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Jark (clone trooper)[]
- Nominated by: QuiGonJinn (Talk) 19:05, February 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Lee asked for more ;)
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)[]
Support[]
- More. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:57, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Keep them coming. Kilson 20:27, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
- Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:20, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
- Good show! Feel free to change the link I added to "Protection bubble" if it's incorrect. Menkooroo 02:08, March 8, 2011 (UTC)
- Force pocket? Really? 1358 (Talk) 21:37, March 8, 2011 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:27, March 9, 2011 (UTC)
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I kinda missed this[]
I think you linked Galactic Republic twice in the first paragraph of the bio.In the second paragraph of the bio, you should mention that Jark and Devil Dogs were part of the intial ground troops that landed on the planet.- Done.
You should probably cut down the information about Fisto and Koon a little at the start of the third paragraph, just because it doesn't directly effect Jark. Maybe say "Fisto and Koon were separated from Jak and the rest of the Devil Dogs during the battle" or something along those lines.- Addressed.
"Ventress then initiated a search for survivors and killed those she could find before leaving the scene. Ultimately, Jark was among the casualties sustained in the fight." Combine these two sentances. Maybe say, "....before leaving the scene, including Jark." just so it reads a little smoother.- Actually, I intentionally structured it this way so to keep Jark's death ambiguous. The comic does not make it clear whether Jark was killed by Ventress during her search, or if he'd been killed earlier by the droids.
- OK, I see. I didn't read the comic, so I assumed he had died.
- Actually, I intentionally structured it this way so to keep Jark's death ambiguous. The comic does not make it clear whether Jark was killed by Ventress during her search, or if he'd been killed earlier by the droids.
- Otherwise, it looks very good. Nice job Jinn, I missed your writing. Kilson 03:30, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks. Nice to see you back as well. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 16:33, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:27, March 9, 2011 (UTC)