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Pelta-class frigateEdit

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  1. B32(Talk)I-find-this-atire-appealing 16:38, December 23, 2017 (UTC)
  2. Ben sc01t (Talk) 08:40, September 2, 2018 (UTC)
  3. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:07, September 6, 2018 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:38, October 14, 2018 (UTC)

ObjectEdit

Ecks-class objectionsEdit
  • I think the article would benefit from a separate "Role" section. The "Starship and vehicle class articles" section of Wookieepedia:Layout Guide indeed recommends such a section. Just by glancing at the infobox, it seems there should be more than enough material for a Role section.
  • I don't suppose there's a reason why engagements is capitalized in the section heading "Early Engagements"?
  • Some of the paragraphs in the article are huge. Please split up some of them. I think the article could also benefit from one or even two more images in the history section.
  • The Behind the scenes section needs to be sourced.
    • Sourced--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:33, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
      • Release dates need separate sources.
        • Added! I was under the impression that they didn't, sorry about that--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:53, March 1, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article is currently in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. Please go through all citation templates and supply backup links. Instructions can be found on the template pages.
  • Please go through all dates in the article and provide a valid source for them. None of the TCW episodes mention "22 BBY", for instance. 1358 (Talk) 00:20, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please read the instructions for the different fields of Template:Starship class. What you have right now in "role" and "model" is incorrect.
  • {{Imagecat}} should be placed somewhere in the article.
  • The Description section definitely needs to include information about the interior, which, if my memory serves me correctly, was quite prominently featured in "Brain Invaders". 1358 (Talk) 23:05, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • Are there no relevant quotes for the currently-quoteless sections? It's been a while since I saw "Brain Invaders", but I bet something applicable can be found there.
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Full sentences get a full stop.
    • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:15, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • Please note that some of the captions you punctuated are actually not full sentences and do not get a full stop. I've fixed it for you. In these cases, the verbs are in present participle and work as modifiers for the nouns. This is a bit of a tricky case, but generally if you have a single verb that ends in -ing in your sentence, it's participle. Let me know if this is unclear. 1358 (Talk) 22:59, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • All applicable articles need to be linked within individual references.
  • There are definitely more fields that you can fill in your {{cite web}} references. Authors, release dates, etc. Please also note that the displayed title should match that of the pages you're linking.
  • I'm not convinced that listing different release dates in the Bts is really needed in this article. All you're doing is create a need for more references. Just stick with the release year. 1358 (Talk) 19:34, March 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 22 doesn't really work as is because "the events of this article" take place over a long period of time.
    • That's what's been used on all dates related to the first half of Rebels Season 2, should I still remove it?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:27, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
      • The logic behind the reference should be fine, but you can't say "The events of this article" because the article covers a large timeline. 1358 (Talk) 23:37, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • On a quick glance, I can spot at least two instances where the same reference is used consecutively within the same paragraph without any other references inbetween. Either one of those references is incorrect, or the first instance is unnecessary.
  • I don't think we can really assert that 900 was a standard crew size for Pelta-class vessels since the Databank instance explicitly refers to the Phoenix Home. However, we can include that Phoenix Home had a crew of 900.
    • Star Wars: The Rebel Files also states that it had a crew of 900, should I switch references?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:20, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
      • Does it say Phoenix Home had 900, or Pelta-class ships in general? 1358 (Talk) 23:21, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
        • Pelta's in general. It's in a section where the details of the frigate are listed like length and manufacturer--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:27, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
          • Yeah, switching to that sounds good. 1358 (Talk) 23:29, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
            • Done!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:31, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
              • For consistency, you should probably use the same references for length and manufacturer etc in the infobox as in the body. 1358 (Talk) 23:37, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
                • Removed the reference all together as Rebel Files has all that info--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:42, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm willing to bet at least some of the TCW quotes have audio files that can be added to the quotes. See Category:Audio files from Star Wars television series. 1358 (Talk) 22:59, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
    • Haven't found any relating to the quotes unfortunately--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:31, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • Reference 27 is throwing a citation error.
    • Oops, must have happened when I switched from the databank to Rebel Files, fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:16, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • This just reads awkwardly due to the tense: "TB-73 arrives at the medical station; however, with no one at the controls, it is in danger of a collision." Go with something like "TB-73 arrives at the medical station with no one at the controls". 1358 (Talk) 16:00, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • You should definitely work blockade runner 0-9-9 into the prose instead of leaving it as a link in a quote.
  • The "Escape craft" field in the infobox has infobox-exclusive information.
  • I'd go with just "Frigate" in the "class" field seeing as the "assault ship" part is really for the variant only.
  • You're missing probably more than a few Databank entries from your Sources section. Barriss Offee's and Brain Worm's entries both mention a medical frigate. I'm willing to bet there are more Databank entries that contain at least a cursory mention of the medical frigate. 1358 (Talk) 23:17, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
    • In terms of databanks, I could only find those two, however, the episode guide for the Siege of Lothal has a ton of concept art and information, so I added that as a source as well, and I'm going to be adding the information tonight--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:03, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • Added information and additional images to supplement expansion--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:04, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • Please go through every single relevant TCW episode guide and check for mentions in not just the synopsis but also the trivia/episode/concept art galleries. The guide for "Brain Invaders" mentions the ship and currently you only have the "episode gallery" feature listed in the Sources. We've also been treating the old TCW episode guides as Canon seeing as the episode guides were all adapted directly from the (Canon) episode scripts (see Krix for precedent) so you'll want to go through those as well and see if anything can be added to the Sources. 1358 (Talk) 16:26, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
          • Okay, do I only add the episode guides or do I also add the corresponding concept, episode, and trivia galleries along with the guide?
            • Just the guides; only get that specific when you add references in the article. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:02, March 24, 2018 (UTC)
              • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:18, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
                • You're still missing the old episode guides. "Brain Invaders" and "Shadow of Malevolence", if not more, mention the frigate. {{SWArchive}} is the citation template you'll want to use. 1358 (Talk) 23:32, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
                  • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:29, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
                    • You should check the biography gallery sections on the databanks too, I just added the Ahsoka one but Kit Fisto's and Poggle the Lesser's also mentions medical frigates --Lewisr (talk) 18:41, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • Some notes in regards to citation templates. You can remove the unused parameters in {{cite web}}, just as you wouldn't include empty parameters in any other templates. You should use first and last only; author is just unnecessary if we know both the first and last names. Furthermore, authorlink is for internal, not external links, so it's not applicable here. date takes the form of YYYY-MM-DD in accordance with ISO 8601; you don't need to include year and month. 1358 (Talk) 18:49, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
    • Do I remove all of the unused parameters or just the ones you mentioned?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:36, March 27, 2018 (UTC)
  • The Brain worm incident aboard TB-73 is major enough to deserve a mention in the intro, imo.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:26, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • This reads a bit awkward, specifically the "Serving in the capacity of a supply ship" part as you talk about supply ships in the preceding sentence, so it feels a bit repetitive. Maybe you could establish a timeline instead? "In the second year of the war, the crew of aboard the frigate TB-73 was infected by Geonosian brain worms" or something similar would be more informative than what you have now.
  • "During the Imperial Era, the early rebellion, and later the Rebel Alliance, fought against the Galactic Empire and used Pelta-class frigates as medcenters" This just reads awkward. I would recommend you reword it something like this: "During the Imperial Era, Pelta-class frigates were used as medcenters by the early rebellion..."
  • "One notable example of the retrofitted Pelta frigates was Phoenix Home" Notable according to whom? Unless a source explicitly calls the Phoenix Home notable, it's your subjective interpretation and should be removed.
  • Darth Vader could use a title or something as context in the intro.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:26, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Keep in mind that anything you add to the intro needs to be mentioned in the body as well, and if needed, separately referenced in the body.
  • I feel like you should make "War continues" a section dedicated only to the TB-73 incident and move the last paragraph to "Later campaigns". You could then rename "War continues" as something more appropriate. 1358 (Talk) 20:53, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The "Sources" list is arranged in chronological order, by real world publication date. Please double-check your ordering here. I'm not sure if the new epguides have publication dates, but the old ones sure do, as do some of the other sw.com articles.
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:33, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • No, they're not ordered by publication date right now. All the old epguides (those that use {{SWArchive}}) were published prior to the starwars.com revamp so they go before the {{SW}} entries. Aside from the new epguides, there should be a publication date on the page itself. You can also use internet archive to find out when a page first appeared. 1358 (Talk) 21:31, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have quite a few duplicate links in the body. The good news here is that there's a gadget to weed these out. Simply go to your preferences and enable the tool in the "Gadgets" tab and you'll see what I mean. 1358 (Talk) 14:51, April 1, 2018 (UTC)
    • Looks like I need Java Script or something because I don't see the highlights--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:25, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • You'll need to "Enable personal JavaScript" in the "Under the hood" tab. Any modern browser supports JS so it shouldn't be a problem. 1358 (Talk) 10:01, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Okay, I checked the box for enabling JavaScript and have the check on the gadget for highlighting duplicate linkgs, but I don't notice any highlighting. How are the highlights displayed? Maybe I'm just overlooking it--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:40, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • It's in the My Tools section of the bottom toolbar. The duplicate body links are highlighted with red boxes. See this screenshot. 1358 (Talk) 21:53, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Ohhhh got it now. This is cool, learn something new everyday :) Got a question, for example, if Darth Vader is linked in the intro and I link Darth Vader in let's say behind the scenes or somewhere else in the body, would the second instance still be highlighted? How does that work?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:01, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
            • I have no idea of how it actually works, but it ignores intro links. My guess is it starts searching for duplicates after the first heading. 1358 (Talk) 22:04, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think the Characteristics would benefit from a division into two subsections. How you'll name them is up to you, but the current second and third paragraphs could probably make up one of the potential subsections. 1358 (Talk) 00:52, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
    • Added, how's that?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:30, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
      • The reason why I suggested the second and third paragraphs was that they contained mostly stuff related to the interior, so you could simply name that section "Interior". "Trait", "appearance" and "characteristic" are virtually synonyms so the current naming seems a bit redundant.
        • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:55, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
          • I've taken the liberty of doing some rearranging here. Take a look. The "interior" quote is perfect, but the main Characteristics quote is kinda lame. Do you think something else could be found? Please also make sure to double-check my rearrangement for any weird referencing. 1358 (Talk) 21:25, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
            • Your edit looks good to me. I'm having difficulty finding a quote that relates to the characteristics of the vessel, I'll continue to look for another one--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:29, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
              • I haven't been able to find another quote of greater quality or importance--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:46, April 12, 2018 (UTC)
                • Very well. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • With the addition of a new section, you should see if you can find a quote for it, as well.
  • I'd also like to see the intro just slightly expanded. You could probably put a paragraph break after "food rations" and add some more stuff about battles where they saw use during the Clone Wars. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • The B1 battle droid informing Grievous about the escaping frigates, as featured in the lead quote, is technically intro-exclusive right now. You should sneak that information into the body, allowing you to remove the quote caption link.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:59, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • I was thinking about sneaking it into the body. You don't need to be that detailed in the intro. 1358 (Talk) 21:52, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • "...and a mercy mission to Aleen, which saw the use of Pelta-class frigates as blockade runners and supply ships." A cursory glance at the body seems to imply that the frigates weren't used as blockade runners at Aleen. Seeing as Ryloth, Christophsis, and Kaliida Shoals all occur in 22 BBY, you could probably move the Aleen mission to a later point in the intro.
  • "until it was destroyed by Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Vader." You could include here where it was destroyed and link the battle in question. 1358 (Talk) 19:45, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. Also restructured the final body paragraph to include where--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:59, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • You should note in the infobox engine field that the frigate is equipped with one engine unit.
  • "Ray shields were equipped in a passageway to reach the bridge, acting as a security countermeasure." A countermeasure against what exactly? Simply "measure" would probably suffice. 1358 (Talk) 23:05, September 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Just noting that these objections are still unaddressed. They're a bit hidden so I thought I'd give you a heads-up. 1358 (Talk) 23:20, October 10, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done, thanks for the head's up--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:53, October 10, 2018 (UTC)
AVEdit
Imperators-class frigateEdit
  • Please get rid of the duplicate links. Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Write out the dating reference for 4 BBY without relying on the Senate Hall thread. Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:38, May 6, 2018 (UTC)
      • Firstly, fix the grammar/sentence construction mistakes in the ref. Secondly, you're going to have to be more specific with your sourcing: "according to StarWars.com." Lastly, the ref should be rewritten to adopt the BBY/ABY system. Imperators II(Talk) 20:09, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • How do I cite a starwars.com article in the note itself? Same as I would for any other reference? Added BBY/ABY, and--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:42, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Sure, you just paste the appropriate template where necessary in the ref. And I'm still not seeing the BBY dates in the ref. Also, from what's currently in the ref, you're saying that The Siege of Lothal is set in 4 BBY just because it takes place between a 4 BBY source and a 3 BBY — but those restraints could just as easily allow the movie to be set in 3 BBY. Imperators II(Talk) 08:46, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
            • Can confirm that Galactic Atlas dates the events of Siege of Lothal to 4 BBY. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 08:52, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
              • Great, I'll remove the note and source it to Atlas--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:30, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • Why is the first sentence of the BTS sourced to Rotten Tomatoes?? Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Removed. This was before I was told that I could just source it to the material itself.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:44, April 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • "The frigate also saw featured use" — what is this? Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • "one retrofitted Pelta-class frigate, Phoenix Home, served as the flagship of Phoenix Cell, which also consisted of the Spectres, under the leadership of Commander Jun Sato, until it was destroyed by the Dark Lord of the Sith, Darth Vader during the Siege of Lothal in the Lothal sector" — the mention of the Spectres is unnecessary in this sentence and causes clutter, and it makes it unclear whom Jun Sato commanded. Also, is the mention of the Lothal sector really necessary here? It reads kind of redundant. Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • What has the huffingtonpost.com ref quote have to do with the Rebels movie's release date? Imperators II(Talk) 19:44, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Removed for same reason as your third objection--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:44, April 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • How is the Rebels mention in the BTS notable? Imperators II(Talk) 20:09, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please provide release years for "Brain Invaders" and all the books mentioned in the BTS. Imperators II(Talk) 20:09, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • What has the last sentence of History got to do with the Pelta frigates? Imperators II(Talk) 08:46, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • Sorry, but ref 26 is just bloody confusing. Please fix the grammar, rewrite the ref for clarity, and don't forget that every fact you mention in the ref has to be sourced. Imperators II(Talk) 08:35, May 21, 2018 (UTC)
    • Couldn't definitively establish that the blockade was before 3 BBY, so I removed that part and fixed ref.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:30, May 30, 2018 (UTC)
      • But you should still establish a no-later-than boundary for Raddus sending the document. I mean, the guy died in 0 BBY, didn't he? Imperators II(Talk) 17:25, May 31, 2018 (UTC)
        • Added.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:45, June 19, 2018 (UTC)
          • You should specify which media exactly from Rebels's season two place the blockade of Ibaar after the Siege of Lothal. Imperators II(Talk) 16:14, June 20, 2018 (UTC)
            • I don't think I've seen a source that explicitly states that it follows chronological order, but I'll go try and find one. Will get back to you on this.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:58, June 20, 2018 (UTC)
              • Changed to Star Wars: The Rebel Files, since its contents are in chronological order--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:48, July 18, 2018 (UTC)
                • Do The Rebel Files mention the Siege of Lothal, though? Imperators II(Talk) 09:31, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
                  • Just saw that it didn't. I further fixed up the ref but I'm not sure how much further I can explain it given that when watching Rebels, the events are in chronological order.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:28, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
                    • After taking a fresh look at it, it now looks to me like we can do without the earlier date, which I've taken the liberty of removing. Imperators II(Talk) 18:17, September 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • Duplicate links in the last paragraph of History. Imperators II(Talk) 16:14, June 20, 2018 (UTC)
LewisrEdit

Shouldn't Raddus' message to Mothma stating in a document assembled by his aides that the rebel fleet consisted largely of several starship classes including Peltas be mentioned? The message is placed between the Blockade of Ibaar and Mission to Ryloth (Phoenix Squadron) if that helps with placement --Lewisr (talk) 16:43, May 10, 2018 (UTC)

  • I wasn't aware of that. What does the passage say?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:47, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
    • You should be considering you already used info from the message haha, I've linked to a preview where you can see it --Lewisr (talk) 16:54, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
      • Oh I see, I only included stuff from the chart, thanks Lewis!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:59, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
        • Don't know how I missed that. Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:09, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
          • You should when the blockade happened so its gives a rough idea of when the message was sent --Lewisr (talk) 17:18, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
            • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:10, May 14, 2018 (UTC)
              • You need to add a source that says she was 16 when she joined the rebellion and then one that says the mission take place in 3 BBY --Lewisr (talk) 16:15, May 14, 2018 (UTC)
                • Should be fixed now--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:19, May 14, 2018 (UTC)
                  • How do we know the blockade came after the Siege of Lothal and before the mission on Lothal? --Lewisr (talk) 16:25, May 14, 2018 (UTC)
SEEdit
  • "for the passengers and crew of the frigates, including a barracks for escorting clone troopers, private quarters for other passengers such as Jedi padawans, and a mess hall for dining" I don't think you need to specifically note Jedi Padawans here. You can probably also reword the first part as well to read "including a barracks for escorting troops, as the barracks aren't specifically for clones.
  • "The Alliance to Restore the Republic would later use the bridge as a communications array, while another bridge at the bow was retrofitted." Did the ship have two bridges, or did the rebels retrofit another room into a second bridge? Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:40, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does the Star Wars Encyclopedia of Starfighters and Other Vehicles say anything about why some "honorable" Separatist generals refrained from attacking Peltas? Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:36, June 1, 2018 (UTC)
    • Since Vitus is on vacation for the better part of the month: The book merely says "The more honorable generals in the Separatist fleet usually don't attack it". - AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:55, June 1, 2018 (UTC)
      • Thanks AV. As AV states, unfortunately, the Star Wars Encyclopedia of Starfighters and Other Vehicles doesn't specify further.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:45, June 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • "At some point during the early rebellion against the Galactic Empire, Kaeden Larte enrolled in the medical program" What is the medical program? Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:11, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
    • Re-read and corrected the sentence. It was a medical program on Alderaan--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:12, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
TommyEdit
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Full stops are only for full sentences.
  • Could you elaborate on the Pelta-class Assault Ship? In the image we see it winning in a broadside against a Raider-class corvette.
    • Added context in both history and description sections.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:37, August 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • A Pelta-class is briefly seen in Divide and Conquer from Star Wars Animation-Magazine. Please update the article accordingly. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 17:49, August 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • Do you know where I can access that? I haven't been able to find anything online, thanks--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:37, August 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • It's only available in Germany and Austria I believe. I can send you photos of my copy but I haven't got around to translating it yet, so you'll have to do that. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 07:35, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
        • That would be great, thanks!
          • Right, then would you mind coming onto IRC to discuss the best way for me to send the images to you? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 14:46, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
    • Is it stated to be Phoenix Home? Is it possible the cell had another Pelta-class? If not, at least mention in in the bts. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 17:07, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
      • It's not stated but we've never had any other source indicate that they had another Pelta, so I'm not really too confident in this comic. I'll add to the BTS.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:09, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
        • Added to BTS, let me know how it looks--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:14, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
          • Hmm, I'm not convinced that just because no other source has suggested the cell had a second pelta that it isn't true. We have info from a canon source, with nothing outright conflicting with it, so we have no reason to disregard it. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:01, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
            • We've never seen a second Pelta associated with Phoenix Cell anywhere except in the art in this comic, not when all of Phoenix Cell's forces fought in the Battle of Atollon, not before the Mission to Ryloth (Phoenix Squadron), and etc. There has also been no source such as Star Wars: The Rebel Files or others imply that Phoenix Cell had a second Pelta. I'm not convinced at all truthfully. If you insist, then I'll add it to this article and to articles corresponding with Phoenix Cell, however.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:50, August 12, 2018 (UTC)
              • Okay I see your point. Good work. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 07:20, August 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think you should add their ability to dock with a Haven-class medical station in the characteristics and possibly role sections. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 21:04, August 20, 2018 (UTC)
QGJEdit
  • Intro: Serving as medcenters, a B1 battle droid informed Grievous that several vessels of the class were active during the Battle of the Kaliida Nebula, as they and the Kaliida Shoals Medical Center were a target of the Malevolence, captained by General Grievous. Can this be reworded? The part about the battle droid makes it read awkwardly.
    • Reworded--Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:51, August 24, 2018 (UTC)
      • I actually think that the part about the B1 battle droid was completely unneccessary and irrelevant for the purposes of the intro. I have rewritten the sentence. Let me know what you think. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:07, August 24, 2018 (UTC)
  • In the second year of the Clone Wars, Geonosian brain worms infected Tango Company, the escorting crew of TB-73, and one participated in recovery efforts of the survivors of the Endurance following a sabotage of the vessel. This sentence could use some rewording as well. I initially thought that one of the worms particiapted in the recovery efforts
  • Characteristics: During the Imperial Era, the early rebellion, and later the Alliance to Restore the Republic I'm not sure that we can treat "the early rebellion" as an organisation of sorts. The phrase refers to a passage of time, not a specific group. "Early rebel cells" or something along those lines would sound better, IMO.
    • How is it now?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 01:51, August 24, 2018 (UTC)
      • The sentence I was talking about was in the "Characteristics" section. You changed a different one in the history section. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:07, August 24, 2018 (UTC)
  • I will continue the review later. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:40, August 23, 2018 (UTC)
  • Check for appropriate context throughout. I'm seeing some instances of missing context, mainly for ships like the Malevolence and the Negotiator, as well as some individuals like Boba Fett and Hondo. Also, don't forget that upon first mention, it should be "the planet Christophsis", not just "Christophsis."
  • Tango Company was ordered to accompany the Jedi, however, unbeknownst to all of them, clone trooper Scythe, a member of Tango Company, was infected by a Geonosian brain worm, previously seen and thought destroyed along with the Progate Temple, in which Queen Karina the Great used the brain worms to form a hive mind and reanimate dead Geonosian warriors to create an undead army. Please split this sentence. This is very run-on.
  • Was Skywalker aboard the Endurance with Windu or did he arrive on the Pelta frigate? This is currently unclear and can be interpreted either way.
  • Watch out for compound sentences that require commas. If the part of the sentence that comes after the conjunction can operate as a sentence on its own, then it should be separated by a comma. Example: Windu's defenses held, but the battle was costly to his men, and he requested medical supplies. "He requested medical supplies" can work as a sentence, since it has a subject and a corresponding verb. Therefore, it needs a comma before "and." I've fixed a couple of such sentences, but keep this in mind for the future.
    • I fixed all instances where I found such errors. Will continue to look and correct.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:55, September 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • The Battle of Endor could use a bit more context, IMO.
  • Regarding the supposed inconsistency in the Bts. Why is it that improbable to assume that the Rebellion had multiple Pelta frigates in their possession? Did some source explicitly state that Phoenix Home was the Rebellion's only Pelta frigate at the time? I think that the information from the German comic should be integrated into the article proper.
    • The Rebellion had multiple Peltas, however, Phoenix Cell only had one per the events of Star Wars Rebels and the comic only depicts Phoenix Cell as far as I can tell.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:55, September 4, 2018 (UTC)
      • This is exactly what I'm asking, though. Apologies if I may have phrased it incorrectly. How do we know that Phoenix Cell only had one such starship? Just because we only see one on screen in the show, doesn't mean that they didn't have another one elsewhere, or that they didn't obtain another between the events of The Siege of Lothal and the events of the comic. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:32, September 5, 2018 (UTC)
        • If they had another Pelta, which the comic depicts as looking identical to the Phoenix Home, then 50% of season 2's plot would be redundant and contradictory. For most of season 2, Phoenix Cell embarked on the goal of gaining a surface base because their previous Pelta-class frigate was destroyed and they needed a new center of operations. Later on, they decided to steal a Quasar Fire-class cruiser-carrier to fulfill the role of their carrier and flagship that their destroyed Pelta-class did before. To say that Phoenix Cell had another Pelta with a hangar and exact color scheme of Phoenix Home being used during that entire time would undo most of the season imo. It would be safer to assume that the appearance of a Pelta in the artwork of a small german comic is artistic error rather than assume that they undermined the plot of season 2, in my personal opinion.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:29, September 5, 2018 (UTC)
          • Very well. I understand your reasoning. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:07, September 6, 2018 (UTC)
  • Also, unless it is explicitly stated in the comic that it takes place after "Imperial Super Commandos," a ref needs to be constructed explaining how the chronology was deduced. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:07, August 24, 2018 (UTC)
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  • Some formatting issues to begin with.
    • In the Appearances, "Divide and Conquer" should be placed within the Shortstory template. It seems you will need to fill in a redlink for whatever issue of Star Wars Animation-Magazine that appears in.
    • The Phoenix Home Expansion Pack is properly formatted as such. Please fix this in the Sources and referencing.
    • The link in reference 9 is broken. Also, "Fleet Command" is capitalized as the name of that article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:17, September 29, 2018 (UTC)

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