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This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.
A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.

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An article must…

  1. …be well-written and detailed.
  2. …be unbiased, non-point of view.
  3. …be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
  4. …follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
  5. …following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
  6. …not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
  7. …have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
  8. …have no more than 1 redlink for articles less than 500 words, no more than 3 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
  9. …have comprehensive detail with all information covered from all sources and appearances.
  10. …be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Wookieepedia:Sourcing for more information.
  11. …have all quotes and images sourced.
  12. …provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
  13. …ideally include a "Personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
  14. …ideally include a "Powers and abilities" section for Force-sensitive characters and a "Skills and abilities" section for non–Force-sensitive characters, where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
  15. …include a "Behind the scenes" section for in-universe articles.
  16. …include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
  17. …counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a good article cannot exceed 1000 words. Articles that do so should be nominated for Featured status.

How to nominate:

  1. First, find an article you find is worthy of good status. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
  2. Add {{GAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating and save the page. NOTE: If the article you are nominating has been nominated for GA one or more times previously, you will need to specify a new subpage name as a parameter in the template (e.g. {{GAnom|Lorum ipsum (second nomination)}}).
  3. Open the redlink (in a new tab or window, if possible) and fill out the form according to the instructions provided.
  4. Copy the code provided to the bottom of this page.
  5. Purge the article to update the template.
  6. Per AgriCorps consensus, nominators are restricted to four nominations on the GAN page at any one time. Once one nomination is removed from the page as either successful or unsuccessful, another can be added.

How to vote:

  1. Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
  2. Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
    • If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
  3. As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
  4. Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members—two of which must be AgriCorps votes—after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the {{Eras|good}} template. The talk page will also be tagged with the {{GA}} template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps/Inquisitorius votes—three of which must be AgriCorps votes—with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
  5. The article is placed on the Good article list.


All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 2 weeks.


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To nominate an article for Good article status, place the {{GAnom}} template on the top of the article and then follow the instructions above. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members—two of which must be an AgriCorps vote—after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the {{Eras|good}} template. The talk page will also be tagged with the {{GA}} template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here.

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Unidentified Aurorient Express band conductor

  • Nominated by: Trak Nar Ramble on 03:38, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Possibly some of the most clunky wording in an article, but this guy has no defined gender. Hopefully enough copy-edits will smooth out the bumps... Trak Nar Ramble on 03:38, March 7, 2013 (UTC)

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 18:38, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
  2. —MJ— Comlink 19:59, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 23:04, April 12, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Clone
  • I would say an article for the guy's species should be added, seeing as it's pretty unique. CC7567 (talk) 21:12, March 9, 2013 (UTC)
    • The thing is... we had an article. However, after a discussion with other people, it was deemed that the article be removed. Trak Nar Ramble on 02:17, March 12, 2013 (UTC)
      • Was there an issue with the notability of the species, then? Because to my knowledge we've had articles for less. Just want to make sure. CC7567 (talk) 02:50, March 14, 2013 (UTC)
        • There was an issue with the validity of the species article, as it was written by a user who had a history of not checking his/her facts first. However, I'll run the article by another user again and see what they think, and then go ahead and make a species article, if it is deemed necessary. At the moment, we're looking into other species to see if this maestro might possibly be of an existing race. Trak Nar Ramble on 01:29, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
          • If I may interject, Skeeter appears to be the same species as the conductor.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:54, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
            • Skeeter was brought up as a possible match, but he has six limbs, whereas our nameless conductor only has four. Other than that, they do share a number of similarities, and I had noted it in the Bts, only to remove it later. Trak Nar Ramble on 01:57, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
              • Okay, an article has been made and linked to. Trak Nar Ramble on 02:55, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
                • "Unknown" should be avoided if possible to maintain an IU perspective, as "unknown" is more from an OOU perspective, since the species' name wasn't necessarily "unknown" in-universe. CC7567 (talk) 14:59, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
All along the watchtower
  • Is it worth it to mention that his "honor and privilege" quote may have been inspired by the Titanic's conductor? Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 03:23, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Unless I have a source that the quote was indeed inspired by the movie, then I can't include it. However, I could always hunt down the contact information of the comic's author and run the question by him. Not sure how soon I would be able to do that, though, so that may be a tidbit that would be added later. Trak Nar Ramble on 01:29, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • Species is unreffed in the infobox.
  • In the intro, you mention the "evacuees", but give no reason as to why the ship was evacuating in the first place.
  • What was the motive behind the attack on the ship?
  • Just a heads up - terms like "unnamed" "unknown" or "unidentified" are not used in the article bodies when refering to species with no canonical name. I've removed the references and covered the removal, but please check for readability. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:31, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • One more - I think we're going to have an article for the attack on the liner, or see if we have one laying around the Wook somewhere to link to. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:34, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
Jangeth
  • Please reload your infobox JangFett (Talk) 21:58, April 7, 2013 (UTC)
  • While minor, it is not appropriate to have "unidentified" within the infobox. Normally you would try to describe it as best as you can or in this case just stick with "insectoid species."
  • Just to be sure, was Qui-Gon a Jedi Master in the comics or a Knight? Sorry, I've always familiarized him as a Master. :P
  • Please double check my work in the appearance section. Did he appear in both comics? JangFett (Talk) 04:10, April 9, 2013 (UTC)
    • He appears in both comics, and I had originally written those appearances that way, only for it to be changed to just mention the series as a whole. Trak Nar Ramble on 03:09, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
From the Council Chambers:
  • The intro is confusing; you show the Jedi crashing the party, then (apparently) back up to explain the terrorist attack, before bringing the Jedi in again. Can we move things around here so that they're in the order they actually occurred? It would make a whole lot more sense that way.
    • Reworded. Trak Nar Ramble on 05:31, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
      • Better, but still a bit confusing. You still show the Jedi crashing in from nowhere, then back up to say they were dispatched, which is out of order. Say why and that they were sent to the ship, then show them dropping in. The first bio paragraph shows what I mean. —MJ— War Room 06:04, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • The BTS has too much fluff. There's no need to retell the character's entire story again from an OOU perspective. Everything from the third sentence on can go.
  • Otherwise, looks good. —MJ— Holocomm 04:19, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
Fred strikes
  • Please separate the second sentence after "security droids." Same for the last intro sentence after "evacuees." MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 14:43, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
Dogma
  • In the intro, who are the mollusks? It should be stated that they are part of the band.
  • The intro is quite large in comparison to the article, so you might want to remove a non-essential sentence or two.
  • The end of the bio where the guy is about to leave has a bit of play by play with the dialogue. You should probably tone it down a bit. 501st dogma(talk) 20:52, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote I am sorry, Trak, I'm sure you had your valid reasons, but this has been on for a while and since you've been unresponsive, I think it's the only way. You can always get this baby up some other time ;) Winterz (talk) 00:51, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:23, May 19, 2013 (UTC)


Myleena Dystra

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 05:39, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A Coruscant-related and police-related article, perfect combo.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Stake black msg 19:02, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 21:03, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 08:15, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:56, May 7, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:35, May 9, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Slow-roasted at the stake

*"when her parents were arrested as Alliance to Restore the Republic". I don't know what you mean there.

    • I don't know either... Done.
  • Beef up that Bts, ma man! Context on H&R, is it a book? a comic series? Who wrote it? Who was the artist that illustrated Dystra's pretty face?
    • I don't really have an author for the section on her but I did add the other info I had.
  • Sources call for {{1stm}} instead of {{1st}}, even if the subject is pictured. I don't know why either, but I've had this objection presented to me a lot of times.
    • Huh, ok.
  • Does the source say "unnecessary risks"? If not, please remove, as that is a POV.
    • Yes, the exact quote is "Her enthusiasm could be her undoing as she takes unnecessary risks and short cuts to make her collar."
  • Please present a source indicating 13 BBY was a golden Imperial era.
    • Word changed.
  • Context on Coruscant, appropriately sourced.
    • I thought "planet" was context?
  • Context on and link to the dissolution of the Imperial Senate, ideally with a date if possible.
    • Added.
  • Context on the Rebel Alliance, COMPNOR, stormtroopers, New Order, Alliance Special Operations and New Republic.
    • Done.
  • "determined to do justice for the cause that her parents had believed in." Didn't she believe in the cause too? This should be included. Maybe you could also reword as "she was determined to do justice for the cause her parents died for" or something of the sort.
    • Wording adjusted
  • "Twice Dystra found herself in dangerous actions during which she was wounded." This could use some rewording.
    • Done.
  • You can also describe her attire somewhere in the article.
    • I'm not sure how I can incorporate that smoothly. And the image doesn't really show if its a police uniform she has on or just regular clothes.
      • You could mention she wore goggles sometimes in the Personality and traits section. Stake black msg 16:17, March 21, 2013 (UTC)
        • I did find a reference to a uniform so both have been added. Coruscantfan (Talk) 18:48, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • For now that's it. Stake black msg 16:08, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
No stakes involved
  • The "briefly" in the infobox must be decapitalized.
    • Done.
  • The "young" assessment, does that say in the source or was it you who assumed it through her appearance?
  • Reload infobox. Winterz (talk) 12:45, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • First appearance in Sources?! Winterz (talk) 15:38, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • Yep, so... are you wanting it removed? Coruscantfan (Talk) 05:05, April 5, 2013 (UTC)
      • He means it should be {{1stm}}, since it's a source. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 05:33, April 5, 2013 (UTC)
        • Oh, got it, changed. :) Coruscantfan (Talk) 05:36, April 5, 2013 (UTC)
          • Considering this, changes should reflect on the Bts as well ;)
  • Try to avoid pipelinking like the "Rebel Alliance" case in the infobox, sir. Winterz (talk) 11:20, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Even though we all know it the article doesn't clearly say that the Rebels became the new republic somewhere in there. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 23:11, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Could there be an article for the Dystra estate?
    • Done.
  • Article for the readjustment camp?
    • Done.
  • Also, perhaps for the foster home? IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:16, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Sorry for intervening in this section :p, but the Rebel safeworld should receive one too. Winterz (talk) 17:48, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
The Cav-Man cometh
  • Okay; Dystra's bio on pg. 127 of Heroes and Rogues has all her stats listed. These should be translated into her skill set and applied to her PT. For an example of how this can be achieved see here. Also, there is equipment listed in the stats that is not mentioned in the article, such as her Y-wing and droid, etc.
    • Done.
  • The image; I see you correlated Dystra's bio as an NRSF agent with the example bio given earlier in the book for a typical agent. Am I right in assuming that the image is not explicitly stated to be Dystra? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:03, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
    • I went back and looked and there isn't a caption, no. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:23, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Search for Mandalore's Mask

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Providing all objections are satisfied. Supreme Emperor (talk) 21:29, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:39, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Winterz (talk) 01:03, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:22, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • First off: Intro has to be shortened considerably. Way out of proportion. Do this and I'll take a closer look. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:14, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
  • What I asked you to do in the Skirmish on Rekkiad related to this one, will certainly make you expand the Search article furthermore and a section for the battles, that occurred during it, would also be good. Winterz (talk) 15:08, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • In the infobox you have "24 casualties" for Clan Jendri but that's just what we know from one battle. I think you should use "At least 24" instead.
    • Clan Jendri only participated in the first skirmish, after that they were never seen/mentioned. I think it's fine the way it is since it does cover what we know, however if you think different I can change it.
  • Participants section would be great ;)
    • Added known participants.
  • You should try and cut down the Aftermath's quote a bit, it's really huge. Whatever you cut should instead be well specified in the text below the quote hence expanding the Aftermath's body making it bigger than the actual quote. Winterz (talk) 11:33, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Alphabetize your categories.
    • Done.
  • Is there a particular reason for the capitalization of the "The Search" section? If the title is conjectural, I don't think 'search' should be capitalized either. 1358 (Talk) 21:05, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • If the title is conjecctural, you probably shouldn't start the intro with "The search", as that makes it sound like the title is canonical ("The battle of Geonosis" vs. "A battle on Geonosis" for example) 1358 (Talk) 19:20, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Can you put background context in for things like why the mask was so important and that Revan was the ne who hid it in the prelude.
    • Added.
      • His redemption should be worth a quick mention as well, and he needs to be linked to in the first time he is mentionedIn
  • Any quotes for the search section and/or its subheadings?
    • Added.
  • Context for Malak in that section
  • Added.
  • When you mention the six guys getting to the basilisks you make it sound like like they haven't been introduced, fix please.
    • Fixed.
  • Context for the twin spears
    • Added.
  • Veela revealed that she knew Revan's identity you need to say earlier that Revan was using an alias or something
    • Added.
  • Some images of Revan or Mandalore wearing his mask wouldn't hurt. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 06:29, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Ditch the list of participants. Those are things we actively try to eliminate throughout the wiki. I know Winterz asked for it, but he was wrong to.
    • Removed.
  • "A search for Mandalore's Mask was a mission undertaken in 3,954 BBY by the surviving Mandalorian clans, leftover from the Mandalorian Wars, gathered on the planet Rekkiad to search for the ancient ceremonial war mask, Mandalore's Mask." The double "search for Mandalore's Mask" is unnecessary here. Change the sentence around.
    • Changed.
  • Context on Canderous Ordo in both the intro and body.
    • Added.
  • Intro: Context on the Twin Spears.
    • Added.
  • First sentence of the Prelude has two sections surrounded by dashes in it. This has to be changed as it's bad for flow.
    • Changed up.
      • The way you have it now, the Mandalore's Mask is mentioned before it's actually introduced: "where Jedi Knights Revan and Malak hid Mandalore's Mask six years earlier, to search for the ancient ceremonial war mask, Mandalore's Mask," It's probably best to just split this sentence up and try to get it straightened out. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:25, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • The whole description of the skirmish in the tomb is too play-by-play.
    • Changed.
  • You start calling the Mandalorians "Mandos" towards the very end. That's fine, but if you're going to do this, you should integrate this throughout the entire article and give a little context on the term's meaning. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:04, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Marker

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Strange alright... 501st dogma(talk) 23:00, April 1, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:10, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 22:50, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:03, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  5. WP:VG marches on.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 16:15, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Winterz (talk) 01:11, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • Are there articles for the rescue of Attichitcuk and the driving off of the Trade Federation, or are they part of a larger battle? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:17, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
    • All of those are included in the Battle of Alaris Prime article. I'm not overly sure whether they should be split. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 04:30, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
Wintz
  • You should source that Bts considering the large explanation.
    • Done.
  • May we receive some articles for this settlements and the TF's base which you specify as having markers? Winterz (talk) 17:51, April 30, 2013 (UTC)

Comments


Galen Torg

  • Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 20:40, April 10, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another minor Rebel character from the Award Ceremony scene.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clean.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:23, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 14:58, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 23:57, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Winterz (talk) 01:09, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Reminds me of a school in my area. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:26, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 20:39, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cav
Jangeth
  • I would definitely check various, older sources, Hanzo. Since this guy said something + he could be seen on screen, I would check every single source relating to ANH. Did you check Empire of Dreams too? JangFett (Talk) 18:55, April 17, 2013 (UTC)
    • That line was from GG1, not the film, in which he had no lines whatsoever. I asked Lelal and Menkooroo to check stuff, and also I made effort to find things on my own, and these were what I got. And as for Empire of Dreams, I'll see about that. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:58, April 18, 2013 (UTC)
      • That's not what I meant. The "can be scene" refers to the film. ;) I would look carefully at other sources as well. JangFett (Talk) 02:54, April 18, 2013 (UTC)
        • Yep he's in Empire of Dreams, added it, along with both the Visual Dictionary and the CVD. As for adaptations, his appearances really are scarce in those, as most adaptations tend to not even depict the entrance to the Audience Chamber. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:18, April 18, 2013 (UTC)
          • Since it a rather "iconic" scene, I would keep looking. For GG1, have you checked the 2nd Ed? Also, what was he named in the first edition. I would mention it in the source list. JangFett (Talk) 13:38, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
            • He is not in the second edition if I recall correctly. And he was first named as Galen Torg in the first edition, but it was not established that he was any film character at that time. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:06, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
              • As for the request you made for me to keep looking, are there any sources you have that you could look into? My search, aided by Menkooroo and LelalMekha, has produced only those results thus far. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:15, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
                • Have you checked the Prima guides for the video games? JangFett (Talk) 14:06, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
                  • No I haven't. Do you have any that you can check? And what games should I even be checking? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:45, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
                    • Oh you probably meant the LEGO Star Wars guides. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:48, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
                      • Got help from Cal Jedi on IRC about those LEGO guides, nothing. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 00:10, April 24, 2013 (UTC)
                        • Yeah, those Prima guides. I've been looking too and haven't found anything. I'll go ahead and strike this objection within a few days. I just hope everything is in the source list, Hanzo. JangFett (Talk) 15:33, May 3, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by AgriCorps 20:39, May 19, 2013 (UTC)



Suurja

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Good job.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 06:17, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:39, April 15, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:47, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:02, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Winterz (talk) 01:09, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Nice work. 501st dogma(talk) 11:28, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Objections, objections…
  • History: including the Padawan learner Alek Squinquargesimus… Alright, couple of things. His name was always Alek, actually. Also, he was actually no Padawan, and Revan was his "unofficial" Master, not his actual Jedi Master, thus, Alek was no Padawan.
    • Umm, as far as I know, Alek was even called "Squint" because others had difficulty pronouncing "Squinquargesimus", so I'd say it was his surname. But I've changed the name to Alek, anyway. And I've changed his rank to Jedi Knight.
      • Thanks, the basis for the surname not being an "actual" part of his name can be found here.
  • Some context on Darth Krayt would be good.
  • Thank you for your contribution to WP:KOTOR!—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:05, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
Objections, and more objections
  • You seem to be missing a ref at the end of the Description's first sentence. Because of this, you are reffing the Surga sysyem and the Outer Rim in the Description to a different thing than you are reffing to it in the infobox.
  • I know this is picky, but the BTS isn't in chronological order. Warfare was published after TCSWE, yet you have TCSWE mentioned in the BTS later than Warfare is. Good work otherwise. 501st dogma(talk) 00:21, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by AgriCorps 21:15, May 19, 2013 (UTC)



Taanab Sunrise

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 12:34, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I was bored

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:31, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
  2. I was expecting to read about some kind of Far Orbit drink :) Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:29, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • I don't think you should call the Yuuzhan Vong the "Vong", it's not a proper name for them.
  • Article for the other Victory-class that attacked the capital ships? IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:38, April 15, 2013 (UTC)
    • Both done. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 22:34, April 15, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • I think some context on the operatives, and how they planned to get aboard the Ralroost, can be added.
    • That better?
  • Class for the Burning Pride? Our article has it as a Miid ro'ik, so check and see if this is accurate. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:19, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • I have it as a cruiser now. It seems that there is no mention of it being a Miid ro'ik. 501st dogma(talk) 20:28, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Kidnapping of Doctor Tarnis

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 21:01, April 18, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:41, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Assuming Cav's satisfied. Winterz (talk) 01:17, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:34, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • In the infobox, you say that he was extracted, but the body says that he fled himself. Perhaps the infobox should reflect that.
    • No, it says extracted in both.
  • The place part in the infobox should say Coruscant as well as the Senate Building.
    • Done.
  • You need to link to Skirmish in Docking Bay 84 in the body. Could you also try to mention Raid on the Migrant Merchants' Guild warehouse in the body? 501st dogma(talk) 00:20, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • Nah, there's no need, as mentioning the prev/conc/next fields isn't necessary - the warehouse raid isn't directly related to the kidnapping. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 01:09, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • "Tarnis requested that Black Sun conduct his "kidnapping" so that he could escape the Senate Building without suspicion and continue with his plans to escape Coruscant." He wanted to continue his plans to escape Coruscant? In the intro it said he wanted to continue his plans to acquire the Planet Prison, but there's no such mention here. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:05, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • Little thing: his alias "Eli Tarnis" is not mentioned once in the main section of the article.
  • When a young Jedi Knight, the former apprentice of Jedi Master Orgus Din, was sent to retrieve the files from the criminals in the Old Galactic Market region, - would a link to the Raid on the Migrant Merchants' Guild warehouse be appropriate here? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:28, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Pathline Tapcafe

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 22:56, April 15, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Anybody want coffee?

(3 ACs/1 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:28, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Watch your copy-and-pasting. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:14, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
  3. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:09, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote I would like one, yes. Winterz (talk) 01:20, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cav

Comments

Cassa Hun

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:56, April 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Project Hero. A CAnom that grew too big.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:41, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:47, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:27, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Winterz (talk) 03:29, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:36, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • There has to be more that can go in the P&T with all his dialogue. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:08, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • Those are actually the only dialogue lines he has, other than the descriptions of the advanced classes. I've expanded it as much as I can. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 02:20, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
  • I've got a picky one. You should probably link Jedi instructor somewhere on the article, like you did with so many others previous to this. Winterz (talk) 01:13, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Oro Dassyne's Bomis Koori IV fort

  • Nominated by: JangFett (Talk) 04:40, April 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: dat fort

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Nice! The more CW, the better.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 21:14, April 19, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:06, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  3. CW CW CW CW CW CW CW CW CW :DDDDD Also, per Cav on dat der quote.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 21:47, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd takes a flying shit on your article
  • "was important to the defense of surrounding star systems. Due to its importance," VARY YOUR WORD CHOICE, BROSKI.
  • Also, the intro seems a bit big in proportion to the body.
  • It seems kinda weird to me that you introduce the fort all over again in the history section, when you should have done so in the description.
  • Could we get another quote in the History? Something related to the siege?
  • One more objection: r u a sith or jedi master IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:28, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • The ray shielded structure helped the Alliance - what Alliance? You mentioned Corporate Alliance in the main section, but not the intro. Naughty.
    • You didn't see anything :3 JangFett (Talk) 18:40, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • Dat quote. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:50, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

  • Another article of mine from 2011, finished a few years later. JangFett (Talk) 04:49, April 18, 2013 (UTC)


Nal Koska

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:08, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:35, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  3. 501st dogma(talk) 20:01, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 15:58, May 10, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:23, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Shouldn't the part about the population be housed in the History, not the description? Otherwise, looks good. 501st dogma(talk)
Toprawa
  • I've noticed you use the same reference note in all your applicable articles to source the TOR date. Can this not be more effectively achieved with Template:TOR dates, which was created for this seemingly same purpose? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:05, May 10, 2013 (UTC)
    • Probably. Changed. (I didn't even realized there was such a template :) ) Imperators II(Talk) 20:28, May 10, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by AgriCorps 01:23, May 19, 2013 (UTC)



Attack on the Shock Drum Facility

(3 ACs/0 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:56, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:50, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:57, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Comments

Gabrial Atanna

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 21:06, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:12, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:04, May 2, 2013 (UTC)
  4. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:21, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  5. These roleplaying articles are indeed goodness.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 17:29, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Is there no mention as to whether he is rescued or not?
    • No. The main focus is the rescue of his wife and grandchildren. It only says a team is going to attempt his rescue.
  • You mention the Darpa sector briefly in the BTS. You should say that Esseles was in the Darpa sector, to tie the Senator to the Darpa sector more. 501st dogma(talk) 23:48, April 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified long-necked riding beast

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:18, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Was meant to be a short CA but manage to bump it just over the word limit.

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. - Princess GLG 02:03, April 26, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Princess
  • I may be wrong about this, but in the first sentence of the intro, isn't species singular therefore needing the verb was? - Princess GLG 12:19, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
    • Nope your right, I've corrected it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:32, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • There were a few linking and spelling problems I fixed. See here, here, and here.
  • In the history section, can you link era to the specific era you are talking about? - Princess GLG 17:35, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Is the title "Cerean riding beast" really accurate if you never actually say anywhere that the beast was native to Cerea?
    • Would Cerea riding beast be better since it was defiantly on Cerea even if it wasn't from there? Or something like long-neck riding beast? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:56, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
      • Unidentified long-necked riding beast would be my selection. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:27, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • "During its time in Tecave it was startled by a pair of swoop bikes driving past at high speed, a technology not allowed within the city, but used by the pro-technology swoop riding gang, the Techrats, which the two Cerean bikers who startled the beast were members of." Sentence carries on too long and hurts the flow.
    • Split it up, is it ok now? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:56, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  • One of the refs reads this way: "The New Essential Guide to Alien Species pp." You put in "pp." but have no actual page number. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:24, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • Yeah as I said in the comments I'm still trying to find my copy of the New Essential guide to species to find the page number although I've still had no luck. If I don't find it soon I'll post a request on the forums. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:56, April 29, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

  • The page number for the New essential guide to species will be added soon once I can find my copy of the book. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:25, April 21, 2013 (UTC)
    • After looking for quite some time I seem to of lost my copy of the book could anyone else be so kind as to look up the Cerean page for me? Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:05, May 11, 2013 (UTC)


Zovius Mendu

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:51, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: And if your head explodes from dark forebodings too, I'll see you on the dark side of the moon.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Nice work!—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 13:43, April 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 00:06, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:37, May 7, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Bonus points for the use of ne'er-do-well. I would also had accepted ruffian, cad, or bounder. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:01, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Definitely per Cav.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 17:32, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Context on Corellia. :)
  • In the infobox, you source the fact that he is a man to 1. However, it is sourced to 3 in the body. 501st dogma(talk) 23:57, May 5, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Langoonan

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:21, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Second species nom for the barn burner!

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. - Princess GLG 12:08, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. They must be blue. Blue Langoon, get it? ~SavageBOB sig 13:10, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  3. --Eyrezer (talk) 10:34, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:33, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:12, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Princess
  • Why the NOTOC?
    • Ah a relic of when I thought the article was going to be only a CAnom. Removed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:18, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • It only says that they are sentient in the intro and infobox. This information needs to be added somewhere in the main body of the article.
  • There were a few minor things I corrected here.
  • Just to be sure, there aren't any quotes available? - Princess GLG 12:07, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • There are some referring specifically to the Death masks, Jiliac says "A death mask from Langoona!" but no quote specfically refers to the species. This reminds me though I should add the quote to the mask article so thanks. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:18, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • Technically, you can't have the other sections of the article without a "Biology and appearance" section. Since we don't know anything about what they look like, it's best to just have a one-line section that says, "The Langoonans were a sentient species" or the equivalent. It's silly, I know, but our Manual of Style requires it.
    • Added although I'm not sure if the mask line is relevant but one line seemed odd. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:37, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
      • That works, but you should take the "sentient species" bit out of "Society & culture" now. ~SavageBOB sig 13:32, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'd add the quote about the death mask as the lead quote. It's about their culture, so it's pertinent. You can probably even add another quote about the death masks to the "Society and culture" section, since that exchange between the Hutts goes on for a few lines. More later! ~SavageBOB sig 13:42, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • Ok added the quote with a bit more explanation then on the mask page. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:37, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Be sure only to use "pp." in references if you're giving a page range (e.g., pp. 3–5). If it's a single page, just use "p."
  • Their rebellion should probably get its own article.
  • Can you go into a bit more detail on the death masks thing? Like, just something small like mentioning which Hutt thought the death mask was valued art, and which didn't (from the story in Rebel Dawn). ~SavageBOB sig 13:43, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • I'll mention that Durga considered them art but I don't think you can assume Jiliac doesn't think them art. I interpreted it as her becoming angry at receiving it due to the fact Durga was using it as a message to allude to his plans to kill her. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:02, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • OK, last little thing: I see you have them first mentioned in Rebel Dawn, but only first identified in The Essential Atlas. Should the Rebel Dawn mention get the {{Imo}} template? ~SavageBOB sig 13:06, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
Eyrezer=
  • Please add the full name of Jaliac in the quote, and please also add a note that a Langoonan mask was given to him whenever.
    • Added the name to the quote and the info to the body of the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:49, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Is there a suitable picture of a Hutt to add some colour to the article? --Eyrezer (talk) 08:31, April 30, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Tal Nami (species)

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:46, April 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Third Barn burner species nom

(1 ACs/4 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Looks good. 501st dogma(talk) 00:00, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
  2. - Princess GLG 13:08, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:39, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ~SavageBOB sig 19:37, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  5. --Eyrezer (talk) 00:51, May 3, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Princess
  • Please check your linking. There are several things you have missed linking to.
    • Think I got them all. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:53, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
      • Root actually links to some guy, so that doesn't need to be linked. Limb should actually link to feet as it occurs in the article before hands. Trader can be linked to merchant, and foodstuff can be linked. - Princess GLG 19:04, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
        • Wow didn't realise so many common terms had pages. Fixed them all. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:44, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
          • Root is still linked in the infobox. Otherwise, looks good. - Princess GLG 11:50, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • Shroud needs italicized as it is a ship. Galaxy of Fear: City of the Dead needs italicized in the Bts. - Princess GLG 11:07, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • Just one thing. You describe the hypothetical victim of the Tal Nami's execution with the word his. Do we know they had the male sex, then? If not, I'd replace the his with the. ~SavageBOB sig 13:27, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Changed as you suggested. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:13, April 30, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Piard

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 18:34, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:42, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:27, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • "Piard objected when Dovrin destroyed the protocol droid...." What droid..... ? Its not mentioned in the bio.
    • Article for the protocol droid? Also, whose was it? Piard's?
      • Redlinked.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 13:57, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
        • Whose droid was it? Was it just a random one standing by?
          • The comic itself makes no indication it was his, as he says something along the lines of it being Imperial property.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 18:11, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you say out right that Cade took the cargo after mindtricking them?
  • Any idea how Cade got on the ship?
  • Could we have context on the Second Imperial Civil War?
  • Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 00:09, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • How about mentioning his earlier meeting with the Jedi? You could also add in the P&T that he knew the Jedi would return some day. 501st dogma(talk) 22:20, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 13:57, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
      • I won't ask for an article for the Jedi, but somebody might, so its up to you. 501st dogma(talk) 23:43, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Same objection from Guerno; the one mentioning the year.
  • "during the Second Imperial Civil War, a galactic between Krayt's Empire and deposed Emperor Roan Fel's Empire-in-exile." Missing word, I assume. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:34, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Guerno

(2 ACs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:29, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:01, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:46, May 11, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • Give a year in the intro, to give a sense of the real time period of these events.
  • "who convinced them that Black Sun pirates stole the cargo." How? I know you link to mind trick, but it would be better to actually state it. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:52, April 28, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Nar Kreeta system

  • Nominated by: Stake black msg 02:43, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Heartbreaking to nominate it at 900 words and not have it as a FA, but here's to hope the reviewing process will provide the remaining 100 words. Also, for WP:AST and the Barnburner!

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Object

Imperators II
  1. Why u do the system, not the planet? :P
    • Per TEA and Online Companion, Nar Kreeta system is specifically not located in the Outer Rim Territories and is located in the Hutt Space instead. Imperators II(Talk) 16:40, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
      • Done. And... good question. I think the system is probably easier. Stake black msg 17:06, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
    • I suggest you use the TEA map image as the main article image, since the system itself technically does not appear on the JK:JA galaxy map. If it does, however, JA needs to be added as an appearance. Imperators II(Talk) 23:02, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
      • IMO it looked better and "more in-universe", but okay, switched. Stake black msg 00:38, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • From TEA you can tell more precisely when the system was attacked by Vong.
    • On a related note, please link to the corresponding Vong attack on the system. Imperators II(Talk) 07:21, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Jangeth
Floyd
  • Need some context on the Disciples of Ragnos crisis.
    • K.
  • Some of the body reads more like a description of the planet than the system. You don't need quite so much detail. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:57, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

It's weird. The TEA entry on Nar Kreeta says it was Vongformed, but the Vong expansion map shows them as passing near the system but the system itself isn't highlighted (an indication the Vong attacked it). This could mean that the Nar Kreeta system was dominated without putting up a fight. What do you think, Imperators? Stake black msg 16:11, April 26, 2013 (UTC)

  • Umm, in the map on page 219 ("Collapse of the Core") of TEA the Nar Kreeta system is highlighted. Imperators II(Talk) 12:43, May 2, 2013 (UTC)
    • You're right, thanks for spotting. Stake black msg 16:24, May 9, 2013 (UTC)


Exar Kun mural

  • Nominated by: Gal-icon OLIOSTER (talk) 12:43, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A painting article? By me?! It's more likely than you think!

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:58, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  2. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:24, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  3. 501st dogma(talk) 20:47, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  4. The beginning of the intro and the beginning of the history are very similar, specifically the part about Yavin 4 and the Galactic Civil War. However, I won't hold it as a formal objection; merely a suggestion for some changing up of the wording.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:40, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Purely as a visual objection, could you move the picture to the left side? Having it on the right is making the article mess up on my browser.
    • What browser are you using? I don't really like the way it looks to the left. Gal-icon OLIOSTER (talk) 20:39, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
      • I was using chrome, and it looked weird at first, but your edits must of fixed it somehow. 501st dogma(talk) 20:47, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  • Location for the temple?
  • Why was there a corpse? I think you need to specify that the spacers fought the spirit in Exar's body or something, as the corpse mention kind of comes out of nowhere. 501st dogma(talk) 22:40, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Indicated that he was resurrected. Gal-icon OLIOSTER (talk) 20:39, May 14, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Moralan (species)

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:26, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Fourth species barn burner nom.

(2 ACs/4 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Good work, but careful with your linking. I linked quite a few things that you missed after you re-went over it. 501st dogma(talk) 23:23, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:28, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  3. - Princess GLG 10:49, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ~SavageBOB sig 13:13, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  5. --Eyrezer (talk) 02:10, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:48, May 7, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • You're inconsistent between "Moralan" and "Moralans".
  • Linking issues. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:14, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
    • Went through and corrected a load. Will check again latter. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:35, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • I think the lead section could do with a time reference. Do we know roughly when they were enslaved, roughly when they established a republic, or roughly when the Hutts reconquered them? Even a vague, "in the years before the founding of the Galactic Republic" would be helpful, and only one of the three events needs a time stamp. But I think cementing one into an era at least would help ground the paragraph.
    • Added they are driven extinct during the Hutt-Xim conflict. Is that enough? Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:27, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • I think you can trim from the first two sentences of "History." We're told their region of the galaxy eventually became part of Hutt Space. Then the next sentence says when that happened by. Just consolidate the two (I'd axe the reference to Hutt Space in the first sentence of that section.)
  • You should add a one-line "Biology and appearance" section that says they were a sentient species, then remove that fact from "History."
    • Made although I'm not sure why there's a rule requiring this. It seems no non-sensical. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:27, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
      • Yeah, but them's the rules? :/ ~SavageBOB sig 19:36, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • You should add a short "Society and culture" section that explains their government structure. You can keep that bit in "History" as well; in the "S&C" part, you tell what the government was like, but in in "History," you say when those things were established, as you do now.
    • Added is it detailed enough? Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:27, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Since you have some of the BTS sourced, can you source all of it? ~SavageBOB sig 13:41, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Looking good, but make sure you don't have any duplicate links now that you've added the new sections. ~SavageBOB sig 19:36, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Meant to but totally forgot. Should be all good now. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:14, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Before supporting, I'd like to inquire whether you can confirm that "Second Battle of Vontor" is a formal, canonical title. If not, it would be conjectural, which would mean we should not capitalize that title as though it were formal. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:57, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • After searching through a fair few books I found it refereed to as the Second Battle of Vontor in The History of Xim and the Tion Cluster so I can confirm it isn't conjecture. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:00, May 6, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified Wookiee command center

  • Nominated by: Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 00:11, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Writing articles based on things in tutorial levels are... interesting

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Nice work. 501st dogma(talk) 12:32, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Not too shabby, but please take a look at my copy edit for the (mainly formatting) things I had to fix. And I despised the tutorial in Empire at War. :P —Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:56, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:41, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Article for the attack?
    • All articles for the Wookiee tutorial campaign battles are in the Battle of Alaris Prime (pre–Clone Wars) article, but this has been brought up in another GB nom, so I may have to open this up to discussion
  • If you are using gameplay paths, shouldn't we have gameplay divider somewhere? 501st dogma(talk) 22:28, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
    • Forgot about that, but the problem is that I can't seem a template that would be applicable, most situations like this are normally light/dark side choices, and 100 % completion wouldn't be appropriate since you still have to collect all of the resources regardless of the order. I may have to make one myself. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 04:18, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
      • You might want to have one that sounds like the RPG path header, as the article is following a specific path. 501st dogma(talk) 11:58, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Missing punctuation in lead quote.
  • What planet was Alaris Prime a moon of? This should be mentioned somewhere.
  • You call Alaris Prime a "world" in the bio. Shouldn't this be changed? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:22, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Shanra Immel

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. - Princess GLG 12:03, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 14:05, May 12, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:48, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Princess
  • Shortly after Malcom left to capture the ship, Immel and her squad placed the last of the beacons at their target sites and shortly after the spaceport was destroyed. Can you find a way to get rid of one of those shortly afters?
    • Changed.
  • The second part of the Biography quote needs italicized, especially in the intro.
    • Fixed.
  • I can see a couple things that need linked.
    • Got all the links I believe. DarthRevan1173 RevanTOR001 (Long live Lord Revan) 02:17, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
      • In the second paragraph of the biography, fighter needs linked. Private is linked twice.
        • Linked and corrected.
  • I'll go over it again once you fix these. - Princess GLG 02:01, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • Shortly after Immel ordered the squad to move out they reached the spaceport three hours later. Are you saying that Shortly after Immel ordered the squad to move out, and they reached the spaceport three hours later. or Three hours after Immel ordered the squad to move out they reached the spaceport.? Either way, you need to change the sentence a little bit.
    • Changed.
  • After setting all the beacons on their targets, Immel checked on Malcom's status and they talked about her thoughts of private Kayle and Malcom reminded her it was good to spend time with her squad. To many ands.
    • Changed.
  • Can't the last two paragraphs of the biography be combined?
    • Since I've just changed the prievous paragraph I see no reason to combine them.
  • Context on SpecForce. - Princess GLG 00:32, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
501st
  • "she served with Republic Special Forces Division, an elite Republic Military division, Colonel Jace Malcom in the battle of Kalandis Seven during the renewed war between the Galactic Republic and the resurgent Sith Empire." This sentence isn't really working grammar wise, Try to fix it.
    • Changed.
      • Still doesn't sound quite right. Try to change it to how you worded it in the intro. As it its the intro, you might not need to add context on SpecForce, so that might help you smooth it out.
        • Should be smoothed out I hope and removed that bit in the intro.
  • Context on Kalandis Seven in intro.
    • Added context.
      • Since you are saying its in the Inner Rim in the intro, it needs to be stated that its in the inner Rim in the bio.
        • Added.
  • The intro doesn't really specify how the targeting beacons destroyed the starport. Either take mention of it out, or tell us how it was destroyed.
    • Specified.
  • I don't think the last sentence of the into matters to the section, so cut it.
    • Removed.
  • "SpecForce, an elite Republic Military division, Colonel Jace Malcom serving as their advisor..." I think you should word this like Colonel Jace Malcom of SpecForce, an elite Republic Military division..... It will make it sound better.
    • Changed.
  • Again, in the bio, how does the spaceport explode?
    • Specified.
  • Isn't Jace SpecForce? Doesn't that mean she doesn't like em either? Add a note in the P&T stating that she didn't mind that Jace was a SpecForce.
    • She didn't like him though as evident by when she said this "You SpecForce boys are all scum" after he declined her offer to share a drink as he was being recalled.
  • You need a bit of context on Jace's mission. You have the planetary ship land, and suddenly he's jumping out of it. You also need to mention that he failed to capture it as well.
    • Added context.
      • Is the command ship landed during this.... or is it flying?
        • Specified.
  • The end of the bio has a bit of play by play in it, with Jace and her talking. Try to tone it down a bit.
  • Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 14:59, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'll finish me review soon. 501st dogma(talk) 22:06, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • "Along the way to the objective, Immel and her squad were attacked, and Corporal Amden vor Keioidian was fatally wounded." This sentence can probably be cut out, as it is not that important to the intro. Remember that the next sentence after this mentions it a bit, so tweak it also.
    • Removed and tweaked.
      • ok, but you left behind this: "Immel and her squad were tasked with the destruction of the local spaceport. Immel, Malcom, and her squad reached the spaceport and proceeded...." This doesn't flow very well.
        • Re-worded.
  • About Admen's wound, is it fatal, or is it not? If it is fatal, they probably wouldn't have him rescued.
    • The story says "Dying man" when referring to him so yea, they also activate his med tracer and Malcom even says "We'll be back for you". I can't really say if the rescued him or not since the story doesn't, but it does say they had every intention of rescuing him.
      • Leave it as it is then.
  • "After silencing the trooper, she planted one of the target beacons onto a nearby power terminal. After watching..." Please change it so you don't start two sentences in a row with after. Another sentence in the same paragraph also starts with After, so you might want to change that as well.
    • Changed.
      • Your change left this: "Immel and Malcom then watched a planetary command ship land, Malcom amended Immel's". This is not quite grammatically correct.
        • Re-worded.
  • You might want to mention the armor that she wears in the P&T. 501st dogma(talk) 23:46, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
    • The armor is only shown in the picture, never stated that she has it, nor what type/brand it is in the story. I can say she wore the general Republic Trooper armor if that's what you wish but not much beyond that. DarthRevan1173 RevanTOR001 (Long live Lord Revan) 00:13, May 9, 2013 (UTC)
      • Just describe the armor, and say something like "She wore red and white armor that was similar to standard Republic trooper armor..." You could probably mention the gun she carried as well. 501st dogma(talk) 12:36, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Reminder: Human should always be capitalized. I've had to tell Cade this a billion times, it's best you get this down now.
    • Capitalized
  • Intro: "Immel and her squad were tasked with the destruction of the local spaceport." Why? Was it under Sith control?
    • Specified.
  • In the intro, you need to be a bit more specific than "fighter". Yeah, you link to it, but just by reading it you can't tell if it's a starfighter or just a run-of-the-mill soldier.
    • Specified.
  • Same with the "fighter" mentioned in the bio.
    • Also specified.
  • You include a physical description of Kalandis Seven in the intro but not the body.
    • Added.
  • "Malcom shot the closet patrol" The closet patrol?
    • Changed.
  • "Immel discovered one of the troopers was still alive" Troopers? Was he from the patrol? Context please.
    • Added.
  • "She had a disparaging of private Vaskus Kayle," A disparaging what? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:54, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Market Street (Taris)

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:13, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Light and limpid green, a second scene, a fight between the blue you once knew.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 23:54, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:18, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:03, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  4. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:30, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Looking good.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 16:41, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Could you give context to Hocekureem?
  • Otherwise, fine work. 501st dogma(talk) 19:58, April 29, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Circumtore

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 12:21, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This is my first planet nom, so tear it apart

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. Good job! Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:41, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:49, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • Could you mention Oph Nar Dinnid's species? Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:10, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • You've linked attack on Circumtore as the point at which Circumtore is captured by the Vong but the maps in the atlas don't necessarily show that. One shows there is an attack on the system and the other shows that it was under Vong control at a later date. It doesn't actually state that it was captured during the attack so could you change the wording not to imply this? Otherwise great work! Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:10, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
    • Both done. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 21:34, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • "Circumtore was a ringed shaped artificial planetoid" What does this mean? It was shaped like a ring? It was ringed, but then what was it shaped as? I'm not really getting this here.
    • The book and the entry call it a ring-shaped artificial planetoid. I've removed the ringed part, as that was a mistake.
  • Intro: Context on Oph Nar Dinnid.
    • How's that?
  • Perhaps an article for the "disaster"? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:17, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done. Thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 20:36, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments


Tsyklen

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:39, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Another species for the burner.

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 12:00, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  2. --Eyrezer (talk) 07:56, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ~SavageBOB sig 00:45, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:20, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • "in the region of the galaxy which became known as Hutt Space.[2] Members of the species were considered wily in nature,[2]..." You're double reffing here.
  • In the infobox you ref their homeworld as Tsyk to 2, while the body has it reffed to 1. Please fix this. 501st dogma(talk) 22:54, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • I think you're mixing history into the "Biology and appearance" section a bit. Unless their homeworld was polluted before they evolved there, that fact probably belongs in "History" instead. And you mention that their world became part of Hutt Space in "History," so I think you can safely remove that fact from "Biology and appearance."
  • The final two sentences of "Biology and appearance" are run-ons. Can you break them up a bit?
  • The final sentence of "History" is confusing -- it sounds like the Vong conquered the planet, so how did it become part of Hutt Space again? Is it possible to give more details, even if it just means that the Vong were eventually defeated (and then source it to some other source)?
    • I added a short sentence is more needed? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:40, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
  • You should note that Han Solo was a Human, since you note that Chewbacca was a Wookiee. :)
  • It might be worthwhile to give a smidgen more detail about the two sources that mention the species in BTS. Is it safe to assume that the novel talked about their appearance, while the Atlas talked about their role in Hutt Space and their conquest by the Vong? If so, maybe mention those things briefly. Otherwise, looks good! ~SavageBOB sig 18:05, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • OK, just a bit more. Their wily nature (I changed it to "crafty" to avoid repetition of the lead section) sounds more like "Society and culture" than it does "Biology and appearance." You need a S&C section anyway, so this will address that issue as well.
    • Added it although I'm trying to think of something else to put in the section with it since one line seems odd. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:07, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Is the plural "Tsyklen" or "Tsyklens"? If the sources don't specify, just go with one and explain that no source has given the plural form in the BTS.
    • In the Atlas its Tsyklen so corrected. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:07, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • "ID forger" -- pretty sure we have an article on identifications. Can you link to it here? ~SavageBOB sig 13:16, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Added the link to Identichip. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:07, May 11, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

  • No quotes? --Eyrezer (talk) 07:56, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Nope there's no dialogue at all in the part she appears in since it's a description of events that happened previously. I scanned ahead incase Han makes a decent mention of the IDs but didn't see anything really relevant. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:50, May 11, 2013 (UTC)


Reef Fortress

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 22:33, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:53, May 7, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Pre-nom reviewed. —MJ— Holocomm 02:58, May 9, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:13, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Jangeth
  • Check your infobox's formatting. The double bracket doesn't need to be on a separate line. JangFett (Talk) 15:37, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • Fixed. - Princess GLG 15:55, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
      • I'll continue my review sometime later. :P JangFett (Talk) 16:04, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
501st
  • In the intro, you should mention that it is on Hapes. The description section needs this mentioned as well.
    • Added.
      • I still think you should say it was on Hapes outright, rather than just the Hapan ocean.
        • Fixed.
          • Could you give context on Hapes? Just say its a planet.
            • Added.
  • History: Who are Lowbacca, Jacen, and Jaina? Where is the Fountain Palace? Be sure to contextify. (I know you give context to the Jedi later, but do it up front)
    • Better?
  • You want the history to be in chronological order, so the part about here staying there as kid should be moved to the top of the section.
  • I think the history section should focus a bit more on the Reef Fortress. You could probally cut a bit of the chase scene out.
    • Better?
  • Article for the assassin attack?
    • Will do later.
      • You can link to it at least, even though it will be a redlink for now.
        • Done.
          • Since the redlink is also present in the intro, you will have to create an article for it.
  • You could probably describe the appearance of the fort from the image in the infobox.
    • What exactly can I describe? The only things about the appearance that I could put into the infobox are the height and width which I can't get from the image.
      • You could describe the high walls and the turret things.
        • Done.
  • Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 17:40, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Be careful when you answer objections. I found quite a few repeated words, and some grammatical errors that were not there before. Make sure to look over the article in preview mode. 501st dogma(talk) 20:27, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • Sorry, I was kinda in a hurry, but I should have gone over it again. I'll try to be more careful next time. - Princess GLG 20:57, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
      • That's okay. 501st dogma(talk) 21:34, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'll continue my review tomorrow. 501st dogma(talk) 23:57, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • You might want to mention the lack of secret passages.
    • Added.
  • Article for the Ambassador?
    • The ambassador is Yfra. I tried to change the wording to make this more obvious.
      • Sorry, I mean the Mairan one. 501st dogma(talk) 20:28, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't think it's necessary to say they were bored. You might want to cut that bit out.
    • Removed.
  • You should mention in the Description section that the fort was powered and had a deflector shield generator. 501st dogma(talk) 11:19, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • I would mention in addition to the fact that there were no passages, that it was built to be impregnable.
    • Added.
  • You might want to mention that Chume went to the fort earlier in the history.
    • She only arrived after the first incident with the carnivorous seaweed which is when it says she arrived.
      • Ah, missed that.
  • "Isolder won the duel after the referee called a sudden death round." You should mention that he won in the sudden death round. Right now it sounds kind of like Isolder won because a sudden death round was called.
    • Done.
  • A release date for Jedi Eclipse would be nice. That should be all. 501st dogma(talk) 16:01, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
SE
  • In the paragraph about the attack by the Bartokk assassins, can you make sure you have all the information about the chase? I recall Ta'a Chume shooting out their repulsor prior to the Bartokk's being killed by the seaweed. Supreme Emperor (talk) 13:01, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • Its an article about the fort, so all the info about the chase doesn't need to be presented as it doesn't quite pertain to the fort itself. 501st dogma(talk) 14:19, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Would like a touch more context on Ambassador Yfra. Who did she serve?
    • Added.
  • Try and shore up your linking, I'm seeing some glaring omissions.
    • I must be blind, but I'm not really seeing any. Could you give a couple examples of what I'm missing?
      • Stuff like turrets, assassin (which you linked, but wasn't before). It's always best to double-check. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:54, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
        • I've gone over it again and fixed a few things. - Princess GLG 00:11, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • It should be mentioned in the body that Tenel Ka was also a Jedi trainee. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:38, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Carnivorous seaweed

  • Nominated by: - Princess GLG 12:00, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: WP:N

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:54, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Uh…
  • Intro: Carnivorous seaweed was a green, aquatic, carnivorous species of plant… Could you place an "and" somewhere, and is the color of the weed necessary? And who is the matriarch of Hapes?
    • I removed the color so I don't need to add an "and". Also added the matriarch. Thanks for the review.- Princess GLG 23:03, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nice work otherwise, and while I have never smoked marijuana, I love the history quote. XD.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:37, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd

Comments

Battle of Moralan

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:50, May 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Subpage I forgot to previously nom.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. Great work on the Barn Burner. 501st dogma(talk) 21:08, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Cool article. Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 02:15, May 15, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • It might be nice for some rank context for Xim to be present in the article. Is he a commander, a general, an admiral? This is optional.
    • I added that he considered himself Daritha is that ok? Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:21, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you add the Third Battle of Vontor to the body somewhere briefly? This again is optional.
    • Added in a sentence including it and Boonta's involvement. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:21, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • In the body of the article, you shouldn't say the Hutt-Xim conflict outright, as it is a conjectural title. A pipelinking is in order.
  • Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 22:41, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Thanks for reading it through! Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:21, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • You don't need to bold stuff in the body.
    • Woops that was left over from when I thought it would be a CA long ago. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:06, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • Needs Prelude and Aftermath sections. This is possible just by rearranging stuff already in the article.
  • Once you deal with these sections I'll give a full look. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:47, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • What does "Daritha" mean? Context please. Other than that, nice work. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:59, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
    • Added context although I'm not sure if the sentence is now grammatically correct do I need to change the commas? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:19, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Market Street Outdoor Exchange

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:14, May 7, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: There was a king who ruled the land, his majesty was in command. With silver eyes, the scarlet eagle showered silver on the people.

(0 ACs/3 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Gotta love the Gryph!—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:28, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 00:06, May 12, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Extra points for the nomination comments you put on your article noms.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 17:21, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Comments

Unidentified Tetan moon

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 06:31, May 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A CA that grew beyond the 250-limit. Gotta GAN it before anyone notices.

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. Dogma frowns at you. 501st dogma(talk) 20:52, May 9, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:00, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • Need some semblance of a time frame in the intro.
    • Added.
  • A little context on the mission would be nice. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:53, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Shettora's criminal faction

(1 ACs/0 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:03, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • Linking issues.
    • Could you specify? Is it underlinking issues? If so, I found two articles that hadn't been linked yet.
  • I really don't like the way you introduce the faction in the intro, it's pretty clumsy. Something like "Around 0 ABY, the Hutt Shettora ran a criminal faction..." would be a lot better. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:01, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:42, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Bogeega Bu'Daay

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Support

  1. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 14:37, May 11, 2013 (UTC)
  2. It is indeed powerful. Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 20:21, May 15, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Knowledge is power, and power corrupts. So, let's all study hard and be evil. BTW, nice article. :P —Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:47, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:04, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

A Force user

  1. Middle of the bio: "Bu'Daay contacted his Master." Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 02:27, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Nice choice for the BB. Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 02:27, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Know that I think about it, maybe add something to the P&T that he said knowledge is power? Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 02:09, May 15, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd

Comments

  • 282 words. Also, finally got around to a barn-burner nom.


Reef Fortress Island

  • Nominated by: - Princess GLG 21:18, May 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:23, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 17:40, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • I know there is a link for the Invasion by the assassins, so could you link to it in the bio?
    • Done.
  • Context on Vergill?
    • Added.
  • Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 13:56, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Comments


Coruscant Ministry of Ingress

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:07, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Bureaucracy, gotta love it.

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:33, May 15, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Query
  • Is "CMoI" a canonical acronym?—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:07, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Yep, its from both Databank entries, Tinker, Tailor, Soldier, Praji and the CSWE. Coruscantfan (Talk) 04:55, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
  • With the Separatist Crisis heating up…' A little nitpicky, but could you use a more formal term? Other than that, fine work!—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 18:17, May 14, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • "For their actions, CMoI received criticism from various areas including" Including what? Also, this paragraph is not fully sourced. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:59, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Operation supernova

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Object

SE
  • Can you add the date to the intro?
    • Added.
      • Would you mind putting the date in the first sentence?
        • How's it look now.
  • In the intro, can you reword the sentence beginning with "After meeting with another Sith "? As it is, I find it a little confusing.
    • Re-worded.
  • In the intro, you say Revan was captured by a Sith, which Sith?
  • Will continue tomorrow. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:30, May 15, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Vaskus Kayle

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Object

Comments

Morgra

  • Nominated by: Jinzler (talk) 19:36, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A Hutt

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Support

  1. The Far Orbit Project's got its fair share of errors too.... 501st dogma(talk) 21:00, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

Object

For da Barnburner?
  • Is the punctuation in the bio quote correct?
    • Yes, the quote is presented in the article exactly as it is shown in the source. This is one of many examples of bad spelling, punctuation and grammar within the Living Force modules; I get the impression that the campaign's writers never learned how to use spell-check. --Jinzler (talk) 19:01, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • You need to mention somewhere in the body or the P&T that he is a hermaphrodite.
  • Articles for the sabotage and rescue? 501st dogma(talk) 15:53, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done, thanks for your review. --Jinzler (talk) 19:01, May 19, 2013 (UTC)

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Radanthus Mandelatara

  • Nominated by: StarsiderSWG (talk) 22:22, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Just wanted to get around to re-nominating this article. I was bit tied down by things during the last nomination, which is why I neglected it. I want to clarify that this character wasn't mentioned in any of the SWG guides, so that's why I don't list those as sources.

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  1. A shame it had to be archived as failed in the first place, unless Tope had other objections beyond that prelim. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 22:40, May 18, 2013 (UTC)

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Unagin

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 07:42, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A former Hutt barnburner CAN that grew beyond the 250-limit.

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