- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Unidentified Death Watch saboteur[]
- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:56, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Short and <add critic comment here>
(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)[]
Support
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 22:33, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 10:36, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Jonjedigrandmaster (We seed the stars) 22:14, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:28, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
- JangFett (Talk) 18:43, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:00, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Floyd has a few
Why did the CIS want to sabotage the cruiser? Clarify.- Added that the CIS was in war with the Republic, but we don't know anything else.
You say they performed a background check on this Mandalorian; any info on the results?- Added a little bit.
- That's all. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:37, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:31, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Soresu has 2 <--Rhyme (Plus Makashi is 2)
Should the appearance have a (appears in hologram) note?- Yep, added.
After the sabotage. This seems to indicate that the sabotage mission was successful. If info on the mission's success is available, it should be mentioned earlier. If it was unsuccessful or we don't know, it would be safer to put "attempted sabotage".SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 11:11, April 23, 2010 (UTC)- Added "attempted". Thank you for your review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:31, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
- However, during the process, the Mandalorian was spotted Wait, so he wasn't successful? If he wasn't, also change during the process to before he could complete his mission or something to that effect. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 22:44, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
- The problem is that we only know something about this guy from the two quotes of Kenobi. Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:11, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
- However, during the process, the Mandalorian was spotted Wait, so he wasn't successful? If he wasn't, also change during the process to before he could complete his mission or something to that effect. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 22:44, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Added "attempted". Thank you for your review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:31, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
"Died: c. 22 BBY,[1][2]" Is there supposed to be the place where he died after the references? Otherwise remove the comma. -- 1358 (Talk) 13:44, April 23, 2010 (UTC)- There was some unverified information (not from me in there) which I removed and forgot the comma. Removed it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:08, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
No article (at least a stub) for the battle? Jonjedigrandmaster (We seed the stars) 22:47, April 25, 2010 (UTC)- If you mean his capture, I created one. If you mean Kenobis investigation, it would be too much context. Thanks for your review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:07, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
- Toprawa:
Any reason why a specific link isn't provided for this Republic cruiser, both in the intro and body? "he was hired by the Confederacy of Independent Systems to sabotage a Republic cruiser"- Linked and created a stub.
Question: is this the Mandalorian whom Kenobi pursues across Mandalore and who then commits suicide by jumping off a building or whatever it was? Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:06, April 30, 2010 (UTC)- No, that's the Death Watch bomber. -- 1358 (Talk) 17:22, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
- Xd is correct, this is another person. Thanks for your review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:33, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
- No, that's the Death Watch bomber. -- 1358 (Talk) 17:22, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:00, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
- Lee, if you get a chance, can you take care of that redlink? I saw that you incorrectly tried to pipelink the nonexistent article, and I made a minor correction. JangFett (Talk) 18:32, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
- Yep I created that while you corrected that link. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:34, April 30, 2010 (UTC)