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The featured articles of the wiki are articles that represent the best Wookieepedia has to offer. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like.

So just what makes a featured article? Well, we've prepared a list just in case someone should ask that, and it is as follows.


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  1. …be well-written and detailed.
  2. …be unbiased, non-point of view.
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  6. …not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
  7. …have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
  8. …have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
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  10. …not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
  11. …be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Wookieepedia:Sourcing for more information.
  12. …have all quotes and images sourced.
  13. …provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
  14. …include a "Personality and traits" section on all character articles.
  15. …ideally include a "Powers and abilities" section for Force-sensitive characters and a "Skills and abilities" section for non–Force-sensitive characters, where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
  16. …include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
  17. …pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
  18. …counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

For more information on what makes a featured article, see What is a featured article?


How to nominate:

  1. First, find an article you feel is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
  2. Add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating and save the page. NOTE: If the article you are nominating has been nominated for FA one or more times previously, you will need to specify a new subpage name as a parameter in the template (e.g. {{FAnom|Lorum ipsum (second nomination)}}).
  3. Open the redlink (in a new tab or window, if possible) and fill out the form according to the instructions provided.
  4. Copy the code provided to the bottom of this page.
  5. Purge the article to update the template.
  6. Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
  7. Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
  8. The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
  9. Be sure to place your signature in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.

How to vote:

  1. Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
  2. Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
  3. Please note that in order for your vote to count, you must have 50 mainspace edits.
  4. If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under, if possible. Failure to do so may result in your objection being considered invalid.
  5. As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
  6. Once the minimum nomination period has passed, an article that has achieved the required number of supporting votes and has no outstanding objections will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article." A nomination will be considered successful if one of the following criteria is met:
    • five supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • four supporting Inquisitor votes, plus two additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • three supporting Inquisitor votes, plus four additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week; or
    • seven supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least two days.
  7. Per Inquisitorius consensus, no Inquisitor may use their Inqvote on their own nominations.

Also remember to add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating.

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All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by Inquisitorius vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

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Revan

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:52, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 1) MULLET MAN FOREVAH 2) I'm incredibly sorry. 3) No, I'm not insane. 4) What can I say? I got bored.

(1 Inqs/4 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Now, if only movie main character articles could be this smooth...--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 02:18, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
    • Only Lando's that smooth. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:57, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote ow my balls IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:15, October 27, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:43, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Impressive, most Impressive. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:57, April 29, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Manoof (talk) 00:49, May 23, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Quick look from the Council Chambers:
  • I'm going to take Jang's comment and make it a formal objection. The intro is way too long. I can tell that simply by the fact that I have a 1080p display, and I still have to scroll down to read the rest of the intro. For comparison, Wedge Antilles is over twice the size of this article, yet his intro is just 607 words compared to Revan's current 1,428. Based on that, I'd like to see the intro cut at least in half. Summarizing is the key here; notice how the Wedge intro handles three X-Wing novels with a single sentence about Wraith Squadron. Let the reader get the details from the body; in an article of this size, small details don't belong in the intro. Three to four paragraphs of the current size, maybe four to five if the paragraph size is reduced, should be the target here.
    • Cut down to four with 672 words. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:12, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • I may make a full review later if I get bored, but there's no guarantee. —MJ— Holocomm 22:57, June 21, 2013 (UTC)
SE decided to take a crack at it
  • Early life and Jedi training
    • In the first paragraph of this section, two sentences in a row are started with the, "The child" and "The Jedi Master" Would you mind switching one up a bit?
      • Uh... the first one is referring to Revan, and the second is the title of Kreia. I don't really see the need here.
    • Same with the second paragraph of that section
      • Same here. The two sentences are talking about different people. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:14, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
        • Looking at it now, i'm not sure why I objected to this :P Apparently you object to some wierd stuff when reviewing while tired :P Supreme Emperor (talk) 16:40, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
The crown jewel of WP:KOTOR
  • These following objections are preliminary, although this section of objections will deal with the article in full. In addition, I intend to make this review my finest, as the scope of this article and the subject in question will require that.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire: Now believing himself to be a Republic soldier… If you could source his position as a soldier, that'd be great. I know that the Essential Guide to the Force, a conversation with Onasi in-game, and the TOR Encyclopedia.
    • Done.
  • Upon entering the next hallway, the two soldiers discovered a pair a Sith troopers and opened fire on the boarders. Continuing through the ship… So what happened to the troopers?
    • Done.
  • until they happened upon a Jedi and a Dark Jedi battling each other. Please link the Jedi and Sith to their respective articles.
    • Bah. I even looked at their articles while looking through the KOTOR articles.
  • Throughout the "Searching for Bastila" subsection, the image captions are in italics. Could you correct this?
    • Currently, I am unable too; there seems to be a problem with the {{Gamemechanics}} family that italicizes image captions if they are on the next line after the template. I'll have someone look into this.
      • OK.
        • Fixed. The templates in that family all had a stray '' near the end of the code. Removing that solved the issue. —MJ— Comlink 19:56, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Did you check the CSWE for some information? I am only asking out of curiosity, because when I read through the article, I'll make a point to cross-reference. Nice job thus far, I'll continue later. I like how you handled my girl Yuthura.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:19, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yep. Read through all three volumes for any mention of KOTOR, and used all the entries to establish as much of the game as canon as I could. Thanks.
  • Returning to May and the others, Revan informed them of the terentatek's defeat, and the grateful students fled the shyrack caves to freedom. Please reference this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:21, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Don't forget to add that he used a violet blade in his duel with Malak, as far as Timeline 8 is concerned.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:26, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • I wouldn't call that a violet blade; it's really more blue to me. Besides, going by Shadows and Light, Revan has a blue blade during the duel.
  • I would also like to add, thank God that that Chee actually confirmed that "Mullet Man" was the facial model used in TOR. I've been bugging him for months about this issue.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:31, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • The 8th paragraph of the "Searching for Bastila" section needs to be referenced.
    • Done.
  • In the 6th paragraph of the same section, you mention Nord without giving any context, which is located in the following paragraph. Please fix this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:13, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Could you pipelink articles for the two brothers in the Outcast village?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:14, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not seeing any articles for those Outcasts.
      • Please create them.
  • Please comb through the article and correct instances of using first names as opposed to surnames. Only where needed, though.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:59, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done; I have left the naming of Bastila when her mother's involved, Mission when Griff is involved, Carth when Dustil is involved, and Canderous when his clan is involved. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:20, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm back, got my PC back. I'll continue where I left off. Been a hell of a few weeks.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 06:21, July 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • "At one of the nearby escape pods, an injured Republic soldier begged Revan for help…" An article for the infected Republic soldier would be good.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:22, August 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Revan, Shan, and Onasi then left the apartment only to be met by a Twi'lek messenger… An article for the Twi'lek would be great.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:47, August 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Still seeing some instances of first name usage as opposed to surnames, please fix where applicable. I'm reading through Tatooine.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 21:54, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Well, that section in particular needs more first name usage than the others—there's Mission and Griff, and Helena and Bastila. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:01, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
      • True, though I had caught the early mention of "Canderous" in the section's first paragraph. I wanted to inform you of where I was in regards to reviewing the article.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:18, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you create an article for the Sand People chieftan?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Linked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:21, September 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • You mention all the planets but Tatooine… Departing Dromund Kaas as willing servants of the Emperor, Darth Revan and Darth Malak followed the Dantooine and Kashyyyk Star Maps to locate similar Star Maps on Manaan and Korriban. Please fix. Possibly more to come.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:10, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • On Korriban, Revan single-handedly defeated a pair of massive terentateks… Revan single-handedly defeated Mandalore the Ultimate… Could you use a synonymous term for one of your uses of "single-handedly?"Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:15, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Sweet, I'll review some more and get back to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:38, August 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • Revan was approached by a Twi'lek named Senni Vek, who handed him a datapad and claimed that Revan had dropped it. The datapad contained a cryptic message asking Revan to meet Hulas on Manaan... Shouldn't this be near the end of the Tatooine events? I haven't played the PC version of the game, but I can't imagine it's too different in this regard.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 10:42, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, I'd like to see mentions of him defeating Darth Nyriss and his holding off multiple opponents in the Shadow of Revan storyline in the combat abilities section.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 05:58, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Tiny details
  • For Revan's homeworld, "Outer Rim" is technically not a world, so it should say something to the effect of "an Outer Rim planet (believed)".
    • Meh. Done, though it looks funky.
  • Also, some images appear small compared to those on most articles. Perhaps it's just me.
    • Maybe true, but I've gone for a larger number of images than most articles, so I've kept the sizes down.
  • A few little grammar things on image captions: the caption should say "Darths (with an S) Andeddu, et. al., and the caption saying "Revan wearing his trademark mask" should not have a period. For minute details like these, ask me if you just want me to change them myself as I find them.
    • Done. I could have sworn I added that Darths.
  • The fourth paragraph of the into mentions the "Jed Master".
    • Done.</s>

Otherwise, awesome job!--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 23:27, June 23, 2013 (UTC)

It is time for your circuits to fry!
  • In the Combat skills subsection of "Powers & abilities" you make no mention of his lightsaber skills and feats, you're simply describing Revan's lightsabers. Improve this.Winterz (talk) 14:51, August 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • His skills are highly customizable, and I'm not a fan of the "feats" section that lists every battle the guy's ever fought. However, I've added his two most notable duels. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
      • I have no idea what you mean with a "feats" section nor has what you mentioned anything to do with what I requested but anyway, your recent update was sufficient! Winterz (talk) 17:28, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
        • I was referring to the kind of P&A that existed before I wrote the article up, and the kind that are present on articles like the Skywalkers. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:58, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
          • You could've just said "the kind that will be terminated". Winterz (talk) 18:21, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
Clone fly-by
  • Is there no more information available on the deleted scene from "Ghosts of Mortis"? The Blu-ray edition of The Complete Season Three actually has an early version of the scene with 3D storyboarding, and while I don't have access to it myself, it should be detailed in the Bts somehow. CC7567 (talk) 21:35, September 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I've gotten all of the information I could get from online at the moment; I will ultimately get ahold of the actual Blu-ray by the time this passes. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:49, October 10, 2013 (UTC)
      • Please do. CC7567 (talk) 15:00, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
        • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:06, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
          • Even though the scene is cut content, can you take some more time to detail the scene? Treat the conversation as though it's in the IU part of the article in terms of the level of detail—among the missing details is the fact that the scene takes place in Mortis's Well of the Dark Side. It's all in the file that I emailed to you, so please expand it more thoroughly. CC7567 (talk) 22:11, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
            • Fair enough; expanded. Thanks again. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:20, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
Fundraiser
  • Having gone no farther than the ToC, I can tell that the companions section is missing a few subsections. I figure the droids deserve a subsection, at least. Also, I could be wrong, but I'm under the impression that there might be a few characters from the novel or TOR that qualify. Expand it or kill it in the name of equality.SinisterSamurai (talk) 06:00, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • T3-M4 done; I'm working on HK-47. There really aren't any other characters that need one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:22, December 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Request the image of Revan's potential female faces is re-added to the article. I don't entirely know why it was removed. It doesn't have to be a second image. Since mullet man is now highlighted with a box, you can probably just get away with re-uploading a version of Mullet Guy.png with this attached, but the final choice is up to you. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'd rather not, as it's not really important, and it'll simply make the image rather wide. There's no real reason to have it; Revan's been canonically confirmed as a male for quite some time, and the only reason the Mullet guy image is there is to illustrate the point that the text is making about which character model is canonical.
      • Does that length of time make the other male faces "slightly less non-canon" than the female faces now one face has been chosen? I figure Gender no longer plays a role in whether or not a non-canon face deserves coverage. They are the same canon level, they deserve the same coverage: Equal or none.
        • It's a personal choice whether to use any image, and it's my choice to use the male faces. It's not required to show all of the potential faces; it was simply useful to illustrate the point the text is making. There's really nothing else to this. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:55, January 7, 2014 (UTC)
          • If it's being voted on, it's a community choice, but at least the caption isn't misleading anymore. SinisterSamurai (talk) 04:46, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing anything how the troops and jedi Revan sent to Malachor were not "Revan's strongest supporters," much reference to Revan's use of psychological tactics/waging a war of beliefs as well as a physical war. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added some notes, but noted that it's only HK-47's opinion.
      • In this instance, HK's opinion is voiced in KOTORII, but is sourced to KOTOR. SinisterSamurai (talk) 03:58, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
        • What are you talking about? The sentence is sourced to KOTOR 2. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:07, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
          • Whoops! Totally right about that one! If you ctrl+F the word "break" the first instance should be the passage I meant. If HK-47 does voice an opinion about Malachor being used to break the Jedi in KOTOR1, then there's a citation just before it from the same source ([7]), and you can eliminate the center count and just source both to KOTOR with one reftag. Although, I have a vague impression that part of that, (the part about not wanted to repeat the devastation at Malachor), was also from KOTORII. I could be way off, though. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:48, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm scanning, but I'm only seeing one reference to the Sith Assassination squads, and no reference that Revan trained them. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • There was one, but expanded regardless.
  • In the infobox, you list Arren Kae as one of Revan's masters, but source it to KOTOR1. It's been a long time since I've played KOTOR1, but I thought the first references to Arren Kae didn't appear until KOTOR2. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Rise of the Sith
    • "As the title of Darth was previously unknown to the Republic and the Jedi, many scholars believed that Revan and Malak were the first Sith to use it, and they speculated that the title was derived from the Rakatan language." The part about the Rakatan language makes the positioning seem off, since as far as I know the Republic did not know about the Rakatan language at this point. The transition is a little too abrupt as well.
    • "The success of HK-47 led Revan to decide that more droids like him would help maintain galactic stability, and HK-47 became the basis for the HK-50 series of droids which were constructed on Telos." I don't think that this part can be sourced to the first game, at least from what I remember. The mention of them being constructed on Telos is a rather abrupt change since the last thing mentioned was the bombardment, which pretty much destroyed the planet. I believe additional context is needed if you are going to mention Telos.
    • I added redlinks for the Echani senator and the Elders' tome for this section.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire
    • "Continuing through the ship, Revan heeded Ulgo's recommendation to draw a vibrosword as they stormed the Sith-held bridge. When they were unable to find Shan, the two rushed for the escape pods so that they would not be caught in the Spire's destruction." I thought that Ulgo told him to use a vibroblade not a vibrosword, which are two different weapons in the game.
    • "Warning Revan to hurry, Onasi suggested that he use his stealth gear to bypass a nearby Sith patrol, and Revan quickly made his way through the next few corridors before Onasi contacted him again." I thought that scouts were the only class to have stealth gear at this point.
  • I will continue at "Searching for Bastila" later. (I had forgotten that I had already reviewed the first few sections of the biography.)--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 05:30, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching for Bastila
    • Doesn't the player encounter the bounty hunters and the merchant before they can encounter Largo or the Sith commander interrogating the Aqualish.
      • Not the way I played it.... I came out of my apartment and almost immediately ran into the Sith.
        • Not the one attacking the Duros, the one with the Aqualish where you get the uniforms.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • If the player defeats Twitch, Bendak Starkiller challenges the player to a death match. The light side decision for the player is to turn down the match. I think this would be good to mention.
      • Done.
    • You didn't mention the drunk guys or Gorton Colu anywhere.
      • Colu, check... drunk guys, though.... Do you remember when they show up?
        • I think the drunk guys show up when you first go to the elevator that takes you to the lower city.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if this should be mentioned, but Revan can find that Zelka Forn had hidden some dying Republic soldiers in his facility.
      • Eh, it's a valid thing about Forn, but not necessarily important for Revan.
    • What about Selven?
      • Weird. I remember writing about her.
    • "A woman named Hester was arguing with the gatekeeper Trewin, begging him to let her husband Hendar back into the village, but Trewin refused because Trewin was pursued by a rakghoul and he could not risk the creature infecting the villagers." I think you mean that Hendar was pursued by the rakghoul.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the Twi'lek who surrendered.
  • I will continue my review after you handle the above objections.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:08, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Escaping Taris
    • There are a few planet related things you might want to mention.
      • What do you mean?
        • This was just talking about the three entries below, since I wasn't sure where they should go in the article. I'm sorry I didn't make it more clear.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:31, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • It seems to me that you should mention T3-H8 at some point since Revan can buy him and then returns him.
      • Done.
    • Don't forgot this guy: Unidentified Ithorian (Upper City).
      • Done.
    • Gelrood, the pazaak player in Javyar's Cantina.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the receptionist, but you might want to change it since I can't remember if she was Twi'lek or Human.
      • She's Human.
    • Just making sure: Canderous meets Revan in the Upper City Cantina and then in the Javyar's Cantina. I was thinking that both meetings were in Javyar's.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:11, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Learning on Dantooine/A Jedi once more
    • Could you mention Crattis Yurkal and Karal Kaar at Aratech Mercantile near the landing pad?
      • Done.
    • There is also a pazaak player named Sol'aa at the Enclave that you could mention.
      • Done.
    • After leaving the enclave isn't there some farmer and his wife that you can talk to?
      • Done.
    • Outside the enclave there is a merchant named Adum Larp.
      • Done.
    • Doesn't Dorak give the player some lesson about comparing the war with Revan and Malak to Ulic Qel-Droma and Exar Kun?
    • Doesn't someone inform Revan about the crystal cave full of Kinrath? You might want to say that Revan went to the cave.
      • Done.
    • I created a redlink for Montagne's husband.
    • Elise's article says that she meets someone named Samnt in the Jedi Enclave and if talk to her there she will thank Revan for helping her get over her husband's death.
  • I will continue my review later.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sand of Tatooine
    • "...the soldier was angry about the way he had been left out of the loop lately" The "left of the loop" part seems a tad too informal for an encyclopedia.
      • Done.
    • "Revan either chose to repair Venn's K-X12 probe droids or simply left the man to his fate and continued into the Dune Sea." I think you should reword this; maybe reword to say that Revan had to choose between saving him and leaving him. Wouldn't rescuing him grant a larger reward to the player anyway?
      • Done.
    • There is a pazaak player named Kudos at the Hunting Lodge.
      • Done.
    • Apparently, if you get the krayt dragon pearl before going to the enclave, you can get the tribe's storyteller to tell you about the Sand People's history. Not sure if this should be included and I haven't personally encountered this, but I thought I would throw it out there.
      • Yeah, I've seen this, but it's rather contrary to the basic storyline, so I left it out. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:45, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • I added redlinks for the docking bay manager, Sharina Fizark's husband, and Fortuna's partner.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:45, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
    • There are also Furko Nellis and Junix Nard in the Anchorhead Cantina. Nellis plays pazaak and Nard is a vendor I believe.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:00, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Into the Shadowlands
    • There is a pazaak player named Fodo Medoo in the Czerka area.
      • Done.
    • I thought the poachers had sonic emitters, not sonic prods.
    • I added a redlink for the Wookiee that Dehno killed and the Wookiee guard.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:20, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • I should be able to continue my review this weekend.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:04, April 16, 2014 (UTC)


praguepride
  1. If Revan is not his real name shouldn't it use the nickname tag?
    • No.
  2. Pronoun confusion: "Revan was betrayed by his Sith apprentice Malak and captured by the Jedi Knight Bastila Shan, who saved Revan and formed a Force bond between them." Which two is them? Or is it all three of them?
    • Changed.
  3. "His mind wiped, Revan was given a new identity as a Republic soldier by the Jedi Council, but when Malak attempted to capture Shan aboard the Republic warship Endar Spire above the planet Taris, Revan joined forces with the Republic officer Carth Onasi and a number of other individuals on Taris to rescue Shan and escape the world before Malak destroyed Taris's surface." Run on sentence that should be broken up. I would recommend also putting the mind wipe stuff in the paragraph before as it deals with Shan's encounter.
    • Tweaked.
  4. (In the Revanchrist paragraph) Is "prowar renegades" direct from source as it should have a hyphon. If it is direct then add the [sic].
    • From the source, but the sic is not necessary. That's for seriously-misspelled words.
      • We'll have to talk about this via IRC.
  5. "But in reality, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause." - remove But.
    • Mhmm.
  6. "In the following weeks" should be [[week]]s
    • That's really a {{sofixit}}. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:18, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  7. more to come...
Manoof
  • Check your CSWECites, most are missing page numbers, and one (56) has the entry as the page number. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if you've noticed this, since it's been sitting here from the start. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Early life
    • 2nd paragraph you mention "alek's friend" twice in quick succession. You could probably switch some of the references to Revan to separate these more. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Nope; Revan isn't his real name, and he hasn't taken the name Revan at that point. Changed it up though.
  • Bio - Mando wars
    • "The Mandalorian warrior culture..." makes it seem like the culture itself is invading, similar to Americanisation. Maybe change it to "the Mandalorians, a warrior culture, ...". Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Reworded.
    • "With the backing of Alek and his other followers, the Jedi decided to journey to the war front against the wishes of the Jedi High Council so that he could scout the enemy lines". Are we talking about the group of jedi with Revan or Revan himself? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Revan; changed to Jedi Knight
    • What were his findings on Onderon/Dxun? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Don't believe it's ever said.
    • "In reality, however, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause. However, Revan came up with a solution". Can I buy a synonym please? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Removed the first however.
    • "star cluster Jaga's Cluster," maybe rephrase to "Jaga's star cluster" pipelinking as necessary. I'm not too set on this though. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • The proper name's Jaga's Cluster, so nope. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:55, April 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • I must now eat and rejuvenate before continuing this review. You really are a sucker for punishment aren't you? :P Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Rise of Sith
    • "Amid the confusion, Shan rushed forward and delivered a Force push to the Sith Lord's chest, sending him flying, but Revan was critically injured in the explosions and the fighting that followed." The word "but" leaves me confused about this sentence, was Shan trying to save Revan? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
  • Endar spire
    • From memory, you could equip a blaster when you storm the bridge, meaning you do not necessarily heed the advice... I'm guessing it thus needs a gamemechanics tag? Also I just replayed this section and he didn't say anything to me before storming the bridge. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • *shrug* Removed.
  • Searching Bastila
    • The second paragraph could probably get the gamemechanics tag, since it implies you talk to Kadir, then Larrim, then Dia and later Gorton. Additionally, while you can't just walk past Kadir since he stops you when you get close enough, you CAN walk past the janitor and leave the apartment complex, bypassing those conversations. You can also ignore Carth when he wants to talk to you, so none of the mentioned conversations are required to progress. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Actually, no, the conversation with Dia is confirmed by Holdan's CSWE entry, and you have to complete conversations with Carth in order to progress to stuff that is confirmed by other sources, like his son.
        • Awesome, that deals with a few other things that would probably have popped up later. Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • "Heading into the northern the pair..." Is this supposed to just be north or is there a word missing? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • "While exploring the cantina, Revan interacted with a number of local patrons, such as Jergan, Christya, and a young noble named Gana Lavin. While in the cantina, Revan spoke..." Since it's already established they are in the cantina, can you say something like "Revan also spoke..."? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • It may be worth mentioning some context on starkiller and his relation to the dueling ring. Glad to see you haven't given up on this! More to come. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Eh, not really necessary IMO. Thanks. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:42, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captured by the Leviathan—The wording in a couple of these paragraphs has left me confused. When did Revan learn who he was, when Karath told Onasi or later when they meet Malak. Saying Revan was confused makes me think he heard the conversation and was confused about his identity, but I assume it was whispered or something to Carth (I haven't played this in ages and can't remember what happened). Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked a bit. He doesn't learn it until Malak tells him.
      • Much better :D Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captive—I'm not sure what you mean by "as well as the fact that Scourge and Nyriss were opposed to him." Since they are Sith, they already are opposed to him? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Opposed to the Emperor; changed.
  • An unlikely rescue—"returned to the Republic over the last three years." gives the feeling it took all 3 years for the ship to return to Republic space. Is this correct? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • As far as I remember, yeah.
  • Legacy—"...but the military's failures become evident and it was clear that the military needed to evolve in order to survive." Something about this section of the sentence seems a bit off but I'm currently too tired to figure it out (if it's fine just say so and I'll strike next time :P) Time to rest methinks! Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:06, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it was just the word "become" instead of "became", but it reads much better overall with the additional change :) Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Warrior and Sith—"Revan was of the opinion that a Sith Master should have but one student—and the same was true of the title of Dark Lord." The section about the title Dark Lord is confusing, from memory it was that only one Sith should hold that title. Could you clarify this please. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Other abilities—Could you rephrase the first sentence in the last paragraph (mechanic), as it is the second sentence in a row to use "Revan [was] also" Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Behind the scenes—"While the variable nature of Knights of the Old Republic, the canonical storyline of the game was originally unknown." needs rewording. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Continuity issues—It strikes me that a bit of the information here can be cut completely as, rather than continuity issues where different sources explicitly create a contradiction, you have character's holding claims or beliefs that are contrary to a different source. Revan's fall to the dark side is the main one, where you mention the Jedi believing he fell on Dantooine is an example, with Bastila's claims about how he lost his memory another. Additionally, I don't think it's worth talking about the different lightsabers here—you've already mentioned them all in the article and from my understanding, no source has him with different lightsabers at the same time. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Actually, I do find them relevant; the Timeline and KOTOR comics are contradictory with the lightsaber colors, and the other contradictions are a result of Revan's backstory being defined and updated over time by various sources.
      • Fair enough. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Alternate storylines—It may be better to subsection this with dark side, female and female dark side variations, as those seem to be the only ones. It may improve readability (rather than jumping to the dark side female, then female, then dark side female stories) and make the section overall easier to read. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Ehh.... I think the current sections work better. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 12:51, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
      • No worries, twas personal preference after all. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • OMG ALL DONE! Great work again on this and props for sticking with it! Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • All done, just sort out that top objection (CSWEcite issue) and I'll vote to support :) Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • You have no life. On the other hand, amazing job. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • I can't really tell on this screen resolution, but that intro is ridiculously big (no, this is no joke). JangFett (Talk) 22:03, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Per dogma and Jang. Fe Nite (talk) 01:07, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well, I've asked around, and a lot of people believe it's a good length for the size of the article. A lot happens to this guy. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 01:13, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • I won't lie Cade. You scare me. Commander Code-8 You lost the game! 10:17, June 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if this is an objection worthy issue, but the segments dealing with the events shown in the novel read very differently from the rest of the article and seem more akin to a narrative than an encyclopedic article. I recall the article being marked for this problem in the past but the template appears to have been removed so perhaps I'm simply mistaken and this style of writing is permissible. Either way good luck with the effort; you carry the torch for all WP:KOTOR members and fans of KOTOR everywhere! JethLordMasterYing yang copy (Xia Order) 08:28, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Hey, thanks. As for the narrative/encyclopedic thing, the article was actually tagged with a Copyvio template because a user actually copied most of the second half of the novel into the article without making many changes. I wrote up the TOR:Revan events while reading the novel, and I guess the reason it reads differently than the KOTOR stuff is because I can go more in-depth as to what actually happened, unlike KOTOR's conversations and the character's feelings. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:44, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan married Bastilla not Shan. That needs to be changed. Unsigned comment by 71.196.255.127 (talk • contribs).
    • Wookieepedia common encyclopedic practice is to refer to characters by their last name in further mentions after they have been introduced. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:08, August 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan looks horrible in Star Wars: The Old Republic... IMO. Is there any chance that the image of him on this page could be changed to one of him wearing his hood and mask? That's the Revan I remember... A badass. Unsigned comment by 118.93.35.26‎ (talk • contribs).
    • As this is his canonical face, no, there isn't. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:03, January 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Observation: Friday will be Revan's one-year anniversary of nomination, and it still has only one support vote. Prediction: Revan will take longer than Wedge did to pass. :P
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    • This is now the longest FAN ever on Wookieepedia, breaking the record set by Wedge. And it still has only two support votes. Over/under on date of passage: February 14, 2016. :P —MJ— Comlink 18:35, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not making it an actual objection, but wouldn't an image of Jedi Revan be more appropriate for the infobox as opposed to Dark Revan? I just would like the reasoning for the image, although he was Jedi (yes, I know what happened in the expansion's events.).—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 07:28, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • I second Jedi Kasra. That is a corrupted form of Revan and didn't even survive long, I suggest you add that one to the appropriate biography section and use as infobox image the previous one. Winterz (talk) 13:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • We should revert to his unmasked infobox image, and place this one in the appropriate section.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 14:43, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Dark Revan (and I totally love that the name is now a thing) is actually the final physical appearance of Revan, and is the final state of his body. However, I'm not necessarily set on using this image; once I actually beat him in the boss battle, I'll see if I can get a better image and reconsider the infobox. 15:09, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
          • I'm actually calling him Shrevan (short for Shadow Revan) atm, lol. But Winterz' points still stand, imo. It's up to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
            • Also, have you any idea who voiced Revan and Shrevan? Doesn't sound like Bennett.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:31, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • No, but I think Dark Revan and the spirit are voiced by different guys... Dark Revan sounds a lot different. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • Revan is played by Spencer Garret in the Shadow of Revan expansion.

Vote to strike Kasra's objections (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Been addressed for several months, and Kasra's long gone. CC7567 (talk) 14:59, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote RL calls JangFett (Talk) 15:28, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:30, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)


Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic (comics)

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:06, November 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An awesome comic series. I honestly don't remember why I started this; it and Revan will be my largest and probably only contributions to WP:KOTOR. Mr. Miller's production notes were a fantastic help. Also, yes, the article is 350kb in terms of characters, but over 100kb of that is references, images, quotes, and formatting—I've checked.

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Support

  1. Apologizes for taking so long to finish looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:51, March 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:59, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Exalted: Why is Rime Feeorin italicized?
  • Damn you, Cade, I don't have time for this. Will continue with Vindication. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:01, May 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Vindication: It is a little bit unclear why Q'Anilia dies. Is this said in the comic?
    • Explained.
  • That's it for the plot. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:12, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • Zayne: others rescue Jarael and a number of Jedi from Flashpoint.[29] After the group rescues Zayne's father Arvan from the Moomo Brothers on Telerath: Can you change one use of rescue? Plus is knighted really capitalized? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:32, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done, and yes, I believe so. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:26, May 27, 2014 (UTC)
So long -_-
  • Commencement: "...who are wearing red space suits identical to the foreseen Sith Lord..." Umm, when were they wearing the suits?
  • Commencement: Could you possibly clarify that T1-LB is the same Elbee that appears later?
  • Flashpoint quote: Shouldn't Zayne's name be mentioned first in the quote attribution since he speaks first?
  • I'll continue from Day's of fear later. 501st dogma(talk) 14:21, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nights of Anger: "...whose illness is growing steadily worse..." You might want to explain before that Camper is ill, or just reword it here to inform the reader for the first time that Camper is ill.
  • "... Mandalore explains that he has turned the Questioner into a martyr that has Mandalore and his lieutenant Cassus Fett helped spread the Neo-Crusader philosophy and armor throughout the Mandalorian ranks..." It's not really sounding right here. I'm pretty sure helped should be before Mandalore and not before spread, but remedy it however you see fit. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Knights of suffering. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Knights: "Upon recognizing Del Moomo..." Uh, since when was Moomo on Taris?
  • Still Knights: "...and Hierogryph keeps hold of the detonator as they flee..." Um, the detonator to what?
  • Exalted: "...Carrick has been in the Sanctum of the Exalted, he cannot be harmed by weapons..." Any particular reason? Is it a tribe tradition? :P
  • I'll start with Prophet Motive later. 501st dogma(talk) 22:35, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Swoop racing part: "Dyre is reinvented as the swoopduelist "Spikes," and Carrick is surprised when Goethar Kleej threatens and coerces him into protecting his son Aubin in the Tandem Open." Could you clarfiy if "Spikes" or Carrick was assigned to protect Aubin? It's vague at the moment.
    • Done.
  • Masks: Context on Wor Tandell?
    • Done.
  • "To her surprise, when she returns to the Hot Prospect, Jarael encounters Malak, and Carrick is surprised..." Could you kill a surprise?
    • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:47, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • Killed one of two encounters in close proximity.
  • Done up to Main Characters. 501st dogma(talk) 22:38, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Malak. 501st dogma(talk) 00:03, October 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Development. 501st dogma(talk) 14:38, November 9, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Article needs to be updated from the following:
    • The Insider 153 and/or 154 stuff. I told you many weeks ago that this needed to be done and you did nothing, so I can't remember which one it is now.
      • Nothing to update from either of those. 154 is just a general summary of Dark Horse; a KOTOR cover is the only thing related to KOTOR in that. 153 is just an offhand mention of KOTOR with no new info.
    • This. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
      • Added a mention. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 00:20, January 11, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • We at WP:KOTOR appreciate your hard work and dedication, Cade. I'll review soon.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:02, September 16, 2014 (UTC)


CT-7567

  • Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Since this project is five years in the making, I felt it needed a preface, so please pardon the ramble. To put it simply, I believe this article's construction symbolizes the Wookieepedia community. There are many people who contributed to it (and still will), whether it was by providing images and audio files, hunting down obscure sources, or letting me bounce ideas off them. The article will never be perfect, nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article, but I hope it does justice to the character himself, who I think is one of the best that Star Wars has to offer—even after the Great EU Purge, because he's a strong character in every one of his appearances. Whether you've already contributed or will do so by lending your time and effort to reviewing the article, thank you for doing your part to make it what it is. So, in honor of May the Fourth and on behalf of WP:TCW, here he is.

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Support

I agree. This article clarifies a lot of information from clone captain CT-7567. I have searched for information in this article many times and all my doubts have been anwered (except of course those that do not cover appearances of Captain Rex.) Unsigned comment by Generalfacu (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Less than 50 mainspace edits -- Cade Calrayn 23:02, May 13, 2014 (UTC))
  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:42, April 10, 2015 (UTC)
  2. I about fainted when I saw this. Now get to work on the Canon article 'cause it looks gross! :P Awesome work ! Nivlacanator(talk) 06:28, April 29, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • A number and a name: Is there a link for the engagement you describe in the last sentence? Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:30, May 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Battle of Teth: We have some kind of link for casevac team, however, as it currently refers only to one special case, I'll leave it up to you to decide about its inclusion.
    • Since "casevac" isn't a Star Wars–specific term, I don't see a need to link to it. Personally I also question whether the casevac team article itself is needed on the site, but that's another matter.
  • Battle of Teth: We have a problem with the remaining clone troopers of Torrent Company. I believe I talked with you about this years ago, but we don't know if CT-9932 is Coric, Del, Attie, Nax, Zeer or just another clone. Currently you say that five (including Coric) survived, but in the next paragraph you mention Coric, Nax, Zeer, CT-9932, Del and Attie as survivors—which are six. My theory is that there are five survivors, but while Rex checked them over comlink, one of the clones answered with his serial number instead of "I'm here" or something like that which is said in the novel. However, this is speculation. It's nitpicky, but a delicate situation. Thoughts? Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:01, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • The jump from six to five troopers (both times excluding Rex) is a discrepancy within the novel. When the troopers are about to report in, Rex states that according to the biosign icons in his HUD, "five of his men were still alive." However, when they individually report in via comlink, there are six, with only Coric and CT-9932 identifying themselves by name (so 9932 definitely isn't Coric). Then, for the rest of the sequence, it's back to five (Coric, Zeer, Nax, Attie, Del). Assuming that the six troopers checking in is an error, I think it's safe to assume that CT-9932 is either Zeer, Nax, Attie, or Del, so I'm removing any references to him, which should solve the problem. CC7567 (talk) 13:41, May 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Shipyards of Gwori: Nitpicky, but However, the battle droids overseeing the blockade detected the multitude of life forms aboard the stolen frigate and activated the radiation beam.: Wasn't that Juhm who ordered it out of frustration of his slaves escaping?
    • It was both; changed.
  • Outpost inspections: and Rex ordered them to take off their sunbonnets to verify that they were clones: Isn't "sunbonnets" rather colloquial?Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:27, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • JanFathal: After Pellaeon, an old acquaintance of his, permitted him to join Leveler's testing session, Rex departed to join the cruise with Tano, Sergeant Coric: Could you vary your use of "join" here?
  • Further campaigns: the blaster cannons, Tano threw a blaster battery at the cannons with the Force, and Rex detonated the explosive by shooting the flying target, annihilating the cannons: Same here with cannons. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:25, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Quell to Maridun: Just as Bly was docking their frigate to the Resolute, a Vulture droid attack inadvertently activated the frigate's hyperdrive: Wasn't that a duo of clone pilots?
    • Bly was at the controls, accompanied by a clone co-pilot. We have articles on the two pilots before Bly replaced one of them, but since there isn't enough info to distinguish them, I've opted not to link them within the article. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Orto Plutonia: that they were only there for his protection, not to fight his crusade against the Talz, the captain and his troops were forced into battle when more Talz appeared and ambushed them. After a Talz warrior and his narglatch forced him out of his Freeco swoop: Could you vary your use of Talz here, e.g. replace one with inhabitants? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:29, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't see a need to change it; three uses in two sentences aren't an extreme overuse of the word. CC7567 (talk) 20:25, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • I took the liberty of making a slight change here. If it annoys you, feel free to revert it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:30, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Blue Shadow Virus: Amidala reported that she and Binks had retrieved the missing bomb from LEP-86C8 in the arboretum, Tano and Rex quickly brought the bomb squad to deactivate the bomb.: Would you be so kind the replace one bomb with "explosive e.g.? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:52, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
Fan of the Core
  • Not so much an objection as an inquiry, under Battle of Teth I'm assuming you're using "casevac" as written in The Clone Wars novel? I know Traviss has a love affair with using military jargon without explaining it, but the average reader may not be aware it stands for "causality evacuation". It may be appropriate to either create an article for that term or simply spell it out. I believe it's also supposed to be all capitalized as a military abbreviation, not sure if she did in the novel or not, I only have a cheap txt copy so forgive me. :)
    • My apologies, I just saw this was already addressed. Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:38, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • I noticed in a couple of places you placed an "s" after adding an apostrophe to a name including Ventress and Grievous, I don't believe that's correct but wanted to double check if that was intentional.
    • Based on personal preference, yes. All uses should be consistent.
  • Excellent work, sir! Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:36, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
Hanzo
  • Just a prelim: I see that the intro has not been updated with the Seizure of Scipio info.
    • There's no mandate that introductions need to include every single battle or event in which a character has been involved. The purpose of an intro is to provide readers with the most basic information on a character (or whatever subject the article covers), and I don't believe the events on Scipio meet that criteria for Rex. CC7567 (talk) 20:33, May 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nice work, highly ambitious to take on a TCW main character article. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:37, April 27, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

  • For reference, this is the Legends version of the article. All canon material will be incorporated into that version once the tabs system is approved and implemented. CC7567 (talk) 21:48, May 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • "nor will it ever be the site’s longest Featured article" It may very well be the site's longest FA when this review finally finishes, given that Wedge is on probation and I have no interest in trying to fix that mess. :P
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Ace Azzameen (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ 64. (Sizable update/expansion)
  • Date added: June 30, 2014
  • Changes since last review: A lot. Check it yourself. Edits concerning update here.

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Support

  1. Inqvote Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:04, May 18, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Comments

  • Added a link to the differences between revisions as well as one to the specifics of the update. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 02:49, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Even with the loss of RFAN, should reduxed FAs that were on the page still be showcased if they pass redux? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:43, January 19, 2015 (UTC)

Barsen'thor (Galactic War)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:41, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Only took me a year and a half to finish this. I've tried to make sure that this reaches the nomination page as smooth as possible, and I believe I have achieved the goal.

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Exiled Jedi
  • While often used informally, "they" and "their" are not proper singular pronouns in formal writing. Please go through the article and change all instances of this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:36, August 31, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Similarly to EJ's comment, "the individual" is also really not a good way to refer to the character. For one thing, you seem to by and large not mention the fact that the Consular's going to places with a companion. Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen, and the rest of the time it should be something like "the Consular and a companion" when you first introduce a planetary storyline. That then opens up several additional terms you can use besides "Jedi", "Consular" - duo, pair, the two. I'm still seeing quite a few theys in there.
    • "Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen," Not true. C2-N2 is technically a healer companion. Yes, his AI sucks and he tends to suicide a lot by trying to punch people with his bare fists, but he can be used, so we can't assume the player always runs with Qyzen until Tharan. I'll look at the rest of the objection later. Just wanted to get this part out of the way first. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:06, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it's safe to say that the in-continuity player characters never used their ship droids in combat, as the droids even say that they're not designed for combat. Their use as companions is really just game mechanics. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:10, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • All parts of the objection should be addressed now. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
          • I'm still seeing a number of "individuals", and also, the game goes out of its way to never call the Consular player a Knight, so I'm not sure it's appropriate to call the Barsen'thor one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
            • Alright, I have cut down the usage of "individual" considereably (from 88 to 22, at the moment). Out of those, a number refer to other individuals beside the Consular. The most part of the remaining instances are either at the start of the biography, where none of the Jedi titles apply to the character yet. I have kept some uses of the word later as well, just to avoid repetition between constantly referring to the character as a "Jedi", a "Consular" or the "Barsen'thor." Regarding the other point raised, I honestly don't see any reason why we can't call the character a Jedi Knight. We know he was promoted to a "full member of the Jedi order" or whatever the game calls it after Tython, but he was only promoted to Jedi Master at the start of Chapter 2. So what rank could he possibly have held in between Tython and the Fortitude? He was obviously a Jedi Knight even if the game doesn't explicitly state he was one. I'm not going to argue this case, and I've changed the article, but I honestly think it's a case of the duck test, IMO. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:47, February 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, a number of the images are only tangentially related to the character, like that Alderaan one. I'm currently playing through the Consular storyline, and will supply images from the game like I have with the Hero. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • The reason for that is that I decided to write this article to status only after I had already completed the class story. Naturally, I never bothered with taking screenshots as I was playing, and I wasn't going to to go back and play through it again with another character just to obtain images for the article. I decided that I could get away with whatever relevant images I could find already uploaded on the site, but if you have the ability to provide better images, that's great. Go ahead. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
      • No problem; you should've seen my original version of the Hero. I think I just used the Holonet images of planets. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:47, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • No mention of Head Jailer Tarinn in the Imperial Holding Facility on Balmorra? He's got a (silent) cutscene and everything. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, I've trimmed a bit, but the intro needs to be cut down some more. Right now it's about 1,200 words, which is a FAN in of itself. Conversely, the Hero's only about 815, and Revan is around 835. You should cut back on some of the details. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:29, May 21, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Copycat! :P But anyways, great work. In the past few weeks, we've filled almost 300 redlinks, leaving us only 3200 left for TOR. I'll be sure to review this soon. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:28, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • Oh, actually, there's another cut thing from the files—during Corellia, the First Son originally was supposed to send a fleet to attack Sarkhai, causing Nadia to depart temporarily as your companion to go and help her homeworld. It's not entirely clear, but it looks like your actions (i.e. alignment choices) would affected whether Sarkhai won easily or only barely succeeded. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:31, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • May I ask why you use "They" or "their" when referring to the Barsen'thor? Winterz (talk) 00:03, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • Because we don't know the Barsen'thor's gender, singular they is used to refer to the character in a gender-neutral manner. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:19, August 23, 2014 (UTC)


Jaden Korr

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:28, August 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: So, to sum things up. He's a dude chasing a clone of himself, who gets killed by another clone of himself. He then gets his memories transferred into that clone's body, so he becomes a clone of himself. Oh, and he might have been a clone to begin with. And he also finds out about a potential clone of Xizor. Enjoy the cloneception.

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Soldier (clone)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The second of the three Jaden Korrs (Jadens Korr? Jadens Korrs?) running around in Riptide.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:24, February 4, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I'd like a mention in the intro about what the purpose of the Community was.
    • Hope it's more clear now.
  • "As they fled from the moon, Soldier and his brothers and sisters were influenced by the Lignan crystals scattered in its atmosphere as a result of the destruction of the Sith dreadnaught Harbinger." Any context on this event? More to come. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:07, January 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Context added. Thanks for taking a look at this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:30, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • "secret storage of Mount Tantiss on the planet Wayland." Secret storage what?
  • Context on Dr. Gray.
  • So Soldier is "Prime"? You don't explicitly link the two in the bio.
  • Same with Iteration, you need to slip in a few paragraph breaks.
  • "The two soon heard the sound of scuttle," Scuttle? Do you mean scuffle?
  • I don't think we need a full paragraph of examples of Soldier's rage in the P&T—one or two examples should suffice. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:08, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Like I mentioned in a response to an objection on my GAnom of Wry, I don't think these clones warrant a nickname template, since they essentially considered those to be their real names. If you have an argument to the contrary, I'm willing to listen. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)


Iteration (Jaden Korr)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:44, August 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Project Jaden Korr, Part 3/3.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:01, January 17, 2015 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I need some context on the Community.
    • Added.
  • Context on Mother.
    • Added.
  • Why did the One Sith want Soldier?
    • Addressed.
  • You've got some huge chunks of text, put in some paragraph breaks.
    • Addressed.
  • I think you should identify the space station as Mother earlier than you do, preferably the first time it actually appears in the bio.
    • Addressed.
  • Outside of the stuff about his appearance, there isn't much substance to the P&T. You just repeat some of the events that happen in the bio, without really going into what those events say about the character. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:08, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
    • Changed it a bit. Can't do much beyond that, as the stuff about him being uncomfortable about dying to replace Korr is speculation coming from Nyss Nenn's POV, and so it might or might not be true. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:53, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

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Anandra Milon

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:08, September 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first canon nomination

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  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:32, September 4, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Nivlacanator Talk 13:59, October 21, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Brandon Rhea(talk) 15:38, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:46, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:09, May 14, 2015 (UTC)

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Lee's charge
Brandon
  • Without having read the story, I can presume based on the opening quote that she was born 16 years before the Battle of Yavin. If I'm correct, you should add that information into the infobox.
    • Good point, I'm still not quite use to working without the BBY years yet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:22, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is there nothing that you could put into a "Skills and abilities" section? She seems to have some skills based on the events of the biography. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:41, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
    • There's not really any skill or ability she's implied to be particularly good or bad at. Anything I put would be kind of vague extrapolation that I'm not sure is necessary. Is there something specific you had in mind? Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:22, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
      • She wields a gun; how does she do with it? Then she was able to take on a stormtrooper and steal his gun. For a weakness, she then suffered injuries as a result. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:37, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
        • There are details on her outsmarting the trooper in personality and traits, and I'm not sure her getting hit several times is enough to comment on her skills or abilities. As for wielding the blaster she points it at the Mon Calamari and it says that it "twitches in her hands", which again isn't really telling us much although I've added it to the P&T. I still really don't think there's anything that gives us enough information to be worth having a skills and abilities section. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:52, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
SE
  • The article states Reffe was killed by stormtroopers in a riot, when he was in fact shot in the street while delivering his tirade. Please correct this.
    • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Please specify that he was shot in the street.
        • Added, although given the information is directly relevant to her I'm not sure such detail is required. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • The story says she took a picture of some signs advertising local entertainment on her previous visit to Level 1997. Please specify this.
    • It just says that she took a picture with a holocam, not what the image was of. Her taking the picture is already included in the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • It describes the signs advertising local entertainment then says she snapped their image with a holocam.
        • It describes the signs as she arrives there and then says when she was younger her friend
          • It says "Anandra had been to Level 1997 once before, on a dare with a schoolmate; they'd taken the lift down, snapped their image with a holocam, then returned skyward." Nothing in that sentence implies the picture was of the signs. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
            • I misread it the first time. After re-reading it, I think they actually took their own picture while on the level, because it refers to them taking a lift down together, then snapping "their" image with a holocam before returning skyward.
              • It doesn't necessarily mean that, as the wording could also just mean a picture belonging to them. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • Please specify that after Reffe's death, her mother tried to reassure them at breakfast.
  • The story states that while Alderaanians were being arrested in the streets, there was no HoloNet service, making it impossible to spread the news.
  • It also says the day after that, when the Imperials went door to door, they claimed that Rebels had been recruiting locals, and that anyone born on Alderaan needed to be taken in for questioning.
  • The story doesn't specify that her neighbor first informed her of the rumor, just that she repeated it with a cynical grin.
    • I didn't mean for it to imply she was the frist to tell her, so reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing where the story says her mother was arrested. All it says is she heard her mother open the door, and the static of a stormtrooper's voice before the cleaning unit carried them away.
    • I could of sworn it specifically said that somewhere, but double checking I can't find it. Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • They were told about Level 2142 before the run in with the Underworld Police.
    • Reordered. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Please specify that the family friend directed them to Level 2142.
  • Santiago didn't want to leave without their mother, and only Anandra and the close call convinced him.
  • Please reword it a bit to clarify that they arrived two days after the transport had left.
    • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • Two days before she arrived at Hangra's Meat Shack, not arrived on the level.
        • Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:24, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
          • Where does the story specify the transport left before they arrived on the level?
  • Finished the first two sections of the bio. After seeing how much detail is missing, I strongly suggest going over the story with a fine tooth comb to make sure you aren't missing more. I also strongly suggest going over any of your other noms from this story, as some of them are also missing information. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:44, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
    • Double checked through and reworded a few more bits to be more specific. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:36, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Where does the story specify the riots were broken up by stormtroopers? The closest thing I'm seeing is "The day after the stormtroopers shot Reffe, security forces began arresting anyone in the street."
    • I took that to be them breaking up the riots, but reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • The story specifies what kind of food the man gave them.
  • It doesn't say they slept as soon as they arrived on the level. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:08, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • I don't think the sentence in the article implies that either? Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Can you specify that the family friend directed them to Level 2142?
  • Can you reword the Centax 3 delivery part? The story doesn't specify a delivery from Centax 3, just "the" Centax 3 delivery.
    • I'm not sure of the difference but done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the P&T it says she wanted to attack the guy at Hangra's Meat shack, the story specifies she wanted to drag him over the counter and yell at him until everything was right.
    • Changed attack to drag over the counter. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
      • You make no mention of this in the bio.
        • Since she doesn't actually do anything I didn't think the specific details of what she felt like doing need to be in the body only the P&T. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:17, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • "After the transport had left Coruscant" You never specify which transport this refers to.
  • Please specify that the man at Hangra's directed them to Level 1997.
    • I actually totally missed that. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
      • You still don't mention that it was the man that sent them there. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:09, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • You don't make any mention of her snapping at Santigo in the bio. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:51, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
    • I thought having specific parts of conversations in the P&T was ok, but added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, March 4, 2015 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Intro could use some info on why the Empire was rounding up Alderaanians.
  • Should probably mention Santigo earlier on in the bio.
    • Added. Any earlier and we can't be sure he's alive yet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • "Anandra approached a stall named Hangra's Meat Shack where she asked the old man operating the grill about the Centax 3 delivery." There is absolutely no context as to why she would ask this.
    • There isn't any in the story either. I assume the Centax 3 delivery was the transport taking them off world but that's never stated. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • You're getting way too play-by-play. We don't need to know everything that they say.
    • Which bits in particular? Most of the info I'd consider play by play was added based on objections from SE and I don't want to undo his objections unless you specifically say they need to go. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:22, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • I'll speak with SE and get back to you. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:27, April 17, 2015 (UTC)
        • I talked to Floyd, and I'm cool with the play by play being cut down. Supreme Emperor (talk) 00:29, April 20, 2015 (UTC)
          • I've removed one sentence I didn't think was necessary, but otherwise I'm struggling to remove anything without losing information that seems like it should stay in the article. What parts are you specifically looking for me to change? Is it the P&T? Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:12, April 28, 2015 (UTC)
            • I think you could shorten some stuff like the "Centax 3 delivery" part, since that has no apparent meaning. The P&T is also a bit airy, you sort of go over a lot of stuff from the bio again without really applying it to what those events say about her. IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:18, April 30, 2015 (UTC)
              • Cut down the delivery section but I feel as though all of the information I've included in the P&T reveals something about her personality or emotions during each event, I can extrapolate further to make clearer statements about what that shows about her, but in the past people have told me that's speculation. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:24, April 30, 2015 (UTC)
                • I don't think that it's speculation if you really have solid evidence to extrapolate from, and I think you do in some of these cases. Give it a try. IFYLOFD (Talk) 02:32, May 4, 2015 (UTC)
                  • Ok I've reworded the P&T, making it less a chronological recount, and more two sections: one on her relationship with Santigo and the other on her emotional state. Is this any better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:33, May 10, 2015 (UTC)
                    • THIS IS HOWIE DO IT IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:09, May 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • Take care of these and I'll give it another look. IFYLOFD (Talk) 02:30, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Some of the paragraphs in the article seem a little long. Could you try and rework things so that the paragraphs are shorter?
  • The biography section should be subsectioned due to its length.
  • I don't see why you need to restate that she was a Human female from Alderaan again in the P&T.
  • Could you mention her parents and brother earlier in the biography section?
  • "When the Imperial, she was surprised to find herself feeling giddy instead of angry or scared, and she managed to outsmart him and disarm him." I am slightly confused with what you are trying to say here.
  • Does it say who illustrated the short story?
  • Could you note she was the main character in the BTS?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:18, May 18, 2015 (UTC)

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Finis Valorum/Canon

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Please do not call for a vote of no confidence in this nomination. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)

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  1. Emperor Jarjarkine MP-Mandalorian Senate Hall 23:42, October 3, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Exellent job. AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 03:40, November 7, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Very well detailed and sourced, I support it. ProfessorTofty (talk) 20:50, November 30, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote It's better than I'd expect a poocanon article to be. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:50, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote IRC reviewed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:56, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:08, May 17, 2015 (UTC)

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Zuko's advice
  • Hi Brandon ! Here i'll give you my standart review. Could you use the code of Show Dupplicated links ? Because i think that, for every articles and mainly on the FA, there should be no Dupps. links. So, it would be good if you could look at this.--Emperor Jarjarkine MP-Mandalorian Senate Hall 23:32, October 3, 2014 (UTC)
Hanzo
  • As a prelim, note the Layout Guide establishes all infobox info must be in the article body itself, meaning his height, hair, eye and skin color. It seems standard practice to put these in personality and traits sections.
  • Will do a full review later. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:25, November 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please edit his behind the scenes to reflect how the Tarkin novel brought back that Legends first name of his. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:49, December 2, 2014 (UTC)
Culator
  • Indeed, even a lack of ability merits a skills and abilities section if that lack is made evident by the references and is relevant to the bio. In Valorum's case, I think these conditions are true. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:03, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
Richter
  • According to the Layout Guide, Encyclopedia and New Databank entries are to be listed in alphabetical order according to entry name. So "Supreme Chancellor Valorum" should be listed under "S" (even though personally I feel there are advantages to have the main subject article listed first like it is now).--Richterbelmont10 R2 sig(come in R2!) 17:10, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Done. In the future, though, I would recommend treating this as a "sofixit" edit. This is simple enough to fix on your own without need for an objection. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 18:18, May 21, 2015 (UTC)

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Note: There was some disagreement over whether this article should have a "Skills and abilities" section, since no skills are outright stated. I could talk about how Valorum was unable to manage the bureaucracy and reign in corruption, and that Palpatine politically outmaneuvered Valorum—resulting in Palpatine's eventual tyrannical reign. If those who review this page think it should be added, I will be happy to add it. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:38, September 15, 2014 (UTC)


Gorman Vandrayk

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 06:24, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Come on my friends, let's make for the hills. They say there's gold but I'm looking for thrills.

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  1. Very well written.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 12:43, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 16:42, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:22, March 24, 2015 (UTC)

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501st
  • Bio and intro don't mention his gender outright.
  • It might be good to give a better introduction into why he became known as Camper in the bio. Right now, you randomly refer to Gorman as "Camper" with no context as to who calls him that. Just using the intro's introduction for his Camper name would be fine.
  • "...at one point, Vandrayk, at the behest of small-time hood Marn Hierogryph, held conceal wanted criminal Zovius Mendu within a crate of dried dreeka fish to be shipped to Corellia." The held conceal part is kinda weird. :P
  • End of On the run: Do they pick up Zayne? It's kind off vague at the moment. Also, what was the envirosuit used for/by? 501st dogma(talk) 02:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • All fixed. IFYLOFD (💩) 04:12, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • The existence of the virus was a lie—what was ailing Vandrayk was actually molds and allergens running through the air circulation on The Last Resort, from which he recovered quickly after coming aboard The Last Resort. - should the second reference to "The Last Resort" instead refer to the "Arkanian Legacy"? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:10, March 16, 2015 (UTC)
    • Yes, fixed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:26, March 20, 2015 (UTC)

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Arkoh Adasca

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 07:43, December 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: It's an eminence front, it's a put-on...

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  1. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:59, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 00:34, March 2, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:48, April 14, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:51, April 28, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 00:55, May 21, 2015 (UTC)

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Toprawa
  • Please employ the {{Faraway}} citation template in the BTS.
  • I think I've asked this on other noms of yours. Isn't Journal of Doctor Demagol an Appearance? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:27, April 11, 2015 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Could you find another way to describe Adascorp in the first paragraph of the bio? Currently it's exactly the same as the intro, though I can't seem to figure out another word to use instead of "giant".
  • Wait, Eejee's female? I always thought he was a he...
  • Did Adasca really poison Lucien, or just drug him into unconsciousness?<s>
  • <s>"refused to speak of the events surrounding the incident"—you mean to the press/public, right? I'm assuming he told his superiors, as the ministry did that blackout.
  • Good work, my good sir. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:57, May 19, 2015 (UTC)

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Heist in Capital City

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:32, December 28, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The first FAN for Star Wars Rebels!

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Support

  1. I'll probably make the Ezra's Gamble article soon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:47, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Nice! Nivlacanator(talk) 05:06, April 29, 2015 (UTC)

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Ayrehead
  • Instead of the previous mission being the conflict on Gorse, would the events of Ezra's Gamble be more appropriate? According to Star Wars Rebels: Rebel Journal by Ezra Bridger they short time before the heist and since both involve Bridger it seems relevant. I'm not sure if Gladiator Night would be a suitable article to include all of those events or if another more broad article would be needed like Hunt for Gronson Takkaro or something. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • Hmm. Gladiator Nights (or whatever the page ends up being called) could work if you wanted to go for Ezra-centric. On the other hand, we could go for rebel-centric (that was why I included Gorse) and could create an article for Sabine's attack on the TIE landing pat from "Art Attack." The Rebellion Begins mentions that Sabine got onto the Lothal most wanted list because of that attack, so it's notable enough (unlike "Entanglement" and "Property of Ezra Bridger," which happen after "Art Attack" and don't really seem relevant enough for an article). So when considering relevance to the rebels, since the heist was a rebel attack first and foremost, that seems like the most logical candidate. What do you think? - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • Either would work for me, and equally I think including both might be fine as well, I'll leave it up to you. The Gorse conflict just seemed somewhat distant. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
        • Added the airfield for now. Once something from Ezra's Gamble is created, I'll add that too. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 06:05, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • Should the Lothal Year date from the Star Wars Rebels: The Visual Guide be included somewhere? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • I could if you feel it's important enough. I try to shy away from using it's not well known to readers, and talking about the event's relation to the Battle of Yavin is much clearer. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • I've seen it in other articles and thought it might be consistent, but to be honest Yavin makes more sense, since we're probably going to be changing it to BBY soonish anyway. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • Quite a lot of linking is missing. In the infobox alone, Years, food and Lothal rebels need to be linked. The Lothal system may also need linking for the orbit of Lothal, but I'm not sure. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added the ones you mentioned (though linking to Lothal system seems a bit of a stretch). I'll fill in the redlink for foodstuff. If there's more then please feel free to add them. This seems like a sofixit. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
      • Anymore that I spot I'll add myself, but I thought since there were several it'd be worth pointing out. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, January 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • TIE fighters need to be included in the forces section of the infobox, and probably Yogar Lyste as well. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the quote for aftermath "could signify something more than the left of a few crates", is this meant to be theft or loss of a few creates? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • "The Ghost later to Lothal, scrambling its signal", I think you're missing a returned or something here. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the final paragraph of aftermath could you change the word rebels to something else in some of its uses, like the group or the crew of the ghost? It seems a little repetitive. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • Some kind of category for the various Rebel missions seems like it would be useful but I'm not sure exactly what it should be. Lothal battles could work, although not all of the events would necessarily fit. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:22, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • If a category was to be created, it would probably have to be something like "Missions of the Ghost." - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:47, January 14, 2015 (UTC)

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Nom Anor

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM. After 1 year, 3 months, 8 days, it is finally done. I apologize in advance for length (40 k words ish) and realize that this will not be passed for a long, long time. Thanks go to all those who helped me with sources and whatnot, especially Cav, for tolerating my constant source requests. Also, if this article goes too in depth in places with unnecessary info, just call me out, as I had a little trouble determining what was relevant and what could get cut....

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Good job. I liked it. The article was descriptive and answered all of my questions. -Joe bob frank Unsigned comment by 70.172.240.61 (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Unregistered users ineligible to vote -- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:44, January 9, 2015 (UTC))

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  • Wavering Loyalties section has no quote because I literally could not find a quote that fit that section... 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)


Mission to steal Imperial disruptors

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:46, January 2, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I hope this nomination doesn't cause much... distress. Get it? No? Ok. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:46, January 2, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:19, March 5, 2015 (UTC)
  2. I think I'll support regardless of the Bay articles, because if it's a no then fine, and if it's a yes I don't think there's any question they'll be made and linked too. An entertaining article! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:38, April 2, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Nivlacanator(talk) 05:04, April 28, 2015 (UTC)

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Clone tries
  • The outcome says that the Rebels handed over the captured disruptors to Organa, while the body states that the weapons were destroyed and that the Rebels delivered the droids back to Organa. So, did Organa get any disuptors?
  • Should Bay 7 and Bay 17 get articles? I imagine they would, under the same circumstances that we have articles such as Docking Bay 94 and the like.
    • Good question. Docking Bay 94 could be argued as having more notability. I'll ask what other people think as well. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:31, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, the Trivia guide identifies the locales as Garel City and Garel City Spaceport. While I'm not sure if the city needs mention, I imagine that the spaceport should be, as it's the location of the cargo bays. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:41, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
    • Created those pages and added them to the page. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:31, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

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Attack on Imperial Troop Transports

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  1. Inqvote IRC reviewed. IFYLOFD (Talk) 03:01, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Good work! Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:12, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:35, April 28, 2015 (UTC)

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Clone tries
  • I forget how the unidentifieds are being handled in Rebels, since obviously we don't want a page for every blithering stormie that walks across the screen, but is that Aqualish in anyway notable enough to have his own article? If not, nevermind.
    • I'm not necessarily opposed to it, but the unofficial rule I've always heard is that a character should, at the very least, have a line of dialogue to qualify for an article. I'm content to go with that. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:37, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
      • That might make more sense, unless, I suppose, some source fills in his background, because I don't know if anything labels him as an actual farm hand or employee, or just some random bystander or a friend who was visiting. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:46, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Since the TIE wasn't actually destroyed, I wonder if that should be mentioned, or at least inferred, that it wasn't destroyed.
    • In the intro, that is.
  • All of these mission articles are really good. That's not an objection, ofc. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:56, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, I wonder if the Aqualish should be mentioned as being detained along with Morad and Marida in the first paragraph of "the attack." --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:46, March 25, 2015 (UTC)
    • We don't know where and when he was detained - we never saw him on the farm except for already being a prisoner, as I recall - so there's not really anything we can say there. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:55, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

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Duel on Stygeon Prime

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 01:35, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Calvin Schubert(talk) 06:14, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

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  • As with my objection to Attack on Imperial interrogator droids, why is Mandalorian not being linked to? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:47, March 16, 2015 (UTC)
    • It was decided early in our documentation of the new canon not to have a page called Mandalorian/Canon (you can see that it's protected from being created). The reason is that, in canon, Mandalorian is much different than Legends. The word is simply a demonym in canon. There would be nothing unique about Mandalorian/Canon compared to Mandalore/Canon. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 14:36, March 16, 2015 (UTC)

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The Last Resort

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:54, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Heaven sent the promised land, looks alright from where I stand.

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  1. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:41, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Brandon Rhea(talk) 01:58, February 28, 2015 (UTC)
  3. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 03:42, March 7, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Nivlacanator(talk) 01:46, April 26, 2015 (UTC)

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Tsoklo

  • Nominated by: Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 20:54, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The Rebel's Rodian (Not Tseebo) (With contributions from AV-6R7, Tsoklo's biggest fan)

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  1. As contributor. Let us toast spicebrew in honor of Tsoklo. - AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 21:01, March 23, 2015 (UTC)

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  • I posted this objection when the article Jho was nominated, and I'm afraid I'll have to post it again here. It's not one that I can strike without some significant convincing. The objection is based on the FA requirements, which say that an article must, "following the review process, be stable, i.e. it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars." Tsoklo is a recurring character in Star Wars Rebels and it stands to reason that he will continue to make appearances here and there. That means there can be multiple instances throughout the next season, as well as via book releases, that will require this article to be constantly updated. No single author/nominator can guarantee that they'll continue to be around to work on the article, and there's no guarantee that anyone else will necessarily update it either. And even if it was updated, there's no guarantee that the updates will be of sufficient quality to maintain the article's FA status. Because of that, this article is at risk of one day becoming a Former Featured Article, and I think it's best that we avoid nominations with that risk. I would encourage you (and everyone) not to nominate characters from Star Wars Rebels. Unlike events, which are mostly confined to one or two episodes, characters are recurring and will constantly need upkeep. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:04, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Good job on the article, though! Should've said that in my previous comment - I don't want my objection to be taken as a shot at the article's quality or overall worthiness to be made a status article. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:05, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
      • I had considered this issue, actually. But I was also making the assumption that I, or someone, could be stuck trying to keep the quality up week to week (which is admittedly insane), especially seeing that it's possible that Tsoklo may take quite some time to bring up to status, possibly by the start of Season 2 which would cause issues everywhere. Damn. It's an excellent point, though. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:11, March 23, 2015 (UTC)

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Azzameen Station

  • Nominated by: JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 18:49, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Long live Azzameen Home Base!

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Cabbel

  • Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:20, April 27, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Hanzo, what does wordcounttool.com say about this article's count" ""It's over ONE THOUSAAAAAAAND!" ""WHAT?! ONE THOUSAND?!"

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Attack on an unidentified pirate base

Yo-ho, yo-ho, It's a pirate's life for me! Nivlacanator(talk) 04:17, May 10, 2015 (UTC)

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Secret mission to Geonosis

  • Nominated by: Nivlacanator(talk) 05:22, May 18, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • This was difficult to word for some reason, but it looks good! (I think) Nivlacanator(talk) 05:22, May 18, 2015 (UTC)

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