In the description, I think that "missile launcher emplacement" would look a lot better than "emplacement missile launcher", unless the source described it in that way.
I was mostly trying to change the wording up with respect to the introduction, but I think it's actually superfluous, given the rest of the sentence and the use of "emplacement" in the following sentence. I've removed it outright. jSarek 22:36, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
You need to mention that the emplacement was in use during the Rebellion era in the body of the article.
Hmm, this may be more complicated than I originally thought. See comments. jSarek 22:36, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
Followed recommendation in comments below. jSarek 09:04, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
Mention that the missiles were anti-infantry in the body of the article.
You should probably create a history section and move some of the parts of the description section that do not describe the properties of the LX-80 to it. Information on the manufacturer, cost, and eras where the emplacement was used would go well in a history section.--Exiled Jedi(Greetings) 15:11, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
I'm not sure whether that's the right decision for this article. The manufacturer needs to be mentioned in the description section to give context for the interoperability of PLX series ordnance with it, and as stated below, I'm not entirely sure how the era could be handled. Cost would certainly be appropriate there, but I don't think it alone could support an entire History section by itself. jSarek 22:36, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
"Eighty missile tubes contained as many missiles, and an automatic loader could load a reserve of eighty more missiles when the first payload was expended." It's probably due to my fatigue, but I'm having trouble understanding this. Do you think you could reword it so that it's clearer how the LX-80 fits into this sentence?
I think I can. You, however, must decide if I have succeeded! jSarek 05:35, August 12, 2011 (UTC)
I would recommend paraphrasing the Bts in-text quote more. While direct quotes are good, paraphrasing quotes into article text adds more fluidity.
Approved by AgriCorps 08:28, August 20, 2011 (UTC)
The era may be more complicated than I originally thought. The book mentions in its introduction that "The bases featured in Hideouts & Strongholds are intended to be fairly generic. Gamemasters should have no difficulties working the material in this volume into a Star Wars campaign of any era, from the time of Tales of the Jedi to the New Republic period." Taking that at face value, the launcher could be found in any of the intervening eras, but I don't think that's the intent here. Given the fact it's a specific model with ties to other specific models of weapon, one would presume (though probably could not confirm) they were not in use over that whole 4,000+ year period. Also, the quote refers specifically to the bases featured in the book, not the opening chapter on base engineering where the LX-80 is to be found ... and which has no specific discussion of time frame at all. I'm open to ideas on how to handle this quite vague discussion of its era. jSarek 22:36, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
It seems to me that you can't really say which eras the weapon existed in. Leaving it blank and having a Behind the Scenes noting how the era was left ambiguous in the book, seems to be the best option in my opinion.--Exiled Jedi(Greetings) 13:30, August 9, 2011 (UTC)