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Vigrat Pomoner
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- Nominated by: 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 20:41, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Project Warfare
(2 ACs/5 Users/7 Total)
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Support
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- Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:00, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 12:11, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Did a quick grammar fix. I'll throw in my support assuming that Menk will be satisfied. Cade Calrayn
20:33, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Assuming Menkooroo is satisfied. Hanzo Hasashi 21:20, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
More Rogues! Menkooroo 01:14, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:17, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 00:48, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Lee's charge
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Please tell us that they fought against the Imperials on Hoth or at least that the AT-AT was Imperial.- In the Intro, right? If so, I fixed it. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:11, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- In the Intro, right? If so, I fixed it. 501st Dogma
After a unit of the Galactic Empire's military sent members of the Iotran Police Force into an ambush because Non-huMan lives were expendable: Could you rephrase that a little bit to reflect that this was the opinion of the Empire and not a fact?- Done. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:11, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
Please mention a little bit earlier that Pomoner served in Rogue Squadron.- We can not realy tell if he served in Green, Blue, or Rogue before the Battle of Hoth as Rogue Group, which he flew in at the battle, was created just before. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:11, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
Then his affiliation in the infobox should be Rogue Group and not Rogue Squadron, correct?Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:08, April 11, 2012 (UTC)- Rogue group later becomes Rogue squadron, though I'll change to Group in the info box. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 20:48, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
- Rogue group later becomes Rogue squadron, though I'll change to Group in the info box. 501st Dogma
- We can not realy tell if he served in Green, Blue, or Rogue before the Battle of Hoth as Rogue Group, which he flew in at the battle, was created just before. 501st Dogma
The P&T section is pretty much a repitition of the bio if you do not tell us what the fact about the ambush tells us about his personality.- Better?501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:11, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Better?501st Dogma
Maybe a mention that the Iotrans are a militaristic species?- Added.
- Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:50, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks fro the review. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:11, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks fro the review. 501st Dogma
Cav
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A male of the militaristic Iotran species, Vigrat Pomoner hailed from the Outer Rim planet Iotra. I don't think that some of the information in this sentence can be attributed to Warfare, such as the Iotrans being militaristic, or that Iotra is in the Outer Rim. If they can, can you please indicate where in Warfare (page numbers), or reference the sentence correctly using other sources.- Sources aded for militaristic and Outer Rim. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 22:06, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Sources aded for militaristic and Outer Rim. 501st Dogma
You do not mention that he was a member of the Iotran Police Force in the intro or bio at all. Also, it should be listed under his affiliation field in the infobox.- The book says "...Joined the Rebellion after an Imperial army unit sent his Iotran police force into an ambush..." according to this he is not a member of the police, but joined after IOtra's police force were sent into an ambush. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 22:06, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
- On second thought, I'm not quite sure. If you still believe he is a member, I'll put it in. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 22:07, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
- I believe the book reference shows he was a member of the police force. The use of "his" indicates a membership. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 23:24, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- I believe the book reference shows he was a member of the police force. The use of "his" indicates a membership. - Cavalier One
- On second thought, I'm not quite sure. If you still believe he is a member, I'll put it in. 501st Dogma
- The book says "...Joined the Rebellion after an Imperial army unit sent his Iotran police force into an ambush..." according to this he is not a member of the police, but joined after IOtra's police force were sent into an ambush. 501st Dogma
I feel some mention should be made of Farr's fate in the battle as well, considering that she was piloting the ship when it was shot down.- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 12:27, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 22:06, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
The Rogues!
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Wes Janson is currently reffed to the Shadows of the Empire multimedia project, but it should be more specific. I believe it's the novel that IDs him as Rogue Four.- Done.
Category:Humans?Same objection as my sixth one for Stax.- Fixed.
It can be tough to know what can be linked, but check out my copy-edit for an idea of what to link in the future. There were a few things I changed in my copy-edit for Stax that I found here too, such as "personal" instead of "personnel" and the lack of Category:Gunners --- be sure to take what you learn from each nom and apply it to all other ones.Good work. Menkooroo 20:25, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
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Where are you coming up with this information that this character's snowspeeder somehow appears in ESB? Outside of named characters (like Hobbie, Zev Senesca, etc.), no specific snowspeeders are ever identified in any of the ESB adaptations, certainly not in the film. My guess is you're just making a general blanket assumption that because we see a bunch of snowspeeders zooming around that one of them must therefore be Rogue Six, which is not an acceptable assumption to make. We only know canonically that this character appeared in the battle, not that he, or by extension his snowspeeder, ever appears on-screen in the film. Without any sort of literal clarification from something that says "this snowspeeder in this scene is Rogue Six," those two ESB appearances need to be removed, and the BTS needs to be revised.Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:51, May 18, 2012 (UTC)- 12 snow speeders appear in one frame in ESB, as well as the other sources. Since we know there were 12 fighters in rogue group, we can conclude that ine of those fighters contains Pomoner. If that does not count as a just reason to add them in, I"ll remove them, but Menk thought I should put them in Mullawny, and I put them in here as well. 501st dogma(talk) 10:52, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Which scene is this in which all twelve snowspeeders appear? I'd appreciate either a screen grab or tracking numbers so I can look at this myself. Toprawa and Ralltiir 14:44, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Shortly after the fighters launch, they fly over the Rebel trench. Actualy, they don't all appear in one frame, but fly across the screen one after another. I'll look for a tracking number. 501st dogma(talk) 20:01, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Here at 0:48, we have all the speeders fly over the trench. 501st dogma(talk) 20:11, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Just throwing my observation in - I only counted nine speeders flying over the trench, not twelve. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 09:16, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks like I counted wrong, thanks Cav. I'll remove the ESB bit in both Mullawny and Pomoner, but Menk says there is a 12 speeders in one frame in Star Wars Manga: The Empire Strikes Back 1, so I'll keep that as a fighter only. Article fixed. 501st dogma(talk) 20:48, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Having dealt with these sorts of retconned snowspeeder character appearances before, I've changed the formatting of the Appearances/Sources sections template to reflect the Tenk Lenso article, for one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:24, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Just chiming in, as I originally suggested "Fighter only" --- I don't think that (Retcon) applies here. If Vigrat had been a preexisting EU character that Warfare had retconned into being in the Battle of Hoth (like Barlon Hightower, for example), it would definitely be a retcon, but this is simply a case of Warfare giving a name and identification to someone who indirectly appeared in the Manga. I'm not sure where there's a retcon here. Menkooroo 17:54, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- I hope it's OK that I removed it; ping me on my talk page if you disagree. I just figured that giving a previously unidentified character a name isn't a retcon; otherwise every film character who received their name from the EU would need {{Ret}} next to their film appearance. Menkooroo 03:42, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Just chiming in, as I originally suggested "Fighter only" --- I don't think that (Retcon) applies here. If Vigrat had been a preexisting EU character that Warfare had retconned into being in the Battle of Hoth (like Barlon Hightower, for example), it would definitely be a retcon, but this is simply a case of Warfare giving a name and identification to someone who indirectly appeared in the Manga. I'm not sure where there's a retcon here. Menkooroo 17:54, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Having dealt with these sorts of retconned snowspeeder character appearances before, I've changed the formatting of the Appearances/Sources sections template to reflect the Tenk Lenso article, for one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:24, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks like I counted wrong, thanks Cav. I'll remove the ESB bit in both Mullawny and Pomoner, but Menk says there is a 12 speeders in one frame in Star Wars Manga: The Empire Strikes Back 1, so I'll keep that as a fighter only. Article fixed. 501st dogma(talk) 20:48, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Just throwing my observation in - I only counted nine speeders flying over the trench, not twelve. - Cavalier One
- Here at 0:48, we have all the speeders fly over the trench. 501st dogma(talk) 20:11, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Shortly after the fighters launch, they fly over the Rebel trench. Actualy, they don't all appear in one frame, but fly across the screen one after another. I'll look for a tracking number. 501st dogma(talk) 20:01, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Which scene is this in which all twelve snowspeeders appear? I'd appreciate either a screen grab or tracking numbers so I can look at this myself. Toprawa and Ralltiir 14:44, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- 12 snow speeders appear in one frame in ESB, as well as the other sources. Since we know there were 12 fighters in rogue group, we can conclude that ine of those fighters contains Pomoner. If that does not count as a just reason to add them in, I"ll remove them, but Menk thought I should put them in Mullawny, and I put them in here as well. 501st dogma(talk) 10:52, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
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It seems to me that the ambush should have an article.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:21, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
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- I have added some more appearances as his T-47 appears in other things. See Stax Mullawny's objections. 501st dogma(talk) 20:29, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
Gavar Khai's petty officer
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- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:59, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Last one of three.
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
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Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 13:10, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Nice job.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 03:07, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:55, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 06:06, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- 501st dogma(talk) 21:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 00:51, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Jujiggum
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Could you give the approximate birth date in the intro?- Added. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Can you reword the "fight"/"fought" redundancy from the last sentence of the intro?- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
IIRC, Operation Shieldfall's objective was to capture or kill Abeloth.- Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Why do you say that the Sabers ambushed the Jedi group, and then go back and say that they found the Jedi group?- Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Grammar in the first sentence of the P&T.- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Check out the tweak I made here. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 13:10, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
A bit of context on why/how using the Force on Nam Chorios had catastrophic consequences would be good- I hope the addition is fine. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
In the BTS, why don't you call him "The petty officer," or even "Gavar Khai's petty officer"? (The latter is a conjectural title, but it's also a completely canon, non-conjectural fact, so it can be used there.) There were lots of Sabers in the article, so saying "The Sith Saber" is less precise.- Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- That's it from me. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 12:27, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:41, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Jangeth
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Reload your infobox. More to come. JangFett (Talk) 16:03, April 13, 2012 (UTC)- Done. Bring' em on. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:27, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
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I'm not sure where you get the information that he was born around 20 ABY. Wouldn't several years older be some between 22 and 24 ABY? It might be a good idea to say before 27.5 ABY.- Good idea, fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:12, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
I would mention somewhere that he had a lightsaber.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:28, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Done, thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:12, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
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Tilden Kaah
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- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:01, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Some FloydProject: Lost Tribe for everyone!
(1 ACs/4 Users/5 Total)
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Support
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—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 04:10, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 11:59, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:23, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 06:49, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 00:58, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Just one: a world that in 5,000 BBY was visited by a group of crash-landed Sith: when they crash-landed, can we really say that they "visited" Kesh? AFAIK if you visit someone or something you actually want to.Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:31, April 14, 2012 (UTC)- Well, "visit" is usually used like that, but can also be used just to mean "to arrive at". IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 16:02, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry, my bad. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:23, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
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CT-4/619
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- Nominated by: 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 19:48, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
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Support
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- Watch out for spelling errors, I corrected quite a few. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:39, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
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Lee's charge
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Wasn't CT-4/619 the clone with whom Fett spoke before they were transported to Cloud City? If it is so, mention it in bio and intro.- Good catch. Added. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 12:19, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Good catch. Added. 501st Dogma
That the superweapon on Raxus Prime is the Dark Reaper is not mentioned in the book, so please source correctly.- Sourced. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 12:19, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Sourced. 501st Dogma
You can mention his exploits in the fight for the P&T and if he is the one mentioned in my first objection then add something from that encounter too.- Done.501st Dogma
(Comlink) 12:19, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.501st Dogma
- Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:29, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 12:19, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma
One more: Upon arrival, CT-4/619 de-militerized the lander that would take the orphans down by painting out all military related markings on the craft, as Bespin wanted no signs of war. : The last part is bothering me here. I do not believe that the planet wanted no signs of war. You could say that the officials of the world were neutral and therefore no war signs are allowed. Oh and please give context for Cloud City.Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:59, April 15, 2012 (UTC)- I've contexted Cloud City and neutralfied Bespin. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 13:28, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- I've contexted Cloud City and neutralfied Bespin. 501st Dogma
Jangston
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Reload your infobox- Done.
"CT-4/619 was part of a clone strike force that landed on the surface near to where the Separatist-aligned Sith Lord Count Dooku's headquarters were located." Check your grammar here"CT-4/619 worked on de-militarizing the hull of the lander that would take the orphans down from the ship." I'm not understand you here. So what exactly did he do to demilitarize the ship? Did he take out weaponry, ect? I think the "down from the ship" is most confusing here.- Better?
For the biography quote, by saying CT-4/619 first, it sounds like that he said "Impossible!" but I don't think this is the case. Since this is a two-speaker quote, you need to mention who spoke what first, then followed by the second speaker in the attribution field. So as an example, if Luke says something before Han in a two-speaker quote, it would be "Luke Skywalker and Han Solo" in the attribution field.- Done. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 20:52, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
- Again, to say CT was a clone then clone trooper when you're introducing him in the bio is redundant. The readers are aware that he is a clone trooper.
- Better? I pipelinked it to read trooper instide.
"CT-4/619 was one of the many clones of the bounty hunter Jango Fett born on the planet Kamino as a clone trooper in the Galactic Republic's Grand Army, and he fought in the Clone Wars between the Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems." Also, it sounds like CT fought with both the Republic and CIS during the Clone Wars. This sentence could be removed since you begin what CT did during the war in the following sentence.- I clarified it but did not remove it.
"The squad's number down to three plus Fett," Are you naming the squad's number as in troops + Fett? It's quite confusing as it stands.- Done, I think.
Since you mentioned that CT and Boba entered the LAAT/i in the intro, it's currently missing in the bio.- Added.
Could you give some detail about the questions Boba wanted answered? At the moment, it's odd that it's only briefly mentioned without suggesting what the questions were or why CT was talking to Boba if he's the pilot of the LAAT."and proceeded to dock the gunship in one of its hangars, taking the orphan to Jedi Glynn-Beti and her Padawan Ulu Ulix before seeing to his duties in the hangar" The last clause does not work in this sentence since he's proceeding to land then you say he took Fett to the Jedi. I don't think he did this while landing.- Better?
"and had the basic look of Jango Fett" Did the novel describe his looks? If not, you are speculating.- Removed.
- Do you need his entry in the CSWE or do you have it? Utilizing the {{CSWECite}} in the sources could work too. JangFett (Talk) 01:13, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- I have access to it on Forum:Entry requests, and its a sentence. Why do you ask?
Exiled Jedi
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- "Along with Fett, the squad's remaining troopers went down to three." Could you word this so that it is more clear what is going on? The way it is currently worded, I am unsure what you are trying to say. Are there two clones and Boba left? Does this include CT-4/619?
- Could you explain why they are waiting for CT-5/501?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:05, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Ferentina
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- Nominated by: Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 19:58, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Those dastardly droids have struck again!
(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
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- 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 20:20, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:17, April 16, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:27, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:21, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
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Lee's charge
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In the infobox and the bio you say that Ferentina was destroyed, while in the intro you just say it suffered major damage.- Adjusted. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:50, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Adjusted. Corellian Premier
Two Seraph-class urban landspeeders became stuck behind a fallen tower.: That's a little bit out of context. Where the speeders from Naboo's military forces?- Its unknown who they belonged to, just added that they were in the town. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:50, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Its unknown who they belonged to, just added that they were in the town. Corellian Premier
- Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:35, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:50, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
Return of the Jedi
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First off, "...the Trade Federation Droid Army attacked and destroyed Ferentina..." Can we get an article for this attack, or is it part of the Liberation of slave camps?- Yes, it happens during the battle. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 01:17, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Yes, it happens during the battle. Corellian Premier
Is there a reason why we can't have the CSWEcite for ref 3?- I just didn't think just specificity was needed. Should I add it? Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 01:17, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- I went ahead and switched it. I would have sofixited it originally, but sometimes the template can't be used if it appears in various entries.
- I just didn't think just specificity was needed. Should I add it? Corellian Premier
The BTS should have something mentioned about the alternate options that are mentioned in the Gamemechanics template.Good work.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 00:22, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking it over. Is the BTS expansion okay? Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 01:17, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good. Good job.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:27, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good. Good job.—Cal Jedi
- Thanks for looking it over. Is the BTS expansion okay? Corellian Premier
Exiled Jedi
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- How about an article on the hangar?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:08, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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- #1 on old CAN to GAN list. WP:VG project.Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 19:58, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
Camp Sagol
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- Nominated by: Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 22:17, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: My entry in WP:VG's group project
(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
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- 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 23:25, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Take a look at my changes. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:22, April 16, 2012 (UTC)
Good work on WP:VG's group project.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 00:33, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:48, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- No errors I can see Enochf 05:09, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
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Only one thing: "....and 2 laser turrets protected the camp. Four power cores provided power to the base's buildings. A network of additional laser turrets was spread throughout the area." Try to put the laser turret parts together, not seperated by the power core sentence.- Ah yes, adjusted. Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 23:06, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Ah yes, adjusted. Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
- Great work on WP:VG. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 22:29, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
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Give a little bit context in the intro for the Battle of Yavin. Otherwise, we have no idea when the battle took place.- Added. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:57, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Added. Corellian Premier
On whose side where the two cities threatened by the camp? Who fought in the Battle of Krant.- Added. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:57, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Added. Corellian Premier
Context for Dewbacks.- Too much, too little? Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:57, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Too much, too little? Corellian Premier
- Good job. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:40, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Why thank you. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 21:57, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Why thank you. Corellian Premier
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- Currently the introduction doesn't have a whole lot to do with Camp Sagol. Could you perhaps add something to the second sentence saying that there were forces coming from there?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:12, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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- Really, the only applicable quote just says that there are two camps in the area. Would it be worth it to add? Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 22:17, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
Luminous (battlecruiser)
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- Nominated by: 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 21:56, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Now Stellar Halo is the only one left
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- Looks Good <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 22:02, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:02, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 00:54, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 09:29, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 21:07, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:14, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Shouldn't the article be titled Luminous (battlecruiser) with a lower case "b". The source supports a lower case.- Deja vu. I've seen this objections before.. Done. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 23:45, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Deja vu. I've seen this objections before.. Done. 501st Dogma
Likewise, the source only states that Luminous is a battlecruiser, not a Star Battlecruiser. Nit-picky? Yes. Accurate? Yes.- Completed
The Luminous was a Star Battlecruiser, part of the Imperial affiliated Kuati Sector Forces during the Galactic Civil War, - nothing states that the Luminous was part of the fleet during that time. Only that the Luminous was there in 8 ABY. That statement makes it seem that Luminous was stationed there for years, which is unconfirmed.- Done.
in 8.5 ABY,[2] during the Galactic Civil War, when the Galactic Empire fought against the Alliance to Restore the Republic, who whould later be known as the New Republic after their victory at Endor in 4 ABY. - this is a choppy sentence, jumping from 8.5 to 4 ABY in reverse chronological order. All that needs to be known is that the New Republic was fighting the Empire in 8.5 ABY, not the history.- Fixed.
Mention should be made of the transmission from Event Horizon to Venir that signalled Suprise Squadron to jump in.- Done.
When hailed by a representative of the New Republic, - lets not keep him anonymous. At least namecheck him and his position within the NR.- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 12:24, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review and done. 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 23:45, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review and done. 501st Dogma
More: description section is needed.- Done, but its short.
Mention of the NR gaining majority shareholding in KDY.- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 12:36, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
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- Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:31, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
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- Exiled Jedi
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The Stellar Halo was a battlecruiser part of the Imperial aligned Kuati Sector Forces as of 8.5 ABY: Sounds kind of akward, can you reword this?- Better?
Maybe make it clearer that the ship was destroyed when sent in the sun.- Done.
The Galactic Civil War is intro-exclusive.- Fixed, sorry about that.
Context for the Luminous.- Contexted it and the event horizon.
- Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:58, April 29, 2012 (UTC)
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XLT-014 labor droid
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- Nominated by: Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:19, April 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Here we go!
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- Transformers! ~Savage
22:41, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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I think the lead is giving too much extraneous information. Rather than saying it was produced in the decades before the Clone Wars, and then explaining what those were for the next ten words, maybe pare it down to say they were produced in the decades before 22 BBY?- I changed it in the intro, but I left it the way it was in the History section to have some difference between the two.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- I changed it in the intro, but I left it the way it was in the History section to have some difference between the two.--Exiled Jedi
In the lead, you mention they could cause problems, but leave it at that. Perhaps add at least one example? In the "Role" section too.- The only story/example I have available is the droid on the cruise ship. I added a mention of this in the intro.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
It sounds like these are two different things. The droids can cause problems by misreading labels or being overconfident, according to the "Role" section. However, the droid on the cruise ship sounds like it was reprogrammed by the pirates, which is no fault of its own. Am I misreading this? ~Savage
18:46, May 29, 2012 (UTC)- What I was trying to say was that the only example of anything that the droids did was the events of the cruise ship. The fact that they cause problems is mentioned, but it is not elaborated on. Sorry for the confusion.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:40, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
OK, this is my final suggestion, and I'll leave it to you whether you want to adopt it or not. If I were you, I'd revert to the version of the lead before you added the bit about the reprogrammed droid there. To me, it sounds like the lead is implying a link between problems with limited intelligence and the reprogrammed pirate droid, but I don't think those things are connected. I think it was better before I asked you to change it, so sorry about that. :) ~Savage
22:41, May 29, 2012 (UTC)- Done.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 22:51, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.--Exiled Jedi
- What I was trying to say was that the only example of anything that the droids did was the events of the cruise ship. The fact that they cause problems is mentioned, but it is not elaborated on. Sorry for the confusion.--Exiled Jedi
- The only story/example I have available is the droid on the cruise ship. I added a mention of this in the intro.--Exiled Jedi
Not sure if we can assume that all of them were yellow with blue sensors, since that seems customizable. Maybe say that some of them had those colors?- How is it now?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- How is it now?--Exiled Jedi
Their height and their sensor seem unrelated to me, so I'd rearrange the info so they're not in the same sentence. Maybe move the blue sensor bit down to the part where you talk about their sensory capabilities?- Better?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Better?--Exiled Jedi
Add red to the infobox since at least some of them had red heads?- Added.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Added.--Exiled Jedi
I'd add that their repulsorlifts gave off a blue glow when in use.- Added.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Added.--Exiled Jedi
A few words of context are probably necessary for heuristic processor. You can crib from the RX-24 article for that if you want. :)- Thanks, fixed.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks, fixed.--Exiled Jedi
Is Bestine's galactic location pertinent? I'd be tempted to ditch it. That's it. Nice work! ~Savage
14:56, May 13, 2012 (UTC)- Removed, thank you for the review.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Removed, thank you for the review.--Exiled Jedi
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- Barn-burner 4!--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:19, April 29, 2012 (UTC)
30th Anniversary Bash
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- Nominated by:
OLIOSTER (talk) 00:40, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A painting GA?! On the Wook?! It's more likely than you think.
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—Cal Jedi
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- Plagueis327 01:12, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- ~Savage
17:27, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:23, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Only one thing: context for galactic civil war in intro.- Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 20:43, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
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Watch your tense; in the lead, it bounces back and forth between present and past.Can you reword in the "Description" to make it clear that Salacious Crumb is not one of Jabba's guards? And isn't that Lando?I'm a bit wary of the lead on this one. The lead gives pretty much all information from the "Description" and the "History," so why have a lead at all? I'd pare it down or remove it as redundant. ~Savage
19:25, May 11, 2012 (UTC)- Cut a bit of it, better?
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Sorry for the late reply! I'm still uneasy with the lead. There is no non-BTS info in the main article that is not also in the lead. Can you cut it down to the bare essentials? I'm not sure you need to go into such detail about the Galactic Civil War in the lead, for one. ~Savage
16:06, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Cut a bit of it, better?
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I do believe this fall under WP:ENT. :P MasterFred
(Whatever) 13:29, May 2, 2012 (UTC)
- That it does. You're welcome to add a talk template or whatever.
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- Nominated by: Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 01:27, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:Part of the Barnburner 4 <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 01:27, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
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- IN-GA = IN, so GA-IN = GA? ~Savage
18:57, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you for contributing to the barn-burner!--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:32, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
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Intro can definitely be expanded.- expanded.
It's not completely sourced.- went through and sourced all paragraphs and infoboxes.
- Still some stuff not sourced.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 18:48, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Not sure what am I missing? <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:17, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
- The first paragraph of the bio wasn't sourced when I first saw it. It looks good now, but the refs in the intro will have to go.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 03:51, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
- Ok fixed, couldn't remember if we were supposed to link in intro. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:49, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- OK. Good job. I'll try to finish my review soon.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:34, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
- OK. Good job. I'll try to finish my review soon.—Cal Jedi
- Ok fixed, couldn't remember if we were supposed to link in intro. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:49, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- The first paragraph of the bio wasn't sourced when I first saw it. It looks good now, but the refs in the intro will have to go.—Cal Jedi
- Not sure what am I missing? <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:17, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Still some stuff not sourced.—Cal Jedi
- went through and sourced all paragraphs and infoboxes.
- I'll look more at it later.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:31, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 17:11, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
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Please restate the information about who IN-GA 44 was at the start of the biography section.- done.
"...returning to Coruscant" You never state that she was on Coruscant. If she was on Coruscant before please add that information.- reworded.
- Did she go with Cross?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:52, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- fixed.<-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Did she go with Cross?--Exiled Jedi
- reworded.
Please identify the VIPs.- reworded.
- Could you provide some context on who these people are?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:52, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- added in more information of the people.<-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Could you provide some context on who these people are?--Exiled Jedi
- reworded.
Please fully source the infobox.- all sourced<-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 17:19, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
You should also add more context to various parts of the article. Some of the locations, people, and organizations could used to be described briefly.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:41, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
Please give context on the following items in the body of the article: Alessi Quon and Imperial Research Station 61.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 23:54, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- added.
Remember to include all information from the infobox in the body of the article.- added more information to Characteristics section. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
You still do not mention her red eyes when she has the virus in the body of the article.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 23:54, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Added.
- added more information to Characteristics section. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
Is there any information on her from Blaster?- no idea, I don't have any access to that source. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Hmmm, you should probably check, but I don't know who has the magazine, sorry.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 23:54, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- This is just a section in the magazine that talks about upcoming merchandise, so I don't think it would have anything.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:32, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
- This is just a section in the magazine that talks about upcoming merchandise, so I don't think it would have anything.--Exiled Jedi
- Hmmm, you should probably check, but I don't know who has the magazine, sorry.--Exiled Jedi
- no idea, I don't have any access to that source. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:28, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- I will look it over again after you take care of these.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:52, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
Please mention the 3 BBY date in the body of the article.- added.
Solo and Chewbacca currently appear out of nowhere, could you explain why they were there and provide some context.- Added some context and reworded some things.
Context on the Millenium Falcon.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:16, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Added in class of the Falcon, not sure what else is needed. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:39, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Added some context and reworded some things.
If he doesn't want the virus to fall into Imperial hands, is he still working for the Empire. Please explain this.- added explanation.
Also, could you put some more quotes in the article?- Added several quotes, including a QOTD.
Any good ones for the Characteristics section?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:16, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Added a quote to that section. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:39, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Added several quotes, including a QOTD.
- Perhaps more later.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 23:54, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks! <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:08, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
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"She was a Massad Thrumble design..." Here, it's unclear that "Massad Thrumble" is a person. Can you rephrase? Like, "She was designed by the droidmaker Massad Thrumble" or something?- reworded.
I think you should spell out that HRD means "human replica droid" upon first mention in both the lead and the body.- done.
Context on Jahan Cross in the intro and body.- done.
Would it be possible to condense the first sentence of "Bio" down to the next section? It's better to not have one-sentence sections whenever possible.- It's short, but it is two sentences.
Context on Milosh Muhrlein and Imperial Research Station 61.- added.
The second-to-last sentence of "MIssion to Wayland" is confusing. She goes to Coruscant to Cross, but suddenly she's separated from him and in some office? Can you rewrite that bit?- reworded.
- In general, I'm not sure why you need section breaks in "Biography" at all. None of them is longer than a paragraph anyway. I'd just have a three-paragraph "Biography section" and ditch the breaks.
- personal preference, I like having it broken up by sections, makes it easier to read (and edit) IMO.
- I'm leaving this one unstruck, since I still find the section breaks superfluous. Sections of one paragraph are unnecessary in my opinion. However, I will still support once everything else is taken care of, since I acknowledge that this is a minor point. ~Savage
21:47, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm leaving this one unstruck, since I still find the section breaks superfluous. Sections of one paragraph are unnecessary in my opinion. However, I will still support once everything else is taken care of, since I acknowledge that this is a minor point. ~Savage
- personal preference, I like having it broken up by sections, makes it easier to read (and edit) IMO.
The list of people she gives comments on at the party is a bit difficult to parse. Are the semicolons in the right places? They should go between each person + description. So, "Han Solo, a Corellian smuggler; Chewbacca, a Wookiee mechanic; R2-D2, an astromech droid; Wicket W. Warrick, an Ewok warrior..." Does that make sense?- yeah that was my bad, been a long time since I took grammar and punctuation :)
In general, I think you use "she" and "her" too much for the droid. Try replacing some of the pronouns with her name or nickname to add variety.- Tried to vary it more.
In the Etti IV part, make sure you're telling the story from the droid's point of view. For instance, add a sentence that IN-GA found a connection between Nar and the Starks before Cross contacts her, since she would have known about that connection first, not him.- Reworded.
Context on the Eclipse.- added.
Conext on Iron Eciplse virus.- added.
Who reprogrammed her with the virus? Can you reword active voice to include this information?- added.
"was ordered to kill them." Can you reword active voice to say who ordered her to kill them?- added.
You say she opened fire but was unable to kill Cross. Can you elaborate a bit? Did her shots go wide? Did the guns fail?- added.
Can you elaborate on why she was unable to kill Stark when Cross ordered her to? Was this also something to do with the matrix?- added.
"by knocking out the repulsorlift generators..." What repulsorlift generators?- added.
"flew down to the generators..." Did she literally fly? Or just descend?- literally flew.
Whoah, where'd the Falcon come from? Can you mention it earlier? It kind of appears out of nowhere.- added more context.
Can you add a few words about how the Eclipse fell into Reltooine's atmosphere? Was the station orbiting Reltooine?- added.
In "Characteristics," you should go into much more detail about the droid's physical characteristics. Discuss her body shape (humanoid and female), her plating color (silver), her photoreceptor colors, her facial features, number of fingers on each hand, etc.- expanded section with more details.
I think you can do more. She is not just humanoid, she is a female humanoid (i.e., she has breasts). You don't' have to mention boobs directly if you don't want to, but you should mention that she has the shape of a female humanoid. Also notable for the description are her antenna-like ear-things, and her largely featureless face. ~Savage
21:47, May 14, 2012 (UTC)- Ok added in those details.
- expanded section with more details.
In the infobox, you say she was created by Alessi Quon, but this person is not mentioned in the article itself.- From the Mission to Wayland section: "where she was being evaluated by her creator, Alessi Quon."
OK. Maybe add a few words of context for Quon upon first mention then, as in occupation and possibly species if you think it's relevant. ~Savage
21:47, May 14, 2012 (UTC)- Added per Exiled's suggestion also :)
- From the Mission to Wayland section: "where she was being evaluated by her creator, Alessi Quon."
Her droid degree should be mentioned in "characteristics," with a bit of context about what it means.- added.
Although you use the word "she" and "her" to describe the droid in the body, you should probably explicitly say that she had female programming under "characteristics."- added.
I'd say her plating is silver and purple before gray and purple, maybe?- fixed.
Were her blasters in her wrists (infobox) or in her forearms (Characteristics)?- fixed.
Can you add publication dates for the story arch she appears in? Publisher too? In other words, mention Dark Horse Comics and give range for when the stories were published, like June to September, 2012, or whatever.- added.
Can you upgrade Reference 3 with Template:Cite web? That's it for now! Good work so far. I'll take another look once these are addressed. :) ~Savage
14:13, May 7, 2012 (UTC)- removed that ref altogether, since it's stated in issue 2 that she's an HRD. Thanks for the review! <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 16:16, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
One more thing: Does the comic reveal why she's considered a Human replica droid when she doesn't look Human at all? Does she lack the skin of a HRD or something? ~Savage
21:47, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
- No idea, she's just identified as a HRD in interviews with the author and on the letters page of issue two. Basically just says she's an HRD without skin or hair. Thanks for the reviews. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:32, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
- <s>OK, I think maybe that's worth mentioning in BTS. Maybe cite CSWE and its definition of HRD, then mention that the author calls her a HRD despite the fact she doesn't meet the criteria. ~Savage
18:41, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- <s>OK, I think maybe that's worth mentioning in BTS. Maybe cite CSWE and its definition of HRD, then mention that the author calls her a HRD despite the fact she doesn't meet the criteria. ~Savage
- Ok I added some more to the BTS but I am not really sure it's worth such a mention. She's identified frequently as a HRD without the hair and skin. To figure out why she's a HRD and not a standard droid, I guess we'd have to read the author's mind, since it's never been referenced as far as I can tell. All sources just state she's a HRD and leave it at that. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:50, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
Well, if a source called a character a Rodian, but they had three eyes and fur, we'd probably say something about the fact that "Character X is called Rodian, despite the fact that he does not match the physical description of that species as shown in The New Essential Guide to Alien Species" or some such. I think you should do the same here, by citing what HRD means in another source (such as The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia or The New Essential Guide to Droids). ~Savage
22:15, May 22, 2012 (UTC)- Ok added a statement about how she's called an HRD even though she doesn't have skin or hair. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:38, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
Can you cite a source for the fact that HRDs are supposed to have skin and hair? Then we're golden. ~Savage
01:55, May 23, 2012 (UTC)- OK added a source. IMO it's not really worth a mention in the BTS, but I don't mind adding it in for completion :) <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 04:24, May 27, 2012 (UTC)</s>
See Culator's comment below. Apparently, the no-skin HRD thing needs to be mentioned in the "history" and "characteristics" sections instead, since it's directly mentioned in the comic! ~Savage
14:09, May 27, 2012 (UTC)- Ok I see what you mean. Fixed. Thanks for the review. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:43, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- OK added a source. IMO it's not really worth a mention in the BTS, but I don't mind adding it in for completion :) <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 04:24, May 27, 2012 (UTC)</s>
- Ok added a statement about how she's called an HRD even though she doesn't have skin or hair. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:38, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- No idea, she's just identified as a HRD in interviews with the author and on the letters page of issue two. Basically just says she's an HRD without skin or hair. Thanks for the reviews. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:32, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
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- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:38, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Moar FloydProject: Lost Tribe. And before you ask: no quotes. None.
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—Cal Jedi
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- Hanzo Hasashi 00:14, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
- I find it amusing that a translator wouldn't get any quotes.--Exiled Jedi
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- Nominated by: Eyrezer 11:49, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A sneaky Ho'Din gardener that defied Gardulla the Hutt.
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- 501st dogma(talk) 21:34, May 3, 2012 (UTC)
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- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 07:33, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
"This article's going to be on the Main Page." "Oo, Wen?" Menkooroo 03:02, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
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- Uncle Oo Wen...--Exiled Jedi
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I think the pleasure garden should probably have an article of its own. That's it, though! ~Savage
19:20, May 11, 2012 (UTC)- Link added and article created. --Eyrezer 09:20, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
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- Nominated by:
501st dogma(talk) 22:01, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:A brief break from Warfare, though parts of this are still sourced to it...
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—Cal Jedi
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Please reload your infobox. Also 501st dogma, I would recommend that you concentrate on your other noms before nominating others. You still have many others above. JangFett (Talk) 23:46, April 30, 2012 (UTC)- Reloaded. I realize I have quite a few noms on both the GAN and CAN pages. I was just waiting for objections. I'll slack off on nominating GANs unitl at least one has passed, but I still intend to get some articles ready to be nominated in the next few weeks.
501st dogma(talk) 00:01, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Reloaded. I realize I have quite a few noms on both the GAN and CAN pages. I was just waiting for objections. I'll slack off on nominating GANs unitl at least one has passed, but I still intend to get some articles ready to be nominated in the next few weeks.
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IIRC, the Galactic Civil War didn't begin until 2 BBY. However, in the article, you switch back and forth from 3 BBY to 3 ABY. Was it 3 ABY, or does EGTW or one of the other sources change this?- Corrected, sorry about that.
"...given to him by a Rodian warlord." - Can we get a link for this Rodian?- Linked.
"...Fett discovered a dead stormtrooper..." - For this stormtrooper, too?- Linked. I'll create the articles soon.
- Good work. While Jang is absolutely correct about not getting bogged down with too much, it is good to see you keep active.—Cal Jedi
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"In response to the loss of one of their capital ships, the Imperials put in an Inquiry..." Because "Inquiry" is capitalized, it seems like it is a subject worth contextualizing. If so, please link and give a smidge of context, since it just appears suddenly to the reader. That's all, not bad.—Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 6, 2012, 00:28 UTC
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Judging from the BTS explanation, the 3 BBY date requires the double ref of Wreckage and the CSWE, which you've done in the infobox --- shouldn't the dating in the bio get the same sourcing?Menkooroo 04:49, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
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"…one of the largest shipyards in the galaxy at that time." You haven't yet mentioned a time period in the body, so the reader won't know what "that" time is.- Done.
The infobox says that it was present for the Civil War, but the article and infobox both say that it was destroyed a year before the war began.- Removed.
"Galactic" is repetitive in the first sentence of the History section. On this note, however, I don't think you need the context regarding the Galactic Civil War either here or in the intro. The way you currently use your mention of the war is to establish it as a reference for the timing of these events; you don't need to say who it was fought between in order to do that.- Better?
I think you can put "at least one" in the passengers field of the infobox, since we know the ship could carry at least one stormtrooper.- Added.
Is it a canonical fact that the ship's very first sighting IU (not just our current earliest knowledge of it) was at the battle where it was shot down?- Tis our earliest knowledge of its spoting. I'll remove it if you want.
- Yeah, that would be best. Just because it's the earliest we've seen it so far from our OOU POV, doesn't mean it's the earliest it's appeared in the galaxy from a totally IU POV. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:34, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Tis our earliest knowledge of its spoting. I'll remove it if you want.
The Janelle article suggests that Aron hired Fett in 0 ABY—is that the case?- No proof. Boba could have been hired in 1 BBY, and just never gotten around to doing the job.
On that note, do we know with certainty that Aron hired Fett precisely "Three years after the incident," as you currently state?- Added "Around".
Do we know why the Adjucator was sent to destroy the Anya Karu?- Nope, no reason given.
"…The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia, published in 2008 as an encyclopedia of everything Star Wars." This is a bit redundant.- Done
"The entry in the Encyclopedia clearly stated that Janelle Harcourt died after the Anya Karu's sabotage, making the incident happen prior to 3 BBY." This doesn't fully clarify things unless you also mention to the reader the source that says that Janelle had died by 3 BBY.- Done.
- One question on this: does the source say it was at least a year after Janelle's death? Could not both have happened in 3 BBY? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:34, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 19:03, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
One last question to add: right now you have the fact that the Civil War didn't break out until after 3 BBY sourced to Star Wars: Empire 28: Wreckage—does the comic actually state as much?Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:34, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
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- Nominated by: Cade Calrayn
03:46, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First GAN as project leader for WookieeProject Warfare... can't let 501st do all the work!
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- Good work on Warfare! 501st dogma(talk) 23:53, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Jinzler 11:29, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
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JangFett (Talk) 21:02, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed misspelling of "millennia" (for shame), 'sgood now Enochf 05:17, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
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Please reload your infobox. More to come. JangFett (Talk) 14:33, May 1, 2012 (UTC)Fact tag in the infobox JangFett (Talk) 20:55, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
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The redlinks for articles in the info box need to be created.- Blue!
Intro: context for Pius Dea, so we know what the "religous cult" is.- Done.
Behind the scenes is needed.First paragraph in aftermath, source the whole thing, not just the first two sentences.- Took me a while to find a good source.
Not really a complaint, but in the "conflict" section, some of those paragraphs are quite short. Consider puting some together.- Done.
- Good Work.
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The conflict is mentioned in the new issue of Star Wars Insider, which seems to indicate that it was also known as the "Pius Dea Civil War." This information needs to be included in the article. --Jinzler 17:37, May 5, 2012 (UTC)- Done.
In the introduction, you might want to give some context as to who Contispex was, eg "the Pius Dea leader Contispex XIX," or something along those lines.- Done.
"Unknowningly influenced by the Jedi, many believers joined the movement and renounce the traditional Pius Dea faith in favor of one more favorable to alien species." This section is unclear as to whether the "believers" were joining the Renunciates or the Pius Dea proper, so please clarify this.- Done.
"The schism sparked a brutal civil war between the Renunciates and the Faithful." Please clarify here that the "Faithful" were those that stayed loyal to the Pius Dea cause.- Done.
You might also want to consider giving some context on what an "OR/D" is, or just linking to "Ordnance/Regional Depot" directly, rather than to the acronym, because some readers might not know what an "OR/D" is.- Done.
"Every single member of the faith was removed from office, and Jedi Grand Master Biel Ductavis assumed the office of Supreme Chancellor." The word "office" is repeated twice here, in close succession. You might want to consider revising this, to give the wording a little more variety.- Done.
Do you think that it is worth adding the quote from Tinker, Tailor in which the war is mentioned, eg the one giving in the Battle of Uquine article? It seems to be the only quote that in any way relates to the article.- Might as well.
Those two redlinks in the navigation template need to be killed, because GAN rule 8 states that there should not be any redlinks in templates.- Done.
- Now that you have added the "Pius Dea Crusades" navigation box to the bottom of the article, the redlinks in that are now going to need to be eliminated as well. --Jinzler 18:12, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- I am currently awaiting the outcome of a Trash Compactor on many of the Crusades, so this objection is in the process of being resolved.
- Now that you have added the "Pius Dea Crusades" navigation box to the bottom of the article, the redlinks in that are now going to need to be eliminated as well. --Jinzler 18:12, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.
- I found this article quite interesting to read, and I look forward to seeing more Warfare nominations from you in the future. --Jinzler 21:39, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
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- There are two redlinks in the Pius Dea Crusades box at the bottom of the article. There is also a redlink in the Insider template in the source section, which is not allowed.--Exiled Jedi
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Ragnos Lakes
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- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:19, May 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: FP:LT. Yup, I'm writing articles on lakes now.
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FP:LT! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:00, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
- 501st dogma(talk) 12:28, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
I'm liking this project better than TOTJ.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:33, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Nice article.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:15, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Biggestleo 02:29, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
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The current wording in the intro and body makes it sound like Wroth wanted to poison all of the villages, but he only poisoned Tetsubal. The rest were done without his will or knowledge by Seelah. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:33, May 2, 2012 (UTC)- Fixed. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:35, May 3, 2012 (UTC)
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"A Lost Tribe messenger..." - Minor objection, but is there any reason why this guy shouldn't get an article?—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 03:24, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:34, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
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Crisp-E-O donut droid
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- Nominated by: Menkooroo 22:10, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: If this passes, it'll be my fiftieth GA. What better way to celebrate than with doughnuts?
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- Mmmm...doughnuts.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 12:41, May 8, 2012 (UTC)
- Curse you! I have now added "donuts" to my grocery list! :P Trak Nar Ramble on 05:30, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Now if only they add a beignet droid to canon. ~Savage
14:42, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
Congrats on number five-oh.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 19:53, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- I love donuts <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:09, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:35, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
In the olden days, it would have been practically mandatory for you to take a topic this delightfully silly and Fourdot it up to twice this size. XD --Darth Culator (Talk) 14:16, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- Love it! Now get to work on getting your 50th FA!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:45, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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"after selecting the most delicious." Most delicious what?I'm not sure: should the affiliation be to the restaurants or to Dexter directly? With a droid, it's hard to say. What do you think?Perhaps a couple words of context on what "fifth-degree" means?The "History" seems appropriate for an article on Dex's Crisp-E-O, but perhaps not so much for an article on the droid model itself. Maybe pare it down a bit to talk less about Dex's struggles and court settlement, etc., to simply mention that Dex had one of these and it followed him from one business to the next? Other than that, looks great. ~Savage
14:02, May 11, 2012 (UTC)- Thanks for the review! I believe I've addressed all four. I doughnut think I've missed anything. Menkooroo 05:28, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
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Chall Bekan
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- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi 18:13, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: It was a CAN, then it became too long.
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—Cal Jedi
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- <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:56, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good! ~Savage
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IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:26, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
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In the BTS section, it states that Chall Bekan is an anagram. An anagram uses all the letters of a word. You've got it properly linked, but it should be rephrased to indicate it's a tuckerization and not an anagram.<-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:22, May 11, 2012 (UTC)- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi 18:23, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
- Umm... it IS an anagram. "Chall Bekan" is an anagram of "Kallenbach." --Jinzler 12:58, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Indeed. The only reason I changed it was simply because Omicron objected, but "Chall Bekan" is an anagram of "Kallenbach." Hanzo Hasashi 04:26, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- ah sorry, didn't realize it was an anagram of only the last name. My bad. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:56, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Indeed. The only reason I changed it was simply because Omicron objected, but "Chall Bekan" is an anagram of "Kallenbach." Hanzo Hasashi 04:26, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Umm... it IS an anagram. "Chall Bekan" is an anagram of "Kallenbach." --Jinzler 12:58, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi 18:23, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
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See this SH thread (should it be a CT?) I started about the canonicity of Chall Bekan's Force-attunement. Hanzo Hasashi 03:49, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
Lin-D
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- Nominated by: ~Savage
15:53, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: If only Ben Burtt had been able to convince Lucas to put him in the prequels! ~Savage
15:53, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
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- I always thought this guy was kinda annoying :P Plagueis327 17:06, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
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- 501st dogma(talk) 20:11, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
Trusting that you grab Menk's objection. Good work.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 19:42, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
Lin-D... hop... hmmmm, this sounded funnier in my head. Menkooroo 05:09, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:00, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- Nice ^_^ Enochf 05:12, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
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In the infobox you state Lin's a 3rd degree droid, while in the Characteristics section you state he is a 2nd degree droid. Which one is it?The galley Lin-D was a slave on was called the Roon Clipper. That should also be added to the article.- Could you add it to the intro too?
- Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 16:31, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Ah, the first was a mistake and has been fixed, and the latter identification has been added. Thanks for the review! ~Savage
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- Ah, the first was a mistake and has been fixed, and the latter identification has been added. Thanks for the review! ~Savage
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Is there not any information on who voiced him?Is there any more information on the drones that attacked the galley? Were they the ones that knocked out the motor and the main sail?How exactly is he indirectly mentioned in the Insider article? I was just wondering if anything could be taken from there.Good work!--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 17:30, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- The episode credits list ten voice actors plus Anthony Daniels, but no information is given on which actor played which character. Do you think I should list the ten actors and say he was played by one of them? As for the drones, I've tried to clarify that they caused the damage. Finally, the episode guide in Insider merely mentions, "An entertainment droid makes constant jokes" or some such. Nothing really useable. Thanks for the review! ~Savage
17:55, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- I wouldn't add anything about the voice actors, looks good.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 18:00, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
- I wouldn't add anything about the voice actors, looks good.--Exiled Jedi
- The episode credits list ten voice actors plus Anthony Daniels, but no information is given on which actor played which character. Do you think I should list the ten actors and say he was played by one of them? As for the drones, I've tried to clarify that they caused the damage. Finally, the episode guide in Insider merely mentions, "An entertainment droid makes constant jokes" or some such. Nothing really useable. Thanks for the review! ~Savage
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Masculine programming is exclusive to the intro and infobox! I demand a body-mention and a category!Excellent work, though, :D Menkooroo 19:11, May 18, 2012 (UTC)- Done, man. :) ~Savage
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- Done, man. :) ~Savage
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- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi 15:32, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Not to be confused with Ristt. With credit to Skippy Farlstendoiro
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- I think that this has enough valuable and good information to be highlighted as a good article. --The Lampshade... (talk) 11:16, May 27, 2012 (UTC)Lamp774
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Quick one: Alex Newborn didn't conflate the two characters; he speculated that Ristt was a stylized take on Bob.Menkooroo 20:11, May 15, 2012 (UTC)- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi 20:38, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
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- In the introduction, isn't calling them heroes a point-of-view statement?
- Well Heroes of Yavin is a canon IU name given to them. Hanzo Hasashi 02:17, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
- That's all, good work.--Exiled Jedi
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- In his intro, I didn't explicitly mention he was Human, since all native Corellians are Humans. I did directly mention his species in the bio afterward though. Hanzo Hasashi 21:48, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
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- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 13:21, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: This page is sorely lacking a Cav nom, and a DarkStryder nom. Luckily, I have rectified this situation.
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Just in time.—Cal Jedi
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Duel in the Gnarls cave
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- Nominated by: Cade Calrayn
22:08, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: The beginning of my Hero of Tython project for Wookieeproject The Old Republic.
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- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
Good work. However, please watch your linking, as I've had to fix a lot of it in your articles. Also, the category for Category:Battles of the Flesh Raider uprising does not exist. You can either make a category for it, or remove that category from this article. I'll leave that to your discretion.—Cal Jedi
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- Plagueis327 18:07, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
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I could be wrong, but aren't words such as "unknown" not allowed in the infobox?Intro: the Jedi's remarkable combat skill resulted in Callef's death... Isn't "remarkable" POV?- Actually, Derrin Weller stresses the fact that the Jedi Knight character is exceptionally skilled in combat, even for a Padawan. It's part of the character's backstory that you can learn about in the game's first conversation with him. Cade Calrayn
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- Okey doke.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Actually, Derrin Weller stresses the fact that the Jedi Knight character is exceptionally skilled in combat, even for a Padawan. It's part of the character's backstory that you can learn about in the game's first conversation with him. Cade Calrayn
- That's all for the moment, bro.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 07:46, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Very interesting, Cade. Gotta get a better laptop.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
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- Please mention the 15 Flesh Raiders and the fact that they died in the body of the article.--Exiled Jedi
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Rabolow
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- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:11, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: FP:LT. You know the drill.
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Hella Brün
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- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 10:50, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Short and sweet. Seriously, any shorter and it would be a CA.
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Hella good job. Menkooroo 05:29, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 05:42, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Dang, you're not kidding. That's a short article. Cade Calrayn
14:55, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:36, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
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- Nominated by: Cade Calrayn
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- Nomination comments: To YouTube for quotes! Or Menk shall be unhappy!
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- 501st dogma(talk) 00:07, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good. Note my edit to his personality and traits, I really don't see why his species and gender should be counted as either. Hanzo Hasashi 04:06, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Winterz 02:02, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
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- Exiled Jedi
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Context for Tython in intro.- Done.
Note: Throughout the article you link to blue and grey. Get rid of those and instead link to color, as the others are disambig.- Actually, blue is an article. But I changed blue-grey to a link to color.
- It's actualy large disambig article. 501st dogma(talk) 00:07, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- It was always my understanding that it was one's personal choice to link to color at the first opportunity, or to link all individual colors, but it just had to be consistent throughout the article. Hanzo Hasashi 04:05, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- It's actualy large disambig article. 501st dogma(talk) 00:07, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Actually, blue is an article. But I changed blue-grey to a link to color.
Last paragraph in bio. What saber?- Um.... Laotah's. The sentence has been reworked.
Is a link to his actual lightsaber to much to ask for?- Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 20:16, May 17, 2012 (UTC)
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I think you should mention the Hero of Tython in the introduction. Good work on the article.--Exiled Jedi
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Is it any possible to make a 'Powers and Abilities' section (noting that he's force-sensitive)?Winterz 00:32, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
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- Context on who/what Flesh Raiders are.
- Done.
- Previously mentioned above, a Powers and Abilities section could be added since Laotah wielded a lightsaber. If not, then a mention should be made in the PT section. - Cavalier One
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Droid optimized interface
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- Nominated by: Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:04, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Was going for a CA, but ended up with nearly three hundred words.
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- I can find no fault with it. Good work.
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—Cal Jedi
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- Let's go, WP:KOTOR! Love it!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:33, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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- For the droid barn-burner.
- Per the discussion of implant level here, the droid upgrade level is game mechanics.--Exiled Jedi
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Whrr
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- Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 20:30, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I couldn't take it anymore. I had to nominate something.
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If Whrr is a third-degree droid please add that information to the "class" field of the infobox.Please create an article for the library branch.I would mention him trying to dissuade Fett from hologames in the body of the article as well.- Mentioned.
Is Whrr his real name?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:25, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
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- Young Boba Fett frequently visited the library branch because his bounty hunter father was the prime clone for the Galactic Republic's new clone army, produced by the Kaminoan cloners. - this should be reworded. You make it sound like Fett visited the library because Jango was the prime clone, which doesn't make sense. If he visited the library because Jango was residing on Kamino because he was the prime clone, then that would be more logical.
- Done.
- The layout appears to be wrong. For specific individual droids, the headings should Biography and Characteristics. A cursory glance of other droid status articles shows this to be the agreed upon format. - Cavalier One
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- Nominated by: Biggestleo 21:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First Artical nomination
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Lacking linking.Infobox-only facts.Sentient species are capitalized.AAlphabetize your categories.1358 (Talk) 21:29, May 18, 2012 (UTC)- Done, I think. Biggestleo 22:35, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
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Context for Aldeeran. You might have to rephrase it to something like this to get the context in: "and a native of the planet Alderaan".I think the intro needs to be expanded. Things to add include her death and the kidnapping of Organa.Context for the Galactic Civil War in Bio.- Still remains.
- Does it look better now? --Biggestleo 03:12, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Still remains.
io needs context for Shell. - one of the infobox facts Xd mentioned.- More to come. Don't despair, although this is your first nomination and you will be recieving lots of objections, everybody has that on their first nom. Good Work! 501st dogma(talk) 21:33, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Please also indicate here when you have completed someone's objection. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. --Biggestleo 22:06, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Please also indicate here when you have completed someone's objection. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
Link for Alderaanian faction.- From my understandings, there is no artical created about the faction. Also, in the book, it only said "the group" and it has no real name for it. So should I make an artical about it? --Biggestleo 23:16, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
Are there any better quotes that describe Dray's character more? 501st dogma(talk) 23:00, May 18, 2012 (UTC)- Well Halle Dray is a secondary character, but i'll try to find better quotes. --Biggestleo 23:11, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Looked over the book, all Dray says are hate words to the Organa Family so yeah nothing special. --Biggestleo 02:20, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Well Halle Dray is a secondary character, but i'll try to find better quotes. --Biggestleo 23:11, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
Could you give context for Shell in the bio? All you would need to do is say "the young boy Shell" or something like that.- Done.
Please note that only in the infobox do you use {{Ref|reference}}. Otherwise, you can just use a normal reference. Also, after you use <ref name="Hostage">''[[Rebel Force: Hostage]]''</ref> once, you should use <ref name="Hostage" /> for any other references. Please change those things in the article.- Done.
- You can do that in the info box too. Use {{Ref|<ref name="Hostage" />}} in the info box after you have the full reference.
- Done.
- You can do that in the info box too. Use {{Ref|<ref name="Hostage" />}} in the info box after you have the full reference.
- Done.
Bio needs to mention Death star destroying Alderaan. Maybe give some context to it too.- Done. Biggestleo 14:01, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
In Bio, please elaborate on the actions that brought the Empire there. JUst a little context, including here affiliation with the Rebels. 501st dogma(talk) 12:17, May 19, 2012 (UTC)- Done. Biggestleo 14:10, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Could you state how Organa got Alderaan involved? 501st dogma(talk) 14:43, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo 15:18, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Could you state how Organa got Alderaan involved? 501st dogma(talk) 14:43, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo 14:10, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- I'll look it over agian soon. Do you have all the info available for Dray in the article? Is there any more about her death? 501st dogma(talk) 19:01, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Yes, thats why I nominated it, right? Thanks for the review. Biggestleo 21:44, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- I'll try to upgrade the artical. Again, thanks for the review. Biggestleo 22:06, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Yes, thats why I nominated it, right? Thanks for the review. Biggestleo 21:44, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
Add something to P&T about Dray not suspecting the Empire to betray them.- Done.
- Now it reads Her leadership in the group contributed to disbanding the faction and getting most of the group killed, even though Dray not suspecting the Empire to betray them." The grammer is a bit off here, and the faction did not disband, it had more of a downfall.
- Done.
- Now it reads Her leadership in the group contributed to disbanding the faction and getting most of the group killed, even though Dray not suspecting the Empire to betray them." The grammer is a bit off here, and the faction did not disband, it had more of a downfall.
- Done.
"Dray fled Alderaan and went to Delaya, the third planet from the star Alderaan in the Alderaan system. It was the sister world of Alderaan before Alderaan was destroyed." In this sentence, you need to state why Dray fled. Also, you could probally remove some context, as you have quite a bit.- I'm not sure why Dray fled. As for the context, if I remove them, I might break an objection request.
- In the intro you say she fled because of the destruction of Alderaan, so say that. As for the overcontexting, in this section of the sentence, "Delaya, the third planet from the star Alderaan in the Alderaan system. It was the sister world of Alderaan before Alderaan was destroyed." You can just say that Delya was the sister world in the Alderaanian system. 501st dogma(talk) 20:21, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo (talk) 23:21, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- In the intro you say she fled because of the destruction of Alderaan, so say that. As for the overcontexting, in this section of the sentence, "Delaya, the third planet from the star Alderaan in the Alderaan system. It was the sister world of Alderaan before Alderaan was destroyed." You can just say that Delya was the sister world in the Alderaanian system. 501st dogma(talk) 20:21, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm not sure why Dray fled. As for the context, if I remove them, I might break an objection request.
Last two sentences of bio both of however in them. Eliminate one. 501st dogma(talk) 17:40, May 21, 2012 (UTC)- Done. Biggestleo (talk) 20:14, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
First paragraph in the bio is out of order. The destruction of the Alderaan needs to be mentioned before Dray being a leader of the faction.- Dray was leader of the faction before the destruction, so does it still need to be mentioned before?
- If she was the leader of the faction before the destruction, the group cannot be called "A group of Alderaanian refugees", as Alderaan has not been obliterated yet, so they're not refugees yet. You will need to change this throughout the article. Also, in the intro, you should mention she was the leader of the group before Alderaan blew up. 501st dogma(talk) 18:54, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Whoops, Dray was never confirmed to be in the faction when she lived on Alderaan or if the faction existed then. However, it is confirmed that she was in the faction when she lived on Delaya. The book didn't give details about the faction itself.Biggestleo (Meeting Room) 15:54, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- If so, my original obejection still remains. 501st dogma(talk) 16:21, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo (Meeting Room) 21:28, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- If so, my original obejection still remains. 501st dogma(talk) 16:21, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- Whoops, Dray was never confirmed to be in the faction when she lived on Alderaan or if the faction existed then. However, it is confirmed that she was in the faction when she lived on Delaya. The book didn't give details about the faction itself.Biggestleo (Meeting Room) 15:54, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
- If she was the leader of the faction before the destruction, the group cannot be called "A group of Alderaanian refugees", as Alderaan has not been obliterated yet, so they're not refugees yet. You will need to change this throughout the article. Also, in the intro, you should mention she was the leader of the group before Alderaan blew up. 501st dogma(talk) 18:54, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Dray was leader of the faction before the destruction, so does it still need to be mentioned before?
J'er Nahj should be mentioned in the bio where they're looking after shell.- Done.
Rebel Force: Hostage needs to be linked in the BtS. I know this is a SOFIXIT, but you should get into the habit of doing it.501st dogma(talk) 16:38, May 26, 2012 (UTC)- Done. Biggestleo (Meeting Room) 16:52, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
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Context on Delaya in the introduction and body.- Described Delaya in body. Just a question, does it need to be in the introduction?
- No, just having in the body should be fine, but is the information you added from Rebel Force: Hostage. If not, you will need to source it to another source.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:04, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Information about Delaya is in the book. Biggestleo (talk) 16:12, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- No, just having in the body should be fine, but is the information you added from Rebel Force: Hostage. If not, you will need to source it to another source.--Exiled Jedi
- Described Delaya in body. Just a question, does it need to be in the introduction?
The Alderaanian faction article says that it is conjectural. If that it so, then you can't use it like a proper faction name in the article. You should say something like "a faction of Alderaanian refugees" or a "group of Alderaanian refugees".- So rename artical? Biggestleo (talk) 14:43, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- He means just changing how its stated in the Dray's article. eg, change Alderaanian faction to a group of Alderaanian refugees (Notice the pipelink). 501st dogma(talk) 14:46, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, I see. Done.
- He means just changing how its stated in the Dray's article. eg, change Alderaanian faction to a group of Alderaanian refugees (Notice the pipelink). 501st dogma(talk) 14:46, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- So rename artical? Biggestleo (talk) 14:43, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
There are still unlinked items in the article. Everything needs to be linked once in the introduction, once in the infobox, and once in the body of the article.- I'm not an expert at linking stuff, but I linked everything I could find. Biggestleo (talk) 15:15, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Here are the things that I fixed with the linking. Please take a look.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:04, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- So what now?
- Here are the things that I fixed with the linking. Please take a look.--Exiled Jedi
- I'm not an expert at linking stuff, but I linked everything I could find. Biggestleo (talk) 15:15, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
"Dray also had the gift of leadership..." Could reword this; currently this sounds a little strange and doesn't really reflect how she got almost her entire group killed.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:07, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo (talk) 14:57, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- I thinking that you could mention something saying how she was a leader of the people and that her leadership contributed to them dying.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:04, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.
- I thinking that you could mention something saying how she was a leader of the people and that her leadership contributed to them dying.--Exiled Jedi
- Done. Biggestleo (talk) 14:57, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
"With Organa with them, Dray and her followers contacted the Imperials and turned in Organa for the reward they had long hoped for." could you reword the start of this sentence to make it flow better. It might also be a good idea to combine this paragraph with the previous one.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:04, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Biggestleo (talk) 16:30, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
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Broon Ters
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- Nominated by: Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 04:17, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Oh boy, this was a fun article to write. Sure thought it would be a CA.
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- Cheers for blatant plagiarism! NaruHina Talk
01:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- I had a classmate named Arun, and a professor who liked to pronounce his name this way. :P Hanzo Hasashi 15:06, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 05:49, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
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- Naru has a bad habit of neglecting things
Context on Het in the intro.- Added.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 17:40, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Added.--Exiled Jedi
"Broon Ters was an individual who played a gambling card game called pazaak at some point against the Twi'lek Doton Het, who was alive around the time of the Dark Wars, a series of conflicts between the Galactic Republic and the remnants of the Sith Empire." Run-on sentence.NaruHina Talk
16:56, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 17:40, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed.--Exiled Jedi
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Don't think it'll hurt to mention the Dark Wars in the intro.- Added.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 19:05, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Added.--Exiled Jedi
- Other than that, looks solid to me. Let's go, WP:KOTOR.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:05, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 19:05, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.--Exiled Jedi
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- Broon Ters was an individual alive at the same time as the Twi'lek Doton Het, who lived during the Dark Wars, a string of conflicts fought between the remnants of the Sith Empire and the Galactic Republic. - this sentence is kinda long. Any chance you can break it up a little? - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 08:40, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm sorry, but I don't see how I can break this up effectively without having a sentence just for the description of the Dark Wars. Any suggestions?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:07, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm sorry, but I don't see how I can break this up effectively without having a sentence just for the description of the Dark Wars. Any suggestions?--Exiled Jedi
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- And yes this is canon!--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 04:17, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
Dorotsech
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- Nominated by: Winterz 12:47, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I believe it complies with all requirements so would like to try. If I don't succeed well at least I'll know what is wrong and may improve it. It has around 400 words.
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Hey, you should kill the redlink in the intro.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:22, May 21, 2012 (UTC)A P&T section would be good, too. It can be short, considering he doesn't look like he says much. Also, see if you can get a at least 1 quote, from either himself, the apprentice, whoever.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:28, May 21, 2012 (UTC)- Done. However a confusion came up and I had to switch a few details...(it was Lord Grathan and not Skotia who captured him) so now there's another red link in the biography..should I take care of it?Winterz 17:49, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- You can, though it's not extremely necessary now.
- Done. However a confusion came up and I had to switch a few details...(it was Lord Grathan and not Skotia who captured him) so now there's another red link in the biography..should I take care of it?Winterz 17:49, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
Since I haven't played the game, it seems to me, going by what is stated in the P&T, that Nox is the apprentice who slew Dorotsech. If this is the case, please mention it in the bio.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:10, May 21, 2012 (UTC)- In the future, you might want to watch the linking, as it's a good idea to link to an article at the first opportunity. Don't get discouraged, because criticism is a good thing, and serves to help you become a better editor. If you need some assistance, I and others would be happy to provide advice.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:14, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Argh I had it linked to Darth Nox but for some reason, I unlinked it. Either way, it's fixed now. So..anything else until I gain your support? Winterz 18:23, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
Reword the paragraph in which Dorotsech encounters the apprentice, ex., Dorotsech encountered Zash's apprentice… and so on. The article is cenetered on Dorotsech, not the apprentice.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:37, May 21, 2012 (UTC)The intro conflicts with the bio, ie, "He was being held captive by Lord Grathan until Darth Nox came to retrieve his creation... vs. The apprentice on his infiltration through Lord Grathan's estate, eventually found Dorotsech and retrieved the weapon. Please correct.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:40, May 21, 2012 (UTC)- I'm afraid I don't see the conflict there ?! Anyways I've rephrased it. Check it out. Winterz 19:46, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
- OK. —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:56, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm afraid I don't see the conflict there ?! Anyways I've rephrased it. Check it out. Winterz 19:46, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
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If the quest was only available for one class please mention what class that was in the Behind the scenes section.You need to add a personality and traits section to add anything about the character's mannerisms, appearance, and any notable features of his personality. This includes the information about his hair color, eye color, and skin color.- You should mention his mustache and that he is bald.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:51, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- He's only partially bald, how should I write it?Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- You should mention his mustache and that he is bald.--Exiled Jedi
Anything in the article's introduction should be mentioned in the body of the article. On a related note, the introduction should probably be expanded.- Grathan's estate should probably be mentioned in the introduction.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:51, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. It is getting a bit repetitive though. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Grathan's estate should probably be mentioned in the introduction.--Exiled Jedi
- I look it over again once you're through with these. Good for you for going ahead and nominating a GA. Don't feel bad if their are a lot of objections on your first one. While this article will require a fair amount of work, I think it will be a good learning experience for you. Just stick with it and you will do fine.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 13:38, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
I haven't got that far in the Sith Inquisitor class, but is the character known as Darth Nox at the time of his/her encounter with Dorotsech. If not, please say something like "the apprentice of Lord Zash".- Well actually he was mentioned by the alias Kallig once but then someone decided to change him to Darth Nox(in the Wookiee article) and so did I, at least in the intro. Either way, done.
Does the game describe him as middle-aged? If not I don't think you can say that he is middle-aged, since he might have just lost his hair young.- Changed to adult to avoid any speculation. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I removed it entirely, since people aren't adults their entire lives, the common practice is to not mention it unless he the individual is obviously a child or is very old. In any case, the character should not be refered to as an adult at the start of the biography.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:14, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
"However, neither his brilliant mind nor his weak personality were able to save him from Nox's lack of compassion, and the scientist was killed right where he stood." I don't think that mentioning his weak personality is necessary, you already mentioned his lack of bravery and it doesn't really fit here.- Modified it, check it out now. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I tweaked it somewhat.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:14, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- I tweaked it somewhat.--Exiled Jedi
- Modified it, check it out now. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
Is the cyber-neutralizer for use against droids or cyborgs? In the biography is seems to be cyborgs, but in the P&T is seems to be droids. If its both please make that clearer.- Well I mentioned in the Biography that it "can" be used against Cyborgs but the weapon was mainly for using against droids, which I've wrote in the artifact's article. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Its looking better, keep up the good work! Also if you can obtain more quotes that would be nice.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:51, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks. About the quotes, well that was the only one worthy among his 4 or so lines. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I added a quote to the Biography section that seemed good. What do you think?--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:14, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- I added a quote to the Biography section that seemed good. What do you think?--Exiled Jedi
- Thanks. About the quotes, well that was the only one worthy among his 4 or so lines. Winterz 17:26, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- I played through the quest and found out some more information:
- He had a wife and children.
- He owned an astromech droid.
- The scientist didn't give the apprentice the weapon he merely told how to find it and power it.
- Lord Zash commissioned him to make the weapon.
- He wanted to know as little about the Sith plans as possible.
- Also, you need to fix the redlink in the introduction.
- The approximate date for the game is approximately 3,643 BBY. I changed the date in the infobox and sourced it. Please mention the date in the body and use the same source.
- Actually, EJ, most WP:TOR people have been using the date 3,641 BBY, since the game is two years long. Cade Calrayn
13:52, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- My mistake.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 13:56, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- My mistake.--Exiled Jedi
- Actually, EJ, most WP:TOR people have been using the date 3,641 BBY, since the game is two years long. Cade Calrayn
- After playing throgh the quest I think this should be all of my objections.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:14, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
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- Good work. I'll let the others finish with the objections. P.S. Got my first nom. here too, should see how many objections I have. Biggestleo (talk) 00:43, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks, done. Winterz 00:59, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
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- Hey, just wanted to let you know about the new system of references and sourcing that Trayus and I have been developing. I went through and changed the refs to match the system, but otherwise I can't see anything EJ missed. Cade Calrayn
14:00, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Ye I noticed your edits and I was aware of the that system you guys developed but I've been rather busy with exams and all so I have to look into EJ's latest objections later. Or maybe solve them out today. And thanks but please notice that this is more a comment not an objection or am I wrong?! Winterz 15:02, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Woops. Yeah, feel free to move it to the comments. I'm on a phone at the moment, so its a little hard to do the move myself. Cade Calrayn
16:16, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
Zirchros
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- Nominated by: Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:22, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: My first nomination for WP:TOR!
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- Winterz 18:23, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Cade Calrayn
01:50, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi
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The "alternative stories" stub is really poor. I'd recommend more info.- There isn't anymore. Since its a crew skill mission, you're companion goes off for a few minutes and comes back with some items. He is only mentioned in the text for the mission--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 18:07, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- There isn't anymore. Since its a crew skill mission, you're companion goes off for a few minutes and comes back with some items. He is only mentioned in the text for the mission--Exiled Jedi
Is there no available picture of him?Winterz 16:14, May 24, 2012 (UTC)- No, he doesn't actually appear, he is just mentioned.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 18:07, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- No, he doesn't actually appear, he is just mentioned.--Exiled Jedi
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- Not bad, EJ. I just changed one of the reference names to match the new system Trayus and I are developing for TOR here. As for the "Tordate" reference... I don't know. Most WP:TOR members I know just source that to the quest the character/location/etc. appears in, since it's part of TOR itself. But I'll leave that to you. Cade Calrayn
01:50, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
Callef
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- Nominated by: Cade Calrayn
23:46, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Project Hero. QUOTES GALORE! Are you happy now, Menk?
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- Good work, Cade. No more objections from me. Winterz 16:53, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
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More content in the introWinterz 16:08, May 24, 2012 (UTC)Great. Well, if he has appeared in 3 different quests it would be great if you extended the "Behind the scenes" section and mention them too(though I'm not completely sure this is necessary?). Winterz 16:20, May 24, 2012 (UTC)Either way, you must mention the non-light side choices in the same section ;)Winterz 16:27, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
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Unidentified planet 17 (Dilonexa system)
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- Nominated by: Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 15:55, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Finally getting around to my entry in the Dilonexa shed scorcher. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 15:55, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
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- I'm astonished how you managed to write all that in an article that had only 2 indirect mentions. Brilliant work.Winterz 16:23, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
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- Hoo-Rah!
"The seventeenth planet was one of 40 spacial bodies in the Dilonexa system." This seems to imply that the planet itself was called "the seventeenth planet." Reword.- How's that? Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 00:50, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- How's that? Corellian Premier
"Once the New Republic took control of the galaxy[8] in 6 ABY,[9] the Centrality sector was again independent of galactic governments.[8] By 137 ABY, the planet was within the territory of the Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt's Galactic Empire." These are copied directly from the original. Rephrase them, please.- Et voila. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 00:50, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Et voila. Corellian Premier
- Thanks for contributing! The Dilonexa articles are still open to everyone! NaruHina Talk
23:03, May 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Sure thing! I chose the 17th because it's my birthday. Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 00:50, May 26, 2012 (UTC)
- Sure thing! I chose the 17th because it's my birthday. Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier
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- Re: to Winterz: Thanks! Although I just adjusted the template. It's part of a project, similar to but smaller in scope than, the barn-burners. Corellian Premier
All along the watchtower 16:39, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
TK-577
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- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi 20:12, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I think final JKTCG-created character nom. With thanks to Starsider for the Galaxies stuff.
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- Bingo, bango, boom. Corellian Premier
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- Nominated by: StarsiderSWG 20:55, May 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I think I've updated this article as much as possible. Let me know if there's anything to fix.
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Yavin (deity)
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- Nominated by: LelalMekha 20:04, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I was just trying to make it a CA, but it's more than 250 words, so here it is.
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- I rewrote certain sentences, and fixed some other stuff. I also changed the image to one that better exhibits the gas giant. See these edits. Cade Calrayn
20:23, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Well done. Plagueis327 20:25, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
- —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 20:40, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
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You have some missing links and some overlinking. Remember that a subject should be linked once upon its first mention in the infobox, once upon its first mention in the intro, and once upon its first mention in the main body. Also, remember that people should only be linked in quote attributions if they do not appear anywhere in the article's text.- With my edits and your, I guess it's all right by now? --LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Yes, I just forgot to strike; my apologies. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:55, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- With my edits and your, I guess it's all right by now? --LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
The intro could use a little expansion.- I tried to expanded, let me know if you think I should add some more.--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- It's probably worth mentioning that Yavin was mentioned in the Books of Massassi. Also, the intro currently makes it sound like it was the Massassi's sole choice to build the temples, while the body says that Sadow ordered them to do it, and then they found their own purpose, as well. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Issue addressed. Hope it works.--LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- It's probably worth mentioning that Yavin was mentioned in the Books of Massassi. Also, the intro currently makes it sound like it was the Massassi's sole choice to build the temples, while the body says that Sadow ordered them to do it, and then they found their own purpose, as well. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- I tried to expanded, let me know if you think I should add some more.--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
"In the eyes of the rough Sith warriors…" The "rough" seems rather POV-ish. Also, you haven't established that the Massassi were Sith warriors, so the reader might not know that you're still referring to them.- Issue addressed. Suppressed "rough" and added a bit of context ("the Massassi, the warrior caste of the Sith species").--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
"…because of its overwhelming power." What was the gas giant's "overwhelming power?" Also, since this is not mentioned anywhere in the main body, it is currently unsourced.- I meant "his all-dominating presence" (as now edited). Is that okay?--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- As the reader, I'm still not quite sure how his presence was all-dominating. (Also, see the next as-yet unstricken objection below; it's somewhat related to this one.) Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- "because of his all-dominating presence in the firmament" → Simply, Yavin's orb looks huge as seen from Yavin 4's ground.--LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Molto bene. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:55, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- "because of his all-dominating presence in the firmament" → Simply, Yavin's orb looks huge as seen from Yavin 4's ground.--LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- As the reader, I'm still not quite sure how his presence was all-dominating. (Also, see the next as-yet unstricken objection below; it's somewhat related to this one.) Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- I meant "his all-dominating presence" (as now edited). Is that okay?--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
You have a bit of missing context throughout the article- Sounds silly but... Would you help me find it? I'm so into it that I'm not sure I can see what's missing. --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Hah looks like you inadvertently took care of these instances while making other fixes. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Sounds silly but... Would you help me find it? I'm so into it that I'm not sure I can see what's missing. --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
The first paragraph of the History section could probably be condensed a little; that much background info so spread out isn't entirely necessary for the article's purposes.- Suppressed the mention of the Korbos fleet, which wasn't necessary indeed.--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
"Yavin was a beautiful but terrible god to them, drawing their attention to the heavens but making the warriors feel small and fearful." This is almost verbatim taken from the source's original wording. Please restructure and use some synonyms here.- Tried to reword it, and I hope the meaning is still the same—I'm not a native speaker of English, so I feel unsure. --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- No worries; for a non-native speaker you're writing quite well. I'd suggest taking the "fascinating and terrifying" wording from the intro and putting that in the body; and in the intro you can just say something like "awe-inspiring." Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed.--LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Tried to reword it, and I hope the meaning is still the same—I'm not a native speaker of English, so I feel unsure. --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
"The ambiguous religious experience of the Massassi…" Who considered it to be ambiguous?- Obviously, I. So I just removed "ambiguous". --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
Do we know who engraved the Books of Massassi?- Luke thinks they have a single author while "some people" say they may have been recorded orally by educated slaves. --LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
The second paragraph of the BTS sounds pretty OR-ish.- As a theologian, I saw the similarity, but I admit the general public wouldn't know. Still, I'm not saying the author knew of this and intended to reference Otto's theory, I'm only saying this is similar—which is a fact anyone can verify. On the other hand, if you really wish me to suppress this paragraph, I will.--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Okay, that's alright; but you need to be extremely clear about what the precise similarity is, and be careful not to suggest that it was an intended similarity (basically, just clarify that the "awe-inspiring and fascinating" feeling is the similarity you're talking about, and state a little more clearly that per the "Idea of Holy" source and Before the Storm, it is shared by both theories/religions) Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Issue addressed. I hope I made thing clear enough. Otherwise, just let me know.--LelalMekha 14:42, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Okay, that's alright; but you need to be extremely clear about what the precise similarity is, and be careful not to suggest that it was an intended similarity (basically, just clarify that the "awe-inspiring and fascinating" feeling is the similarity you're talking about, and state a little more clearly that per the "Idea of Holy" source and Before the Storm, it is shared by both theories/religions) Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- As a theologian, I saw the similarity, but I admit the general public wouldn't know. Still, I'm not saying the author knew of this and intended to reference Otto's theory, I'm only saying this is similar—which is a fact anyone can verify. On the other hand, if you really wish me to suppress this paragraph, I will.--LelalMekha 01:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
- That's all from me. Interesting topic. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:18, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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The article is great. I just have one reservation: why single out Otto in the BTS? There are other thinkers who have postulated about the awe-inspiring nature of religion, and it seems odd to single this one out. For instance, why not talk about Bronislaw Malinowski's functionalist view of religion? Or Émile Durkheim's? In short, I wonder if the paragraph is better removed. ~Savage
15:58, May 29, 2012 (UTC)- Well, the awe-inspiring nature of religion has been postulated by many thinkers, it's true. But Otto's specificity is the ambiguity of awe AND fascination, with a desire of fusion. Otto's work on theology predates the other scholars you're citing here. At least in Belgian universities, Otto is cited as the first to clearly define this dual concept known as the "numinous". But as I already said before, if we are to cut it, I'll cut it. --LelalMekha 16:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
That's a good point, and I've thought about this some more. I would still suggest removal, though, because I think the comment strays too far from the subject at hand. There are a number of articles about deities on the wiki, and it's probably not worthwhile to go into theology and philosophy in their BTS sections in my opinion. The exception would be if the authors or creators of the Yavin deity said in an interview somewhere that they were inspired by Otto's writings. But without that confirmation, noting the similarities between Streen's statements and Otto's just seems a bit tangential in my opinion. Sorry to be a spoilsport. :( ~Savage
15:21, May 30, 2012 (UTC)- Now, don't be sorry. Sometimes, I feel like I'm being overly educational. ;-) I shall remove it this instant (but I hope the word number will still be okay for a GA). --LelalMekha 15:37, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- By my count, you're at 330 words, so no worries! :) ~Savage
15:40, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- By my count, you're at 330 words, so no worries! :) ~Savage
- Now, don't be sorry. Sometimes, I feel like I'm being overly educational. ;-) I shall remove it this instant (but I hope the word number will still be okay for a GA). --LelalMekha 15:37, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
- Well, the awe-inspiring nature of religion has been postulated by many thinkers, it's true. But Otto's specificity is the ambiguity of awe AND fascination, with a desire of fusion. Otto's work on theology predates the other scholars you're citing here. At least in Belgian universities, Otto is cited as the first to clearly define this dual concept known as the "numinous". But as I already said before, if we are to cut it, I'll cut it. --LelalMekha 16:05, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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Consider splitting this sentence. S-0D3-GE3 discovered the body of Captain Sullio—an officer of the Onderonian military—shortly after she was murdered and was shot and destroyed by her killer shortly after his discovery. Such as ; he was then or something like that.Give a source for Meetra Surik's name, as the game is not a proper source.- That's all for the moment, nice work, Oli. Let's go, WP:KotOR!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:50, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
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