- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Kep-She[]
- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:01, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Well, after two CAs to Cat and Mouse, I simply had to write a GA :P
(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)[]
Support[]
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:43, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- -- 1358 (Talk) 18:01, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 11:45, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 01:19, September 18, 2010 (UTC)
- JangFett (Talk) 23:35, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
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Lee, before I even give this a review, there is a number of grammatical errors in the article. Please go back and carefully read through your work. JangFett (Talk) 19:59, September 5, 2010 (UTC)- Should be better now. Damn, forgot the copy-edit. Sorry. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:59, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
- Still remains.
- Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:58, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
"The so-named Battle of Malastare Narrows claimed many lives and many ships; however Kep-She's task force managed to destroy Trench's flagship, breaking the corporate blockade and supposedly killing the Harch admiral." Please take a look at this sentence. You use "; however" incorrectly. Somehow the two clauses don't connect.I don't see any reason for you to say "so-named."It's not only this, Lee. You need to check your comma usage as well. I'm still seeing that issue in the article.In the intro, where do you get "intense" from, because I don't recall reading or hearing about that. That's OR/speculation. JangFett (Talk) 15:36, September 13, 2010 (UTC)- Jon took care of those issues in his copy-edit, Lee, but please take care of the intense and so-named problem. JangFett (Talk) 15:41, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you to both of you for reminding me on this problem. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:05, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Both fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:14, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you to both of you for reminding me on this problem. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:05, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Jon took care of those issues in his copy-edit, Lee, but please take care of the intense and so-named problem. JangFett (Talk) 15:41, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:58, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Still remains.
- Should be better now. Damn, forgot the copy-edit. Sorry. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:59, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358[]
Quick glance: "…during the Clone Wars.[2] ten years later[3]…" I don't know whether 'ten years later' is supposed to be a part of the earlier sentence (then why a period?) or the next sentence (Please capitalize the first letter).-- 1358 (Talk) 14:03, September 6, 2010 (UTC)- Should be a comma. Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:34, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
"Admiral Trench wasn't dead, however; he escaped and joined the Separatists during the Clone Wars…" Does the comic you sourced this sentence to that Trench joined the Separatists during the Clone Wars, or just that he joined them?-- 1358 (Talk) 15:15, September 14, 2010 (UTC)- Sourcing error. Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:45, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum[]
Do you know for certain that you can use just "She" in place of Kep-She? Since it's hyphenated, I don't think you can split it up like that unless the source itself does.- Replaeced all instances of She with Kep-She.
Last sentence of the intro is worded poorly and awkwardly.- Fixed.
Please make the paragraph sizes in the body more uniform. The first very short paragraph looks out of place.- Better?
"The battle which ensued claimed many lives and many ships; however She's task force managed to destroy Trench's flagship, breaking the corporate blockade and supposedly killed the Harch admiral." Grammar.- Fixed.
Grammar mistake in the last paragraph of the bio, too. Also, is that much detail really necessary for Kep-She's article?- Removed some.
You only name the Battle of Malastare Narrows in the opening quote, so when you name it in the BTS it's not entirely clear that you're referring to the battle in which Kep-She took place.- Fixed.
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:46, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:58, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
Soresu[]
I'd fix this myself, but it's so obvious that I need to state it. Notice anything wrong with the section names?SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 04:28, September 17, 2010 (UTC)- Stupid, even for my standards. Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:51, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
Grunny[]
In the second paragraph of the biography section, you reference "Cat and Mouse" twice in a row. Normally I'd just remove the first one, but please check you didn't intend one of them to be referenced to a different source. Grunny (talk) 02:00, September 21, 2010 (UTC)- Nah, an error. Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:32, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:35, September 22, 2010 (UTC)