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Barrow OicunnEdit

(5 Inqs/1 User/6 Total)Edit

Support

1. Thefourdotelipsis 09:41, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
2. YVW, dangit! Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 06:26, 6 December 2007 (UTC)
3. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 02:03, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
4. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 19:56, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
5. Graestan^{(This party's over)} 00:57, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
6. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:29, 10 December 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

1. • From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
   • "He served aboard the Mas Ramdar during the Battle of Coruscant, and served the Republic faithfully"—A bit awkward.
   • Too many subsequent sentences beginning with "he."
   • Linking, such as piped links for gunner and the galaxy,among others.
     • Eh?
       • "Gunnery officer"…"pan-galactic"…you get the gist.
   • "Oicunn was given the chance to utilized inspired tactics"—Tense.
   • Could the image be moved? It appears that "The New Order" is the title more for the image in this arrangement.
   • —Graestan^{(This party's over)} 03:25, 9 December 2007 (UTC)
     • Apart from the "Eh?"d one, I've adressed all of them. Except for the image. I'm a bit of a stickler for having images adjacent to the relevant text, and if I flipped it, all the images in the article would be on the one side, which looks quite ugly. So I'm going to have to make a stand on that one. :P Thefourdotelipsis 07:15, 9 December 2007 (UTC)
       • Fair enough on the image.Graestan^{(This party's over)} 23:32, 9 December 2007 (UTC)
2. From the motel of Green Tentacle:
   • Don't we usually bullet lists in infoboxes?
     • I thought I'd try something different, since bullets look hideous in the infobox. If it conflicts with the MOS, or you think it's particularly objectionable, I'll add bullets, however.
       • Meh. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:29, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
   • Infobox eras different to icon.
     • Fixed.
   • Clone Wars: "With Humbarine devastated and abandoned, its defensive forces were abandoned, with Oicunn transferred to the Coruscant Home Fleet." Abandon one of those abandoneds. :P Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 00:03, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
     • Abandoned. Thefourdotelipsis 00:57, 10 December 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 23:49, 10 December 2007 (UTC)

• This beat just won't stop! Thefourdotelipsis 09:41, 3 December 2007 (UTC)