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The AgriCorps redux page is an active extension of AgriCorps meetings, wherein Good articles that have been updated, rewritten, or otherwise overhauled so significantly as to require a review of a section or of the entire article are placed. Articles that are placed here will be given reviews by AgriCorps members, and when the required number of votes in favor of the article being passed are acquired, the article will be removed from the redux page and will retain its Good status.
How the redux page works:
- During AgriCorps meetings, articles that have recently received updates or overhauls so significant as to require a review of the new material will be voted on as "reduxed," tagged with the GA redux template, and placed on this page. Members of the AgriCorps will then review the article or the section(s) of the article as necessary.
- Once an article has achieved the required number of supporting AgriCorps votes and has no outstanding objections, it will be removed from the redux page and archived, and will keep its status as a Good article. A nomination will be considered successful once it has achieved three supporting AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections. As an active extension of AgriCorps meetings, only AgriCorps votes will be counted. Archiving instructions can be found here.
- Any article that has outstanding objections for three weeks will be eliminated from the redux list by the AgriCorps, and will be stripped of its Good status.
Reduxed articles
Ringo
- Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 56.
- Date added: March 24, 2013
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Winterz
Again, the Bts section can be expanded and it should.- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:01, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
Though a lot less, you should probably fix the misspelling and such.Winterz (talk) 16:32, March 25, 2013 (UTC)- Tried to fix as much as I could and sent a request for a second look. Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:01, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
Bangeth
"Part of the 501st Legion, Ringo participated in the defense of Ereesus and the Republic invasion of the planet Umbara around 21 BBY. Immediately after landing, the clone troopers came under heavy fire from the native Umbarans." If you're going to mention the "defense of Ereesus," then I would also give context to it instead of focusing primarily on the Battle of Umbara.- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
Is the Ereesus battle a battle or defense (with a confirmed name)? Unless it's stated in the source, I would use a conjectural statement for the intro, instead of saying "defense of Ereesus."- No confirmed name, changed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
Since he is part of the Torrent Company now, please see what you could do to mention this in the intro.- Added. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
"...Ringo was part of the Torrent Company in the 501st Legion," Something does not seem to flow right. Perhaps if you tweak the wording a bit, it will be better. I.e, "he was a member of Torrent Company, a unit within" or something along those lines. Try something out.- How's this? Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
Before mentioning this setback, try to find a way to mention "Assisted by the Ereesus Planetary Security Forces" before. JangFett (Talk) 20:43, March 27, 2013 (UTC)- Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
- "Ringo and Torrent Company were dispatched to assist the Ereesus Planetary Security Forces to defend the planet Ereesus against a Separatist invasion. " This sentence needs some tweaking. "to assist the_____to defend the___" Try to make it flow better. JangFett (Talk) 22:33, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
- Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:11, March 28, 2013 (UTC)
- "Ringo and Torrent Company were dispatched to assist the Ereesus Planetary Security Forces to defend the planet Ereesus against a Separatist invasion. " This sentence needs some tweaking. "to assist the_____to defend the___" Try to make it flow better. JangFett (Talk) 22:33, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
- Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
- The intro is rather confusing due to you saying Ringo either served in Torrent Company and later the 501st itself. I would clean this up in the intro and make a separate sentence about Torrent Company/501st. Later, when you mention Umbara, say Ringo and the 501st Legion instead of "Ringo served with the 501st." I hope this makes sense. JangFett (Talk) 22:35, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
- Check it out. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:11, March 28, 2013 (UTC)
- It's still the same. Look at "Ringo and his unit were sent to" and then later you said "Ringer and the 501st." JangFett (Talk) 15:49, March 31, 2013 (UTC)
- I hope it is better now. Forvige me, if I understand you wrong. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:48, March 31, 2013 (UTC)
- It's still the same. Look at "Ringo and his unit were sent to" and then later you said "Ringer and the 501st." JangFett (Talk) 15:49, March 31, 2013 (UTC)
- Check it out. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:11, March 28, 2013 (UTC)
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- Copy-edited at Lee's request. —MJ— Council Chambers 20:09, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
Oz (clone trooper)
- Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 56.
- Date added: March 24, 2013
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Winterz
Redirects must be fixed.- Done (Hopefully). Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:13, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
I was going to help with the grammar but I see too many mistakes, so you should probably handle that yourself.- Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:13, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
"During the campaign, Oz and a squad led by Planetary Security Forces Sergeant Palola (...)" is a bit confusing, if it is a squad of PSF members then you could certainly improve the sentence's structure.- Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:06, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
Considering the small-sized Bts section, you should expand it with the Insider's appearance.Winterz (talk) 16:23, March 25, 2013 (UTC)- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:06, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
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