal of variability when it comes to player decisions, there are a number of alternate storylines and endings available." This appears to be the only part of the BTS that is not sourced.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:14, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
praguepride
  1. If Revan is not his real name shouldn't it use the nickname tag?
    • No.
  2. Pronoun confusion: "Revan was betrayed by his Sith apprentice Malak and captured by the Jedi Knight Bastila Shan, who saved Revan and formed a Force bond between them." Which two is them? Or is it all three of them?
    • Changed.
  3. "His mind wiped, Revan was given a new identity as a Republic soldier by the Jedi Council, but when Malak attempted to capture Shan aboard the Republic warship Endar Spire above the planet Taris, Revan joined forces with the Republic officer Carth Onasi and a number of other individuals on Taris to rescue Shan and escape the world before Malak destroyed Taris's surface." Run on sentence that should be broken up. I would recommend also putting the mind wipe stuff in the paragraph before as it deals with Shan's encounter.
    • Tweaked.
  4. (In the Revanchrist paragraph) Is "prowar renegades" direct from source as it should have a hyphon. If it is direct then add the [sic].
    • From the source, but the sic is not necessary. That's for seriously-misspelled words.
      • We'll have to talk about this via IRC.
  5. "But in reality, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause." - remove But.
    • Mhmm.
  6. "In the following weeks" should be [[week]]s
    • That's really a {{sofixit}}. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:18, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  7. more to come...
Manoof
  • Check your CSWECites, most are missing page numbers, and one (56) has the entry as the page number. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if you've noticed this, since it's been sitting here from the start. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Early life
    • 2nd paragraph you mention "alek's friend" twice in quick succession. You could probably switch some of the references to Revan to separate these more. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Nope; Revan isn't his real name, and he hasn't taken the name Revan at that point. Changed it up though.
  • Bio - Mando wars
    • "The Mandalorian warrior culture..." makes it seem like the culture itself is invading, similar to Americanisation. Maybe change it to "the Mandalorians, a warrior culture, ...". Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Reworded.
    • "With the backing of Alek and his other followers, the Jedi decided to journey to the war front against the wishes of the Jedi High Council so that he could scout the enemy lines". Are we talking about the group of jedi with Revan or Revan himself? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Revan; changed to Jedi Knight
    • What were his findings on Onderon/Dxun? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Don't believe it's ever said.
    • "In reality, however, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause. However, Revan came up with a solution". Can I buy a synonym please? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Removed the first however.
    • "star cluster Jaga's Cluster," maybe rephrase to "Jaga's star cluster" pipelinking as necessary. I'm not too set on this though. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • The proper name's Jaga's Cluster, so nope. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:55, April 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • I must now eat and rejuvenate before continuing this review. You really are a sucker for punishment aren't you? :P Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Rise of Sith
    • "Amid the confusion, Shan rushed forward and delivered a Force push to the Sith Lord's chest, sending him flying, but Revan was critically injured in the explosions and the fighting that followed." The word "but" leaves me confused about this sentence, was Shan trying to save Revan? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
  • Endar spire
    • From memory, you could equip a blaster when you storm the bridge, meaning you do not necessarily heed the advice... I'm guessing it thus needs a gamemechanics tag? Also I just replayed this section and he didn't say anything to me before storming the bridge. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • *shrug* Removed.
  • Searching Bastila
    • The second paragraph could probably get the gamemechanics tag, since it implies you talk to Kadir, then Larrim, then Dia and later Gorton. Additionally, while you can't just walk past Kadir since he stops you when you get close enough, you CAN walk past the janitor and leave the apartment complex, bypassing those conversations. You can also ignore Carth when he wants to talk to you, so none of the mentioned conversations are required to progress. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Actually, no, the conversation with Dia is confirmed by Holdan's CSWE entry, and you have to complete conversations with Carth in order to progress to stuff that is confirmed by other sources, like his son.
        • Awesome, that deals with a few other things that would probably have popped up later. Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • "Heading into the northern the pair..." Is this supposed to just be north or is there a word missing? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • "While exploring the cantina, Revan interacted with a number of local patrons, such as Jergan, Christya, and a young noble named Gana Lavin. While in the cantina, Revan spoke..." Since it's already established they are in the cantina, can you say something like "Revan also spoke..."? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • It may be worth mentioning some context on starkiller and his relation to the dueling ring. Glad to see you haven't given up on this! More to come. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Eh, not really necessary IMO. Thanks. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:42, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captured by the Leviathan—The wording in a couple of these paragraphs has left me confused. When did Revan learn who he was, when Karath told Onasi or later when they meet Malak. Saying Revan was confused makes me think he heard the conversation and was confused about his identity, but I assume it was whispered or something to Carth (I haven't played this in ages and can't remember what happened). Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked a bit. He doesn't learn it until Malak tells him.
      • Much better :D Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captive—I'm not sure what you mean by "as well as the fact that Scourge and Nyriss were opposed to him." Since they are Sith, they already are opposed to him? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Opposed to the Emperor; changed.
  • An unlikely rescue—"returned to the Republic over the last three years." gives the feeling it took all 3 years for the ship to return to Republic space. Is this correct? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • As far as I remember, yeah.
  • Legacy—"...but the military's failures become evident and it was clear that the military needed to evolve in order to survive." Something about this section of the sentence seems a bit off but I'm currently too tired to figure it out (if it's fine just say so and I'll strike next time :P) Time to rest methinks! Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:06, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it was just the word "become" instead of "became", but it reads much better overall with the additional change :) Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Warrior and Sith—"Revan was of the opinion that a Sith Master should have but one student—and the same was true of the title of Dark Lord." The section about the title Dark Lord is confusing, from memory it was that only one Sith should hold that title. Could you clarify this please. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Other abilities—Could you rephrase the first sentence in the last paragraph (mechanic), as it is the second sentence in a row to use "Revan [was] also" Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Behind the scenes—"While the variable nature of Knights of the Old Republic, the canonical storyline of the game was originally unknown." needs rewording. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Continuity issues—It strikes me that a bit of the information here can be cut completely as, rather than continuity issues where different sources explicitly create a contradiction, you have character's holding claims or beliefs that are contrary to a different source. Revan's fall to the dark side is the main one, where you mention the Jedi believing he fell on Dantooine is an example, with Bastila's claims about how he lost his memory another. Additionally, I don't think it's worth talking about the different lightsabers here—you've already mentioned them all in the article and from my understanding, no source has him with different lightsabers at the same time. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Actually, I do find them relevant; the Timeline and KOTOR comics are contradictory with the lightsaber colors, and the other contradictions are a result of Revan's backstory being defined and updated over time by various sources.
      • Fair enough. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Alternate storylines—It may be better to subsection this with dark side, female and female dark side variations, as those seem to be the only ones. It may improve readability (rather than jumping to the dark side female, then female, then dark side female stories) and make the section overall easier to read. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Ehh.... I think the current sections work better. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 12:51, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
      • No worries, twas personal preference after all. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • OMG ALL DONE! Great work again on this and props for sticking with it! Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • All done, just sort out that top objection (CSWEcite issue) and I'll vote to support :) Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
Culator USED TO think Revan was kinda cool
  • Got a few quibbles with some wording. Under "Confronting evil": "When the Emperor expressed his disappointment with Scourge, Revan proclaimed that he was their ally now, but the Sith Lord was suddenly overcome by a vision of the future—a future in which another Knight defeated the Emperor." - this whole sentence is confusing. Which Sith Lord? Scourge or the Emperor? Whose ally? Under "Freedom and fall": "Dying, Revan attempted to become one with the Force, but he was unsuccessful." Well, that's not entirely true, now is it? Shouldn't it say something more like "was not entirely successful" or "was only partially successful" since "was unsuccessful" would basically imply that his entire spirit was stuck in his meat body?
    • Both done.
  • In "Into the Shadowlands," are you sure about this name "Gerwooken?" It fails the google test and isn't linked anywhere including in this article, and I don't have a savegame in this area to check.
    • Fixed.
  • That's all I specifically nitpicked, and I definitely hate you. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:06, May 27, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • You have no life. On the other hand, amazing job. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • I can't really tell on this screen resolution, but that intro is ridiculously big (no, this is no joke). JangFett (Talk) 22:03, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Per dogma and Jang. Fe Nite (talk) 01:07, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well, I've asked around, and a lot of people believe it's a good length for the size of the article. A lot happens to this guy. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 01:13, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • I won't lie Cade. You scare me. Commander Code-8 You lost the game! 10:17, June 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if this is an objection worthy issue, but the segments dealing with the events shown in the novel read very differently from the rest of the article and seem more akin to a narrative than an encyclopedic article. I recall the article being marked for this problem in the past but the template appears to have been removed so perhaps I'm simply mistaken and this style of writing is permissible. Either way good luck with the effort; you carry the torch for all WP:KOTOR members and fans of KOTOR everywhere! JethLordMasterYing yang copy (Xia Order) 08:28, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Hey, thanks. As for the narrative/encyclopedic thing, the article was actually tagged with a Copyvio template because a user actually copied most of the second half of the novel into the article without making many changes. I wrote up the TOR:Revan events while reading the novel, and I guess the reason it reads differently than the KOTOR stuff is because I can go more in-depth as to what actually happened, unlike KOTOR's conversations and the character's feelings. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:44, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan married Bastilla not Shan. That needs to be changed. Unsigned comment by 71.196.255.127 (talk • contribs).
    • Wookieepedia common encyclopedic practice is to refer to characters by their last name in further mentions after they have been introduced. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:08, August 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan looks horrible in Star Wars: The Old Republic... IMO. Is there any chance that the image of him on this page could be changed to one of him wearing his hood and mask? That's the Revan I remember... A badass. Unsigned comment by 118.93.35.26‎ (talk • contribs).
    • As this is his canonical face, no, there isn't. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:03, January 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Observation: Friday will be Revan's one-year anniversary of nomination, and it still has only one support vote. Prediction: Revan will take longer than Wedge did to pass. :P
    Master JonathanJedi symbol.svgCouncil Chambers
    02:12 UTC WedJune 11, 2014
    • This is now the longest FAN ever on Wookieepedia, breaking the record set by Wedge. And it still has only two support votes. Over/under on date of passage: February 14, 2016. :P —MJ— Comlink 18:35, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not making it an actual objection, but wouldn't an image of Jedi Revan be more appropriate for the infobox as opposed to Dark Revan? I just would like the reasoning for the image, although he was Jedi (yes, I know what happened in the expansion's events.).—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 07:28, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • I second Jedi Kasra. That is a corrupted form of Revan and didn't even survive long, I suggest you add that one to the appropriate biography section and use as infobox image the previous one. Winterz (talk) 13:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • We should revert to his unmasked infobox image, and place this one in the appropriate section.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 14:43, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Dark Revan (and I totally love that the name is now a thing) is actually the final physical appearance of Revan, and is the final state of his body. However, I'm not necessarily set on using this image; once I actually beat him in the boss battle, I'll see if I can get a better image and reconsider the infobox. 15:09, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
          • I'm actually calling him Shrevan (short for Shadow Revan) atm, lol. But Winterz' points still stand, imo. It's up to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
            • Also, have you any idea who voiced Revan and Shrevan? Doesn't sound like Bennett.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:31, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • No, but I think Dark Revan and the spirit are voiced by different guys... Dark Revan sounds a lot different. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • Revan is played by Spencer Garret in the Shadow of Revan expansion.
  • One Inqvote away. Can we push this through before the nomination is two full years old? :P —MJ— War Room 04:08, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
    • MJ, you know you're perfectly welcome to review stuff yourself if you want things to move faster around here. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:27, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
      • I'm aware, and I would if I could (like I did with Wedge while Havac was still around). Unfortunately, real life does not currently permit me the free time needed to properly review an article of this size. I'm only now digging through my watchlist for the first time in nearly two weeks, because RL has kept me away for a while. —MJ— War Room 04:36, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
        • At any rate, Tope's reviewing this now so hopefully it won't take six more years. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:38, June 3, 2015 (UTC)

Vote to strike Kasra's objections (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Been addressed for several months, and Kasra's long gone. CC7567 (talk) 14:59, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote RL calls JangFett (Talk) 15:28, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:30, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)


Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic (comics)

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:06, November 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An awesome comic series. I honestly don't remember why I started this; it and Revan will be my largest and probably only contributions to WP:KOTOR. Mr. Miller's production notes were a fantastic help. Also, yes, the article is 350kb in terms of characters, but over 100kb of that is references, images, quotes, and formatting—I've checked.

(0 Inqs/3 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Apologizes for taking so long to finish looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:51, March 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:59, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Manoof (talk) 23:28, July 11, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Exalted: Why is Rime Feeorin italicized?
  • Damn you, Cade, I don't have time for this. Will continue with Vindication. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:01, May 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Vindication: It is a little bit unclear why Q'Anilia dies. Is this said in the comic?
    • Explained.
  • That's it for the plot. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:12, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • Zayne: others rescue Jarael and a number of Jedi from Flashpoint.[29] After the group rescues Zayne's father Arvan from the Moomo Brothers on Telerath: Can you change one use of rescue? Plus is knighted really capitalized? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:32, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done, and yes, I believe so. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:26, May 27, 2014 (UTC)
So long -_-
  • Commencement: "...who are wearing red space suits identical to the foreseen Sith Lord..." Umm, when were they wearing the suits?
  • Commencement: Could you possibly clarify that T1-LB is the same Elbee that appears later?
  • Flashpoint quote: Shouldn't Zayne's name be mentioned first in the quote attribution since he speaks first?
  • I'll continue from Day's of fear later. 501st dogma(talk) 14:21, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nights of Anger: "...whose illness is growing steadily worse..." You might want to explain before that Camper is ill, or just reword it here to inform the reader for the first time that Camper is ill.
  • "... Mandalore explains that he has turned the Questioner into a martyr that has Mandalore and his lieutenant Cassus Fett helped spread the Neo-Crusader philosophy and armor throughout the Mandalorian ranks..." It's not really sounding right here. I'm pretty sure helped should be before Mandalore and not before spread, but remedy it however you see fit. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Knights of suffering. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Knights: "Upon recognizing Del Moomo..." Uh, since when was Moomo on Taris?
  • Still Knights: "...and Hierogryph keeps hold of the detonator as they flee..." Um, the detonator to what?
  • Exalted: "...Carrick has been in the Sanctum of the Exalted, he cannot be harmed by weapons..." Any particular reason? Is it a tribe tradition? :P
  • I'll start with Prophet Motive later. 501st dogma(talk) 22:35, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Swoop racing part: "Dyre is reinvented as the swoopduelist "Spikes," and Carrick is surprised when Goethar Kleej threatens and coerces him into protecting his son Aubin in the Tandem Open." Could you clarfiy if "Spikes" or Carrick was assigned to protect Aubin? It's vague at the moment.
    • Done.
  • Masks: Context on Wor Tandell?
    • Done.
  • "To her surprise, when she returns to the Hot Prospect, Jarael encounters Malak, and Carrick is surprised..." Could you kill a surprise?
    • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:47, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • Killed one of two encounters in close proximity.
  • Done up to Main Characters. 501st dogma(talk) 22:38, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Malak. 501st dogma(talk) 00:03, October 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Development. 501st dogma(talk) 14:38, November 9, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Article needs to be updated from the following:
    • The Insider 153 and/or 154 stuff. I told you many weeks ago that this needed to be done and you did nothing, so I can't remember which one it is now.
      • Nothing to update from either of those. 154 is just a general summary of Dark Horse; a KOTOR cover is the only thing related to KOTOR in that. 153 is just an offhand mention of KOTOR with no new info.
    • This. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
      • Added a mention. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 00:20, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Commmencement—"an action that severely damaged T1-LB's programming and brain." Since droids don't have a brain, shouldn't the sentence end at programming? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • The last two sentences regarding The Last Resort's capture need to be reworded, you need to clarify exactly what happens as without having read the comic, it is confusing to follow what happens—what does surrendering to the masters have to do with the pirate? If the release has been negotiated, how is it carrick can attempt to steal the ship? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • "he executes Ying to eliminate witnesses before preparing to kill Carrick." I assume here Ying is the only witness? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Flashpoint—"flee on one of the last remaining ship" needs to be fixed, I'm not sure if there was only one ship remaining, or several? (remove "one of" or add an s to ship?) Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Daze of hate—Is the word "to" correct from the source in the quote for this section? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Knights of suffering—In the last paragraph, you mention a Togruta, with no previous mention of which character is of this species. I'm guessing by the following language the character is Tey? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Vector—"she is forced to execute the constable when she is infected" needs to be clarified as to who kills whom. I'll continue with Prophet Motive at another time. Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Prophet Motive—You say "A month after Vindication". Assuming the entire plot should be written IU, this needs to be rephrased, unless Vindication is an IU term for the events in the comic of the same name of course. I'll have to get back to this when I have more time. Manoof (talk) 10:09, June 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • References to other works—You start using WEG without specifying it stands for West End Games. Could you please clarify this somewhere. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Reception—I don't know who Thomas Lorraine is, but I don't think having a random quote by a random person should be used here. Could you please use a quote by someone notable (why should we believe this person nobody has heard of before?) or at the very least, justify why this quote was used above all other quotes, other than the fact that you personally like it (It IS a nice quote after all). A quote from an editorial review would probably be better. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Legacy—You don't seem to mention to any extent Knights of the Old Republic (Star Wars Miniatures), which drew heavily from the comics as well as the game. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Media—The colour code key at the top seems redundant and I would recommend removal of it - Story arcs can easily be seen by the comic title, all issues can be seen to be collected in a trade paperback from the table, with the exception of course of the handbook. Finally, the series is finished (and DH no longer has publishing rights) so future issues holds no meaning. For linking purposes, I am happy for the story arc title to be left in the table. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Not so much an objection as a recommendation to make sure all links you reference are backed up on webarchive.org, and perhaps make use of the backup links in your citations in the event the page is removed. I'm done, good job as always! Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • We at WP:KOTOR appreciate your hard work and dedication, Cade. I'll review soon.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:02, September 16, 2014 (UTC)


CT-7567

  • Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Since this project is five years in the making, I felt it needed a preface, so please pardon the ramble. To put it simply, I believe this article's construction symbolizes the Wookieepedia community. There are many people who contributed to it (and still will), whether it was by providing images and audio files, hunting down obscure sources, or letting me bounce ideas off them. The article will never be perfect, nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article, but I hope it does justice to the character himself, who I think is one of the best that Star Wars has to offer—even after the Great EU Purge, because he's a strong character in every one of his appearances. Whether you've already contributed or will do so by lending your time and effort to reviewing the article, thank you for doing your part to make it what it is. So, in honor of May the Fourth and on behalf of WP:TCW, here he is.

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Support

I agree. This article clarifies a lot of information from clone captain CT-7567. I have searched for information in this article many times and all my doubts have been anwered (except of course those that do not cover appearances of Captain Rex.) Unsigned comment by Generalfacu (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Less than 50 mainspace edits -- Cade Calrayn 23:02, May 13, 2014 (UTC))
  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:42, April 10, 2015 (UTC)
  2. I about fainted when I saw this. Now get to work on the Canon article 'cause it looks gross! :P Awesome work ! Nivlacanator(talk) 06:28, April 29, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Emperor Jarjarkine MP-Mandalorian Senate Hall @Wikia 14:42, July 8, 2015 (UTC)
  4. - AV-6R7 (talk) 22:18, July 27, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote This article kind of represents the culmination of all of CC's blood and sweat managing TCW for us over the years, and it's a deserving monument to such high praise. This is probably now our single best article in terms of writing and formatting quality, and research exhaustiveness. The Personality and traits section is simply perfect, and no long character article from this point forward should ever attempt to gain Featured status without following CC's model here. Just an outstanding job, CC. I'm proud to see you finally get this done. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:13, August 23, 2015 (UTC)

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Lee's charge
  • A number and a name: Is there a link for the engagement you describe in the last sentence? Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:30, May 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Battle of Teth: We have some kind of link for casevac team, however, as it currently refers only to one special case, I'll leave it up to you to decide about its inclusion.
    • Since "casevac" isn't a Star Wars–specific term, I don't see a need to link to it. Personally I also question whether the casevac team article itself is needed on the site, but that's another matter.
  • Battle of Teth: We have a problem with the remaining clone troopers of Torrent Company. I believe I talked with you about this years ago, but we don't know if CT-9932 is Coric, Del, Attie, Nax, Zeer or just another clone. Currently you say that five (including Coric) survived, but in the next paragraph you mention Coric, Nax, Zeer, CT-9932, Del and Attie as survivors—which are six. My theory is that there are five survivors, but while Rex checked them over comlink, one of the clones answered with his serial number instead of "I'm here" or something like that which is said in the novel. However, this is speculation. It's nitpicky, but a delicate situation. Thoughts? Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:01, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • The jump from six to five troopers (both times excluding Rex) is a discrepancy within the novel. When the troopers are about to report in, Rex states that according to the biosign icons in his HUD, "five of his men were still alive." However, when they individually report in via comlink, there are six, with only Coric and CT-9932 identifying themselves by name (so 9932 definitely isn't Coric). Then, for the rest of the sequence, it's back to five (Coric, Zeer, Nax, Attie, Del). Assuming that the six troopers checking in is an error, I think it's safe to assume that CT-9932 is either Zeer, Nax, Attie, or Del, so I'm removing any references to him, which should solve the problem. CC7567 (talk) 13:41, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Shipyards of Gwori: Nitpicky, but However, the battle droids overseeing the blockade detected the multitude of life forms aboard the stolen frigate and activated the radiation beam.: Wasn't that Juhm who ordered it out of frustration of his slaves escaping?
    • It was both; changed.
  • Outpost inspections: and Rex ordered them to take off their sunbonnets to verify that they were clones: Isn't "sunbonnets" rather colloquial?Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:27, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • JanFathal: After Pellaeon, an old acquaintance of his, permitted him to join Leveler's testing session, Rex departed to join the cruise with Tano, Sergeant Coric: Could you vary your use of "join" here?
  • Further campaigns: the blaster cannons, Tano threw a blaster battery at the cannons with the Force, and Rex detonated the explosive by shooting the flying target, annihilating the cannons: Same here with cannons. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:25, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Quell to Maridun: Just as Bly was docking their frigate to the Resolute, a Vulture droid attack inadvertently activated the frigate's hyperdrive: Wasn't that a duo of clone pilots?
    • Bly was at the controls, accompanied by a clone co-pilot. We have articles on the two pilots before Bly replaced one of them, but since there isn't enough info to distinguish them, I've opted not to link them within the article. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Orto Plutonia: that they were only there for his protection, not to fight his crusade against the Talz, the captain and his troops were forced into battle when more Talz appeared and ambushed them. After a Talz warrior and his narglatch forced him out of his Freeco swoop: Could you vary your use of Talz here, e.g. replace one with inhabitants? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:29, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't see a need to change it; three uses in two sentences aren't an extreme overuse of the word. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • I took the liberty of making a slight change here. If it annoys you, feel free to revert it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:30, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Blue Shadow Virus: Amidala reported that she and Binks had retrieved the missing bomb from LEP-86C8 in the arboretum, Tano and Rex quickly brought the bomb squad to deactivate the bomb.: Would you be so kind the replace one bomb with "explosive e.g.? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:52, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
Fan of the Core
  • Not so much an objection as an inquiry, under Battle of Teth I'm assuming you're using "casevac" as written in The Clone Wars novel? I know Traviss has a love affair with using military jargon without explaining it, but the average reader may not be aware it stands for "causality evacuation". It may be appropriate to either create an article for that term or simply spell it out. I believe it's also supposed to be all capitalized as a military abbreviation, not sure if she did in the novel or not, I only have a cheap txt copy so forgive me. :)
    • My apologies, I just saw this was already addressed. Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:38, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • I noticed in a couple of places you placed an "s" after adding an apostrophe to a name including Ventress and Grievous, I don't believe that's correct but wanted to double check if that was intentional.
    • Based on personal preference, yes. All uses should be consistent.
  • Excellent work, sir! Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:36, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
Hanzo
  • Just a prelim: I see that the intro has not been updated with the Seizure of Scipio info.
    • There's no mandate that introductions need to include every single battle or event in which a character has been involved. The purpose of an intro is to provide readers with the most basic information on a character (or whatever subject the article covers), and I don't believe the events on Scipio meet that criteria for Rex. CC7567 (talk) 20:33, May 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nice work, highly ambitious to take on a TCW main character article. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:37, April 27, 2015 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Preliminary objection: this page is in the category for pages with template parameter errors. I believe it was done in a recent edit. Please review the last few edits on this page and fix the template that has the problem. Manoof (talk) 05:38, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Sorry, the specific subcategory is actually templates with unrecognized parameters Manoof (talk) 05:40, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • Battle of christophsis—you need to make it clearer they are unaware of slick's identity when you identify him at the start, or reveal his identity later. Reading that it was one of slick's men after it was already identified that slick was the traitor is confusing. Manoof (talk) 06:14, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
    • The article already states that when Rex spotted Slick in the hallway, Slick was "too far away to be identified." That should be clear enough for any reader.
  • —"When Rex joined in, he received a blow to the head, and Slick knocked him to the floor and used the "groin popper" maneuver to dislocate his leg." Could you rewrite this without so many commas and "and"s? Perhaps something like "When Rex joined in, Slick knocked him to the floor with a blow to the head before using the "groin popper" maneuver to dislocate his leg." Manoof (talk) 06:14, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
    • The original sentence isn't a run-on, nor is it unnecessarily unwieldy in length, so I don't see a reason to reword it.
  • —You need to mention somewhere that the deflector shield is growing larger, or the edge of the shield is approaching the republic forces or something. You mention the shield being deployed (which could simply mean the equipment was being put into position) and a few other things, then all of a sudden the shield is passing over them. I'll continue with the battle of teth when I have more time (perhaps in a few hours). Manoof (talk) 06:14, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added. CC7567 (talk) 09:29, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
    • As an addendum, while I appreciate your willingness to review this article, there are plenty of other articles up for FA nomination that do not yet have the required user votes. I would strongly encourage you to redirect your time and energy to review those other FANs instead of this one, in order to prioritize those articles that are in more need of attention. Thanks! CC7567 (talk) 22:57, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
      • Just because the nomination has several votes, does not mean there are no issues with the article. However, you are right in that my efforts are better put to use on other nominations, so will discontinue this review. Manoof (talk) 07:26, August 26, 2015 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • In the Gwori section, the article talks about how the MagnaGuards protect Rex and Co. from spiders, as if this is some kind of major local threat or something, but it really doesn't go into context to explain what the significance of these spiders is. Can you add a little bit to explain this?
  • Regarding the final paragraph of the "Further campaigns" subsection, I believe the game guide should be sufficient to allow us to say that Kenobi and Skywalker are the two Jedi involved in the Christophsis mining operation. If the guide says that, then that's perfectly canonical, and that's pretty much how we determine these kinds of video game issues. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:36, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Adjusted. CC7567 (talk) 08:51, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • Further regarding that reference note, is there any particular reason you list the six possible Jedi choices in the order that you do? After Skywalker and Tano, it just seems kind of random. If there's no order there, I would perhaps recommend listing by alphabetical order. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:33, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • Alphabetized, as there's no significance to the current order. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • I find this sentence in the brain worms section sort of jarring, since the article never really goes into resolving this question. I would suggest either answer the question or just removing this sentence: "Skywalker evaded the other Jedi's inquiries as to how he had extracted the information from the so-far uncooperative Poggle."
    • Expanded slightly. CC7567 (talk) 08:51, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Lead quote in the "Bloodshed and rescues" subsection. There should be a comma in the sentence "I'm getting you out of here Rex." Is this your omission?
    • Yeah, my mistake. I've added it. CC7567 (talk) 08:51, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • I was surprised by the lack of article before Indomitable here and wanted to check whether it's "Indomitable" or "the Indomitable": "...and Torrent Company joined him aboard Indomitable..."
    • The novel consistently refers to it as "Indomitable" without a "the," which the article should reflect where appropriate. CC7567 (talk) 08:51, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm also curious about the Citatel section's lead quote. Are you taking its punctuation from disc captions? Also, why the [sic]? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:50, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • The comma in the second-to-last sentence ("both our sides, and could tip") was my addition. If you're referring to the bracketed ellipsis, I added it to omit a portion of unnecessary dialogue. Also, I'm not sure why I added the [sic], so I removed it. CC7567 (talk) 08:51, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • Generally, I think it's best to have our quotes mirror official captions wherever possible, excepting obvious errors (the OT DVDs are terrible, for example). If the captions don't include that comma, I would remove it, if for no other reason. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:33, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • I went through the Blu-rays and adjusted all of the quotes to match the captions. In this case, the comma is actually there in the original captions, so I've left it there. (And yeah, I just rewatched the OT, and even the Blu-ray captions are pretty atrocious.) CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the "Against General Krell" section's lead quote, I would check on the Blu-ray's captioning for the "My orders are..." line to see how it formats that, because it doesn't seem like you really need the colon there, which I increasingly feel like you're overusing a bit overall.
  • I'd like to see the first image caption in the Ahsoka-turns-traitor section give a bit more context on the significance of the "intercepted transmission" Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:09, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • Reworded slightly. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • I think the BTS explanation of his Jaig eyes and the mention of the original ESB concept drawings should mention the fact that the Jaig eyes were supposed to be part of Boba Fett's helmet. This is specifically relevant given the relationship between the Fetts and the clones.
  • "...but it was later decided that such a move would not be appropriate for his character." Who decided this?
    • Checked the video commentary and it was Filoni (at least), so I've added that. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Can we not use the citation specifics for Starships & Vehicles Collection 43?
  • Can you elaborate on why exactly you're choosing to treat his alluded-to involvement in the Battle of Cato Neimoidia as an error? If there's nothing in Labyrinth of Evil that's specifically contradicting his involvement, I don't see why we should treat it as one.
    • The Fact File, where that bit originates, doesn't have the best reputation for avoiding errors. In addition, since TCW never depicted his role in the events leading into ROTS, I'd prefer to assume that his involvement in the battle is one of those errors, at least until a canon source better clarifies his role in the pre-ROTS events. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
      • Changed per our discussion. CC7567 (talk) 02:05, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • The article alternates between "space-walk" and "spacewalking." Is one correct according to sources?
    • Space-walking is used. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • This sentence should be updated/reworded to reflect their placement within the now overall non-canon Star Wars Legends: "The following details stories that have not been deemed canon due to their disregard for established continuity."
    • I reworded the sentence, but I'm not sure if it's clear, so please let me know if you have any better suggestions for wording. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Was there nothing else to say for this game? "Rex is also featured in the film's tie-in online game."
    • Added a bit more info. CC7567 (talk) 23:40, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is the quote punctuation yours from the "Cartoon Network online games" section?
    • I'm pretty sure that's the way the game formatted it, but I don't remember for sure, and there's no way to check since the game's no longer available. I'm going to add the missing comma in lieu of finding another way to access the game. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Why are you italicizing the "Clone Wars Infinities" section title?
    • I've un-italicized it. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm not in agreement that the Clone Wars Head-to-Head book should be treated as non-canon, necessarily. I haven't read the TCW version, but I'm familiar with the Rebels version, and it includes specific event narration. I don't see why we shouldn't be incorporating this into canon events if it doesn't contradict anything. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:14, August 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • I've always treated the Head-to-Head books as containing canon material and information while pitting characters against each other in non-canon match-ups. As the article states, the TCW Head-to-Head pits Rex against a demolition droid at a Coruscant power generator, which mirrors the events of the bombing of the Coruscant power generator from "Heroes on Both Sides." While the match-up doesn't directly contradict other material, it's redundant to the episode's events. Another matchup, between Skywalker and Savage Opress, is framed like this: "What would happen if Savage was tasked to destroy Anakin, the brightest star in the Jedi Order?" Each match-up is a what-if scenario that doesn't necessarily create an actual canon event. CC7567 (talk) 08:45, August 22, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • For reference, this is the Legends version of the article. All canon material will be incorporated into that version once the tabs system is approved and implemented. CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • "nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article" It may very well be the site's longest FA when this review finally finishes, given that Wedge is on probation and I have no interest in trying to fix that mess. :P
    Master JonathanJedi symbol.svgCouncil Chambers
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  • As I've checked and seen the Twitter citations are all still online, please add images to them, per rules since established in the Layout Guide. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:02, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • All screenshots added. CC7567 (talk) 02:40, August 8, 2015 (UTC)


Ace Azzameen (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ 64. (Sizable update/expansion)
  • Date added: June 30, 2014
  • Changes since last review: A lot. Check it yourself. Edits concerning update here.

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Support

  1. Inqvote Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:04, May 18, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 02:15, June 18, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 00:01, June 26, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:12, August 14, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • Some context on starships (such as class) is needed (Selu, Sabra, Otana, Andrasta, etc) - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:30, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • I believe GT took care of it. I'll finish my copyedit tonight to make sure nothing's missing. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 16:42, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
      • Anything that needed further contextifying has been contextified. Shown here. Also reworded some of the colloquialisms. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 19:09, August 13, 2015 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
  • Broken reference. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:27, August 26, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Forgot that whole affair was mentioned in the BTS. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 02:25, August 27, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • Added a link to the differences between revisions as well as one to the specifics of the update. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 02:49, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Even with the loss of RFAN, should reduxed FAs that were on the page still be showcased if they pass redux? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:43, January 19, 2015 (UTC)
  • Now has had enough votes to be archived for almost 2 weeks. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:00, August 26, 2015 (UTC)

Barsen'thor (Galactic War)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:41, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Only took me a year and a half to finish this. I've tried to make sure that this reaches the nomination page as smooth as possible, and I believe I have achieved the goal.

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Exiled Jedi
  • While often used informally, "they" and "their" are not proper singular pronouns in formal writing. Please go through the article and change all instances of this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:36, August 31, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Similarly to EJ's comment, "the individual" is also really not a good way to refer to the character. For one thing, you seem to by and large not mention the fact that the Consular's going to places with a companion. Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen, and the rest of the time it should be something like "the Consular and a companion" when you first introduce a planetary storyline. That then opens up several additional terms you can use besides "Jedi", "Consular" - duo, pair, the two. I'm still seeing quite a few theys in there.
    • "Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen," Not true. C2-N2 is technically a healer companion. Yes, his AI sucks and he tends to suicide a lot by trying to punch people with his bare fists, but he can be used, so we can't assume the player always runs with Qyzen until Tharan. I'll look at the rest of the objection later. Just wanted to get this part out of the way first. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:06, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it's safe to say that the in-continuity player characters never used their ship droids in combat, as the droids even say that they're not designed for combat. Their use as companions is really just game mechanics. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:10, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • All parts of the objection should be addressed now. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
          • I'm still seeing a number of "individuals", and also, the game goes out of its way to never call the Consular player a Knight, so I'm not sure it's appropriate to call the Barsen'thor one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
            • Alright, I have cut down the usage of "individual" considereably (from 88 to 22, at the moment). Out of those, a number refer to other individuals beside the Consular. The most part of the remaining instances are either at the start of the biography, where none of the Jedi titles apply to the character yet. I have kept some uses of the word later as well, just to avoid repetition between constantly referring to the character as a "Jedi", a "Consular" or the "Barsen'thor." Regarding the other point raised, I honestly don't see any reason why we can't call the character a Jedi Knight. We know he was promoted to a "full member of the Jedi order" or whatever the game calls it after Tython, but he was only promoted to Jedi Master at the start of Chapter 2. So what rank could he possibly have held in between Tython and the Fortitude? He was obviously a Jedi Knight even if the game doesn't explicitly state he was one. I'm not going to argue this case, and I've changed the article, but I honestly think it's a case of the duck test, IMO. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:47, February 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, a number of the images are only tangentially related to the character, like that Alderaan one. I'm currently playing through the Consular storyline, and will supply images from the game like I have with the Hero. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • The reason for that is that I decided to write this article to status only after I had already completed the class story. Naturally, I never bothered with taking screenshots as I was playing, and I wasn't going to to go back and play through it again with another character just to obtain images for the article. I decided that I could get away with whatever relevant images I could find already uploaded on the site, but if you have the ability to provide better images, that's great. Go ahead. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
      • No problem; you should've seen my original version of the Hero. I think I just used the Holonet images of planets. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:47, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • No mention of Head Jailer Tarinn in the Imperial Holding Facility on Balmorra? He's got a (silent) cutscene and everything. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, I've trimmed a bit, but the intro needs to be cut down some more. Right now it's about 1,200 words, which is a FAN in of itself. Conversely, the Hero's only about 815, and Revan is around 835. You should cut back on some of the details. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:29, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Alright. I think I've pretty much cut every possible extraneous bit of detail, leaving the intro at less than 1000 words. Everything else is necessary context in my opinion. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:16, June 6, 2015 (UTC)


  • So, huge news for the Barsen'thor and this nomination. The Star Wars: Force and Destiny Core Rulebook contains an excerpt from Rediscovering the Jedi, a work by the respected historian Professor Belys Harand who was known for his expertise on Xim. Rediscovering the Jedi was published during the era of the Empire, and was subsequently banned. Here's the important part:
    • Chandrila's Jedi Tomb: Although his true name has been lost to time, the third Barsen'thor, or Warden of the Jedi Order, is thought to be entombed on Chandrila, somewhere in the famous Crystal Canyons. He was famous for a number of ancient diplomatic victories, and for an equal number as a battlefield general.
  • With Knights of the Fallen Empire forthcoming and its condensing of class stories into a single story about the Outlander, I think we can effectively say that the canon storylines of the eight classes are over. With that, and this source stating that the Barsen'thor is a male, I believe we can take that information as valid; thus, this article needs to be updated to reflect that. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:29, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, the Chandrila mention is clearly meant as a reference to the Dead Jedi Knight and the Chandrila Jedi tomb, so I think that these can be merged. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:30, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, now this nomination and Jaden Korr are connected to each other. I'm just going to say that I totally foresaw that that would happen with my Force sense. Jokes aside though, I've updated the article with the new information, both in terms of adding the Jedi Academy stuff and interspersing masculine pronouns throughout. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:39, August 26, 2015 (UTC)
Culator finds player character articles annoying
  • This is not an objection, just an observation: There were many, many typos and grammar issues here, and I haven't even done a full copyedit, just a quick automated scan: indvidual → individual, Leiutenant → Lieutenant, 'returned back' → 'returned' (2), presense → presence, ressurrect → resurrect, 'the the' → 'the' (2). Please be mindful of this, thanks.
    • Noted. Thanks for catching those.
  • You have a ref name="The Bounty Hunter's Daughter" that references "Conversation with Qyzen Fess: "A Taste of Medicine"" and a ref name="A Taste of Medicine" that references "Conversation with Qyzen Fess: "A Taste of Medicine"" so I'm guessing one of those is wrong. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 17:18, July 25, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Copycat! :P But anyways, great work. In the past few weeks, we've filled almost 300 redlinks, leaving us only 3200 left for TOR. I'll be sure to review this soon. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:28, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • Oh, actually, there's another cut thing from the files—during Corellia, the First Son originally was supposed to send a fleet to attack Sarkhai, causing Nadia to depart temporarily as your companion to go and help her homeworld. It's not entirely clear, but it looks like your actions (i.e. alignment choices) would affected whether Sarkhai won easily or only barely succeeded. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:31, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • May I ask why you use "They" or "their" when referring to the Barsen'thor? Winterz (talk) 00:03, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • Because we don't know the Barsen'thor's gender, singular they is used to refer to the character in a gender-neutral manner. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:19, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
  • I might be unable to address any future objections on this and my other noms until the end of the month due to studies. I know I've been pretty much inactive on the wiki anyways—kind of lost interest in the Star Wars universe after the new canon took over—but I have been checking my nominations occassionally. However, I'll probably be unable to do even that in the next few weeks. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:16, June 6, 2015 (UTC)
    • Back to a previous contributing capacity. Starting off with a sizable expansion/rewrite/clarification of certain points. New redlinks will be dealt with soon. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:49, June 27, 2015 (UTC)


Jaden Korr

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:28, August 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: So, to sum things up. He's a dude chasing a clone of himself, who gets killed by another clone of himself. He then gets his memories transferred into that clone's body, so he becomes a clone of himself. Oh, and he might have been a clone to begin with. And he also finds out about a potential clone of Xizor. Enjoy the cloneception.

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  1. ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:57, August 19, 2015 (UTC)

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Cav
  • A couple of preliminaries:
  • Korr's birth year is listed as c. 1 ABY, referenced to Crosscurrent as a character pegged him as forty years old. However, this means he was 13 during the events of Jedi Academy, correct? But the character model for the game doesn't really support this age for the character at all. What is the exact quote for his age from Crosscurrent? Is there some leeway to list his birth at prior to 1 ABY rather than circa? If not, some mention in the BTS about the character model seemingly not supporting the character's age should be mentioned. Of course, the clone angle might account for the discrepancy, but that was never confirmed.
    • Here's the exact quote from the novel: "Before Khedryn could raise a hand in greeting, a human thrust himself into Khedryn's space. The man was taller than Khedryn by a head. His neatly trimmed beard and short brown hair book-ended intense, haunted gray eyes, the kind Khedryn had seen in religious fanatics. Khedryn put him at forty years, maybe, about the time human men looked back on their lives, found them wanting, and turned stupid." Of course, Khedryn's guess might be wrong and Jaden could be older, but it's the only estimation we have. Mentioning the discrepancy in the Bts sounds like the best approach. Will work on that in a bit. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:41, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • For the Jedi Academy stuff, shouldn't there be 100% completion templates around it? As far as I remember, the player did not have to complete all the missions to proceed, and they could be done in any order. I know you list this in the BTS, but the article body should reflect this as well. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:37, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added the necessary templates to paragraphs dealing with optional missions. The intro on Yavin, as well as the missions to Hoth, Vjun, Taspir III and Korriban are left out, as they are required to progress the plot. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:01, August 24, 2015 (UTC)

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Soldier (clone)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The second of the three Jaden Korrs (Jadens Korr? Jadens Korrs?) running around in Riptide.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:24, February 4, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I'd like a mention in the intro about what the purpose of the Community was.
    • Hope it's more clear now.
  • "As they fled from the moon, Soldier and his brothers and sisters were influenced by the Lignan crystals scattered in its atmosphere as a result of the destruction of the Sith dreadnaught Harbinger." Any context on this event? More to come. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:07, January 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Context added. Thanks for taking a look at this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:30, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • "secret storage of Mount Tantiss on the planet Wayland." Secret storage what?
  • Context on Dr. Gray.
  • So Soldier is "Prime"? You don't explicitly link the two in the bio.
  • Same with Iteration, you need to slip in a few paragraph breaks.
  • "The two soon heard the sound of scuttle," Scuttle? Do you mean scuffle?
  • I don't think we need a full paragraph of examples of Soldier's rage in the P&T—one or two examples should suffice. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:08, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • The last two paragraphs of "The escape" are a bit play by play with short, choppy sentences. I would consider trying to streamline it.
  • Also, in the last paragraph of "The escape," you state: "Nenn making his way to his scout flyer, flown into the area by his sister, Syll Nenn, who was then killed by Korr in a skirmish." This makes it sound like both Nenn and his sister where killed in the ambush, but Nenn appears on the space station in the next section. Some clarification is needed. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:48, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Made some changes to those paragraphs, which should take care of both objections. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:32, August 24, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • Like I mentioned in a response to an objection on my GAnom of Wry, I don't think these clones warrant a nickname template, since they essentially considered those to be their real names. If you have an argument to the contrary, I'm willing to listen. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)


Nom Anor

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM. After 1 year, 3 months, 8 days, it is finally done. I apologize in advance for length (40 k words ish) and realize that this will not be passed for a long, long time. Thanks go to all those who helped me with sources and whatnot, especially Cav, for tolerating my constant source requests. Also, if this article goes too in depth in places with unnecessary info, just call me out, as I had a little trouble determining what was relevant and what could get cut....

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Good job. I liked it. The article was descriptive and answered all of my questions. -Joe bob frank Unsigned comment by 70.172.240.61 (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Unregistered users ineligible to vote -- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:44, January 9, 2015 (UTC))

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  • Wavering Loyalties section has no quote because I literally could not find a quote that fit that section... 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Probably too many images of things only slightly related to Nom Anor, such as an image of the Jedi Temple. Maybe keep 2/3 of them.ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:51, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Without them, it would be walls of text, which it already is in some sections. It's standard procedure to add images of things in the text that are not of the subject if there are not enough images available of the subject. 501st dogma(talk) 13:08, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • Right, but maybe it could do with a little fewer in some sections. But it's your call, I won't micromanage.ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 09:34, August 21, 2015 (UTC)


Azzameen Station

  • Nominated by: JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 18:49, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Long live Azzameen Home Base!

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  1. Inqvote IRC reviewed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:29, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:04, July 18, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 16:28, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Trip391 (talk) 05:03, August 16, 2015 (UTC)

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Toprawa
  • Please pipelink appropriate battle articles here and anywhere else that I may have missed, such as the Kessel Station one: "though a later Azzameen mission would recover it for the data stored within."; "following a failed Azzameen supply run for the Alliance to Restore the Republic"
    • Gonna need to work on this one. They aren't pipelinked because they don't have articles, which I believe was a result of questionable notability. I'm of the opinion that they'd be notable simply for having an entire level centered around them, but that wasn't the case for MK-09, Aeron Azzameen, or Ace Azzameen (or even Keyan Farlander or Maarek Stele), and I'm not one to argue the notability policy one way or the other. I have no objection to adding the required links (and thus creating the associated articles) but I hope you understand my reluctance.
      • I made this objection with the assumption that these articles existed, so I'll wait to talk to you about this one. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:43, July 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Updating this objection: I've spoken to Jorrel about this and am now waiting for him to create and link to articles for the battles mentioned in this article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:13, August 2, 2015 (UTC)
        • Before I get to work on creating the battle articles mentioned in Azzameen Station, I ran through the list of missions on the X-Wing Alliance page and created redlinks (or linked to an existing article in a few instances) for most missions in the game (excepting the tutorial missions). I plan on creating articles, starting with those relevant to Azzameen Station, but I'd like your input on the names, and notability, before doing so. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 22:03, August 13, 2015 (UTC)
          • Honestly, Jorrel, it doesn't really matter to me what they're called. I figure names and notability will work themselves out over time. As long as things are pipelinked here, I'm satisfied. I trust your judgement. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:09, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm wondering if you're taking the quote formatting from game captions or if you're just interpreting them yourself, because I have the following concerns:
    • Grammatically, there should be a comma after "Let's go" in the "Azzameen Station once more" subsection. Does the game truly omit this comma in the captions or wherever you may be taking this quote from?
      • Oversight. It's been corrected.
    • The space placed after the ellipsis in the "Inhabitants" section; is that from a caption or your invention, because it probably doesn't need to be there.
      • Yeah, that was an oversight. Also corrected.
  • I don't believe the February 1999 release date in the BTS is self-sourcing. You will need a reference for that.
    • I think I've found a suitable source.
      • If you're going to cite an external link, you need to either tuck it into one of our existing citation templates or use Cite web. In this case, we do have a Moby Games citation template, so it needs to be applied for this reference. I have done this for you this time, but remember this for the future. As an additional note here, the Moby Games reference cannot be used as a source for that entire sentence. You need to attach the Moby reference only to parts of that sentence that apply to this link. I have done this for you as well. Please be more careful of your referencing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk)
  • What is your reasoning for placing the LucasArts.com site link where it is currently in the Sources list? The Internet Archive link suggests the website was active no later than August 7, 2009, if I'm reading it correctly, in which case it should be placed before The Essential Atlas in the list.
    • That was based off of a false memory of the organization of source lists. Fixed.
  • Reviewing note: Much like planets, the station itself is not listed in the Online Companion, only its system is, so it should not be listed in the Sources list. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:17, July 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • Removed. Didn't know how we tackled that, and it was in when I started, so I assumed that it was supposed to be there. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 06:59, July 31, 2015 (UTC)

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Cabbel

  • Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:20, April 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Hanzo, what does wordcounttool.com say about this article's count" ""It's over ONE THOUSAAAAAAAND!" ""WHAT?! ONE THOUSAND?!"

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 23:53, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Not entirely convinced wearing an Imperial uniform is notable enough to justify an equipment section, but otherwise looks good. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:09, August 9, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 23:47, August 21, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • Here's my main issue with the article: it seems more centered on the activities of the Tyrant itself, not with Cabbel. For instance, the two paragraphs on the search for Crix Madine, it doesn't seem that Cabbel had any active role outside of being on the Tyrant at the time. This article is about the character Cabbel, not on the ship. Stuff he's not expressly involved in either needs to be removed or summarized more briefly, and it very well might take this under 1,000 words. IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:28, July 13, 2015 (UTC)
  • Intro and bio start way too similarly for my tastes.
  • You're going to have the source the Quantum Storm's name to something different than ESB. IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:34, July 15, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • Is Cabbel confirmed to be part of the Tyrant crew during the time of the Battle of Derra IV, or is there some leeway in the timeline in which Cabbel could have been part of the Avenger crew reporting to Needa as seen in the Topps cards, then assigned as first officer to Tyrant in the aftermath? The CCG card only states that he was assigned to the Tyrant as first officer during the Battle of Hoth, and makes no mention that he graduated OCS and went straight to the Tyrant. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:07, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well the wording of his Topps card mentions him being the Tyrant's first officer in 3 ABY, before mentioning the galaxy-wide search leading to the Battle of Hoth, can be seen here for reference. Though that card's wording is ambiguous, it does sound as if he was already on the Tyrant before Death Squadron deployed the probe droids. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:05, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • Granted, while mentioning Cabbel being on the Tyrant before mentioning the aftermath of the probe droids' deployment is rather vague, without a source literally stating Cabbel was the Avenger lieutenant, it is not a duck test scenario. As an example there are numerous cases of characters being portrayed by the same extra through the films, including the Avenger bridge crew extras in reused footage on the Executor in the very end of ESB. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:38, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
        • Updated. Believe it might as well be a duck test scenario, per our further discussion. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:21, August 21, 2015 (UTC)

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Secret mission to Geonosis

  • Nominated by: Nivlacanator(talk) 05:22, May 18, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • This was difficult to word for some reason, but it looks good! (I think) Nivlacanator(talk) 05:22, May 18, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 06:27, July 11, 2015 (UTC)

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Fan of the Core
  • Your first quote, you don't need to link both Darth Vader and Aphra since you link them later in the article body.
  • The intro in its current form seems threadbare. Try pulling the paragraphs together into one or create two paragraphs.
  • When talking about Aphra in the intro you should also link "Doctor" since that is her title and archeologist is a profession.
  • the queen's lair Context on who the queen is.
  • Expand on why they are infiltrating the factory.
  • At the beginning you call him 0-0-0 but later on you refer to him as Triple Zero. You could explain they are the same thing, but you should explain that and then stick with it throughout the article.
    • I hadn't thought of that. I'll watch that in the future! Nivlacanator(talk) 07:15, June 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Cylo's research base links to a redirect. While not necessarily a problem, there are several redirects throughout the article it would be good to fix.
  • The first sentence of the body, the semicolon should be comma.
  • as her womb, and the battle droids Comma isn't needed.
  • Including the bombing the shipyards at Kuat, and assaulting Weapons Factory Alpha; the Empire's foremost weapons factory. The sentence structure here is messed up and needs phrasing.
    • That sentence was actually really bothering me, too Nivlacanator(talk) 02:18, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • and Cymoon 1, and put' Comma isn't needed.
  • There are several more instances of commas placed next to the word "and" where they aren't needed. I would just go through the article and remove them when necessary.
  • hunt down an Imperial agent, and a Rebel pilot who had become of interest to him If you're not going to actually list who they are, then context is needed as to why they are of interest of him. Or, if its not relevant to the mission on Geonosis then remove the references all together.
    • Good point. Added names and better context. Nivlacanator(talk) 02:18, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • and Tagge soon attacked and defeated a group Link should be either to "attacked" or "defeated".
  • Vader revealed that he needed private resources of his own: unquestionably loyal battle droids. Context since the reader doesn't know why.
  • So he ordered Aphra to be silent You don't mention that Aphra is talking so why is Vader ordering her to be silent?
  • The last paragraph of the prelude appears to occur on Geonosis so shouldn't this be under "The mission"?
  • Evidently meaning the queen did not see them as droids, but as her own children. This sentence sounds like an assumption made by you the writer. If its what she actually thinks then it should be reworked.
  • Vader ignored the queen's objections, and leaped down to the queen and cut her from the droid factory—her "womb"—using his lightsaber. She survived the attack and struck back; sending her "children", dozens of B1 battle droids—some capable of flight—to stop the Dark Lord. Using the dash can be good when you want to highlight something important, but in this case you've used it to the point where its distracting. Also, the semicolon isn't needed here.
    • I was waiting for that to be an objection. It looked so ugly on my tiny PC. :P Nivlacanator(talk) 00:25, July 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • No comma needed after "locator beacon"
    • Why me commas so bad here? Nivlacanator(talk) 15:31, June 26, 2015 (UTC)
      • See here. Coruscantfan (Talk) 18:07, June 27, 2015 (UTC)
        • I've heard MJ is the best! As I mentioned in the nom comment, I found this really difficult to word for some reason Nivlacanator(talk) 00:26, July 6, 2015 (UTC)
          • Yep, some articles are like that. Coruscantfan (Talk) 06:26, July 11, 2015 (UTC)
  • Comma instead of semicolon needed in "finger; leaving"
  • The Ark Angel, at Aphra's order, barraged the location of the beacon; forging a massive hole in the ceiling, and dropping uncountable amounts of rock to rain down on Vader and his team. Rework the punctuation, its not needed.
  • captured the Emperor's agent in this section you actually talk about Cylo but like I stated before if you're going to bring him into this article, you need to actually link his name and provide context earlier on to explain why he's relevant to the Geonosis mission.
  • Good job! Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:20, June 26, 2015 (UTC)
  • The intro looks better. But from reading the article it seems like Vader wants an "army" and Aphra suggests the battle droids but Vader's reasoning for wanting the army has more to do with his fall from grace with Palpatine. The intro makes it seem like he wants the army because he's looking for a rebel and an Imperial agent. So I would rewrite the intro to clarify what his goal with this specific mission was and then expand on that. Side note, I rewrote one sentence, see what you think. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:02, July 3, 2015 (UTC)
  • I reworked some of the intro but other than that, I'm done. Good job. Coruscantfan (Talk) 06:26, July 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Oh, sorry. I forgot about the intro. But thanks, I'm terrible at writing intros! Thanks, Coruscantfan! Nivlacanator(talk) 06:29, July 11, 2015 (UTC)
Brandon
  • The result section of the infobox is currently empty, but the result is known. You'll need to add that. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:40, June 26, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • Infobox outcome: "The Geonosian queen is left without a way to produce offspring" - she was already left without a way to produce offspring via the sterilization, so that can't be a direct result of this event. Should be reworded to clarify the nature of her new children as battle droids and avoid biological assumption.
    • Done. Though it could probably be worded better. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:04, August 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • The identities of the Imperial agent and Rebel pilot referenced in the intro should be named.
  • "Emperor Palpatine, Vader's Sith Master, lost favor with Vader" - Vader lost favor with Palpatine, not the other way around. This needs to be reworded.
    • Hmmm, could you further explain what you mean&mdahs;I believe Palpatine lost Vader for failing at Yavin and Cymoon 1. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:04, August 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Why is Vader hunting Cylo-IV?
  • "Vader ignored the queen's objections, and leaped down to the queen and cut her from her womb, the droid factory using his lightsaber." Some rewording required here; the last part of the sentence reads as if the droid factory was using Vader's lightsaber.
  • "Although, its thrusters malfunctioned and she jumped down to Vader's position to ask if he could help." Are there some missing words after the comma in the sentence? It seems like there should be something else are the comma to make the sentence make sense. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:23, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
Culator blames you for soiling his hard drive with nucanon
  • As far as I can tell from the comics I had to acquire to check this, "secret mission to Geonosis" is not exactly a formal name, but it is the only appellation this mission has been given (unless one wants to call it "plan to steal a robot womb factory off a homicidally broody alien queen," but I think the first name is better for our purposes). However, had I not read the comics, I would have assumed this was one of our infamous conjectural titles and you forgot the corresponding template. Therefore, for the benefit of readers with similar assumptions, this nomenclature should be explained with a simple note about its origin and usage in the behind the scenes section. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 22:25, August 22, 2015 (UTC)

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Dooku's lightsaber/Canon

  • Nominated by: Squishy Vic | message 17:08, June 11, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I have been working on completely revamping the Count Dooku article for a tiny bit, and it is sad that Sir Christopher Lee passed just recently. I thought this was a nice memorandum article to write and to feature (if found worthy) in the meanwhile. Squishy Vic | message 17:08, June 11, 2015 (UTC)

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Brandon
  1. Couple of initial points before I go deeper into this. First, you say that Dooku created his lightsaber after he became a Sith Lord, and you source that to Ultimate Star Wars. The "Dooku's lightsaber" entry in Ultimate Star Wars doesn't say that. Is there a source that does? If not, you'll need to keep the timeline of its creation vague.
  2. You say that the lightsaber was destroyed when the Invisible Hand was destroyed. Was it? Do we know that for sure? We can assume within reason that it was, but we could also assume that Cassio Tagge was killed when the Death Star blew up—yet we now know he's alive. I wouldn't make this assumption about his lightsaber unless it's clearly stated somewhere. In which case, it should be sourced to wherever that's stated, rather than Episode III.
    • The lightsaber/Dooku's body were both left in that room and not much time passed between his death and the ship's rear half burning up in the atmosphere, least not nearly between Tagge's introduction and the Death Star blowing up. Still, of course, the lightsaber may not be destroyed (per some major spoilers on another lightsaber), but we haven't seen it again in canon yet; would it be acceptable to write "last seen" some date? I can write its fate in vague terms. I just don't want to omit the fact that it was last used by anyone at that point, far as we know in established canon. Squishy Vic | message 22:04, June 11, 2015 (UTC)
      • "Last seen" is an out-of-universe statement, so that wouldn't work in an in-universe article. The best thing to do is to not address its fate at all, not even in vague or speculative terms. You're not omitting anything by doing that, you're just naturally ending the article where the facts end. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 22:07, June 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • I removed all direct references to its destruction, but I did leave the following in the history, as it states only the facts that the body/weapon were left on board while the ship was destroyed: Squishy Vic | message 04:52, June 12, 2015 (UTC)
      • "Once Skywalker escaped with both Kenobi and Sidious in tow, Dooku's lightsaber – as well as his lifeless body – were left aboard the Invisible Hand as it was destroyed in the final moments of the battle.
        • That states it in a way that still suggests, based on the sentence structure, that the lightsaber was still there when the ship was destroyed. We don't know that. Say this instead: "Once Skywalker escaped with both Kenobi and Palpatine in tow, Dooku's lightsaber was left behind in the [whatever that room is called] of the Invisible Hand, which was destroyed shortly thereafter." You'll note I also changed Sidious to Palpatine. In this context, he was operating as Palpatine so it's clearer to the reader to say Palpatine. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:22, June 12, 2015 (UTC)
          • Is there any right way/template to source [1] non-databank info from StarWars.com? That RotS gallery refers to that chamber as Grievous's chambers, I just need to figure how to source it. Squishy Vic | message 05:34, June 12, 2015 (UTC)
            • {{SW|url=films/star-wars-episode-3-revenge-of-the-sith-story-gallery|text=Star Wars: Revenge of the Sith Story Gallery}} - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:41, June 12, 2015 (UTC)
              • Changes have been applied, link added to Sources. Squishy Vic | message 05:48, June 12, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Are there any quotes from "Dooku Captured" specific to the lightsaber? It'd be great to open the History section with something more relevant to the lightsaber, since the current quote is more about General Grievous than it is about Dooku's weapon.
  4. I would imagine that there are many more StarWars.com sources showing Dooku's lightsaber. That will include the Episode II and Episode III film pages, TCW Episode Guides for episodes in which the weapon appeared (but make sure you actually check the Episode Guides - don't make the assumption that it's in the Guide just because the weapon was in the corresponding episode), and Databank entries for characters who may have had contact with the lightsaber in some way.
    • Will go through these and add them soon. Squishy Vic | message 02:32, June 17, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Similarly, you'll need to include more than just StarWars.com sources as well. This includes, but is not limited to, Star Wars Insider editions released after April 25, 2014 in which the lightsaber may have been show. Please be sure to consult Wookieepedia:Layout Guide#Sources for more information this, including canon-specific rules.
    • This has been addressed. All Insider (canon) issues have been checked and added if they referenced Dooku's saber or images of it. Squishy Vic | message 02:32, June 17, 2015 (UTC)
    (This is, undoubtedly, a pain in the ass, but that tends to happen with subjects that are fairly ubiquitous).
  6. This part isn't an objection, but just something important to note. There are people on Wookieepedia who don't like lightsaber articles and who think they're pointless (I'm not one of them). There may be a push at some point to eliminate as many as possible. Odds are this will be ones that aren't unique or that aren't notable in the franchise, meaning this lightsaber is probably safe, but I say this just to point out that there are no guarantees that this page will be kept if such a push happens, even it's promoted to FA. Just something to keep in mind!
  7. More later. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 19:53, June 11, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Can I support my own nom? (aka vote in Support) Squishy Vic | message 17:08, June 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Nope! That'd be too easy, wouldn't it? =P - Brandon Rhea(talk) 19:53, June 11, 2015 (UTC)


Slick/Canon

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  1. Brandon's got the power! Nivlacanator(talk) 23:27, July 4, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Coruscantfan (Talk) 17:05, July 24, 2015 (UTC)

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Clone fly-by
  • I don't think the last section of the Biography is particularly relevant to Slick as an individual, since it's a passing mention in dialogue by another character—purely as an acknowledgement of his actions and nothing more, so it doesn't directly affect him. It would be something akin to chronicling every time Anakin Skywalker gets mentioned by another character, and inserting all of those mentions into Skywalker's article as an acknowledgement of X talking about him on Y occasion, which would be rather extraneous. I think it'd be best to remove the paragraph. CC7567 (talk) 01:39, June 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'd like to keep it in some form, since it does show that Slick's actions—and the idea that a clone could betray the Republic—were known to other people and that it was relevant to other events. I definitely thought that the section got a bit long but I felt the need to contextualize it. Any ideas for trimming it, if you agree that it's still relevant as a legacy? - Brandon Rhea(talk) 01:45, June 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • To be honest, I can't think of any rewording that would make it relevant enough to warrant staying in the article. That's not a criticism of your writing; it's just based on what we've seen in canon sources so far. I agree that the idea of a clone traitor was relevant to other in-universe events and must have had an impact on them, but at the same time, we (as viewers) haven't seen any kind of explicit impact from Slick's treason. All we have is Tano and Offee discussing Slick's actions on a single occasion, and that's not notable on its own. If a canon source were to depict a more palpable consequence of Slick's treason, like the creation of a program to verify each clone's loyalties, then that would be worth mentioning—but seeing as we haven't seen something like that yet, I don't think Tano and Offee's conversation merits inclusion in Slick's article. CC7567 (talk) 02:06, June 19, 2015 (UTC)
Jang
  • "Slick was the name of a clone trooper who served as a Clone Sergeant in the Grand Army of the Republic during the Clone Wars." Now from the Department of Redundancy Department of Redundancy JangFett (Talk) 13:52, July 4, 2015 (UTC)
    • I've removed the clone trooper part and went right to Clone Sergeant. Hopefully that's what you were referring to. Hard to tell when your objection is nothing but sarcasm. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 15:18, July 4, 2015 (UTC)
Cubert
  • The link to Slick's image gallery says it's to canon only images, but it contains one images that is not canon. Nivlacanator(talk) 23:26, July 4, 2015 (UTC)
    • There's nothing I can do about that until such time as the community decides to split image categories into Canon and Legends. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 23:35, July 4, 2015 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone

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  • Have you checked Asajj and Rex's Databank entries? How about others? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:52, June 18, 2015 (UTC)
    • Yes. Asajj's biography gallery isn't loading (there appears to be an issue with it on SW.com since I've tried on multiple devices). If there is a reference to Slick in there, then I'll add it once the gallery is working again. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 01:56, June 18, 2015 (UTC)
  • If this FAN passes, will this be the first time the Legends and Canon counterparts of a subject are both quality articles? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:50, June 18, 2015 (UTC)


CT-1409

  • Nominated by: Squishy Vic | message 07:00, June 19, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Probably one of my favorite clone troopers, had to do his canon article justice! If you have objections about the images, please note them here instead of changing them, as widescreen images (16x9 or wider) look great at 300px and don't show enough detail at anything smaller. They have been meticulously chosen and placed throughout the article to make the article as beautiful as possible. Thanks! Squishy Vic | message 07:00, June 19, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Although Echo will undoubtedly be in upcoming Clone Wars Legacy stories. Great job! Nivlacanator(talk) 04:55, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Excellent work. It's not every day that you wake up to a featured article quality canon article. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 14:42, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
  3. ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:59, August 19, 2015 (UTC)

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AV-6R7
Clone fly-by
  • There are a bit too many images in the article. The general precedent is to use an image every 3-4 paragraphs, or one per section, whichever fits better. Images should be used only as embellishments of the text, and anything more frequent than that causes the images to become rather crowded and take attention away from the text, especially since the article uses images in extreme widescreen format. Please try to remove a few of the images. CC7567 (talk) 22:17, July 30, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Great job on this! - Brandon Rhea(talk) 01:34, June 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Edited the page for a minor thing. Hope I didn't step on your toes. Just to clarify, Wat Tambor was the foreman of the Techno Union, and the Emir of Ryloth. I swapped Emir for foreman and added Emir before the first mention of Wat Tambor. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:09, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Thanks, I updated the intro to reflect this as well. Didn't know they were two separate titles until now. Squishy Vic | message 10:05, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
      • Sure thing. Sorry for missing the intro and making more work for you. EDIT: I almost feel like Emir belongs before Wat Tambor in the intro, though that's just my opinion. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 14:43, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • The Anaheim Bad Batch panel is available in the videos section of starwars.com, if you want to use that instead of the youtube channel. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 06:50, June 24, 2015 (UTC)
    • Thanks, updated with that one instead.Squishy Vic | message 07:06, June 24, 2015 (UTC)
      • Yeah, it just seems more professional to use the one posted on their official website. EDIT: Plus, backup links. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 07:10, June 24, 2015 (UTC)


Attack on an Imperial convoy

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  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 22:14, June 25, 2015 (UTC)
  2. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:14, June 25, 2015 (UTC)

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AV-6R7
  • Although some sources call the asteroid itself Fort Anaxes, the asteroid is actually designated PM-1203. This will need to be corrected. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:53, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, there's nothing in need of correction. Everything in the article correctly states that Fort Anaxes is an asteroid base, which it is. I'll simply add in a link to PM-1203 where appropriate. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:56, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
  • Mandalorian needs to be linked to something in the intro and body. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:04, August 17, 2015 (UTC)
    • Hey GT. I've actually responded to this objection in multiple noms before. As you can see, Mandalorian/Canon is protected from being created. The reason is that, canonically, Mandalorian is currently just a demonym. There would be no difference between content in Mandalorian/Canon and Mandalore/Canon—unlike, say, Alderaanian/Canon vs Alderaan/Canon. So we won't be creating Mandalorian/Canon at this time. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 15:11, August 17, 2015 (UTC)
      • In which case it should at least link to Mandalore/Canon. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:06, August 17, 2015 (UTC)
        • I have been told on multiple instances not to do that, so I haven't done it on any previous noms. I would like a firm answer on this before I add it to this nom, that way it can be consistent with other articles. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:09, August 17, 2015 (UTC)

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Coruscant Security Force/Canon

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 22:04, June 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Déjà vu... although this version is blessedly shorter.

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Cubert
  • Awesome! But shouldn't AotC be marked as "(First mentioned; albeit indirectly)"? I'll read through it fully soon. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:17, July 10, 2015 (UTC)

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Exar Kun

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:40, July 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Holiday, celebrate.

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  1. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:50, August 13, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:49, August 19, 2015 (UTC)

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Alderaan Enclave

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Voorpee

  • Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Good article nomination that, quite simply, got too long. Well, in any case, before the nomination was closed, I had gotten support from one AgriCorp member and three regular users and didn't have any outstanding objections. Still, I'd be happy to address any other concerns that may be brought up. The original nomination can be found here. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. It's nice to see a less serious article every so often. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:19, August 7, 2015 (UTC)

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Ayrehead
  • The intro should be updated to include information about the cloning and talent show. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • I would reword the bts concerning Brown saying pets would appear in the third book as it is currently a bit confusing to read and not entirely clear that the Phantom Bully is the third book unless you follow the link. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is it clear if the original Voorpee is the one that is kept, or could he be amongst the ones returned to the zoo or the rescue organization? If it isn't clar you should at least mention this in the behind the scenes and maybe even in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, I tried something like that, but if you look back at Manoof's objections on the original Good article nomination, I ended up getting rid of it because if nothing is stated either way, then the custom is to not say anything at all. And the book really doesn't. After the whole mess happens, Voorpee himself isn't mentioned again at all. It's entirely unclear whether they ever even found the original Voorpee. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, July 22, 2015 (UTC)

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Skirmish at Haven

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  1. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:31, July 29, 2015 (UTC)
  2. - AV-6R7 (talk) 15:34, July 29, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:42, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 01:31, August 27, 2015 (UTC)

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Deltic

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:17, August 2, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An article I was sure was only going to be a GA.

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Te Hasa

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 22:18, August 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first FA nomination. 1039 words.

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  1. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:46, August 10, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:26, August 13, 2015 (UTC)

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Toprawa
  • The History section should detail the fact that the Gree at some point immigrated to Te Hasa.
    • Added.
  • The Gree image in the article body has a pretty sketchy editing job to remove surrounding graphics. You should seek someone with image-editing skills to clean this up for you. I would suggest Darth Culator.
    • I've asked Culator for some help.
  • I would also like to see the image caption detail something specific about the Gree in relation to Te Hasa. "A Gree" is pretty boring.
    • Some fun fact added to the boring caption.
  • Maybe I'm just not understanding it, but I find the beginning of this sentence to be kind of confusing. Can you tweak this at all to clarify? "The greatest concentration in the Gree Enclave of textmasters..."
    • Is it clearer now? It's supposed to be "the largest number of textmasters in the Enclave worked in the Library" + context on textmasters.
  • Reviewing notes:
    • Since you write a lot of planet articles, this is something I want you to pay more attention to. Going along with my second objection I made here regarding using manual reference notes for sources that don't directly mention a subject, the Essential Atlas Online Companion does not list planets; it only lists systems. So if you're going to source astrograhical data for planets from the Online Companion, you should specify how exactly you're reaching that information. Notice in reference 1 for Nal Koska that I specified "Based on corresponding data for Y'Toub system" for the Online Companion reference, since you're extrapolating all of that information specifically from the Y'Toub system information. You should add this to your reference note anytime you're sourcing information from the Companion for a planet.
      • Ah, OK, got it now. In the case with Nal Koska, I thought the note was necessary because only "Y'Toub" was listed in the Appendix/Companion and not "Nal Koska".
    • You don't need to go into a full explanation of what a Type II atmosphere is. That's what our links are for.
      • Yeah, I should've noticed that bit could be shortened.
    • You seem to have a habit of overusing the dash. Reserve those for instances where you're trying to emphasize the dramatic or seriousness of something, and stick to commas for the majority of sentences. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:58, August 9, 2015 (UTC)

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FEX-M3 nerve gas grenade

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:52, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Wasn't around much when the article got probed due to the main image issue, so I completely missed it until I saw its GA status removed. However, the article had also undergone a sizable update prior to that, which also put it at 1006 words. So, I guess the article would've eventually ended up on the FAN page regardless.

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  • Credit to JMAS for finding a better image for the infobox. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:52, August 12, 2015 (UTC)


Cornelius Evazan/Canon

  • Nominated by: AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 04:37, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: With all the previous objections taken care of and other aditions, the page exceeded 1,000 words. Thus, I am running this for FA status.

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