Nomination comments: Santhou Lazith'chika. Mikka Reekeene. Siene Symm. Lens Reekeene. A many-month Mini-Project dealing with Reekeene's Roughnecks, only to achieve this specific goal. WP:AS presents: The alien species from The Long Shot Campaign!
I actually wonder if this article over-interprets Miniature Battles. My logic is this. We have a text description of a battle in one book, and a picture with very little context in another book. Currently the article claims there were two battles on the planet, but we do not know there was two, they could be only one. We just don't know. This raises the question of how we shold handle this. We can't say there was only one battle, nor can we say there was two. My preference would be to include the image in the final section of the History with a generic caption, and to remove the text of a second battle or the Imperials returning from the body. Then in the BTS to discuss exactly what I am discussing here: text with no image, image with no text. They could be the same, they could be different. This would retain the ambiguity of the source material in the article. Thoughts?
Absolutely disagree, but nonetheless changed; my arguments are under BTS. Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
I feel more comfortable about this now (I also removed the final paragraph from the history, which I think you intended to remove seeing as the sourcing was take out.) and like the explanation in the BTS. --Eyrezer 22:30, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
I would also like to see a little more information in the BTS regarding the Long Shot campaign and how it was originally one of several adventure sketches but this one was expanded to demonstrate how this could occur. --Eyrezer 01:58, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
Added, except that I think that, when the canon does expand a sketch, then it is how it occured, not how it could occur (Rookies: Rendezvous is the canon representation of that adventure in the RPG, and Barezz's canon death). Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, July 20, 2010 (UTC)
Oh, sure. I agree with that, I just think it is worth describing the development of the story line as it occurs in the book.
Is the information about them being clumsier and less dextrous than Humans from their game stats? If so, it's probably best to move this to BTS, since stats are not considered canon.
Is is appropriate to say that their noble titles and pomp had no cultural value? Is this what the OS says? In real-world anthropology, nothing a culture does lacks some sort of cultural value, so I was just curious if this should or could be reworded.
Should't the RPG and Game End templates be used somewhere in history to indicate that the sequence of events shown refers to the "accepted path"? Similarly, variants from the Longshot Campaign should be mentioned in BTS, if there are any.
Is there a reason that their language isn't mentioned in the Society and culture section? If they developed and used their own language, that should be worth mentioning there instead of simply in the History section.
"the last real civil war on Abonshee ended": if this war is specifically mentioned in a source, it should deserve an article.
"suffered damage in a skirmish": same as above.CC7567(talk) 04:10, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
Only one: "The caption identifies the miniatures as "lizard men," sculpted by Grenadier Models, Inc. for a different role-playing game, Martial Metals, and Ral Partha; the cabin in the background is identified as a product of Gallia Reproductions; and the stormtroopers, not identified, are the only figures specifically made for the Star Wars roleplaying game; they were also sculpted by Grenadier Models, Inc., the authorized distributor for West End Games' Star Wars roleplaying game." Too long sentence; please split. That's all. -- 1358(Talk) 08:05, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Cut just before "the cabin". How is it now? --Eyrezer 08:17, September 4, 2010 (UTC)