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Lex (clone trooper)[]
- Nominated by: Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 00:13, December 2, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: This has been sitting on my to do list for far too long...
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)[]
Support[]
- Jinzler 14:14, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
- —Tommy 9281 Thursday, February 3, 2011, 13:21 UTC
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 18:11, February 12, 2011 (UTC)
- Menkooroo 03:24, February 13, 2011 (UTC)
- JangFett (Talk) 20:56, February 13, 2011 (UTC)
Object[]
Xd1358[]
Preliminary objections:
Two unsourced items in the infobox.The intro seems a bit long compared to the body. I suggest you take out the context on Clone Wars.References go after commas.1358 (Talk) 13:45, December 2, 2010 (UTC)- All should be fixed. Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 23:15, December 2, 2010 (UTC)
You may find some quite nit-picky stuff in here, but since you're kinda new on the page, it's better to learn these small things now. :-)
In the {{Youmay}} template, do you find anything incorrect? Hint: Capitalization. ;)- Capita--heeeeeeeyyy...
Generally, we don't include eye color (nor hair color) in the infobox for clone troopers, since it is not confirmed that Lex also had brown eyes.In the intro, you must capitalize all ranks that are referring to an individual. In this case, Herc's rank needs adjusting.I'm not really familiar with the source, but is "Battle of Akoshissss" mentioned in the novel directly, or is it a conjectural title? If it is, then the article needs to be pipelinked, like [[Battle of Akoshissss|battle]].Please do a link check as well as a copy-edit in the bio. The same rank issue also appears there.The two first sentences can't be sourced to the clone troopers' databank entry. Please adjust.- Him being a clone still needs to be sourced to the db entry. 1358 (Talk) 21:08, December 5, 2010 (UTC)
- I don't see any change. 1358 (Talk) 20:47, December 15, 2010 (UTC)
- This isn't what you meant...?
- No, the first sentence can be sourced to Decide your Destiny, but "Like all other clones, Lex was a clone of Mandalorian bounty hunter Jango Fett." can't. 1358 (Talk) 18:50, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
- Oh. Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 22:00, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
- No, the first sentence can be sourced to Decide your Destiny, but "Like all other clones, Lex was a clone of Mandalorian bounty hunter Jango Fett." can't. 1358 (Talk) 18:50, December 20, 2010 (UTC)
- This isn't what you meant...?
- I don't see any change. 1358 (Talk) 20:47, December 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Him being a clone still needs to be sourced to the db entry. 1358 (Talk) 21:08, December 5, 2010 (UTC)
The third sentence can't be sourced to Star Wars Annual 2011. Please fix.Particular reason why 'the' is capitalized in "The Force?"Why did the Galactic Senate send the battalion to Akoshissss? Was Krossen there?Article for the scientist's starship?Not really an objection, but could you add the release date (or even year) for the source material?- I'll read it through once more after you've fixed these. 1358 (Talk) 18:53, December 3, 2010 (UTC)
- OK, I believe I've fixed them all, except for the copy-edit
and Panith's ship, which I will do either later today or tomorrow morning. Thanks for your time! =D Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 01:02, December 4, 2010 (UTC) - Try now. Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 17:58, December 8, 2010 (UTC)
- Try now. Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 02:58, December 18, 2010 (UTC)
- OK, I believe I've fixed them all, except for the copy-edit
Jinzler[]
On a number of occasions, the source refers to Lex as being a clone commando, so this needs to be reflected in the article.That Kamino is his homeworld and that his height is 1.83 meters is currently infobox only information. Both these facts need to be mentioned in the main body of the article as well.- Have a look-see of the two above. Sorry for the long wait.
At starwars.com/decideyourdestiny, if you check out the content for The Way of the Jedi, boxes J and K include an image of a clone trooper. I'm pretty certain that this trooper must be Lex, so therefore the image should be included in the article.- Added image. I even got the one where he's posing. :P Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 22:35, January 2, 2011 (UTC)
You need to specify in the "Behind the scenes" section the various options about what can happen to Lex. Basically you just need to briefly cover the following: after infiltrating the base, Eerin's Padawan, Kos, R3-G0 and Lex have a choice as to whether to follow Panith into a laboratory or follow some MagnaGuards into a hangar, and if they follow the droids then Lex volunteers to blow up Panith's starship. R3-G0 then goes aboard the ship and if they choose not to follow him aboard, Lex sets off the explosives and dies from poison gas, and later that night, the clone troopers on Akoshissss hold a wake to honor Lex and the other clones lost in the battle. If they chose to follow R3-G0, they are inside the ship when the gas is released. Lex then blows the ship up and they then go and capture Panith. Going back a bit, if they chose to follow Panith to the laboratory when they entered the base, the Padawans leave Lex to stand guard, but he soon after goes to help them and shoots Krossen in the chest, and the reader then has the choice of helping Lex battle Krossen, or going after Panith. If the Padawan assists Lex, then Lex draws Krossen into the doorway, and R3-G0 shuts the doors on the creature, and Lex subsequently kills Krossen. If the reader chooses to pursue Panith then Lex kills Krossen using an EMP bomb, which also destroys R3-G0. --Jinzler 09:21, December 23, 2010 (UTC)- Now, this is the one that I'm going to need some guidance on. AFAIK there are no Decide Your Destiny articles that are as close to 100% completion as Lex here, so I don't really have an example to follow. How should all this be included in the Bts? My intial thought was to get it all point-form-ed, but I'm not sure if that's the right thing to do. =/ Bonslywizard (Send a transmission) 05:17, January 8, 2011 (UTC)
- Nice work on the article so far. I hope these objections aren't too daunting and I'm happy to help you fix them if you encounter any problems. --Jinzler 09:21, December 23, 2010 (UTC)
I think that the information on Lex's height would be more appropriate in the "Personality and traits" section of the article, rather than in the "Biography" section.You could perhaps add a brief note to the BTS section stating that Lex features in the The Way of the Jedi content at starwars.com/decideyourdestiny.- Top two are fixed.
I think that you should remove the "Ambig" template at the top of the article and replace it with "RPG" and "Endgame" templates within the body of the article, as has been done in the Raan Calrissian GA. This is because I think that we should approach the "Decide Your Destiny" novels in the same way that we approach content from RPG material, by assuming that everything is canon and only the events influenced by the reader's decisions are ambiguous. Therefore, the fact that Lex was a clone trooper from Kamino is canon. However, the stuff about him going to Akoshissss is ambiguously canon, because it is possible for the reader not to encounter him. Please let me know your thoughts on this.- Well, I only used RPG/Endgame for the part about the battle itself, since all the rest is agreed upon by all the paths. The different paths only influence what happens during the battle. Regardless on what the reader chooses to do, Panith will still have made Krossen and it will still have been almost done. When the Padwan reaches Akoshisss, Eerin and her battalion is already there, even if the Padwan doesn't encounter them. Bonslywizard (Send a transmission) 02:10, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
- That should be everything. Well done. --Jinzler 14:03, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
jgjtj[]
I don't know why you mentioned redundant things in the bio such as "Also like Fett, Lex was 1.83 meters tall." It's irrelevant.Fact tag in the infobox"In response to this, the Galactic Senate sent the battalion to the Trandoshan moon of Akoshissss" what battalion?Is there a way you could make the biography read more in Lex's poi? Right now, It feels like a summarized version of events leading up to the Battle of Akoshissss."If, when the team entered the base, the reader chooses to follow Panith rather than the MagnaDroids," Awkwardly worded sentence- Rephrased. Sorry, that was me. --Jinzler 00:17, January 19, 2011 (UTC)
- I'm going to check the bts again after you take care of these objections.
- All have been addressed. Sorry for the long-ish wait; been kinda sick this week. XP Bonslywizard (Send a transmission) 20:56, January 31, 2011 (UTC)
Also, please watch your spelling and grammar. Be sure to read your work before submitting any changes. JangFett (Talk) 23:29, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
The Lex Express[]
The Clone Trooper databank entry doesn't mention that Kamino is in Wild Space --- that part of the sentence will have to be sourced to something else (probably The Essential Atlas, but I'm not certain on that).- The Atlas (or, the companion, at least) only says "extragalactic", and Kamino's article sources it to Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds, so I'm putting that there, and if in my virtual travels I find anything else I'll replace.
The paragraph right before the RPG template is unsourced at the end.- Personality and traits currently sources his height of 1.83 metres to The Way of the Jedi --- should that be sourced to the databank, like in the infobox?
There's some tense shifting in the first paragraph of behind the scenes --- you go from "his appearances was" to "is featured in the novel's online content" --- past and present are both fine, but definitely pick one and stick with it.- S'all I got! Good work. Menkooroo 14:18, February 7, 2011 (UTC)
- OK. Bonslywizard (Send a transmission) 18:03, February 12, 2011 (UTC)
Jujiggum[]
"Like all other clones, Lex…" All other clone troopers perhaps, but not all other clones.That's all I've got, pending the resolution of Menk's objections. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:45, February 12, 2011 (UTC)- Yup. Bonslywizard (Send a transmission) 18:04, February 12, 2011 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:56, February 13, 2011 (UTC)
- Just a note, I' ll be going on a mini-vacation starting today and I won't be around the next few days. I might still be able to edit, but chances are I won't. I'll be back no later than the 31st. Happy Life Day, everybody! Bonslywizard(Send a transmission) 14:52, December 26, 2010 (UTC)