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The featured articles of the wiki are articles that represent the best Wookieepedia has to offer. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like.

So just what makes a featured article? Well, we've prepared a list just in case someone should ask that, and it is as follows.


An article must…

  1. …be well-written and comprehensively detailed.
  2. …be unbiased, non-point of view.
  3. …have comprehensive Appearances and Sources lists.
  4. …be fully referenced. See Wookieepedia:Sourcing for more information.
  5. …follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
  6. …following the review process, be stable, i.e. it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
  7. …not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
  8. …have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
  9. …have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
  10. …have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
  11. …not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
  12. …have all quotes and images sourced.
  13. …provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
  14. …include a "Personality and traits" section on all character articles.
  15. …ideally include a "Powers and abilities" section for Force-sensitive characters and a "Skills and abilities" section for non–Force-sensitive characters, where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
  16. …include a "Behind the scenes" section for in-universe articles.
  17. …include a reasonable number of images of the highest quality to illustrate the article, as source availability permits.
  18. …counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

For more information on what makes a featured article, see What is a featured article?


How to nominate:

  1. First, find an article you feel is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
  2. Add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating and save the page. NOTE: If the article you are nominating has been nominated for FA one or more times previously, you will need to specify a new subpage name as a parameter in the template (e.g. {{FAnom|Lorum ipsum (second nomination)}}).
  3. Open the redlink (in a new tab or window, if possible) and fill out the form according to the instructions provided.
  4. Copy the code provided to the bottom of this page.
  5. Purge the article to update the template.
  6. Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
  7. Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
  8. The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
  9. Be sure to place your signature in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.

How to vote:

  1. Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
  2. Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
  3. Please note that in order for your vote to count, you must have 50 mainspace edits.
  4. If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under, if possible. Failure to do so may result in your objection being considered invalid.
  5. As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
  6. Once the minimum nomination period has passed, an article that has achieved the required number of supporting votes and has no outstanding objections will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article." A nomination will be considered successful if one of the following criteria is met:
    • five supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • four supporting Inquisitor votes, plus two additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week;
    • three supporting Inquisitor votes, plus four additional supporting votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week; or
    • seven supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least two days.
  7. Per Inquisitorius consensus, no Inquisitor may use their Inqvote on their own nominations.

Also remember to add {{FAnom}} at the top of the article you are nominating.

Every day the next article in the queue will be highlighted on the Main Page as featured, marked with the {{FA}} template and removed from the list of nominations. The beginning of the article then appears on the Main Page via the {{Featured article}} template. Nominations that are inactive with outstanding objections for three weeks will be eliminated from the nominations list by the Inquisitorius.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by Inquisitorius vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Note: All reduxed articles require only four support votes to maintain their Featured status, at least two of which must come from Inquisitors. Reduxed articles will be subject to removal if objections are not addressed after a period of 4 weeks, pending the support of at least three Inquisitors.


Featured article nominations

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Revan

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:52, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 1) MULLET MAN FOREVAH 2) I'm incredibly sorry. 3) No, I'm not insane. 4) What can I say? I got bored.

(2 Inqs/4 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Now, if only movie main character articles could be this smooth...--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 02:18, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
    • Only Lando's that smooth. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:57, June 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote ow my balls IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:15, October 27, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:43, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Impressive, most Impressive. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:57, April 29, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Manoof (talk) 00:49, May 23, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:36, May 27, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Quick look from the Council Chambers:
  • I'm going to take Jang's comment and make it a formal objection. The intro is way too long. I can tell that simply by the fact that I have a 1080p display, and I still have to scroll down to read the rest of the intro. For comparison, Wedge Antilles is over twice the size of this article, yet his intro is just 607 words compared to Revan's current 1,428. Based on that, I'd like to see the intro cut at least in half. Summarizing is the key here; notice how the Wedge intro handles three X-Wing novels with a single sentence about Wraith Squadron. Let the reader get the details from the body; in an article of this size, small details don't belong in the intro. Three to four paragraphs of the current size, maybe four to five if the paragraph size is reduced, should be the target here.
    • Cut down to four with 672 words. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:12, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • I may make a full review later if I get bored, but there's no guarantee. —MJ— Holocomm 22:57, June 21, 2013 (UTC)
SE decided to take a crack at it
  • Early life and Jedi training
    • In the first paragraph of this section, two sentences in a row are started with the, "The child" and "The Jedi Master" Would you mind switching one up a bit?
      • Uh... the first one is referring to Revan, and the second is the title of Kreia. I don't really see the need here.
    • Same with the second paragraph of that section
      • Same here. The two sentences are talking about different people. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:14, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
        • Looking at it now, i'm not sure why I objected to this :P Apparently you object to some wierd stuff when reviewing while tired :P Supreme Emperor (talk) 16:40, June 22, 2013 (UTC)
The crown jewel of WP:KOTOR
  • These following objections are preliminary, although this section of objections will deal with the article in full. In addition, I intend to make this review my finest, as the scope of this article and the subject in question will require that.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire: Now believing himself to be a Republic soldier… If you could source his position as a soldier, that'd be great. I know that the Essential Guide to the Force, a conversation with Onasi in-game, and the TOR Encyclopedia.
    • Done.
  • Upon entering the next hallway, the two soldiers discovered a pair a Sith troopers and opened fire on the boarders. Continuing through the ship… So what happened to the troopers?
    • Done.
  • until they happened upon a Jedi and a Dark Jedi battling each other. Please link the Jedi and Sith to their respective articles.
    • Bah. I even looked at their articles while looking through the KOTOR articles.
  • Throughout the "Searching for Bastila" subsection, the image captions are in italics. Could you correct this?
    • Currently, I am unable too; there seems to be a problem with the {{Gamemechanics}} family that italicizes image captions if they are on the next line after the template. I'll have someone look into this.
      • OK.
        • Fixed. The templates in that family all had a stray '' near the end of the code. Removing that solved the issue. —MJ— Comlink 19:56, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Did you check the CSWE for some information? I am only asking out of curiosity, because when I read through the article, I'll make a point to cross-reference. Nice job thus far, I'll continue later. I like how you handled my girl Yuthura.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:19, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yep. Read through all three volumes for any mention of KOTOR, and used all the entries to establish as much of the game as canon as I could. Thanks.
  • Returning to May and the others, Revan informed them of the terentatek's defeat, and the grateful students fled the shyrack caves to freedom. Please reference this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:21, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Don't forget to add that he used a violet blade in his duel with Malak, as far as Timeline 8 is concerned.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:26, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • I wouldn't call that a violet blade; it's really more blue to me. Besides, going by Shadows and Light, Revan has a blue blade during the duel.
  • I would also like to add, thank God that that Chee actually confirmed that "Mullet Man" was the facial model used in TOR. I've been bugging him for months about this issue.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:31, June 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • The 8th paragraph of the "Searching for Bastila" section needs to be referenced.
    • Done.
  • In the 6th paragraph of the same section, you mention Nord without giving any context, which is located in the following paragraph. Please fix this.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:13, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Could you pipelink articles for the two brothers in the Outcast village?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:14, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not seeing any articles for those Outcasts.
      • Please create them.
  • Please comb through the article and correct instances of using first names as opposed to surnames. Only where needed, though.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:59, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done; I have left the naming of Bastila when her mother's involved, Mission when Griff is involved, Carth when Dustil is involved, and Canderous when his clan is involved. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:20, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm back, got my PC back. I'll continue where I left off. Been a hell of a few weeks.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 06:21, July 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • "At one of the nearby escape pods, an injured Republic soldier begged Revan for help…" An article for the infected Republic soldier would be good.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:22, August 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Revan, Shan, and Onasi then left the apartment only to be met by a Twi'lek messenger… An article for the Twi'lek would be great.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:47, August 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Still seeing some instances of first name usage as opposed to surnames, please fix where applicable. I'm reading through Tatooine.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 21:54, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Well, that section in particular needs more first name usage than the others—there's Mission and Griff, and Helena and Bastila. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:01, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
      • True, though I had caught the early mention of "Canderous" in the section's first paragraph. I wanted to inform you of where I was in regards to reviewing the article.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:18, August 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you create an article for the Sand People chieftan?Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 02:19, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Linked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:21, September 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • You mention all the planets but Tatooine… Departing Dromund Kaas as willing servants of the Emperor, Darth Revan and Darth Malak followed the Dantooine and Kashyyyk Star Maps to locate similar Star Maps on Manaan and Korriban. Please fix. Possibly more to come.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:10, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • On Korriban, Revan single-handedly defeated a pair of massive terentateks… Revan single-handedly defeated Mandalore the Ultimate… Could you use a synonymous term for one of your uses of "single-handedly?"Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:15, August 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Sweet, I'll review some more and get back to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:38, August 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • Revan was approached by a Twi'lek named Senni Vek, who handed him a datapad and claimed that Revan had dropped it. The datapad contained a cryptic message asking Revan to meet Hulas on Manaan... Shouldn't this be near the end of the Tatooine events? I haven't played the PC version of the game, but I can't imagine it's too different in this regard.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 10:42, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Not according to our own article on the guy, and the image we have of him.
  • Also, I'd like to see mentions of him defeating Darth Nyriss and his holding off multiple opponents in the Shadow of Revan storyline in the combat abilities section.Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 05:58, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Tiny details
  • For Revan's homeworld, "Outer Rim" is technically not a world, so it should say something to the effect of "an Outer Rim planet (believed)".
    • Meh. Done, though it looks funky.
  • Also, some images appear small compared to those on most articles. Perhaps it's just me.
    • Maybe true, but I've gone for a larger number of images than most articles, so I've kept the sizes down.
  • A few little grammar things on image captions: the caption should say "Darths (with an S) Andeddu, et. al., and the caption saying "Revan wearing his trademark mask" should not have a period. For minute details like these, ask me if you just want me to change them myself as I find them.
    • Done. I could have sworn I added that Darths.
  • The fourth paragraph of the into mentions the "Jed Master".
    • Done.</s>

Otherwise, awesome job!--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 23:27, June 23, 2013 (UTC)

It is time for your circuits to fry!
  • In the Combat skills subsection of "Powers & abilities" you make no mention of his lightsaber skills and feats, you're simply describing Revan's lightsabers. Improve this.Winterz (talk) 14:51, August 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • His skills are highly customizable, and I'm not a fan of the "feats" section that lists every battle the guy's ever fought. However, I've added his two most notable duels. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
      • I have no idea what you mean with a "feats" section nor has what you mentioned anything to do with what I requested but anyway, your recent update was sufficient! Winterz (talk) 17:28, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
        • I was referring to the kind of P&A that existed before I wrote the article up, and the kind that are present on articles like the Skywalkers. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:58, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
          • You could've just said "the kind that will be terminated". Winterz (talk) 18:21, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
Clone fly-by
  • Is there no more information available on the deleted scene from "Ghosts of Mortis"? The Blu-ray edition of The Complete Season Three actually has an early version of the scene with 3D storyboarding, and while I don't have access to it myself, it should be detailed in the Bts somehow. CC7567 (talk) 21:35, September 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I've gotten all of the information I could get from online at the moment; I will ultimately get ahold of the actual Blu-ray by the time this passes. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:49, October 10, 2013 (UTC)
      • Please do. CC7567 (talk) 15:00, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
        • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:06, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
          • Even though the scene is cut content, can you take some more time to detail the scene? Treat the conversation as though it's in the IU part of the article in terms of the level of detail—among the missing details is the fact that the scene takes place in Mortis's Well of the Dark Side. It's all in the file that I emailed to you, so please expand it more thoroughly. CC7567 (talk) 22:11, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
            • Fair enough; expanded. Thanks again. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:20, February 8, 2014 (UTC)
Fundraiser
  • Having gone no farther than the ToC, I can tell that the companions section is missing a few subsections. I figure the droids deserve a subsection, at least. Also, I could be wrong, but I'm under the impression that there might be a few characters from the novel or TOR that qualify. Expand it or kill it in the name of equality.SinisterSamurai (talk) 06:00, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • T3-M4 done; I'm working on HK-47. There really aren't any other characters that need one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:22, December 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Request the image of Revan's potential female faces is re-added to the article. I don't entirely know why it was removed. It doesn't have to be a second image. Since mullet man is now highlighted with a box, you can probably just get away with re-uploading a version of Mullet Guy.png with this attached, but the final choice is up to you. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'd rather not, as it's not really important, and it'll simply make the image rather wide. There's no real reason to have it; Revan's been canonically confirmed as a male for quite some time, and the only reason the Mullet guy image is there is to illustrate the point that the text is making about which character model is canonical.
      • Does that length of time make the other male faces "slightly less non-canon" than the female faces now one face has been chosen? I figure Gender no longer plays a role in whether or not a non-canon face deserves coverage. They are the same canon level, they deserve the same coverage: Equal or none.
        • It's a personal choice whether to use any image, and it's my choice to use the male faces. It's not required to show all of the potential faces; it was simply useful to illustrate the point the text is making. There's really nothing else to this. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:55, January 7, 2014 (UTC)
          • If it's being voted on, it's a community choice, but at least the caption isn't misleading anymore. SinisterSamurai (talk) 04:46, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not seeing anything how the troops and jedi Revan sent to Malachor were not "Revan's strongest supporters," much reference to Revan's use of psychological tactics/waging a war of beliefs as well as a physical war. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added some notes, but noted that it's only HK-47's opinion.
      • In this instance, HK's opinion is voiced in KOTORII, but is sourced to KOTOR. SinisterSamurai (talk) 03:58, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
        • What are you talking about? The sentence is sourced to KOTOR 2. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:07, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
          • Whoops! Totally right about that one! If you ctrl+F the word "break" the first instance should be the passage I meant. If HK-47 does voice an opinion about Malachor being used to break the Jedi in KOTOR1, then there's a citation just before it from the same source ([7]), and you can eliminate the center count and just source both to KOTOR with one reftag. Although, I have a vague impression that part of that, (the part about not wanted to repeat the devastation at Malachor), was also from KOTORII. I could be way off, though. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:48, October 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm scanning, but I'm only seeing one reference to the Sith Assassination squads, and no reference that Revan trained them. * SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • There was one, but expanded regardless.
  • In the infobox, you list Arren Kae as one of Revan's masters, but source it to KOTOR1. It's been a long time since I've played KOTOR1, but I thought the first references to Arren Kae didn't appear until KOTOR2. SinisterSamurai (talk) 05:29, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Rise of the Sith
    • "As the title of Darth was previously unknown to the Republic and the Jedi, many scholars believed that Revan and Malak were the first Sith to use it, and they speculated that the title was derived from the Rakatan language." The part about the Rakatan language makes the positioning seem off, since as far as I know the Republic did not know about the Rakatan language at this point. The transition is a little too abrupt as well.
    • "The success of HK-47 led Revan to decide that more droids like him would help maintain galactic stability, and HK-47 became the basis for the HK-50 series of droids which were constructed on Telos." I don't think that this part can be sourced to the first game, at least from what I remember. The mention of them being constructed on Telos is a rather abrupt change since the last thing mentioned was the bombardment, which pretty much destroyed the planet. I believe additional context is needed if you are going to mention Telos.
    • I added redlinks for the Echani senator and the Elders' tome for this section.
  • Aboard the Endar Spire
    • "Continuing through the ship, Revan heeded Ulgo's recommendation to draw a vibrosword as they stormed the Sith-held bridge. When they were unable to find Shan, the two rushed for the escape pods so that they would not be caught in the Spire's destruction." I thought that Ulgo told him to use a vibroblade not a vibrosword, which are two different weapons in the game.
    • "Warning Revan to hurry, Onasi suggested that he use his stealth gear to bypass a nearby Sith patrol, and Revan quickly made his way through the next few corridors before Onasi contacted him again." I thought that scouts were the only class to have stealth gear at this point.
  • I will continue at "Searching for Bastila" later. (I had forgotten that I had already reviewed the first few sections of the biography.)--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 05:30, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching for Bastila
    • Doesn't the player encounter the bounty hunters and the merchant before they can encounter Largo or the Sith commander interrogating the Aqualish.
      • Not the way I played it.... I came out of my apartment and almost immediately ran into the Sith.
        • Not the one attacking the Duros, the one with the Aqualish where you get the uniforms.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • If the player defeats Twitch, Bendak Starkiller challenges the player to a death match. The light side decision for the player is to turn down the match. I think this would be good to mention.
      • Done.
    • You didn't mention the drunk guys or Gorton Colu anywhere.
      • Colu, check... drunk guys, though.... Do you remember when they show up?
        • I think the drunk guys show up when you first go to the elevator that takes you to the lower city.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if this should be mentioned, but Revan can find that Zelka Forn had hidden some dying Republic soldiers in his facility.
      • Eh, it's a valid thing about Forn, but not necessarily important for Revan.
    • What about Selven?
      • Weird. I remember writing about her.
    • "A woman named Hester was arguing with the gatekeeper Trewin, begging him to let her husband Hendar back into the village, but Trewin refused because Trewin was pursued by a rakghoul and he could not risk the creature infecting the villagers." I think you mean that Hendar was pursued by the rakghoul.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the Twi'lek who surrendered.
  • I will continue my review after you handle the above objections.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:08, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Escaping Taris
    • There are a few planet related things you might want to mention.
      • What do you mean?
        • This was just talking about the three entries below, since I wasn't sure where they should go in the article. I'm sorry I didn't make it more clear.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:31, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • It seems to me that you should mention T3-H8 at some point since Revan can buy him and then returns him.
      • Done.
    • Don't forgot this guy: Unidentified Ithorian (Upper City).
      • Done.
    • Gelrood, the pazaak player in Javyar's Cantina.
      • Done.
    • I added a redlink for the receptionist, but you might want to change it since I can't remember if she was Twi'lek or Human.
      • She's Human.
    • Just making sure: Canderous meets Revan in the Upper City Cantina and then in the Javyar's Cantina. I was thinking that both meetings were in Javyar's.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:11, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Learning on Dantooine/A Jedi once more
    • Could you mention Crattis Yurkal and Karal Kaar at Aratech Mercantile near the landing pad?
      • Done.
    • There is also a pazaak player named Sol'aa at the Enclave that you could mention.
      • Done.
    • After leaving the enclave isn't there some farmer and his wife that you can talk to?
      • Done.
    • Outside the enclave there is a merchant named Adum Larp.
      • Done.
    • Doesn't Dorak give the player some lesson about comparing the war with Revan and Malak to Ulic Qel-Droma and Exar Kun?
    • Doesn't someone inform Revan about the crystal cave full of Kinrath? You might want to say that Revan went to the cave.
      • Done.
    • I created a redlink for Montagne's husband.
    • Elise's article says that she meets someone named Samnt in the Jedi Enclave and if talk to her there she will thank Revan for helping her get over her husband's death.
  • I will continue my review later.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:16, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sand of Tatooine
    • "...the soldier was angry about the way he had been left out of the loop lately" The "left of the loop" part seems a tad too informal for an encyclopedia.
      • Done.
    • "Revan either chose to repair Venn's K-X12 probe droids or simply left the man to his fate and continued into the Dune Sea." I think you should reword this; maybe reword to say that Revan had to choose between saving him and leaving him. Wouldn't rescuing him grant a larger reward to the player anyway?
      • Done.
    • There is a pazaak player named Kudos at the Hunting Lodge.
      • Done.
    • Apparently, if you get the krayt dragon pearl before going to the enclave, you can get the tribe's storyteller to tell you about the Sand People's history. Not sure if this should be included and I haven't personally encountered this, but I thought I would throw it out there.
      • Yeah, I've seen this, but it's rather contrary to the basic storyline, so I left it out. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:45, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • I added redlinks for the docking bay manager, Sharina Fizark's husband, and Fortuna's partner.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:45, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
    • There are also Furko Nellis and Junix Nard in the Anchorhead Cantina. Nellis plays pazaak and Nard is a vendor I believe.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:00, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Into the Shadowlands
    • There is a pazaak player named Fodo Medoo in the Czerka area.
      • Done.
    • I thought the poachers had sonic emitters, not sonic prods.
    • I added a redlink for the Wookiee that Dehno killed and the Wookiee guard.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:20, February 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • I should be able to continue my review this weekend.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:04, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Searching the oceans
    • Out of curiosity, is there a reason why you place the trial before Revan going to the Sith embassy. From what the mysterious man says, it seems like it would be reasonable for Revan to go to the Sith Embassy before the trial.
      • You're totally right; I've rearranged that section.
    • What is your logic for choosing the access card as the party's means of entering the Sith base? Weren't there like three ways to get into the base?
      • I think you get a passcard from the soldier; the way I wrote it was trying to leave it ambiguous, but I forgot about the hangar. I've added mechanics tags to that part.
    • "As the Selkath claimed to be a concerned friend of the Republic, Revan informed Niklos of the need to protect the Hrakert Rift facility, and a relieved Niklos promised to try and cover for the Republic if the issue came to light." Who is Niklos? I don't see the character mentioned anywhere else.
      • It's Nilko Bwaas, actually, who the player met earlier, but I've given a bit more context.
    • Is Visitor's Hotel capitalized or not? You have it both ways in this section.
      • The proper name's capitalized, so fixed.
    • Minor characters that were not mentioned: Jolan Aphett, Gonto Yas, Tyvark Luowan, Yortal Ixlis, Unidentified Republic soldier (Hrakert Station)
      • All done.
    • Items that seem worthy of an article: Ahto City cantina
      • Added.
  • The heart of the Sith
    • "When he came across a group of Sith apprentices whom wanted to attack Revan as "sport" when they encountered him, Revan was able to persuade them otherwise, but another student who was threatening a woman attacked Revan when he intervened. Defeating the student, Revan took one of their medallions and brought it to Ban, who allowed Revan, Onasi, and another into the Academy when he claimed that his companions were slaves." This doesn't have to happen this way. It needs some kind of game mechanics tags.
      • According to GameBanshee and what I remember, the apprentice will attack you regardless, but I've moved the first encounter into LS tags.
        • I don't ever remember running into this encounter, and I've won the game three times.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
        • Tagged.
    • Aren't there some hopefuls in Dreshdae that you can persuade to leave?
      • Done.
    • I'm not seeing mention of Mekel until the tomb. You left out the scene with him and the hopefuls.
      • Done.
    • Minor characters that were not mentioned: B'ree, Toll Apkar, Mika Dorin and related information, Dak Vesser
      • From what I can see, Ziagorm's inviting you to visit Dorin requires not doing the Juhani stuff until after the Leviathan and a few other things that contradict with the established path, so I'm of the opinion that it's not needed in the article. Ziagorm's article should probably be rewritten though.
        • Where is Juhani's stuff is established to take place before the Leviathan? I am also curious what else it conflicts with.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
          • aaaand all done. I was wrong.
    • Items that might be worthy of an article: The spaceport manager, the Czerka representative? (I don't really remember this character.)
      • Both linked.
    • "With the medallion, Ban allowed Revan, Onasi, and Juhani into the Academy when he claimed that his companions were slaves." How do we know that he brought these particular people with him? Is it stated somewhere else?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:19, September 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • Trapped on Lehon
    • Is it possible to complete the Garn quest and side with the Elders? The article makes it sound like it is possible, but I never did it. If it is possible to do both, you might want to mention Garn in the article. I'm pretty sure the other Black Rakata quests can't be completed if you side with the Elders, but the article for this guy makes me wonder about this quest.
      • From what I can see, no. You'd have to head to the north beach and be friendly with the Black Rakata, which is counter to the established light side path. I've fixed that article.
    • Minor characters/items that were not mentioned: Orsaa
      • Done.
  • A final confrontation
    • I don't remember the game calling them Aurek-class tactical strikefighters. Please provide the source that gives them this name.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 04:07, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
      • Sourced.
  • Confronting evil
    • I think you should mention that Revan influenced the Sith Emperor to keep him from attacking the Republic in this section. You note this in the next section, but don't mention it here.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 03:56, August 6, 2015 (UTC)
      • Done.
  • Companions
    • Is there a reason you have T3-M4's name bolded in his section?
      • Left over from an early version, probably.
    • I was wondering why you mention the Cross of Glory in T3-M4's section and not in any of the other sections.
      • Ah, I meant to draw attention to the fact he was a droid; done.
        • Did HK-47 get the Cross of Glory too?--Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:15, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Behind the scenes
    • "While none of the player's dialogue features voice-overs" This is not technically true, there is some dialog used when you use the security skill. Please reword this to match.
      • Don't recall that, but done.
    • Do we know who did the voice acting for the female Revan from KotOR?
      • Not that I'm aware of.
    • "As Knights of the Old Republic is a RPG with a great deal of variability when it comes to player decisions, there are a number of alternate storylines and endings available." This appears to be the only part of the BTS that is not sourced.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:14, August 7, 2015 (UTC)
      • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:10, August 11, 2015 (UTC)
        • Thanks for your review, EJ; great job with finding all these. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:59, September 5, 2015 (UTC)
praguepride
  1. If Revan is not his real name shouldn't it use the nickname tag?
    • No.
  2. Pronoun confusion: "Revan was betrayed by his Sith apprentice Malak and captured by the Jedi Knight Bastila Shan, who saved Revan and formed a Force bond between them." Which two is them? Or is it all three of them?
    • Changed.
  3. "His mind wiped, Revan was given a new identity as a Republic soldier by the Jedi Council, but when Malak attempted to capture Shan aboard the Republic warship Endar Spire above the planet Taris, Revan joined forces with the Republic officer Carth Onasi and a number of other individuals on Taris to rescue Shan and escape the world before Malak destroyed Taris's surface." Run on sentence that should be broken up. I would recommend also putting the mind wipe stuff in the paragraph before as it deals with Shan's encounter.
    • Tweaked.
  4. (In the Revanchrist paragraph) Is "prowar renegades" direct from source as it should have a hyphon. If it is direct then add the [sic].
    • From the source, but the sic is not necessary. That's for seriously-misspelled words.
      • We'll have to talk about this via IRC.
  5. "But in reality, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause." - remove But.
    • Mhmm.
  6. "In the following weeks" should be [[week]]s
    • That's really a {{sofixit}}. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:18, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  7. more to come...
Manoof
  • Check your CSWECites, most are missing page numbers, and one (56) has the entry as the page number. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if you've noticed this, since it's been sitting here from the start. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Early life
    • 2nd paragraph you mention "alek's friend" twice in quick succession. You could probably switch some of the references to Revan to separate these more. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Nope; Revan isn't his real name, and he hasn't taken the name Revan at that point. Changed it up though.
  • Bio - Mando wars
    • "The Mandalorian warrior culture..." makes it seem like the culture itself is invading, similar to Americanisation. Maybe change it to "the Mandalorians, a warrior culture, ...". Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Reworded.
    • "With the backing of Alek and his other followers, the Jedi decided to journey to the war front against the wishes of the Jedi High Council so that he could scout the enemy lines". Are we talking about the group of jedi with Revan or Revan himself? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Revan; changed to Jedi Knight
    • What were his findings on Onderon/Dxun? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Don't believe it's ever said.
    • "In reality, however, the Mandalorians' own actions made it impossible for them to stand in the way of Revan's cause. However, Revan came up with a solution". Can I buy a synonym please? Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • Removed the first however.
    • "star cluster Jaga's Cluster," maybe rephrase to "Jaga's star cluster" pipelinking as necessary. I'm not too set on this though. Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
      • The proper name's Jaga's Cluster, so nope. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:55, April 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • I must now eat and rejuvenate before continuing this review. You really are a sucker for punishment aren't you? :P Manoof (talk) 01:42, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Bio - Rise of Sith
    • "Amid the confusion, Shan rushed forward and delivered a Force push to the Sith Lord's chest, sending him flying, but Revan was critically injured in the explosions and the fighting that followed." The word "but" leaves me confused about this sentence, was Shan trying to save Revan? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
  • Endar spire
    • From memory, you could equip a blaster when you storm the bridge, meaning you do not necessarily heed the advice... I'm guessing it thus needs a gamemechanics tag? Also I just replayed this section and he didn't say anything to me before storming the bridge. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • *shrug* Removed.
  • Searching Bastila
    • The second paragraph could probably get the gamemechanics tag, since it implies you talk to Kadir, then Larrim, then Dia and later Gorton. Additionally, while you can't just walk past Kadir since he stops you when you get close enough, you CAN walk past the janitor and leave the apartment complex, bypassing those conversations. You can also ignore Carth when he wants to talk to you, so none of the mentioned conversations are required to progress. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Actually, no, the conversation with Dia is confirmed by Holdan's CSWE entry, and you have to complete conversations with Carth in order to progress to stuff that is confirmed by other sources, like his son.
        • Awesome, that deals with a few other things that would probably have popped up later. Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • "Heading into the northern the pair..." Is this supposed to just be north or is there a word missing? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • "While exploring the cantina, Revan interacted with a number of local patrons, such as Jergan, Christya, and a young noble named Gana Lavin. While in the cantina, Revan spoke..." Since it's already established they are in the cantina, can you say something like "Revan also spoke..."? Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
    • It may be worth mentioning some context on starkiller and his relation to the dueling ring. Glad to see you haven't given up on this! More to come. Manoof (talk) 07:31, April 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Eh, not really necessary IMO. Thanks. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:42, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captured by the Leviathan—The wording in a couple of these paragraphs has left me confused. When did Revan learn who he was, when Karath told Onasi or later when they meet Malak. Saying Revan was confused makes me think he heard the conversation and was confused about his identity, but I assume it was whispered or something to Carth (I haven't played this in ages and can't remember what happened). Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked a bit. He doesn't learn it until Malak tells him.
      • Much better :D Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Captive—I'm not sure what you mean by "as well as the fact that Scourge and Nyriss were opposed to him." Since they are Sith, they already are opposed to him? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Opposed to the Emperor; changed.
  • An unlikely rescue—"returned to the Republic over the last three years." gives the feeling it took all 3 years for the ship to return to Republic space. Is this correct? Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • As far as I remember, yeah.
  • Legacy—"...but the military's failures become evident and it was clear that the military needed to evolve in order to survive." Something about this section of the sentence seems a bit off but I'm currently too tired to figure it out (if it's fine just say so and I'll strike next time :P) Time to rest methinks! Manoof (talk) 06:58, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
    • Tweaked. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:06, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it was just the word "become" instead of "became", but it reads much better overall with the additional change :) Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Warrior and Sith—"Revan was of the opinion that a Sith Master should have but one student—and the same was true of the title of Dark Lord." The section about the title Dark Lord is confusing, from memory it was that only one Sith should hold that title. Could you clarify this please. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Other abilities—Could you rephrase the first sentence in the last paragraph (mechanic), as it is the second sentence in a row to use "Revan [was] also" Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Behind the scenes—"While the variable nature of Knights of the Old Republic, the canonical storyline of the game was originally unknown." needs rewording. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fixed.
  • Continuity issues—It strikes me that a bit of the information here can be cut completely as, rather than continuity issues where different sources explicitly create a contradiction, you have character's holding claims or beliefs that are contrary to a different source. Revan's fall to the dark side is the main one, where you mention the Jedi believing he fell on Dantooine is an example, with Bastila's claims about how he lost his memory another. Additionally, I don't think it's worth talking about the different lightsabers here—you've already mentioned them all in the article and from my understanding, no source has him with different lightsabers at the same time. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Actually, I do find them relevant; the Timeline and KOTOR comics are contradictory with the lightsaber colors, and the other contradictions are a result of Revan's backstory being defined and updated over time by various sources.
      • Fair enough. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Alternate storylines—It may be better to subsection this with dark side, female and female dark side variations, as those seem to be the only ones. It may improve readability (rather than jumping to the dark side female, then female, then dark side female stories) and make the section overall easier to read. Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
    • Ehh.... I think the current sections work better. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 12:51, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
      • No worries, twas personal preference after all. Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • OMG ALL DONE! Great work again on this and props for sticking with it! Manoof (talk) 05:56, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • All done, just sort out that top objection (CSWEcite issue) and I'll vote to support :) Manoof (talk) 22:42, May 22, 2015 (UTC)
Culator USED TO think Revan was kinda cool
  • Got a few quibbles with some wording. Under "Confronting evil": "When the Emperor expressed his disappointment with Scourge, Revan proclaimed that he was their ally now, but the Sith Lord was suddenly overcome by a vision of the future—a future in which another Knight defeated the Emperor." - this whole sentence is confusing. Which Sith Lord? Scourge or the Emperor? Whose ally? Under "Freedom and fall": "Dying, Revan attempted to become one with the Force, but he was unsuccessful." Well, that's not entirely true, now is it? Shouldn't it say something more like "was not entirely successful" or "was only partially successful" since "was unsuccessful" would basically imply that his entire spirit was stuck in his meat body?
    • Both done.
  • In "Into the Shadowlands," are you sure about this name "Gerwooken?" It fails the google test and isn't linked anywhere including in this article, and I don't have a savegame in this area to check.
    • Fixed.
  • That's all I specifically nitpicked, and I definitely hate you. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:06, May 27, 2015 (UTC)
Imperators
  • Intro
    • First of all, why do you use both the {{C}} template and simple parentheses in the infobox comments? Shouldn't one or the other be used consistently?
    • "[...] Revan joined forces with the Republic officer Carth Onasi and a number of other individuals on Taris to locate Shan on Taris and escape the world before Malak destroyed Taris's surface." So many instances of "Taris" make it a bit awkward, please change that.
    • You've got your Sith Lords mixed up: Darth Rivan did not begin the New Sith Wars—Darth Ruin did. Please correct this.
    • "[...] named himself after Revan after reading a damaged manuscript about the Sith Lord, and the Sith Lord Darth Bane discovered Revan's Sith holocron [...]" Maybe you can change one "Sith Lord" to "Dark Lord" to avoid the repetition of those words in such close proximity? The "after Revan after reading" part also seems weird to me, but I don't have any suggestions there, so I won't make that one a strict objection.
    • That's all for now. Maybe in the following days I'll be brave enough and read and review the rest of it, too. :) Imperators II(Talk) 23:37, September 24, 2015 (UTC)
Hands
  • Repeating a prior talk page message: "just wanted to let you know that the new SW.com Ghosts of Mortis episode guide should have been listed after the old Databank entries. Unless you erroneously formatted the old episode guide, which should look like this: SWicon Episode Commentary #3.17: Ghosts of Mortis on StarWars.com (content now obsolete; backup link on Archive.org)." Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:27, December 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • For Waru's sake, Hanzo, that is the utter definition of a {{Sofixit}}. Not something you leave an objection for. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:01, January 11, 2016 (UTC)
      • Well I'm not 100% sure whether you just put the new episode guide in the wrong place, or erroneously formatted the old episode guide. Also am respecting the inuse tag between you and Toprawa. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 17:13, January 11, 2016 (UTC)

Comments

  • You have no life. On the other hand, amazing job. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • I can't really tell on this screen resolution, but that intro is ridiculously big (no, this is no joke). JangFett (Talk) 22:03, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Per dogma and Jang. Fe Nite (talk) 01:07, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well, I've asked around, and a lot of people believe it's a good length for the size of the article. A lot happens to this guy. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 01:13, June 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • I won't lie Cade. You scare me. Commander Code-8 You lost the game! 10:17, June 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if this is an objection worthy issue, but the segments dealing with the events shown in the novel read very differently from the rest of the article and seem more akin to a narrative than an encyclopedic article. I recall the article being marked for this problem in the past but the template appears to have been removed so perhaps I'm simply mistaken and this style of writing is permissible. Either way good luck with the effort; you carry the torch for all WP:KOTOR members and fans of KOTOR everywhere! JethLordMasterYing yang copy (Xia Order) 08:28, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Hey, thanks. As for the narrative/encyclopedic thing, the article was actually tagged with a Copyvio template because a user actually copied most of the second half of the novel into the article without making many changes. I wrote up the TOR:Revan events while reading the novel, and I guess the reason it reads differently than the KOTOR stuff is because I can go more in-depth as to what actually happened, unlike KOTOR's conversations and the character's feelings. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:44, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan married Bastilla not Shan. That needs to be changed. Unsigned comment by 71.196.255.127 (talk • contribs).
    • Wookieepedia common encyclopedic practice is to refer to characters by their last name in further mentions after they have been introduced. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:08, August 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • Revan looks horrible in Star Wars: The Old Republic... IMO. Is there any chance that the image of him on this page could be changed to one of him wearing his hood and mask? That's the Revan I remember... A badass. Unsigned comment by 118.93.35.26‎ (talk • contribs).
    • As this is his canonical face, no, there isn't. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:03, January 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Observation: Friday will be Revan's one-year anniversary of nomination, and it still has only one support vote. Prediction: Revan will take longer than Wedge did to pass. :P
    Master JonathanJedi symbol.svgCouncil Chambers
    02:12 UTC WedJune 11, 2014
    • This is now the longest FAN ever on Wookieepedia, breaking the record set by Wedge. And it still has only two support votes. Over/under on date of passage: February 14, 2016. :P —MJ— Comlink 18:35, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not making it an actual objection, but wouldn't an image of Jedi Revan be more appropriate for the infobox as opposed to Dark Revan? I just would like the reasoning for the image, although he was Jedi (yes, I know what happened in the expansion's events.).—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 07:28, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • I second Jedi Kasra. That is a corrupted form of Revan and didn't even survive long, I suggest you add that one to the appropriate biography section and use as infobox image the previous one. Winterz (talk) 13:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • We should revert to his unmasked infobox image, and place this one in the appropriate section.AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 14:43, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Dark Revan (and I totally love that the name is now a thing) is actually the final physical appearance of Revan, and is the final state of his body. However, I'm not necessarily set on using this image; once I actually beat him in the boss battle, I'll see if I can get a better image and reconsider the infobox. 15:09, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
          • I'm actually calling him Shrevan (short for Shadow Revan) atm, lol. But Winterz' points still stand, imo. It's up to you.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:24, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
            • Also, have you any idea who voiced Revan and Shrevan? Doesn't sound like Bennett.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:31, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • No, but I think Dark Revan and the spirit are voiced by different guys... Dark Revan sounds a lot different. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
              • Revan is played by Spencer Garret in the Shadow of Revan expansion.
  • One Inqvote away. Can we push this through before the nomination is two full years old? :P —MJ— War Room 04:08, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
    • MJ, you know you're perfectly welcome to review stuff yourself if you want things to move faster around here. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:27, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
      • I'm aware, and I would if I could (like I did with Wedge while Havac was still around). Unfortunately, real life does not currently permit me the free time needed to properly review an article of this size. I'm only now digging through my watchlist for the first time in nearly two weeks, because RL has kept me away for a while. —MJ— War Room 04:36, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
        • At any rate, Tope's reviewing this now so hopefully it won't take six more years. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:38, June 3, 2015 (UTC)

Vote to strike Kasra's objections (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Been addressed for several months, and Kasra's long gone. CC7567 (talk) 14:59, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote RL calls JangFett (Talk) 15:28, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:30, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:51, July 1, 2014 (UTC)


Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic (comics)

  • Nominated by: Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:06, November 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An awesome comic series. I honestly don't remember why I started this; it and Revan will be my largest and probably only contributions to WP:KOTOR. Mr. Miller's production notes were a fantastic help. Also, yes, the article is 350kb in terms of characters, but over 100kb of that is references, images, quotes, and formatting—I've checked.

(0 Inqs/3 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Apologizes for taking so long to finish looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:51, March 28, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:59, April 7, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Manoof (talk) 23:28, July 11, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Exalted: Why is Rime Feeorin italicized?
  • Damn you, Cade, I don't have time for this. Will continue with Vindication. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:01, May 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Vindication: It is a little bit unclear why Q'Anilia dies. Is this said in the comic?
    • Explained.
  • That's it for the plot. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:12, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • Zayne: others rescue Jarael and a number of Jedi from Flashpoint.[29] After the group rescues Zayne's father Arvan from the Moomo Brothers on Telerath: Can you change one use of rescue? Plus is knighted really capitalized? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:32, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done, and yes, I believe so. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:26, May 27, 2014 (UTC)
So long -_-
  • Commencement: "...who are wearing red space suits identical to the foreseen Sith Lord..." Umm, when were they wearing the suits?
  • Commencement: Could you possibly clarify that T1-LB is the same Elbee that appears later?
  • Flashpoint quote: Shouldn't Zayne's name be mentioned first in the quote attribution since he speaks first?
  • I'll continue from Day's of fear later. 501st dogma(talk) 14:21, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nights of Anger: "...whose illness is growing steadily worse..." You might want to explain before that Camper is ill, or just reword it here to inform the reader for the first time that Camper is ill.
  • "... Mandalore explains that he has turned the Questioner into a martyr that has Mandalore and his lieutenant Cassus Fett helped spread the Neo-Crusader philosophy and armor throughout the Mandalorian ranks..." It's not really sounding right here. I'm pretty sure helped should be before Mandalore and not before spread, but remedy it however you see fit. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Knights of suffering. 501st dogma(talk) 17:41, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Knights: "Upon recognizing Del Moomo..." Uh, since when was Moomo on Taris?
  • Still Knights: "...and Hierogryph keeps hold of the detonator as they flee..." Um, the detonator to what?
  • Exalted: "...Carrick has been in the Sanctum of the Exalted, he cannot be harmed by weapons..." Any particular reason? Is it a tribe tradition? :P
  • I'll start with Prophet Motive later. 501st dogma(talk) 22:35, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Swoop racing part: "Dyre is reinvented as the swoopduelist "Spikes," and Carrick is surprised when Goethar Kleej threatens and coerces him into protecting his son Aubin in the Tandem Open." Could you clarfiy if "Spikes" or Carrick was assigned to protect Aubin? It's vague at the moment.
    • Done.
  • Masks: Context on Wor Tandell?
    • Done.
  • "To her surprise, when she returns to the Hot Prospect, Jarael encounters Malak, and Carrick is surprised..." Could you kill a surprise?
    • Done. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:47, September 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • Killed one of two encounters in close proximity.
  • Done up to Main Characters. 501st dogma(talk) 22:38, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Malak. 501st dogma(talk) 00:03, October 2, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done up to Development. 501st dogma(talk) 14:38, November 9, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Article needs to be updated from the following:
    • The Insider 153 and/or 154 stuff. I told you many weeks ago that this needed to be done and you did nothing, so I can't remember which one it is now.
      • Nothing to update from either of those. 154 is just a general summary of Dark Horse; a KOTOR cover is the only thing related to KOTOR in that. 153 is just an offhand mention of KOTOR with no new info.
    • This. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, January 8, 2015 (UTC)
      • Added a mention. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 00:20, January 11, 2015 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Commmencement—"an action that severely damaged T1-LB's programming and brain." Since droids don't have a brain, shouldn't the sentence end at programming? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • The last two sentences regarding The Last Resort's capture need to be reworded, you need to clarify exactly what happens as without having read the comic, it is confusing to follow what happens—what does surrendering to the masters have to do with the pirate? If the release has been negotiated, how is it carrick can attempt to steal the ship? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • "he executes Ying to eliminate witnesses before preparing to kill Carrick." I assume here Ying is the only witness? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Flashpoint—"flee on one of the last remaining ship" needs to be fixed, I'm not sure if there was only one ship remaining, or several? (remove "one of" or add an s to ship?) Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Daze of hate—Is the word "to" correct from the source in the quote for this section? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Knights of suffering—In the last paragraph, you mention a Togruta, with no previous mention of which character is of this species. I'm guessing by the following language the character is Tey? Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Vector—"she is forced to execute the constable when she is infected" needs to be clarified as to who kills whom. I'll continue with Prophet Motive at another time. Manoof (talk) 08:54, May 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Prophet Motive—You say "A month after Vindication". Assuming the entire plot should be written IU, this needs to be rephrased, unless Vindication is an IU term for the events in the comic of the same name of course. I'll have to get back to this when I have more time. Manoof (talk) 10:09, June 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • References to other works—You start using WEG without specifying it stands for West End Games. Could you please clarify this somewhere. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Reception—I don't know who Thomas Lorraine is, but I don't think having a random quote by a random person should be used here. Could you please use a quote by someone notable (why should we believe this person nobody has heard of before?) or at the very least, justify why this quote was used above all other quotes, other than the fact that you personally like it (It IS a nice quote after all). A quote from an editorial review would probably be better. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Legacy—You don't seem to mention to any extent Knights of the Old Republic (Star Wars Miniatures), which drew heavily from the comics as well as the game. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Media—The colour code key at the top seems redundant and I would recommend removal of it - Story arcs can easily be seen by the comic title, all issues can be seen to be collected in a trade paperback from the table, with the exception of course of the handbook. Finally, the series is finished (and DH no longer has publishing rights) so future issues holds no meaning. For linking purposes, I am happy for the story arc title to be left in the table. Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Not so much an objection as a recommendation to make sure all links you reference are backed up on webarchive.org, and perhaps make use of the backup links in your citations in the event the page is removed. I'm done, good job as always! Manoof (talk) 04:22, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

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  • We at WP:KOTOR appreciate your hard work and dedication, Cade. I'll review soon.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:02, September 16, 2014 (UTC)


Barsen'thor (Galactic War)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:41, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Only took me a year and a half to finish this. I've tried to make sure that this reaches the nomination page as smooth as possible, and I believe I have achieved the goal.

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Exiled Jedi
  • While often used informally, "they" and "their" are not proper singular pronouns in formal writing. Please go through the article and change all instances of this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:36, August 31, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Similarly to EJ's comment, "the individual" is also really not a good way to refer to the character. For one thing, you seem to by and large not mention the fact that the Consular's going to places with a companion. Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen, and the rest of the time it should be something like "the Consular and a companion" when you first introduce a planetary storyline. That then opens up several additional terms you can use besides "Jedi", "Consular" - duo, pair, the two. I'm still seeing quite a few theys in there.
    • "Up until the Carida, it's always Qyzen," Not true. C2-N2 is technically a healer companion. Yes, his AI sucks and he tends to suicide a lot by trying to punch people with his bare fists, but he can be used, so we can't assume the player always runs with Qyzen until Tharan. I'll look at the rest of the objection later. Just wanted to get this part out of the way first. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:06, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
      • I think it's safe to say that the in-continuity player characters never used their ship droids in combat, as the droids even say that they're not designed for combat. Their use as companions is really just game mechanics. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:10, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
        • All parts of the objection should be addressed now. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
          • I'm still seeing a number of "individuals", and also, the game goes out of its way to never call the Consular player a Knight, so I'm not sure it's appropriate to call the Barsen'thor one. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
            • Alright, I have cut down the usage of "individual" considereably (from 88 to 22, at the moment). Out of those, a number refer to other individuals beside the Consular. The most part of the remaining instances are either at the start of the biography, where none of the Jedi titles apply to the character yet. I have kept some uses of the word later as well, just to avoid repetition between constantly referring to the character as a "Jedi", a "Consular" or the "Barsen'thor." Regarding the other point raised, I honestly don't see any reason why we can't call the character a Jedi Knight. We know he was promoted to a "full member of the Jedi order" or whatever the game calls it after Tython, but he was only promoted to Jedi Master at the start of Chapter 2. So what rank could he possibly have held in between Tython and the Fortitude? He was obviously a Jedi Knight even if the game doesn't explicitly state he was one. I'm not going to argue this case, and I've changed the article, but I honestly think it's a case of the duck test, IMO. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:47, February 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, a number of the images are only tangentially related to the character, like that Alderaan one. I'm currently playing through the Consular storyline, and will supply images from the game like I have with the Hero. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, January 20, 2015 (UTC)
    • The reason for that is that I decided to write this article to status only after I had already completed the class story. Naturally, I never bothered with taking screenshots as I was playing, and I wasn't going to to go back and play through it again with another character just to obtain images for the article. I decided that I could get away with whatever relevant images I could find already uploaded on the site, but if you have the ability to provide better images, that's great. Go ahead. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:41, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
      • No problem; you should've seen my original version of the Hero. I think I just used the Holonet images of planets. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:47, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • No mention of Head Jailer Tarinn in the Imperial Holding Facility on Balmorra? He's got a (silent) cutscene and everything. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:39, February 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, I've trimmed a bit, but the intro needs to be cut down some more. Right now it's about 1,200 words, which is a FAN in of itself. Conversely, the Hero's only about 815, and Revan is around 835. You should cut back on some of the details. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:29, May 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Alright. I think I've pretty much cut every possible extraneous bit of detail, leaving the intro at less than 1000 words. Everything else is necessary context in my opinion. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:16, June 6, 2015 (UTC)


  • So, huge news for the Barsen'thor and this nomination. The Star Wars: Force and Destiny Core Rulebook contains an excerpt from Rediscovering the Jedi, a work by the respected historian Professor Belys Harand who was known for his expertise on Xim. Rediscovering the Jedi was published during the era of the Empire, and was subsequently banned. Here's the important part:
    • Chandrila's Jedi Tomb: Although his true name has been lost to time, the third Barsen'thor, or Warden of the Jedi Order, is thought to be entombed on Chandrila, somewhere in the famous Crystal Canyons. He was famous for a number of ancient diplomatic victories, and for an equal number as a battlefield general.
  • With Knights of the Fallen Empire forthcoming and its condensing of class stories into a single story about the Outlander, I think we can effectively say that the canon storylines of the eight classes are over. With that, and this source stating that the Barsen'thor is a male, I believe we can take that information as valid; thus, this article needs to be updated to reflect that. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:29, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Also, the Chandrila mention is clearly meant as a reference to the Dead Jedi Knight and the Chandrila Jedi tomb, so I think that these can be merged. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:30, August 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, now this nomination and Jaden Korr are connected to each other. I'm just going to say that I totally foresaw that that would happen with my Force sense. Jokes aside though, I've updated the article with the new information, both in terms of adding the Jedi Academy stuff and interspersing masculine pronouns throughout. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:39, August 26, 2015 (UTC)
Culator finds player character articles annoying
  • This is not an objection, just an observation: There were many, many typos and grammar issues here, and I haven't even done a full copyedit, just a quick automated scan: indvidual → individual, Leiutenant → Lieutenant, 'returned back' → 'returned' (2), presense → presence, ressurrect → resurrect, 'the the' → 'the' (2). Please be mindful of this, thanks.
    • Noted. Thanks for catching those.
  • You have a ref name="The Bounty Hunter's Daughter" that references "Conversation with Qyzen Fess: "A Taste of Medicine"" and a ref name="A Taste of Medicine" that references "Conversation with Qyzen Fess: "A Taste of Medicine"" so I'm guessing one of those is wrong. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 17:18, July 25, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Copycat! :P But anyways, great work. In the past few weeks, we've filled almost 300 redlinks, leaving us only 3200 left for TOR. I'll be sure to review this soon. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:28, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • Oh, actually, there's another cut thing from the files—during Corellia, the First Son originally was supposed to send a fleet to attack Sarkhai, causing Nadia to depart temporarily as your companion to go and help her homeworld. It's not entirely clear, but it looks like your actions (i.e. alignment choices) would affected whether Sarkhai won easily or only barely succeeded. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:31, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • May I ask why you use "They" or "their" when referring to the Barsen'thor? Winterz (talk) 00:03, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • Because we don't know the Barsen'thor's gender, singular they is used to refer to the character in a gender-neutral manner. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:19, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
  • I might be unable to address any future objections on this and my other noms until the end of the month due to studies. I know I've been pretty much inactive on the wiki anyways—kind of lost interest in the Star Wars universe after the new canon took over—but I have been checking my nominations occassionally. However, I'll probably be unable to do even that in the next few weeks. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:16, June 6, 2015 (UTC)
    • Back to a previous contributing capacity. Starting off with a sizable expansion/rewrite/clarification of certain points. New redlinks will be dealt with soon. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:49, June 27, 2015 (UTC)


Jaden Korr

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:28, August 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: So, to sum things up. He's a dude chasing a clone of himself, who gets killed by another clone of himself. He then gets his memories transferred into that clone's body, so he becomes a clone of himself. Oh, and he might have been a clone to begin with. And he also finds out about a potential clone of Xizor. Enjoy the cloneception.

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  1. ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:57, August 19, 2015 (UTC)

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Cav
  • A couple of preliminaries:
  • Korr's birth year is listed as c. 1 ABY, referenced to Crosscurrent as a character pegged him as forty years old. However, this means he was 13 during the events of Jedi Academy, correct? But the character model for the game doesn't really support this age for the character at all. What is the exact quote for his age from Crosscurrent? Is there some leeway to list his birth at prior to 1 ABY rather than circa? If not, some mention in the BTS about the character model seemingly not supporting the character's age should be mentioned. Of course, the clone angle might account for the discrepancy, but that was never confirmed.
    • Here's the exact quote from the novel: "Before Khedryn could raise a hand in greeting, a human thrust himself into Khedryn's space. The man was taller than Khedryn by a head. His neatly trimmed beard and short brown hair book-ended intense, haunted gray eyes, the kind Khedryn had seen in religious fanatics. Khedryn put him at forty years, maybe, about the time human men looked back on their lives, found them wanting, and turned stupid." Of course, Khedryn's guess might be wrong and Jaden could be older, but it's the only estimation we have. Mentioning the discrepancy in the Bts sounds like the best approach. Will work on that in a bit. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:41, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
  • For the Jedi Academy stuff, shouldn't there be 100% completion templates around it? As far as I remember, the player did not have to complete all the missions to proceed, and they could be done in any order. I know you list this in the BTS, but the article body should reflect this as well. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:37, August 14, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added the necessary templates to paragraphs dealing with optional missions. The intro on Yavin, as well as the missions to Hoth, Vjun, Taspir III and Korriban are left out, as they are required to progress the plot. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:01, August 24, 2015 (UTC)

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Soldier (clone)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The second of the three Jaden Korrs (Jadens Korr? Jadens Korrs?) running around in Riptide.

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  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:24, February 4, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:29, January 16, 2016 (UTC)
  3. 1358 (Talk) 00:15, February 1, 2016 (UTC)

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Floyd
  • I'd like a mention in the intro about what the purpose of the Community was.
    • Hope it's more clear now.
  • "As they fled from the moon, Soldier and his brothers and sisters were influenced by the Lignan crystals scattered in its atmosphere as a result of the destruction of the Sith dreadnaught Harbinger." Any context on this event? More to come. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:07, January 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Context added. Thanks for taking a look at this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:30, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • "secret storage of Mount Tantiss on the planet Wayland." Secret storage what?
  • Context on Dr. Gray.
  • So Soldier is "Prime"? You don't explicitly link the two in the bio.
  • Same with Iteration, you need to slip in a few paragraph breaks.
  • "The two soon heard the sound of scuttle," Scuttle? Do you mean scuffle?
  • I don't think we need a full paragraph of examples of Soldier's rage in the P&T—one or two examples should suffice. IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:08, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
  • The last two paragraphs of "The escape" are a bit play by play with short, choppy sentences. I would consider trying to streamline it.
  • Also, in the last paragraph of "The escape," you state: "Nenn making his way to his scout flyer, flown into the area by his sister, Syll Nenn, who was then killed by Korr in a skirmish." This makes it sound like both Nenn and his sister where killed in the ambush, but Nenn appears on the space station in the next section. Some clarification is needed. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:48, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Made some changes to those paragraphs, which should take care of both objections. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:32, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Firstly, that intro is too big. It's almost the size of the Hero's, and Soldier's only in a single novel. Please drop some of that excessive detail. Cade StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:51, October 13, 2015 (UTC)
    • Addressed. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:28, October 27, 2015 (UTC)
      • I, too, was still a bit concerned about the size of the intro, mostly the paragraph sizes. A good rule of thumb for Wookieepedia articles is to try and not go much longer than eight sentences per paragraph. If you're over ten, you probably need a paragraph break, especially in the intro, since that shows up on the Main Page, so we want it to look as presentable as possible. Keep in mind, also, that 99 percent of our readership is looking at our articles in Wikia skin, which has dramatically narrower margins than Monobook, so a 10-line paragraph in Monobook is like a 20-line paragraph in Wikia skin and looks terrible. I cut down on a little bit of wordiness in the intro and removed the sentence detailing the specifics of the other clones' disease, which was a bit extraneous to Soldier, and further divided the intro into three paragraphs. I think should work and will look better in Wikia skin. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:48, January 8, 2016 (UTC)
        • You are right I suppose. I forgot that the Wikia's skin numerous ads and banners squeeze the actual content of the page into a tiny speck in the middle. I'll try to keep that in mind in the future. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:55, January 16, 2016 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • My objections focus on two pieces of referencing that cannot be properly cited to Riptide:
    • The first, "...the galactic capital of Coruscant..." I don't see anything in the story that indicates Coruscant is the galactic capital
    • Secondly, calling Lumiya a Dark Lady of the Sith. Riptide makes no such mention of this title. Both of these items will need independent references. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:10, January 11, 2016 (UTC)

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  • Like I mentioned in a response to an objection on my GAnom of Wry, I don't think these clones warrant a nickname template, since they essentially considered those to be their real names. If you have an argument to the contrary, I'm willing to listen. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:42, August 20, 2014 (UTC)


Nom Anor

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM. After 1 year, 3 months, 8 days, it is finally done. I apologize in advance for length (40 k words ish) and realize that this will not be passed for a long, long time. Thanks go to all those who helped me with sources and whatnot, especially Cav, for tolerating my constant source requests. Also, if this article goes too in depth in places with unnecessary info, just call me out, as I had a little trouble determining what was relevant and what could get cut....

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Good job. I liked it. The article was descriptive and answered all of my questions. -Joe bob frank Unsigned comment by 70.172.240.61 (talk • contribs). (Vote struck per policy: Unregistered users ineligible to vote -- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:44, January 9, 2015 (UTC))
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Comments

  • Wavering Loyalties section has no quote because I literally could not find a quote that fit that section... 501st dogma(talk) 21:11, January 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Probably too many images of things only slightly related to Nom Anor, such as an image of the Jedi Temple. Maybe keep 2/3 of them.ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:51, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
    • Without them, it would be walls of text, which it already is in some sections. It's standard procedure to add images of things in the text that are not of the subject if there are not enough images available of the subject. 501st dogma(talk) 13:08, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • Right, but maybe it could do with a little fewer in some sections. But it's your call, I won't micromanage.ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 09:34, August 21, 2015 (UTC)


Coruscant Security Force

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 22:04, June 25, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Déjà vu... although this version is blessedly shorter.

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  1. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 14:27, April 16, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Great job. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:46, April 25, 2016 (UTC)
  3. AV-6R7Crew Pit 12:56, April 25, 2016 (UTC)

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Cubert
  • Awesome! But shouldn't AotC be marked as "(First mentioned; albeit indirectly)"? I'll read through it fully soon. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:17, July 10, 2015 (UTC)
AV-6R7

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  • The Coruscant model of police droid are named Guardian police droids as in legends per Star Wars: Absolutely Everything You Need to Know. I've fixed the redirects on all other pages, but since the redirects will required some sentences to be reworded on this article I thought I'd leave the changes to you instead of messing around with your FAN. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:13, October 27, 2015 (UTC)


Exar Kun

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Talk) 04:40, July 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Holiday, celebrate.

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  1. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:50, August 13, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 12:49, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:43, September 5, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Provided the update is taken care of. Supreme Emperor (talk) 18:17, April 11, 2016 (UTC)
  5. Good work! Manoof (talk) 06:12, April 25, 2016 (UTC)

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Comments

  • Unfamiliar as I am with the source material, I could only evaluate this from a technical angle, and so the only real issue I noted was that you consistently missed punctuating your image captions. "Subject verbs the object" is a complete sentence per WP:LG 8.1, as in "Exar Kun wields his double-bladed lightsaber" or "Exar Kun prepares his final ritual." Just something to note for future reference, since I went ahead and corrected it. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:43, September 5, 2015 (UTC)


Alderaan Enclave

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Ayrehead
  • You don't mention the spy in Organa's group in the body, only the intro. This could be fixed with a mention of the message between Tula and Tace that Covis finds. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:55, April 9, 2016 (UTC)

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Voorpee

  • Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Good article nomination that, quite simply, got too long. Well, in any case, before the nomination was closed, I had gotten support from one AgriCorp member and three regular users and didn't have any outstanding objections. Still, I'd be happy to address any other concerns that may be brought up. The original nomination can be found here. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:53, July 20, 2015 (UTC)

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  1. It's nice to see a less serious article every so often. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:19, August 7, 2015 (UTC)

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Ayrehead
  • The intro should be updated to include information about the cloning and talent show. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • I would reword the bts concerning Brown saying pets would appear in the third book as it is currently a bit confusing to read and not entirely clear that the Phantom Bully is the third book unless you follow the link. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is it clear if the original Voorpee is the one that is kept, or could he be amongst the ones returned to the zoo or the rescue organization? If it isn't clar you should at least mention this in the behind the scenes and maybe even in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:22, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, I tried something like that, but if you look back at Manoof's objections on the original Good article nomination, I ended up getting rid of it because if nothing is stated either way, then the custom is to not say anything at all. And the book really doesn't. After the whole mess happens, Voorpee himself isn't mentioned again at all. It's entirely unclear whether they ever even found the original Voorpee. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, July 22, 2015 (UTC)

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Deltic

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:17, August 2, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An article I was sure was only going to be a GA.

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  1. Maybe add a couple of images to break up the text a bit? Great stuff! Nivlacanator(talk) 00:21, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Took out some of the play-by-play; we don't need to know every time someone leaves a room. Otherwise looks good. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:28, April 25, 2016 (UTC)

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Toprawa

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FEX-M3 nerve gas grenade

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:52, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Wasn't around much when the article got probed due to the main image issue, so I completely missed it until I saw its GA status removed. However, the article had also undergone a sizable update prior to that, which also put it at 1006 words. So, I guess the article would've eventually ended up on the FAN page regardless.

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  1. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 06:19, February 17, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 10:59, April 27, 2016 (UTC)

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Exiled Jedi

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  • Credit to JMAS for finding a better image for the infobox. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:52, August 12, 2015 (UTC)


Cornelius Evazan

  • Nominated by: AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 04:37, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: With all the previous objections taken care of and other aditions, the page exceeded 1,000 words. Thus, I am running this for FA status.

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  1. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 20:18, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Nivlacanator(talk) 00:15, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Cwedin(talk) 04:12, November 11, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Squishy Vic talk 18:44, December 19, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:08, April 9, 2016 (UTC)
  6. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 02:44, April 21, 2016 (UTC)

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Jang
  • I'll post this here instead of the KB, but in the Annotated Screenplays, on page 44, he's called a "Human." Lucas doesn't give him any other description, but he's later described as "unpleasant" when Obi-Wan intervenes. JangFett (Talk) 06:07, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
    • Revised Fourth Edition, I assume? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 06:14, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
      • This will be an interesting case because most screenplay drafts, with complied edits and changes, are marked with the same date, even outside Star Wars. Unless we can track down and find all of the edited fourth draft screenplays, including the revised ones, it'll be tough to precisely determine the title. The Annotated Screenplays doesn't actually say where "Human" is from, unfortunately. Both it and this script dated January 15, 1976, both use "Human." Using the data I've collected from the Screenplays (listed in your KB), both "Human" and "Int. Death Star corridor" are used in the website, so it's safe to say Revised, although I'm not sure of the date. On another similar note: I'm not sure where "grubby" came from, if you want to keep that. JangFett (Talk) 06:25, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
        • Intresting. I've done as you've requested and did a little clean up in that area. The descriptor "short, grubby Human" is given in the script you've posted a link to, so do you think that would be OK to use? Also, I'm thinking of replacing the Bts quote with a sentence from the original novelization. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 06:35, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
          • Re: "grubby"—Ah, cool, I've missed that. Yes, it's safe to use. Source it to the website. But since we can't pinpoint the dates (I wouldn't trust what the website says in this case), a ref note needs to be used instead of a direct ref to Annotated Screenplays. It doesn't need to be complex, just one indicating the inaccurate dating. Using the website and what the Screenplays says, you can assume that they're both in one of the Revised Fourth Drafts. As for the quote, that would work better, since you're using Legends information. JangFett (Talk) 06:43, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
            • I've put up a quote from the novelization. Just to clarify, the above description is used in the draft included in the Annotated Screenplays and I need to source the online script? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 14:15, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
              • Try this: The ref note should go after "In the Revised Fourth Edition script for A New Hope," and then you can source "grubby" and "unpleasant Human" to the website, since they're both present there. JangFett (Talk) 14:24, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
                • Ok, cool, but how would you word the ref note. I've never written one before, so an example that could be used in the article would be appreciated. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 14:33, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
                  • Something along the lines of: "Several revised fourth drafts were released from mid-1976 to 1977, per the Screenplays, but the actual content of these scripts are unknown. A copy of a revised fourth draft shows identical descriptors present in Screenplays, but the date is incorrect. Therefore, this article assumes that only the identical descriptors are correct. JangFett (Talk) 14:48, November 10, 2015 (UTC)

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Mission to Vetine

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  1. Nice Nivlacanator(talk) 00:13, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:33, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
  3. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 00:32, November 16, 2015 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 06:19, December 5, 2015 (UTC)
  5. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 02:59, April 21, 2016 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:19, April 29, 2016 (UTC)

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Cevan
  • There needs to be a reference note beside the "Twenty days after the Battle of Endor" in the prelude; that information is not given in SE III. Also, I added a link but then removed it as I decided to tell you here instead: a page for the "Jedi Temple traning ground," (name confirmed in the "The Wrong Jedi" episode guide, I believe in the concept art gallery captions) which is where the tree resided, should be made. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 16:10, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • Ah, meant to include the reference for the date. Good call. As for the training ground, I've re-added the link and will create it shortly. That wasn't something you needed to remove so feel free to keep that sort of thing in pages in the future! - Brandon Rhea(talk) 22:04, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Since Luke wasn't aware there were two twigs until he actually got into the lab, could you change the wording earlier in the article to reflect this. At the moment the infobox lists retrieving specifically two at the objective and the beginning of the body does the same, which makes it seem like Luke planned on getting both. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:01, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • I realise now I should have made this objection on the Wretch of Tachyon article, but should the black site at the Wretch of Tachyon have a separate article to the wretch itself? Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:01, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
    • That's a good question, and it's one I considered when creating the pages. I don't know if the Wretch of Tayron is the black site, or if the black site is something located at the Wretch of Tayron. So until that's clarified I rolled it all into the Wretch of Tayron article. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 22:04, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
Floyd
  • The Galactic Civil War is infobox-exclusive.
  • "breach Imperial encryption codes" Did he breach the codes or breach something with the codes?
  • How did Luke learn that the tree was there? Is that something that would go in the Prelude? IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:12, November 23, 2015 (UTC)

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Tula

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:34, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another Princess Leia nom.

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  1. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 22:48, November 1, 2015 (UTC)

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Darth Bane

  • Nominated by: Ruthless Xero(Talk) 03:26, November 11, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The only reason given for it's FA removal was an update for The Clone Wars Season 3, which had been added three days after it was stripped. I've updated the article with the relevant information from Book of Sith and the Encyclopedia so I see no reason it shouldn't be restored to FA status. Ruthless Xero(Talk) 03:26, November 11, 2015 (UTC)

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  • Oddly Bane's Encyclopedia entry reveals he was defeated by the Jedi. Perhaps worth noting the inconsistency in the BTS? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:25, November 13, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'm not too sure honestly. I added it, but it was reverted with the reasoning that the Encyclopedia was a Canon source and the information should be left out of the Legends article. Ruthless Xero(Talk) 06:12, November 21, 2015 (UTC)
      • The Encyclopedia is both a Legends and Canon source, so feel free to restore your edit. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 07:55, November 21, 2015 (UTC)
        • That being said, the Encyclopedia was never written to accommodate Legends, least of all in March 2014 when Bane appeared in The Clone Wars, so—Hanzo—that's the angle I'd take when you mention it in the BtS. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 15:53, November 21, 2015 (UTC)


Holshef

  • Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 01:07, November 24, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A good article nomination that got too long. The original nomination can be found here. Since the Servants of the Empire series has now ended, I think it's safe to say Holshef's story has most likely come to a close. ProfessorTofty (talk) 01:07, November 24, 2015 (UTC)

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Fenn Booda

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Galactic Civil War/Legends

  • Nominated by: The All-knowing Sith'ari (talk) 01:43, December 28, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The article has been expanded to cover just about every aspect of the old Legends continuity that covered the Galactic Civil War. For many years, it was the Star Wars. As we enter into the new Canon era, the old deserves recognition and remembrance.

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Ecks Dee
  • This article is currently not in line with our Layout Guide. Please fix this. For examples have a look at some existing war FAs.
  • Lots of sections lack quotes. I'm sure you can find quotes for more or less every section in the article.
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Only full sentences require punctuation.
  • I am quite sure you're missing tons of appearances and sources. Radio dramas and tons of encyclopedia/databank entries spring to my mind.
  • Impressive undertaking. I'll be even more impressed if this nomination process eventually concludes in success. For a first-time nomination to take on such a massive project and succeed is probably a first. As a former Inq and current AgriCorps member, the article is not even close to being ready right now and I'm doubtful it can ever be with just one nominator. Fully comprehensive, it would probably be the longest article on the site by far. I'm not saying this to discourage you, but I'm not sure you've realized the magnitude of this undertaking. Anyway, good luck. 1358 (Talk) 23:49, January 31, 2016 (UTC)

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Halle Burtoni

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  1. Nice job! - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:27, December 30, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Indeed! TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 02:57, April 21, 2016 (UTC)

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  • Can you find a quote for the Bts section, perhaps from one of the Blu-Ray TCW sets?
  • Mention that phase II armor was specifically an improvement over phase I?
    • I feel like that's implied with "upgrade over." - Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:17, December 30, 2015 (UTC)
      • The reason I say this is because it currently links clone trooper armor while Phase II specifically improved on Phase I. Mayeb change it so that it says "an upgrade over Phase I clone trooper armor"?
        • I changed it so the word "standard" links to Phase I. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:24, December 30, 2015 (UTC)
  • Maybe mention Mot-Not Rab at the end of the first paragraph in the Biography section along with Amedda and Deechi? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:44, December 30, 2015 (UTC)

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Mee Deechi

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:14, December 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Apparently I'm on a bit of a TCW political kick lately. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:17, December 31, 2015 (UTC)

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AnilSerifoglu

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L'ulo

  • Nominated by: Cwedin(talk) 08:51, January 16, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first character nom

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  1. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 02:51, April 21, 2016 (UTC)

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Manoof
  • Straight off the bat, this page is in a maintenance category (templates with invalid url parameters). You'll have to go through your urls and fix this. It'll probably be one of your references, check the template page as it probably doesn't need the full url. For example, the starwars.com links don't need the http://www.starwars.com/ section of the url, and including it adds it to the category. I only noticed as I'm cleaning these categories up. As it's a nomination, I thought I'd drop a note so you can keep it in mind for future edits/nominations :) Manoof (talk) 10:17, April 19, 2016 (UTC)

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Quick note. Although there's no way to know for sure at this point, it's very possible that the Duros on the cover of Star Wars: Poe Dameron 3 is L'ulo. If he's in multiple issues of the Poe Dameron comic, which wouldn't surprise me given his connection to Shara, then this nomination will no longer satisfy FAN requirement #6. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:40, April 2, 2016 (UTC)

  • I've noticed that too. Hopefully we get an answer come Wednesday! (In the meantime, I'll be copy-editing the article. It could use a cleanup.) - Cwedin(talk) 17:06, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
    • Want me to do a copy-edit? Whenever I write something, I always miss things that other people end up finding for me. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:11, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
      • That would be fantastic! Also, if you have any tips on updating the article's images, that would be great. (I feel they're poorly utilized at the moment.) - Cwedin(talk) 17:20, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
        • Think I'll do a quick run-through after Brandon. Great Job, Cwedin! Nivlacanator(talk) 22:36, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
          • Haven't looked at this yet (sorry!), but as it turns out, the Duros in Poe Dameron IS indeed L'ulo. So he'll likely be recurring for awhile now. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:31, April 6, 2016 (UTC)
            • Yup, I just picked up a copy. I'll try to keep the article maintained with each issue's release (life allowing). :P - Cwedin(talk) 17:39, April 6, 2016 (UTC)


Volik

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, January 18, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Are you tired of your stressful life in the Core? Then come visit our wonderful resort on Volik! Hunt bountiful game, engage in a challenging climbing experience, and dine on exotic food! Updated: Please beware of the local pirates and smugglers, it appears they are very active this season."

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Shara Bey

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  1. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 16:37, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
  2. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 02:56, April 21, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Cwedin(talk) 03:08, April 21, 2016 (UTC)
  4. Harshg (talk) 18:50, April 23, 2016 (UTC)

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Cevan
  • The opening credits of the third issue of Shattered Empire reveals that Bey and Dameron joined the Alliance prior to the Battle of Hoth, so it may be wise to somehow work that into the first section of the biography. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 16:19, April 2, 2016 (UTC)
    • Good catch. Added. And thanks for adding all those links. Honestly I generally have no idea that half of these pages even exist. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:35, April 2, 2016 (UTC)

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Rescue of Tseebo

  • Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:33, April 5, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I think I started writing this 8 or 9 months ago, but I got super lazy with it. So I'm glad it's finally finished. Thank you to Cevan for giving it a once-over and link check before I posted this nomination. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:33, April 5, 2016 (UTC)

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  1. Harshg (talk) 10:20, April 5, 2016 (UTC)
  2. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 14:00, April 5, 2016 (UTC)

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J'Quille

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:24, April 9, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: When I started writing up this article I did not realise Tim Dry had written an entire book about it.

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  • I could not find the ISBN for Tim Dry's book anywhere and I'm not sure one even exists since it's only an ebook. I've included the ASIN instead since I wasn't sure what to include, but if it needs removing then let me know. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:27, April 9, 2016 (UTC)



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