This guy is the reason we'll be looking up the names of every new TCW character in the Complete Spoilerpedia. -- Darth Culator(Talk) 01:19, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
I'd like to see the bio subsectioned. The bio starts way too suddenly; it doesn't establish all the facts it should (that he's a senate commando, the time period, preferably his species, etc). Additionally, the bio shouldn't be a summary of the sources (e.g. "His true loyalties revealed"...it should be established he was a traitor before it's revealed to the others, etc.) -- AdmirableAckbar(Talk) 00:15, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
My mistake. It could probably use a little more elaboration, if possible, though; it just suddenly goes from "Dooku bribed him" to "Ventress sent him the all-clear" after a several paragraph interval. -- AdmirableAckbar(Talk) 00:21, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
As far as subsections go, how many do you want? The only way it could work is one paragraph for "Republic service" and the rest for "Separatist agent." Grand Moff Tranner(Comlink) 00:23, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
Sorry for the post-vote objection, but if you're going to include non-quote description within a quote, as you have done for his death section, please at least format it correctly so the parenthetical description is not italicized.Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:35, 10 December 2008 (UTC)
For the record, I readded part of the quote, but not the part including the description. Grand Moff Tranner(Comlink) 12:11, 10 December 2008 (UTC)
This kind of just ends abruptly without a conclusion. Nothing can be explained to say what happened? I've never read this comic: "Faytonni and Med-Beq planned to flee the planet in the Nubianship, but the skiff's autopilot was set to return the craft to the Senate docking platform."