I don't think "majordomoship" is a word. Please tweak: "After this, however, his temporary majordomoship"
I wouldn't really say this. I'm not sure if I would actually call this POV or OR, but I'm not sure how you can tell what is luck and what is skill when referring to others: "Kwerve was similar to most Corellians in that he was extremely lucky"
Altered a bit.
Please check whether the GG5 info comes from the first or second edition. It may be pertinent to specify as such in the BTS, and then you should add the second edition to the source list if it's relevant
Altered refs and source list.
Additionally, you should research the other adaptations of ROTJ (comics, novel, radio adaptations, etc.) to see which ones include mention of the skull, and then those need to be added to the Apps/source lists as wellToprawa and Ralltiir 00:31, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
You're apparently also missing some info from the radio drama/script in regards to Luke's use of the skull, as well as a nice quote that could be thrown in there if you break up the last section a little. Please see me.Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:17, 4 July 2008 (UTC)
"Kwerve was similar to most Corellians in that he was extremely lucky, and this was one of the reasons Bib Fortuna loathed him so." Please reword this entire sentence or just cut it completely. Where does it say explicitly that Corellians are lucky?
There is a redlink in the Appearances section that needs to go.
Rebel Dawn might start in 2 BBY, but Kwerve doesn't show up until the book has reached ANH's timeframe (0 BBY). Please correct these dates, including his date of death. --Borsk Fey'lyaTalk 12:30, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
Not that this would make much of a difference, but would it be possible to put an image of his skull in the article? That would make this article unique. Grand Moff Tranner(Comlink) 23:28, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
I was originally going to include one, but there didn't seem to be space. However, the skull one would probably be better than the rancor one, so I'll grab a screenshot and try and add it tomorrow. -- AdmirableAckbar(Talk) 23:43, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
I was going to suggest the same thing. It would look really cool to get a screenshot of the skull flying through the air. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:34, 25 June 2008 (UTC)