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Jinsol[]
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:09, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A fine addition to my collection. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:09, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)[]
Support[]
- Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:33, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn (Talk) 13:41, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- Fan26 (Talk) 00:30, March 5, 2019 (UTC)
- Zed42 (talk) 06:43, March 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:50, March 21, 2019 (UTC)
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Imperators[]
Please see this section of our Naming policy. This article should be located at the title Jinsol.Imperators II(Talk) 13:15, February 18, 2019 (UTC)- I have added a {{Youmay}} and a title altercation through {{Eras}}. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 16:32, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- Ignore that, I have re-read the section and created a disambiguation page. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 16:41, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- I've fixed this for you. Imperators II(Talk) 16:58, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 17:04, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- I've fixed this for you. Imperators II(Talk) 16:58, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- Ignore that, I have re-read the section and created a disambiguation page. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 16:41, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- I have added a {{Youmay}} and a title altercation through {{Eras}}. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 16:32, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
Anil[]
"attacked by who the fellow rebel Brand suspected to be assets of the planet's underworld" According to the novel, Brand also mentions another possible, and more probable, reason for the attack. "I think the real powers in Ankhural want us out." Please revise.Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 06:20, February 19, 2019 (UTC)- I always thought the real powers meant the underworld. I didn't want to refer to them as "the real powers" in the article so I substituted that. Let me know if you want that changed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:08, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Changed it anyway. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:35, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- "It could have been random. One of the lower-level gangs looking to score cheap blasters, maybe hold our people for ransom."
"But you don’t believe it."
"I think it's a message. I think the real powers in Ankhural want us out."
I think this passage makes it pretty clear that the underworld and the "real powers" are two different things. And if you want to keep Brand's guess for the attack in the article, I'd like to see them both getting a mention there. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:10, February 19, 2019 (UTC)- Done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:22, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Almost there. Rather than leaving it ambiguous as "sending a message," I think you can directly say that they attacked for the rebels to leave. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:49, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:53, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Almost there. Rather than leaving it ambiguous as "sending a message," I think you can directly say that they attacked for the rebels to leave. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:49, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- Done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:22, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- "It could have been random. One of the lower-level gangs looking to score cheap blasters, maybe hold our people for ransom."
- Changed it anyway. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:35, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
- I always thought the real powers meant the underworld. I didn't want to refer to them as "the real powers" in the article so I substituted that. Let me know if you want that changed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:08, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
Zed[]
I know it's kinda difficult if it's unclear who the attackers were, but the second-last sentence feels somewhat awkward.- Reworded. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:35, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
Is this attack significant enough to have its own article?Zed42 (talk) 07:27, February 19, 2019 (UTC)- I wouldn't think so. Nothing significant comes out of it. It's just the "real powers" sending a message to Twilight Company. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:35, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
I presume you would have already checked, but are there any quotes that could be used?Zed42 (talk) 07:44, February 19, 2019 (UTC)- Nope. I would have added it by now if there was. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
Fan26[]
Could you add some context on how Ankurhal was crime-ridden so Brand's thought about the real powers makes a little more sense?Fan26 (Talk) 18:40, March 4, 2019 (UTC)- Done. Made it brief. Don't want to make the article too off-topic. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 18:43, March 4, 2019 (UTC)
- Please swap the positioning of the two parts of that sentence, so the reader learns that Brand knows of the planet's crime difficulties before getting her opinion on the "real powers". Fan26 (Talk) 20:31, March 4, 2019 (UTC)
- Swapped. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 20:46, March 4, 2019 (UTC)
- Please swap the positioning of the two parts of that sentence, so the reader learns that Brand knows of the planet's crime difficulties before getting her opinion on the "real powers". Fan26 (Talk) 20:31, March 4, 2019 (UTC)
- Done. Made it brief. Don't want to make the article too off-topic. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 18:43, March 4, 2019 (UTC)
Comments[]
- Will the renaming of the article affect the name of this nomination page? Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 17:04, February 18, 2019 (UTC)
- It would be appropriate for you to rename this page and update the CAN page, then mark the old version (which will become a redirect) for deletion. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:54, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- I've fixed this for you. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:33, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 08:14, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- I've fixed this for you. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:33, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
- It would be appropriate for you to rename this page and update the CAN page, then mark the old version (which will become a redirect) for deletion. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:54, February 20, 2019 (UTC)