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Mak Plain[]
- Nominated by: Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 09:41, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:A
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(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)[]
Support[]
- No issues here. Good work, Trayus.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:44, August 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Plagueis327 (talk) 22:02, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:02, August 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:49, August 19, 2012 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 06:01, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 19:07, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
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Exiled Jedi[]
"Later in the war, Mak Plain travelled to the Outer Rim world of Zygerria to deal with the Confederate-allied Zygerrian slavers." Could you reword this? At first I thought you meant that he went to Zygerria to defeat/go up against the slavers, which I don't seem to remember from the show.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 04:28, August 19, 2012 (UTC)- Changed "deal" to "consort." Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 06:51, August 19, 2012 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone[]
The caption for the leading quote is mixing up the speakers at the moment. Could you adjust it so that the order of speakers is clear?- Clarified.
Might be worth mentioning in the intro if Burtoni's loan bill passed or not, since Plain was involved with it to some extent.- Added.
Could you split up the intro paragraph somewhere?- I tested it out, but the only place to split it is really between sentences 3 and 4, and that makes both paragraphs oddly small. I would rather avoid arbitrary breaks when the sum of the smaller paragraphs isn't prohibitively long.
In the bio, I don't think "Pursuit of Peace" clarifies that the loan bill was passed. Please source it properly—I believe Chee's Twitter comment is what we currently use.- Woops, thought I had fixed that.
Regarding the Zygerrian Slavers Guild: I know that they existed during the time of the Republic, but TCW hasn't directly referenced the Slavers Guild, only the Zygerrian Slave Empire. It sounds like it would be better to utilize the Slave Empire instead of the Slavers Guild in the bio.- Taken care of.
- Hey ho, politics. Wait, why isn't this on the FAN? It's over
9,0001,000. CC7567 (talk) 06:46, August 22, 2012 (UTC)- Hey I hadn't noticed that. Hm, I guess when this passes I'll just throw it over to the FAN. Should be a quick pass over there. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 04:53, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
Comments[]
- Part 2 of me and CC's TCWProject: Politics! Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:26, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:07, August 23, 2012 (UTC)