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Jura Ostrogoth[]
- Nominated by: Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:42, February 2, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Much like he did with Armitage, Joe Schreiber presented me with a very likable character who I had hoped would become a major protagonist in the story. And, much like Armitage, Schreiber promptly and brutally killed this character in the following chapter.
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- Oh, how I love Red Harvest. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 01:47, February 14, 2011 (UTC)
- Mmm, brains! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 18:38, February 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 20:04, March 30, 2011 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 22:28, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
- —Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 1, 2011, 13:00 UTC
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Jujiggum[]
Just one: "The Sith Lord had intended for it to grant him immortality, but it instead only yielded an undead Sith teenager." My impression was that Scabrous only wanted to make himself immortal; he knew about Drear's procedure of eating a Jedi's heart and planned to do so himself so that he would remain in control of his actions, but IIRC Scabrous showed no intentions of having any of his students/test subjects also eat a Jedi heart and thus retain control.Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:45, February 17, 2011 (UTC)- Yeah that's what I meant. "Him" = Scabrous. I've reworded for clarity. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 18:33, February 17, 2011 (UTC)
Cav[]
There were a number of places where "Jura" was used instead of "Ostrogoth", which contradicts the MoS; I've replaced them with either Ostrogoth or a descriptor, but you should go over the changes to see if the sentences need to be rewritten for better clarity or are fine as they are.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:07, March 11, 2011 (UTC)- Everything looks fine to me. I didn't realize I had left so many "Jura"s in there. Woopsie, and thanks for taking care of them. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 10:17, March 11, 2011 (UTC)
Ecks Dee[]
"The Ostrogoth creature immediately traveled to the academy dormitory, where it ambushed and killed Scopique. The Zabrak was able to decapitate Ostrogoth before he was similarly transformed into an undead beast." The sentences essentially say the Zabrak was killed and that he then decapitated Ostrogoth before being transformed. Do you mean he managed to decapitate Ostrogoth before getting killed and transformed? If so, can you reword it slightly?- It's always a confusing situation with zombes, but I've changed "killed" to "infected." It's a bit more accurate.
In the intro, you describe Odacer-Faustin as "a chilly world"; however, in the bio, you describe his homeworld? Which one is correct; and if both are, can you… well, do something about it?:P 1358 (Talk) 14:33, April 29, 2011 (UTC)- Yeah they're both chilly. I've changed Odacer-Faustin to "frozen" though, because it has more actual ice than Chazwa supposedly does. I think. Haha thanks for the review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 21:49, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
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- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 13:00, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
- How about adding an image of something related to the guy? Some images make a wall of text look more interesting. :P 1358 (Talk) 20:33, February 9, 2011 (UTC)
- The thing is, there are pretty much no images that I can think would relate to this article. It all takes place on a world we've never seen before, the character has no pictures anywhere, and he doesn't have a droid friend or anything that I could put a model picture up of. AND the fellow on the front cover of the book isn't identified, and if he were, it has to be some other student that got Zombied later, because neither Ostrogoth or Nickter had lightsabers on them. :/ Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 22:19, February 9, 2011 (UTC)