- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
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17[]
- Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 11:55, July 4, 2014 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Another one. Double checked before nomming, fingers crossed! WPVG
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Missing an "a" in the first sentence.- Got it.
I think it would be preferable to refer to the CIS with words like Confederacy or Separatists rather than the initials.- Changed
- Do it in the bio as well
- Done
- Do it in the bio as well
- Changed
In the bio perhaps pipelink to the battle rather than giving the full name to avoid the repetition- Changed
Intro seems a bit too long given the size of the bio. See what you can cut back- Cut and reworded the second part of the intro
"In 22 BBY he and 35 greeted the clone commando RC-1138 known as "Boss" before they assisted two other clones to defend..." you need some punctation after saying RC-1138 and the "to" at the end should be removed, also give some context for 35.Changed in part of the above process.
- More on the way. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 06:03, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
In the second bio paragraph you use the word commando four times in two sentences. Please correct the repetition- Mixed it up, better?
When you say they re-joined two other clones this implies that they were with them earlier and left, but I doubt this is the case.- Typo, fixed
- Is Boss the only commando who shows up, the quote has a plural which suggests he wasn't alone, or is that a typo? Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 06:56, July 27, 2014 (UTC)
- Please link to the two other clones in the intro
- Done
- The clones didn't defend the droids. Please correct this
- I've done a copy-edit addressing some small issues. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 06:37, August 4, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth[]
- I've shifted some of your words around in the intro to improve the flow.
- Is "hatched" the correct word? I don't think that really applies to clones.
- Similar to Floyd's objection in the 35 nomination, what's the source for his name being 17? How is it spelled in the source?
- You did not mention his being Human in the article other than the infobox; I added it to the P&T.
- I think I've clarified what you're saying in the BTS about his dialogue; please correct me if I misunderstood your intention. Cade Calrayn 18:51, August 19, 2014 (UTC)
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Vote to remove nomination (AC only)[]
- Objections over two weeks old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:51, September 2, 2014 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:53, September 2, 2014 (UTC)
- Sir Cavalier of One(Squadron channel) 18:56, September 2, 2014 (UTC)