- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Nuvo Vindi[]
- Nominated by:Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy)
- Nomination comments:Fresh outta the GA oven.
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)[]
Support
- I support odd (and insane) scientists. CC7567 (talk) 03:54, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
- Very clean. The ACs and CC slow-roasted this guy. Graestan(Talk) 23:03, 4 May 2009 (UTC)
- Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 11:01, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
- Thefourdotelipsis 00:00, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
- — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:25, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
- After some FAN polishing, it's good to go. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 00:52, 12 May 2009 (UTC)
Object
- A few things that I should have caught while it was on the GAN page:
Can it be mentioned in the intro that the virus had no known cure?Can it be mentioned that Amidala and Binks arrived in Theed, rather than later when the Jedi arrived?If it is stated as "members of the 501st Legion", it should probably have context. Otherwise, the clone troopers can just be mentioned there.- Contextificated.
"combat the enemies": a little awkward. Possibly try to substitute "enemies" for something else; the Confederacy and Republic were officially enemies, but Vindi hadn't yet actually met the Jedi, so it seems a little strange that they can hold so much tension against each other before even officially meeting.- replaced with "intruders"
When Vindi attempts to escape, it can be said that Kenobi was the one that was forced to halt his approach and prevent the vials from breaking.- Kenobified.
The shuttle can be mentioned earlier.- Sheathipeded.
Can it be mentioned earlier that Vindi was a scientist, rather than all the way down in the Bts?- Yay for mad scientists. (And ones appearing in The Clone Wars, too.) CC7567 (talk) 05:11, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
- Yay for mental instability! Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 01:33, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
Vindi isn't mentioned at all in the first paragraph of the "Discovery" section. Please cut down any extraneous detail here, try to keep the focus on Vindi. Thefourdotelipsis 23:11, 5 May 2009 (UTC)- While I agree, it was requeted by Cylka that that specific information be included during the GAN process. So who do I go with?Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 04:35, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
- The specific information? While I agree that you need some semblance of what was going on there, you can really cut it down a lot. Make it more general, less in-depth. Thefourdotelipsis 22:12, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
- K, I condensed a bit and added a Vindi mention at the end there. Is that bueno or should I do more? Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 19:47, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
- The specific information? While I agree that you need some semblance of what was going on there, you can really cut it down a lot. Make it more general, less in-depth. Thefourdotelipsis 22:12, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
- While I agree, it was requeted by Cylka that that specific information be included during the GAN process. So who do I go with?Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 04:35, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
- From the Desk of Atarumaster88
"Nuvo Vindi was a brilliant but obsessive scientist who experienced problems with his sanity." POV- Changed brilliant to talented, got rid of sanity bit, and changed the broad term "obsessive" to "obsessed with" a specific item. Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
A bit of clarification on how his activation of the timers caused problems for the clones-they seemed to disarm the bombs easily enough.- Reworked. Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
"Dr. Vindi's sanity was questionable." POV.- Removed. Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 18:25, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
- Why thank you! Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- Part of WookieeProject: The Clone Wars
- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:52, 12 May 2009 (UTC)