- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Koho[]
- Nominated by: JangFett (Talk) 18:00, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Poor
DenalKoho. :(
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)[]
Support
- --Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:19, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 14:14, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
- Koho's ultimate fate remains unknown? SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 09:33, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
- How could I not vote for a Denal-related character? :P QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:53, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 23:41, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:00, November 16, 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Lee strikes again
Please source the quote.Please source the last sentence in the BtS.Possible something else will come, but otherwise another good clone GAN. --Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:05, October 11, 2009 (UTC)- All addressed, Lee; thanks for catching these.
- Attack of the Clone
You're going to have to find a better source for his death. Neither of the episodes or their guides explicitly confirmed that he died.CC7567 (talk) 18:16, October 11, 2009 (UTC)- Yeah, I was afraid about this. I'll leave it ambiguous then about Koho's death; however, we know that Denal died.
- It's sounding more and more like you're disregarding the whole review process that we went through (and are still going through, in fact) for Hunting the Hunters III. Being "afraid about this" sounds like you were just hoping that no one would catch it. It's simple: either a source confirms it or it doesn't. Nothing in between. I don't want to see this happen again. CC7567 (talk) 18:29, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- I may but in, but I think meant about being afraid, that his sources don't work and not that no should catch them. Although it is not confirmed it is possible, but his death has no source.--Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:33, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- My point about proper source coverage still stands regardless of whatever else happens. CC7567 (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- I understand your point and apologize. No offense. --Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:46, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- My point about proper source coverage still stands regardless of whatever else happens. CC7567 (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- I may but in, but I think meant about being afraid, that his sources don't work and not that no should catch them. Although it is not confirmed it is possible, but his death has no source.--Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:33, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- It's sounding more and more like you're disregarding the whole review process that we went through (and are still going through, in fact) for Hunting the Hunters III. Being "afraid about this" sounds like you were just hoping that no one would catch it. It's simple: either a source confirms it or it doesn't. Nothing in between. I don't want to see this happen again. CC7567 (talk) 18:29, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- Yeah, I was afraid about this. I'll leave it ambiguous then about Koho's death; however, we know that Denal died.
An infobox picture, perhaps? I cannot understand why you lack a main picture and yet have one in the body.- Unless you want me to crop a image of him, I cannot get anything decent. He was first seen right behind Rex, and then later he's behind Denal. He's in a very obstructive location.
- You could try asking JMAS if you're unsure about the quality of the image, but you still need an infobox image. Rule 16 states that nominations must "include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available," which indeed they are. CC7567 (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- I uploaded a temporary (Or perhaps permanent) infobox image, CC. :)
- You could try asking JMAS if you're unsure about the quality of the image, but you still need an infobox image. Rule 16 states that nominations must "include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available," which indeed they are. CC7567 (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
- Unless you want me to crop a image of him, I cannot get anything decent. He was first seen right behind Rex, and then later he's behind Denal. He's in a very obstructive location.
"Denal told the Duros bounty hunter to surrender, although their capturing of Bane was cut short when they engaged the latter in a duel, which resulted in the death of Denal." This sounds like only Denal and Bane were involved, but then you say "their capturing of Bane."CC7567 (talk) 18:29, October 11, 2009 (UTC)- Addressed; hope that helps.
- The Grand Master
"...the clones joined Jedi General Anakin Skywalker and his Padawan, Ahsoka Tano." Joined them in what?"In retaliation, Skywalker soon ordered Rex..." In retaliation aganist what?- Bah, both addressed.
Does any source actually explicitly state/show them engaging in "a duel" with Bane? IIRC, the confrontation, or whatever happened, wasn't shown on-screen at all except for Bane's apparent "death." Also, the fact that Bane escaped the confrontation might be worth mentioning in the article.Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 01:38, October 24, 2009 (UTC)- Addressed. Thanks for the review, Jonny. :)
- No prob. I'll give it another look-over ASAP. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 00:11, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
- Addressed. Thanks for the review, Jonny. :)
- A few more
It's not very clear in the intro if the battle over Devaron and the battle on Bane's ship are the same battles or two separate battles.- Addressed.
"Serving under Captain CC-7567, nicknamed "Rex," the clones joined Jedi General Anakin Skywalker..." Who exactly do you mean by "the clones"? The only ones you've introduced so far are Koho and Rex. Do you mean them? Or are therme more clones involved?- Eh, it should be "Koho." Addressed.
- Ok, but does this mean that Rex joined, too or just Koho? And the meaning of the word "joined" is a little unclear here. Do you just mean he fought alongside them? Or did he meet up with them?
- Hope this is sufficient. :P
- Ok, but does this mean that Rex joined, too or just Koho? And the meaning of the word "joined" is a little unclear here. Do you just mean he fought alongside them? Or did he meet up with them?
- Eh, it should be "Koho." Addressed.
Parts of the bio seem to be following the battle more than following Koho. For example, when you start off the second paragraph with "As the clone troopers..." Does this include Koho? Try to tweak parts of this section to make it more from Koho's point of view.Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 21:29, October 26, 2009 (UTC)- Adressed; thanks, Jonny. Sorry for not addressing these eariler. I've been busy.
- No prob; I've been busy lately myself. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 20:54, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
- Adressed; thanks, Jonny. Sorry for not addressing these eariler. I've been busy.
- Clone attack II
Please expand the battle in the intro—throughout the body, in fact. It otherwise sounds like a pointless engagement if you don't mention what the objective was or what the circumstances of Rex's order for Koho and Denal to find Skywalker were.- Addressed; hope this helps.
The episode is not a source for Denal's death.- Addressed.
Please get in a note about where he was named in the Bts.CC7567 (talk) 04:56, November 13, 2009 (UTC)"to retake the stolen holocron" in the intro and "to recover the stolen holocron from bounty hunter Cad Bane" in the body: to retake what stolen holocron? Neither of these mentions are clear.- Addressed.
It's still unclear why Tano chased after Bane. If you can't get in the mention about the trap, please find some other way of shortening the information.CC7567 (talk) 04:03, November 14, 2009 (UTC)- Addressed.
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:25, November 17, 2009 (UTC)