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Eekar Oki[]
- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:39, April 15, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: From CA to GA, Part 1235489667255....
(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)[]
Support[]
- :P Kilson(Let's have a chat) 17:11, April 16, 2011 (UTC)
- Congrats. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:15, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- JangFett (Talk) 00:44, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Hanzo Hasashi 01:01, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 17:59, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 18:16, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:19, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
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Toprawa[]
Can we add a little bit more description to the biography's image caption? Like, "Oki in the Jedi Temple during some event."Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:50, April 15, 2011 (UTC)- Added. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:02, April 16, 2011 (UTC)
I don't mind so much whether an article actually links to individual colors or just links to Color upon first mention of a color, as long as it's consistent throughout. The infobox and P/T linking are currently not consistent. Please choose one and stick with it.Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:51, April 16, 2011 (UTC)- Used the to the individual colors. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:15, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson[]
From looking at the images on the page, I believe you can put "Black" into the eye color field of the infobox and the Pts section. Otherwise, seems good.Kilson(Let's have a chat) 20:00, April 15, 2011 (UTC)- Fixed. Hey you adress the objections too fast. I'dont even have time to recognize them :P Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:02, April 16, 2011 (UTC)
7654[]
In the intro, could you vary "was present"? It gets repetitive as it appears in two sentences.- Varied.
"When Grievous displayed the captive Koth in a holographic transmission sent to the Jedi Temple on Coruscant, Oki was present in the Jedi Temple communication center." So he sent the transmission to the Jedi Temple while Oki was in a room in the Jedi Temple. For factual correctness, see if you can reword this sentence by saying Oki and other Jedi were in the communication room when they received Grievous' transmission.- Reworded.
- "Oki was present in the Jedi Temple communication center when Grievous displayed the captive Koth in a holographic transmission sent to the Jedi Temple on Coruscant" Now it's saying Grievous was at the Jedi Temple center and was playing back some transmission sent to the temple.
- Fixed.
- "Oki was present in the Jedi Temple communication center when Grievous displayed the captive Koth in a holographic transmission sent to the Jedi Temple on Coruscant" Now it's saying Grievous was at the Jedi Temple center and was playing back some transmission sent to the temple.
- Reworded.
"In the transmission, the General explained that his entire reason for living was to end the lives of Jedi." Not seeing how this relates to Oki unless you could merge this sentence in with the one before this. In the following sentence that mentions Grievous tortured Eeth in front of Oki and the Jedi, could you also fluently tie in that to the transmission sentence? They feel disjointed. Perhaps saying Grievous demonstrated his anger toward the Jedi.- Fixed.
Not sure why you're recapping what happened in the episode, i.e, mentioning Obi-Wan and Anakin, while the article is about Oki.- Well, it's about the impact of the transmission. I think it is not wrong to mention it in a short sentence.
- If it doesn't involve Oki in someway, it shouldn't be mentioned.
- I disagree, but to satisfy this objection: adressed.
- This has happened in your other noms as well, Lee. Talk about anything that has to do with Oki, since this is his article, not the episode, individual battles, or other character articles.
- I disagree, but to satisfy this objection: adressed.
- If it doesn't involve Oki in someway, it shouldn't be mentioned.
- Well, it's about the impact of the transmission. I think it is not wrong to mention it in a short sentence.
Ahsoka and the other Padawans were rescued by Trandoshan big game hunters?- Fixed.
- At the moment it is still reading awkwardly. Perhaps saying after Ahsoka was rescued by vduvesoh from the Trandoshan moon Wasskah, Oki was there on Coruscant when the Padawans arrived. Something along those lines. You can keep the sentence as is, but I think the "after being captured by a band of Trandoshan game hunters on the moon Wasskah." makes the sentence odd for me.
- Reworded.
- Again, Lee, we don't need to know about how the Padawans got to Wasskah. Take a look at the sentence at the moment.
- Reworded.
- At the moment it is still reading awkwardly. Perhaps saying after Ahsoka was rescued by vduvesoh from the Trandoshan moon Wasskah, Oki was there on Coruscant when the Padawans arrived. Something along those lines. You can keep the sentence as is, but I think the "after being captured by a band of Trandoshan game hunters on the moon Wasskah." makes the sentence odd for me.
- Fixed.
"...possessed enough Force potential to become a Jedi Knight" Is there a source for this (I don't think there is), and if not, it's speculation. JangFett (Talk) 03:04, April 17, 2011 (UTC)- Just fyi, I don't believe that any source has stated he was a Knight. CC7567 (talk) 03:59, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Yeah, I didn't think so. JangFett (Talk) 15:30, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Changed. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:15, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- I still don't understand why you're saying "he possessed enough Force potential to become a Jedi." Sounds like a filler or just unnecessary fluff. Perhaps an AC member could step in, but maybe you could merge the P&T with the bio since there's not enough information needed for a P&T. Without the extraneous sentence mentioned above, the P&T only mentions that he's a blue-skinned Mon Cal. JangFett (Talk) 17:56, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Other GAs have it too. I think it is a fact that should be mentioned in the P&T. But you're right, maybe an AC can help us. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:57, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Lee, regardless of what you have done in previous GAs, from what I can see, it looks like fluff/unnecessary information. Please see what you can do to remove anything redundant information and other issues that are stated in my original objection. JangFett (Talk) 19:48, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I won't argue with you. You're the AC, you have the experience. Removed the stuff. 287 words. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:10, April 19, 2011 (UTC)
- Lee, regardless of what you have done in previous GAs, from what I can see, it looks like fluff/unnecessary information. Please see what you can do to remove anything redundant information and other issues that are stated in my original objection. JangFett (Talk) 19:48, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Other GAs have it too. I think it is a fact that should be mentioned in the P&T. But you're right, maybe an AC can help us. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:57, April 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I still don't understand why you're saying "he possessed enough Force potential to become a Jedi." Sounds like a filler or just unnecessary fluff. Perhaps an AC member could step in, but maybe you could merge the P&T with the bio since there's not enough information needed for a P&T. Without the extraneous sentence mentioned above, the P&T only mentions that he's a blue-skinned Mon Cal. JangFett (Talk) 17:56, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Changed. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:15, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Yeah, I didn't think so. JangFett (Talk) 15:30, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Just fyi, I don't believe that any source has stated he was a Knight. CC7567 (talk) 03:59, April 17, 2011 (UTC)
Jujiggum[]
"Oki spoke with Skywalker inside the Senate Building on Coruscant" You haven't yet mentioned any Skywalker, you provide no context, and you don't even link Skywalker in the article.- Fixed.
- "Fellow Jedi Knight" Do we actually know that Oki was a Jedi Knight? If not, then you can't say "fellow". If so, then why is it not mentioned anywhere in the article? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 17:55, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Changed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:57, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- "Fellow Jedi Knight" Do we actually know that Oki was a Jedi Knight? If not, then you can't say "fellow". If so, then why is it not mentioned anywhere in the article? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 17:55, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed.
You use both s' and s's (Grievous' and series's). It doesn't matter which one you use; both are technically correct. But please be consistent.- Used s'.
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:10, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:17, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:19, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
- Hey Tope, I think you missed your objection above. Could you please mind to check it. Thanks. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:09, April 27, 2011 (UTC)