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Lux Bonteri[]
- Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 01:35, August 11, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A guy who hit on Ahsoka? He has to be cool!
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)[]
Support[]
- He's going to die a horrible death JangFett (Talk) 05:35, August 12, 2011 (UTC)
- Sorry about the mixup with the commas.--Talrrivanian (Headquarters) 06:43, August 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Great read. I think I see similarities between Wikia staff and Filoni—both come up with the most ridiculous ideas. :P 1358 (Talk) 15:59, August 25, 2011 (UTC)
- grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 10:07, September 1, 2011 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn (Talk) 17:38, September 8, 2011 (UTC)
- Well written, CC. --Eyrezer 11:17, September 20, 2011 (UTC)
Object[]
Ahsoka is cheating on Padme for this guy now?[]
"which was headquartered on the Separatist capital of Raxus," IIRC, I think I discussed this with you, and silly TCW still refuses to correct itself. I'm not sure if we should say "the capital of the CIS," because it makes it seem to be the only capital, which isn't quite true.- I'm aware of the inconsistency, but the fact of the matter is that Raxus was home to the Separatist Congress, and there are numerous sources that state it was the capital of the Separatists during the war. That doesn't automatically outlaw the other capitals, since it's completely possible that they were capitals at other times during the war, but I have to honestly say that I haven't yet come across any other official source that explicitly identifies the currently listed capitals (besides Raxus) as such. Do you know of any, perchance?
- While most don't identify it has capital, databank sources list the Separatist Council as the in-command or leaders of the CIS, by saying "These inhospitable features made Mustafar an ideal sanctuary for the ever mobile Separatist Council that led the Confederacy of Independent Systems during the Clone Wars. (Mustafar)" "The world served as a base-of-operations for the ever-mobile Separatist Council, the assembled trade and commerce barons in command of the Confederacy of Independent Systems. (Utapau)" CSWE identifies the Council as the ruling body of the CIS. From what I read in this article, just saying the makes it seem like it's the only capital. What if you say "the capital around this time" or something along those lines until something is clarified in a source? JangFett (Talk) 14:53, August 11, 2011 (UTC)
- To be honest, I think adjusting the article to compensate for the other "capitals" would be a little overkill. Unless the term "capital" is explicitly defined (according to a source) as wherever the Separatist Council happens to be taking refuge at one point in time, I'm uncomfortable with alluding to something that still hasn't been clarified—the question if those other worlds were officially designated as capitals. In addition, I don't see a problem with the current wording; saying that Raxus was "the capital" still doesn't rule out the fact that there could have been other capitals during the war. The fact of the matter is that Raxus was the capital during Bonteri's early life, and the issue of other capitals simply isn't relevant to him, so I don't feel comfortable even alluding to other potential capitals when this canonical problem isn't relevant to his article. I do appreciate the urge to compensate for earlier pre-TCW source material, but it doesn't seem like that material is explicit enough to warrant a direct problem here. CC7567 (talk) 18:48, August 11, 2011 (UTC)
- While most don't identify it has capital, databank sources list the Separatist Council as the in-command or leaders of the CIS, by saying "These inhospitable features made Mustafar an ideal sanctuary for the ever mobile Separatist Council that led the Confederacy of Independent Systems during the Clone Wars. (Mustafar)" "The world served as a base-of-operations for the ever-mobile Separatist Council, the assembled trade and commerce barons in command of the Confederacy of Independent Systems. (Utapau)" CSWE identifies the Council as the ruling body of the CIS. From what I read in this article, just saying the makes it seem like it's the only capital. What if you say "the capital around this time" or something along those lines until something is clarified in a source? JangFett (Talk) 14:53, August 11, 2011 (UTC)
- I'm aware of the inconsistency, but the fact of the matter is that Raxus was home to the Separatist Congress, and there are numerous sources that state it was the capital of the Separatists during the war. That doesn't automatically outlaw the other capitals, since it's completely possible that they were capitals at other times during the war, but I have to honestly say that I haven't yet come across any other official source that explicitly identifies the currently listed capitals (besides Raxus) as such. Do you know of any, perchance?
"Yet even after his father, who worked as a military officer for the Confederacy's armed forces, was killed in battle with the Grand Army of the Republic's clone troopers" He died with the clone troopers or was he killed by clone troopers?- Adjusted for clarity.
- Nice job, CC, but TCW and its nonsense makes you wonder when this show will end. :P JangFett (Talk) 01:55, August 11, 2011 (UTC)
This guy must have some nerve...[]
In the introduction you use waay to many comas, consider forming new sentences for a better flow. Right now the whole intro is choppy because of this problem.- To be honest, using more sentences will only make text choppier. Commas add more fluency for sentences. This is more of a personal preference for writers, but right now, there is nothing grammatically wrong with the article's formatting and nothing that extremely interrupts sentence flow.
- Sure
- To be honest, using more sentences will only make text choppier. Commas add more fluency for sentences. This is more of a personal preference for writers, but right now, there is nothing grammatically wrong with the article's formatting and nothing that extremely interrupts sentence flow.
This sentence in the P&t Upon meeting a Jedi, Tano, for the first time,[2] Bonteri initially did not know what to make of her. is also choppy maybe needs to be two sentences.- Same as above.
- Maybe more to come later.--Talrrivanian (Headquarters) 08:10, August 17, 2011 (UTC)
QGJ[]
In the intro, I'm not sure you can say that a family can be a part of the Republic. As I see it, a planet can be a part of the Republic, a family can only be loyal or disloyal to it. Although his family was originally part of the Galactic Republic, they sided with the Confederacy following its establishment in 24 BBYQuiGonJinn (Talk) 17:44, September 6, 2011 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:43, September 21, 2011 (UTC)
- While yes, the article is over 1,000 words, I thought that a GAN would be best for now, considering that he will be appearing in the upcoming Season Four. (Hopefully a FAN will come once the dust has settled.) And yes, I promise to diligently update him with new material as it becomes available. CC7567 (talk) 01:35, August 11, 2011 (UTC)