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Kane GriggsEdit

• Nominated by: Xicer9^(Combadge) 04:31, March 1, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another obscure DE character.

(5 ACs/2 Users/7 Total)Edit

Support

1. Cylka^-talk- 05:24, March 3, 2010 (UTC)
2. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 07:14, March 3, 2010 (UTC)
3. Be a little more mindful of run-ons. I fixed one, but there are many close calls as well. Graestan^(Talk) 01:04, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:54, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
5. Grunny (talk) 09:14, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
6. Going for the snowball. CC7567 ^(talk) 09:24, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
7. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 14:33, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. Cylka:
   • I'm usually a proponent of details, however I feel that the intro is a bit too long and detailed for the length of the article. I noticed a couple of sentences that could be cut out, especially regarding his relationship with Marfa. I didn't want to make these changes myself without consulting you, but if you want, I could do so.
     • I combined the two sentences dealing with their first meeting and Griggs' proposal. I also cut out the sentence about him starting a new family. Marfa formed a pretty significant part of Griggs' biography so I didn't want to cut out any important details. Hopefully this is better.
       • Great! That was what I was looking for.
   • You forgot to use Marfa Thorbin's last name in the article. I went through and changed it, but please check to make sure that I didn't miss any mentions.
     • I apologize for that. In some articles I've seen first names used over last so I wasn't sure what the precedent was.
       • Precedent is to always use last name, except when using the last name would cause confusion about who it would be referring to eg. when talking about two or more people sharing the same surname in the same section. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 22:12, March 1, 2010 (UTC)
   • I think that you could expand his P/T a little by talking about how his emotions influenced his actions.
     • Expanded.
   • In the Bts, you should selfsource the encyclopedic mentions. Otherwise - has since been given brief entries in numerous encyclopedic sources over the years - is an unsourced statement.
     • Done.
   • Can you source any of the information in the bio to the encyclopedias?
     • Not really, the entries are all variations of "A navigator aboard the New Republic Star Destroyer Emancipator during the Battle of Calamari." None of them give any new information.
   • Nice work. Cylka^-talk- 16:54, March 1, 2010 (UTC)
     • Thanks a lot for the review! Xicer9^(Combadge) 18:35, March 1, 2010 (UTC)
2. Toprawa:
   • Please kill redlinks in the intro per GAN Rule 8.
     • Killed.
   • Please at least provide redlinks for mother and child. Earn bonus points by filling them in: "He eventually fell in love with and married another woman and fathered a child."
     • Created and linked.
   • Excellent overall. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:26, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
     • Thanks much for the review! Xicer9^(Combadge) 05:50, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by AgriCorps 14:33, March 6, 2010 (UTC)