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Battle of Khorm

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:54, September 27, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Nice work. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 08:51, October 17, 2018 (UTC)
  3. I know three non-AC votes are superfluous, but I feel since I had an objection that was dealt with that I took awhile to get back to I should go ahead and vote in favor. Fan26 (Talk) 22:44, November 10, 2018 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:04, November 15, 2018 (UTC)
  5. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 10:30, November 22, 2018 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • Being blinded and losing a whole eye aren't the same thing, the intro and body should be consistent on that.
  • Not sure why Clone Commander is pipelinked in the history
  • he started using a cybernetic implant instead of his missing eye. Being pedantic here but the word "instead" makes it of sound like a choice rather than a replacement.
  • I think reference 4 needs to acknowledge the loss of Wolfe's eye as the reason we know that the battle took place between Felucia and Abregado. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:52, September 25, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Ref 1 makes a bit of a leap. Please explain that because Wolffe lost his eye in this battle, it must take place after when he had both eyes.
  • Is there no backup link for the defunct CN video?
    • Unfortunately, no. Those videos from CN are gone forever. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:19, October 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • Hmm, I'm uneasy using something which essentially can't be sourced. Could an alternate source be used? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 10:53, October 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • If the point of the first BTS image is to show Wolffe's missing eye, could you find one of him in person, not in a hologram?
  • I'm not a big fan of the one sentence paragraphs in the BTS. Could you group some of them please?
  • Is it necessary to say "[Ultimate Star Wars] did not specify whether Khorm was a planet or another type of location."? That isn't really notable, as it should be clear it wasn't identified if the location's type isn't specified in the body.
  • The link for the CN site is currently in Russian (I think) :P Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:04, October 12, 2018 (UTC)
    • For some reason, when you try to access CN.com, it automatically redirects you to a version of the website in your native language. I didn't even notice that it did that. Fixed. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:19, October 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please state Star Wars: Force Collection is canon, just to make it clear. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 10:53, October 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does Gilroy have any quotes from the insider article that could be used? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 16:41, October 15, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The reference note for the date is extremely long, convoluted, and practically impossible to understand by simply reading it. Please find a way to simplify that explanation so anyone reading the article can easily digest and comprehend what it's trying to say. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:17, October 17, 2018 (UTC)
Fan26
  • The BtS section includes the panel of Wolffe's injury but doesn't explain what exactly happened-Ventress escaping, etc. I'd like that to be added. Fan26 (Talk) 21:39, October 28, 2018 (UTC)
    • Added. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 21:25, November 3, 2018 (UTC)
      • Sorry it took so long to get back to this. Fan26 (Talk) 14:03, November 9, 2018 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • The whole sentence containing "the comic version's portrayal of events was accepted as the official backstory" seems unnecessary given that this is true of anything in Legends that wasn't non-canon.Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:49, October 29, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

The Clone Wars: Headgames

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 05:33, September 14, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I've done some tweaking to this and would like to give a shot at restoring this to GA status.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Fan26 (Talk) 17:32, October 19, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Nice work. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 13:35, October 23, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 15:01, December 18, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • "As the droids approach the fabricated bunker through a canyon" Is the bunker prefab? Neither the article nor the bunker's article says anything in either way save the above sentence. If so it should be changed to prefabricated. If not, it should be removed, considering that by the definition of fabricated, every bunker would be a fabricated one. Fan26 (Talk) 01:38, October 19, 2018 (UTC)
    • "Fabricated" here was used as a synonym for "fake," not as a form of "prefab." I have made some changes to the wording to alleviate the confusion. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:43, October 19, 2018 (UTC)
    • ah, because the bunker was built solely for the trap, I see. Fan26 (Talk) 17:31, October 19, 2018 (UTC)
"The Clone Wars: Impgames"
  • Appearances is missing Lekku/Legends. Please check if anything else should be listed. Imperators II(Talk) 23:08, October 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Added a couple more things. Should be all, unless we want to list stuff like Limb, Eye and of course, Breast. Which I doubt is necessary. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:42, October 27, 2018 (UTC)
      • I think we should. Comprehensively listing appearances of any in-universe subjects can potentially be beneficial to both readers and editors. Imperators II(Talk) 14:20, October 28, 2018 (UTC)
        • If you say so. But I still think this is silly. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:14, October 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • Can you see about rewording the lead intro sentence? It reads super redundant. Imperators II(Talk) 23:26, November 1, 2018 (UTC)
  • Is the "tagline" the thing written on the title page? If so, why are you not following that page's capitalization of the line? Imperators II(Talk) 23:48, November 6, 2018 (UTC)
  • Refs 5 and 10 are bad. So is the first Bibliography item. Imperators II(Talk) 23:16, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • In Appearances, should Inc go into double quotes, as well? Imperators II(Talk) 23:16, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think you should also note Tom Hodges as the colorist in the infobox. Imperators II(Talk) 23:16, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm afraid the date ref is incomplete. If the only thing known about "The Clone Wars: Headgames" was that it takes place prior to "Jedi Crash," it could just as easily take place in 23 BBY, or 24 BBY, or... if you get my meaning. Imperators II(Talk) 23:16, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Uh, 22 BBY is infobox-exclusive. Imperators II(Talk) 11:58, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Looking at the comic, there's actually no indication the events are set on a distinct planet. Saying that "an unidentified planet" was targeted by the CIS is pretty speculative. The only canonical things we know is that there was an information bunker set in a canyon. Please reword the first paragraph to reflect this. Imperators II(Talk) 17:47, December 13, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

CJ-9 electrified bo-rifle

  • Nominated by: TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 13:24, November 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: If you ever played the 2015 Battlefront, you know what I'm talking about.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:17, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Ugh. My Xbox cannot properly connect to wifi, and I've been stuck playing the single-player content available at release...I really have missed a lot. Fan26 (Talk) 20:41, November 11, 2018 (UTC)

Object

QGJ
  • In the Bts, can you add a ref note next to the 2016 release date, citing some sort of article that mentions the rifle being added to the game? Similar to what you've done on your other weapon articles. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:45, November 10, 2018 (UTC)
Fan26
  • The first sentence of the intro is missing a comma after Lasan High Honor Guard. Fan26 (Talk) 22:49, November 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • In the BtS it says the weapon can only be gotten by picking it off of another player...I'm left a little confused as to where it can come from. Does each match begin with one or two players having the bo-rifle and then it just spreads through the combatants as they kill each other? Fan26 (Talk) 03:27, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
    • The game's developers originally logged in to the game with CJ-9s in order to start dropping the new weapon—so that when they die, normal players could finally get the weapon. Since then, the bo-rifle is a viral weapon that you need to find someone who has it, kill them, then unlock the weapon permanently. You can read more about that here if you want. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:35, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
      • For clarification that probably should be added to the article (clarification, and it's pretty interesting). Fan26 (Talk) 03:39, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
        • How does that look? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 04:22, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
          • Almost there-I think it should be mentioned that this began as a means of getting it into the game. Fan26 (Talk) 04:41, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • "a more recent and less artfully designed version of the bo-rifle" Should be reworded-recent should be replaced with later or some similar word. Fan26 (Talk) 19:20, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • Half question, and half objection (so I'm not yet striking my vote), I recently was playing and after a look-through the weapons available in the single-player "Skirmish" mode (I stupidly often just go with the default one), I noticed that it is available there as well. Given that the BtS might seem to be implying that it is only available in multiplayer, would it being available for singleplayer the sort of thing that should also be added or not? Fan26 (Talk) 19:50, November 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • I am not sure if just saying that it also appears in singleplayer modes is notable, but I've just made a minor clarification for this viral thing is "in Star Wars Battlefront's multiplayer modes." TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:12, November 26, 2018 (UTC)
      • Yeah, you're probably right. Thanks for clearing that up though. Fan26 (Talk) 19:04, November 27, 2018 (UTC)

Comments


Brintooin

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 16:16, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The lack of the full "-ooine" suffix is maddening.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:23, November 11, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Fan26 (Talk) 02:53, November 17, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:56, December 18, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Comments

Seswenna/Legends

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:37, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  2. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:45, November 17, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Anil Major system
  • In the first paragraph of the History section, "Darkknell" links to Knel'char system, and "Clak'dor system" links to Colu system. Are these mistakes, or simply alternative names for the respective systems. If they are, I think you should add the names to those articles in order to avoid confusion. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:06, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
    • The names used in this article are used by Atlas. I've added info to those articles' Sources lists. Imperators II(Talk) 22:29, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think the word admiral in the third paragraph of the introduction should be lowercased. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:24, November 12, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Rescue of Attichitcuk

  • Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:15, November 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Longest article I've written since my return, this is gonna be rough

(0 ACs/3 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Fan26 (Talk) 15:17, November 26, 2018 (UTC)
  2. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:11, November 28, 2018 (UTC)
  3. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:30, November 28, 2018 (UTC)

Object

QGJ
  • The prelude section is way too detailed and play-by-play, with lots of extraneous info not necessary to the understanding of the subject of this article. Example:

Both sides faced the threat of the gundarks, a predatory species on Alaris Prime, and independently decided to destroy the creatures. Attichitcuk's son Chewbacca, with the help of Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn, trained a group of bowcaster troopers and marched towards the gundark nest. The Wookiees arrived to witness B1 battle droids of the Trade Federation Droid Army exterminating the gundarks. The battle droids then opened fire on the Wookiees, who returned fire and won the resulting battle.

  • You can easily throw out this entire paragraph, and just summarize that the Wookiees found out about Trade Federation presence on the moon, in one sentence.
    • Breaking my heart here. Done
  • Some paragraphs look too big in the Oasis skin (mainly the second prelude paragraph and the Bts)
    • Trimmed some fat from that prelude paragraph, I think that's enough, and split the Bts
  • Context needed on DRN-38
    • Did what I could
  • The infobox claims that 13 Bowcaster troopers participated in the mission. Yet in the text you mention 10 troopers departing with Chewbacca initially and then another group joining them. Did the second group only consist of three troopers? Please clarify the numbers here.
    • I'm counting Chewie as one of the troopers, since I wasn't sure what else to call him, the other two are just because the strategy guide recommends sending multiple troopers for the next phase. I've updated the infobox slightly in the best way I could manage
  • Through use of the Force, an energy field the Jedi accessed, This context is superfluous and unnecessary. "The Force" does not require further context.
  • "The rescue" section should better establish that Jinn gave commands during the mission. Right now, his participation is not enough to qualify him as a commander, but if you incorporate the quote into the text, it might rectify this issue.
    • Added in, also updated a bit I'd forgotten about earlier so Qui-Gon's role should be much clearer.
  • And on Jinn's advice the medical droid healed the injuries gained before the party proceeded. You should first establish that the party received injuries during the fight, before talking about treating those injuries. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 21:05, November 22, 2018 (UTC)
Fan26
  • "Upon reaching the base Attichitcuk was sent into the base's command center for protection, and soon after three droidekas, a stronger type of battle droid, were sent by DRN-38 to attack the base, which Chewbacca and the Wookiees swiftly repelled." This is a bit of a run-on and can probably be split into two sentences given that the two different subjects (Attichituck and DRN) perform two different actions that are only loosely related. Fan26 (Talk) 23:36, November 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done
  • "As Chewbacca's party reached the other side of the river on the return trip, a group of six B1 battle droids awaited them, and with the help of the second group of Wookiees they were swiftly destroyed."
    • The phrase 'on the return trip' feels a bit off. I'm not sure if it seems superfluous though-could you try just rewording it?
      • Howzat?
        • Thanks.
    • Saying the droids awaited them seems to imply that the wookiees are still making their way towards the other side of the river. Could it be changed to something more combative, like "engaged" or "attacked" or some such "war verb"?
      • I was trying to be mindful of the amount of times I used such words, turned out I hadn't even used "engaged" in this article.
    • "the second group of Wookiees" Is this referring to the group that departed after the healing to rendezvous with the first group? If so, both this and the earlier mention might need to be clarified-reading it now, I'm not sure how many groups of wookiees are heading where. The first mention kinda implies (at least to me, so I might be overthinking this) that the first group that rescued Attitchuck disappeared or something and throughout the section it's not clear if the second group left the base to go help escort Attichituck back or they came from somewhere else. Fan26 (Talk) 23:49, November 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • I believe some overthinking has occurred here, but hope it's clearer now. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 13:05, November 26, 2018 (UTC)
        • Yeah, this was the result of too much nitpicking. Thanks for clearing it up though, if somewhere down the line it seems like it should be changed, go ahead and do so. Fan26 (Talk) 14:04, November 26, 2018 (UTC)
Anil
  • Trade Federation Droid Army is infobox-exclusive. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 06:40, November 28, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. Realized I'd missed Jedi Order too. Also I noticed you deleted the reference in the last sentence of the Bts, I see the logic behind it but I'd just like to know if that's specifically part of our policies, I couldn't find it. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:33, November 28, 2018 (UTC)
      • I don't think it is directly mentioned in the policies, but that is how it was handled in previous status article nominations, like this one. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:11, November 28, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Daimlo

  • Nominated by:OtterSurf (talk) 22:04, November 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Good work on the objections! Hope to see you go the extra mile and write up Daimla, as well. Imperators II(Talk) 19:46, December 16, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Nice work indeed. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:02, December 17, 2018 (UTC)

Object

AnilSerifoglu
  • The infobox's sentience parameter is empty. It should also be mentioned in the article body itself, and the word "sentient" in the intro should be pipelinked to sentience.
  • Duplicate references
  • The article is inconsistent about the use of quotation mark for "Scorch" Zanales.
  • The infobox has a link to a redirect page: Scorch Zanales
    • I also fixed another redirect page, Legends, in the article. I really recommend turning the "Highlight all redirects orange." gagdet on from the Preferences for your future nominations, it comes in handy. ;) TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article needs some linking, such as Podracer (profession)/Legends, Podracer/Legends, Pilot/Legends, Color/Legends etc.
    • I've added a few more links if you don't mind, and fixed a few links that were pipelinked to canon articles. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Is there another image available for the species? The one in the body is simply a resized version of the infobox image.
  • The image caption shouldn't have a full stop per the Layout Guide. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 05:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • All of the aforementioned concerns have been dealt with. Some schoolboy errors were made, I'll admit. I also added a new source. There is no other picture of a Daimlo anywhere, so I worked with what there is. OtterSurf (talk) 08:51, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Eye and skin color info are infobox-exclusive. PS: I've removed the "white" from the eye color parameter as it looks like a human eye, so no need to add sclera color. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Just wanted to let you know that this one is still here. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Since it's an article about a species, I think you should mention that Zanales was male somewhere in the article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I don't think the last sentence of the BTS is relevant to this article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:28, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does Star Wars: Racer Revenge: Prima's Official Strategy Guide explicitly say it's 24 BBY, or say something like "... years before/after ..." If it's the latter, you'll need an additional reference note. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • The intro to Racer Revenge specifically states that it takes place eight years after EP1, meaning it's 24 BBY. I've corrected the reference. OtterSurf (talk) 11:12, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Sorry to interject here, but you still need a manual reference note then that explains how, according to some source, Episode I is set in 32 BBY and how the game is set eight years after that, and therefore in 24 BBY. Imperators II(Talk) 11:32, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Added. OtterSurf (talk) 12:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • "according to some source, Episode I is set in 32 BBY". Please specify this source in the reference note. Imperators II(Talk) 12:49, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
Imp
  • The fact that Daimlo is temperate is intro-exclusive. Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Can Daimla's location in the Kallea sector really be sourced to the video game? Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • No, it's the Essential Atlas companion. I've corrected it. OtterSurf (talk) 11:15, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • You can't source the fact that the species evolved to sentience on Daimla to the Online Companion, nor the fact that there actually existed a world called Daimla. Those need to be referenced to some of the other sources. Imperators II(Talk) 11:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Is this claim supported by the listed source, or is it just extrapolation from the fact that there was a Daimlo company that produced a Podracer? "Daimlo society was well aware of Podracing,"? Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Extrapolation. Maybe "well" aware is too strong. I'll correct that. OtterSurf (talk) 11:17, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • My point is that you should not extrapolate it at all. Just state that there was this company, Daimlo Engineering, that did stuff. Imperators II(Talk) 11:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Got it. OtterSurf (talk) 11:25, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • "At least one Daimlo company" is still worded too speculatively. This conveys the supposed possibility of more Daimlo companies producing Podracers, when there's really no need for that. Just keep it simple by outright naming the company. Imperators II(Talk) 11:50, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
            • I'll get right on that. OtterSurf (talk) 11:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The last sentence of BTS is just repeating information present in the Sources list, and so should be cut. Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:19, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • No, the sentence is still there. Imperators II(Talk) 11:27, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Could you clarify that? OtterSurf (talk) 13:39, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • Well, my original objection remains unchanged: the last sentence of BTS should be cut. Imperators II(Talk) 13:44, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think you should reword BTS to be clearer about the chronology of the species' appearance. The way I understand it, the species first appeared in the game, and was subsequently identified by the game guide. Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:26, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Please reference the BTS correctly. Imperators II(Talk) 11:28, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • This is the only outstanding point right now; can you clarify? OtterSurf (talk) 12:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • First off, this is definitely not the only outstanding point right now, see all my other objections, both above and below this one, and also the one in Anil's subsection above. Second, the fact that Daimlos first appeared in the game should be referenced to the game itself, not the guide. Imperators II(Talk) 12:26, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'd like to see a contextual qualifier for Euceron and Gamorr. Imperators II(Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Please explain. OtterSurf (talk) 11:41, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • "the [insert region] planet Euceron" would do. Also please provide a region for Daimla. Imperators II(Talk) 11:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • Again, Dangerous Games does not place Euceron in the Mid Rim, so you need a separate reference for that. Imperators II(Talk) 12:09, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
            • Oh, duh! Of course. Doing that. OtterSurf (talk) 12:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
              • Again, you're referencing all the stuff about Zanales to The Essential Atlas. Imperators II(Talk) 12:28, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
                • Not sure of any other source which would be useful there. I don't think Euceron's placement is referenced anywhere else. OtterSurf (talk) 12:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Similarly, is "Daimlos were well known in the galaxy," also extrapolated from the fact that Skywalker recognized one Daimlo as such? Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The "Daimlos in the galaxy" section should be restructured somewhat. First, you mention the Galactic Games and the Hutt Championships, and then you seem to go into a bit of detail on the Gamorr course, and then into much more detail on the Championships again. I think you should move the initial mention of the Championships to its appropriate place, and see if it can be made into a separate paragraph. The Skywalker paragraph is only one sentence long and therefore should be incorporated earlier in the first paragraph. Imperators II(Talk) 11:26, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Trimmed. TBH, I think the further information would be more appropriate for The Zanales page itself, so I cut it from this page. OtterSurf (talk) 11:39, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have infobox-exclusive color information. Imperators II(Talk) 11:30, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Unsourced item in infobox. Imperators II(Talk) 11:30, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The structure of "Society and culture" feels a bit off. First you should talk about the "fundamental," "physical" aspects of the culture, i.e., the rituals. Then you should talk about the languages spoken by members of the species, and only then you should mention Daimlo Engineering, which (correct me if I'm wrong) is only known to share its name with the species, not necessarily to be founded or run by them. Imperators II(Talk) 11:55, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I don't believe there's any reason here to reference the languages and Zanales' name to different sources in the infobox and body. Imperators II(Talk) 11:55, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please provide context for Hutt Championships. Imperators II(Talk) 12:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. I also added the date for the Galactic Games. OtterSurf (talk) 12:37, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • That's good, but the date is not mentioned in the novel and therefore needs a separate date reference. Please see all the above objections. Imperators II(Talk) 12:42, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Right now, "Biology and appearance" makes it sound like only the skin on Daimlos' heads was gray. Imperators II(Talk) 12:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • I am unsure if Zanales' entire torso is clothed or if his skin in that region is indeed pink, but I've corrected it nonetheless. OtterSurf (talk) 12:31, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Can it be specified in "Daimlos in the galaxy" that Zanales' homeworld was Daimla? Imperators II(Talk) 14:02, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • I already mentioned that Zanales excelled in the rituals on his homeworld, but sure. Done. OtterSurf (talk) 14:06, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • The prior wording just didn't connect Daimla, which had rituals, with Zanales' homeworld, which also had rituals. I've sourced it to the Racer Revenge guide, since I assume it is stated there. Imperators II(Talk) 14:10, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Great. It's also stated outright on the Starwars.com article if that helps. OtterSurf (talk) 14:16, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • The StarWars.com article doesn't identify Daimla by name. Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Alright, everything sourced to the Podracers blog article should be reworded to stay closer to the source:
    • "Daimlos had strict cultural traditions" — this is entirely your own extrapolation and should be cut. Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • "one year-long coming-of-age ritual" — we don't know if there were several rituals, so you shouldn't frame the wording as if there were. Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • The article doesn't say that "unpredictable tactics while Podracing" helped gain Zanales any popularity. Neither does it say that about "proficiency in smashing into opponents". Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • This remains unaddressed. Imperators II(Talk) 14:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • No, I took care of it. OtterSurf (talk) 15:02, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • No, you didn't. Please take the time to read the source article again. It says Zanales was popular with crowds, and that he was unpredictable and proficient in beating up enemies. It doesn't say the latter was the cause of the former. Imperators II(Talk) 15:10, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • You should specify Daimlos had "skullplates," which is more specific than "head plates." If no other source supports the use of this specific term, reference it accordingly. Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • All taken care of! I reworded some sections to be closer to the original article. OtterSurf (talk) 14:29, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • See above. Also, "were undoubtedly factors in this status" is POV-ish. In addition, use of the pronoun "this" kind of runs counter to our past tense requirement, see what you can do about rewording it. Imperators II(Talk) 14:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article needs to be updated with information from The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. The entry for "Zanales, Scorch" on p. 367 of Volume III uses "Daimlos" for both singular and plural forms of the species' name. It also says that Zanales and the other young Daimlos participating in the contest used both their skullplates and their horns. Imperators II(Talk) 14:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. From other sources I've read, Daimlo is the correct singular term. OtterSurf (talk) 14:59, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Please familiarize yourself with {{CSWECite}} and implement it, both in referencing and in Sources. I think the misspelling should be noted in the BTS and in Sources. Also make sure Daimlos exists as a redirect to Daimlo. Imperators II(Talk) 15:10, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • I'm sorry, but I can't get the cite thing to work and I've never done a redirect. OtterSurf (talk) 16:30, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • Here's how you do it. And this is how you create a redirect (take a look at the wikicode behind that page).Imperators II(Talk) 16:42, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
            • It's okay, I took care of it. Although someone did edit the redirect while I worked on it; was that you? OtterSurf (talk) 16:44, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
              • Yep, it was you. Thanks. OtterSurf (talk) 16:46, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • In connection to the previous objection, I think that a "History" section is warranted here, which would talk about how Zanales participated in the Daimlo contest and was actually elevated to hero status, which is mentioned both by CSWE and the SW.com article. Imperators II(Talk) 14:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • If that's the case, wouldn't simply renaming the "Daimlos in the galaxy" section be sufficient? I mean, it's not like there's much info on actual Daimlo impact on the galaxy at large. OtterSurf (talk) 14:59, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • You know what, scratch that. I don't think it's necessary. I have integrated Zanales' hero status, however. OtterSurf (talk) 15:04, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • Right now, you're just mentioning Zanales' exploits on Daimla as a footnote to his Podracing career, but what I'm saying is that it's significant enough to the species on Daimla to warrant a separate History section for that. Our Layout Guide supports this: "History deals with the major events in the history of the species. This includes such events as wars, discovery by the galactic community, and other important epochs." I'd say being considered a hero is rather important. Imperators II(Talk) 15:13, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • And no, just renaming "Daimlos in the galaxy" would not be "sufficient" since that section talks about Zanales being a popular racer across the galaxy. Imperators II(Talk) 15:15, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
            • I'll give it a go, then. OtterSurf (talk) 15:31, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
              • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 15:54, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
                • Like I explained above, I believe everything having to do with Zanales podracing should go into the latter section. Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
                  • Yup, done. I bridged the sections a little but they're more or less separate. OtterSurf (talk) 17:12, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I believe the skullplates merit a mention as a notable distinction in the infobox. Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Also please separate the features in the infobox via separate bullet items. Imperators II(Talk) 16:50, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Can we provide a number of digits for Daimlo hands? Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • The head has a rather prominent muzzle, which should be mentioned. Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Is it possible to determine what the greenish protrusions at the sides of his head are? Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Is it possible to determine the number of digits for Daimlo feet? Imperators II(Talk) 16:49, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done, done, done, done, don't know, done. OtterSurf (talk) 17:07, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does one of the other sources describe the plates as "thick"? 'Cause the SW.com article doesn't. Imperators II(Talk) 17:18, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • I'll correct that. OtterSurf (talk) 17:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Looking at this article for another species of a Podracer pilot makes me wonder, can you provide any quotes by Zanales? If I were you, I'd try and contact Clonehunter to see if he can assist with the quotes (and possibly audiofiles). Imperators II(Talk) 17:58, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Based on what I know of Huttese, I think one of Zanales' quotes is "Scorch Zanales, ready to race again!". But I'll see what I can do. Thanks for the info, I'll ask Clonehunters. OtterSurf (talk) 18:16, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Found another one - "kako kreespa", which means "you're gonna fry"; that's the other phrase he utters when you select him in Racer Revenge. Can we add that? OtterSurf (talk) 18:39, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
      • Go for it. Make sure use the appropriate template if the quote's a translation from Huttese, as used here. Imperators II(Talk) 20:04, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
        • See what you can do about the other quote. Until you do, I've moved the current quote to serve as the opening quote for the article, per the Layout Guide. Imperators II(Talk) 21:53, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
          • I don't know about the quotes, if I may chime in, but the character's audio files can be found here. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 05:25, November 30, 2018 (UTC)
            • Excellent! I've downloaded them; they're in .wav format, though. OtterSurf (talk) 09:15, November 30, 2018 (UTC)
            • Had a quick look through and the two quotes I can actually decipher aren't there, unfortunately. OtterSurf (talk) 09:48, November 30, 2018 (UTC)
            • Clonehunter says he'll try and work on the audiofiles we need, so I'm quietly optimistic on that front. OtterSurf (talk) 09:29, December 3, 2018 (UTC)
            • Still haven't got anything back from Clonehunter. I don't blame him, he's probably busy, but we may have to leave this out for now. We can always add it at a later date, and go with what we have now. OtterSurf (talk) 16:54, December 11, 2018 (UTC)
            • Clonehunter just got back to me with the quote audio and he's added it into the article. He's also got some quotes of Dax Gazaway talkung about Zanales, so we could add those as well. OtterSurf (talk) 10:20, December 14, 2018 (UTC)
              • Let's see 'em. Imperators II(Talk) 10:43, December 14, 2018 (UTC)
                • I've let Clonehunter know we'd like them. Hopefully they'll be available soon. OtterSurf (talk) 13:13, December 14, 2018 (UTC)
                  • Added some Dax quotes and Zanales' other select screen quote. Without a complete book of Huttese (Or Daimli, if that's what he's speaking) it's tough to discern the majority of his in-game quotes. You're first translation of the new quote was close, but a bit off. He says his name, and then says Podrace. The closest I found for the middle word in Huttese is "Soong," which means either "It's" or "too." Anyways, feel free to delete or move the quotes around, it's your article. I hope this helps, and good article! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 05:05, December 16, 2018 (UTC)
                    • Mate, you're a lifesaver. Cheers. OtterSurf (talk) 10:13, December 16, 2018 (UTC)
                    • Quotes are in. I think we're ready to go! OtterSurf (talk) 19:30, December 16, 2018 (UTC)
  • The intro should be expanded just a little bit. I'd mention the short, bulky body, and especially the horns and the skullplates. Imperators II(Talk) 20:56, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • It seems like the game's concept art for Zanales (see here) features a slightly different body shape for the Daimlo, as well as brown fur. This should be mentioned in the BTS. Imperators II(Talk) 18:29, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 09:17, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • Not bad, but I think it should be slightly more specific as to how was the body shape different. Imperators II(Talk) 10:43, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
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  • The bit about Daimlo Engineering would fit better in the "in the galaxy" section.
  • I'd rather that concept art be used in the Bts, even if it means removing the image used in the "in the galaxy" section, especially since the "galaxy" one is just a cropped version of the infobox image. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 04:39, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 10:30, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
      • Let's crop all the black space out, just leaving the artwork. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 21:46, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
        • If I may chime in, I've found a slightly better version of the image, cropped the black space out, and uploaded it by replacing the old one. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:02, December 17, 2018 (UTC)

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  1. Saying "violent Clantaani species" is racial profiling. I demand three sentences about how the media has negatively focused on only the violent members of the species instead. Fan26 (Talk) 14:45, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
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