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Z9Edit

  • Nominated by: Cevan IMPpress (talk) 01:11, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Decided to knock this guy out before I really get cracking on Gubacher.

(2 ACs/5 Users/7 Total)Edit

SupportEdit

  1. Shayn Mikel (talk) 04:10, November 30, 2016 (UTC) The article is about as comprehensive as it gets for a single-episode background character.
  2. Great work! Nivlacanator(talk) 05:41, December 1, 2016 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 17:59, December 29, 2016 (UTC)
  4. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 01:44, May 1, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 15:56, May 1, 2017 (UTC)
  6. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:20, May 22, 2017 (UTC)
  7. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 22:13, July 5, 2017 (UTC)

ObjectEdit

NivlacanatorEdit
  • I would identify D-Suad. Something like this: "efforts of D-Squad, a Republic squad of spy droids". Nivlacanator(talk) 05:52, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • At the word "boarded", I would suggest making it a link to "Escape from Abafar."
  • A word better than pelted might be better—battered, bombarded.
  • Z9 should also be affiliated with the Republic Military, so that should be added to the infobox, etc.
    • Done. In case anyone should ask, the "military" in "Republic military" is lowercase because, despite the page it links to being uppercase, whoever made that page was in error and it has yet to be uppercase in canon. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 13:40, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
Imperators IIEdit
  • You have some infobox-exclusive information. Imperators II(Talk) 20:48, December 20, 2016 (UTC)
    • I believe that should do it. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 01:46, December 24, 2016 (UTC)
Fred strikes backEdit
  • Is the droid's top ever referred to as a "dome"? If not, I wouldn't refer to it as such. It's not really the correct shape for a dome. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 21:53, April 26, 2017 (UTC)
The CPEdit
  • Hey Cevan, a couple things. Shouldn't the antenna and the computer probe-arm be spelled out in both the infobox and Characteristic sections?
  • Also the word "approach" is used twice in the last part of the characteristics. Please try to switch it up a bit.
  • Nice job otherwise. Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 20:06, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks DeeEdit
  • Some preliminary objections before I look at the prose itself. The references for the droid's height are inadequate as is. Z9 is not mentioned in any of the Databank entries, so you'll need to include a note about how you reached the conclusion. Essentially the exact same objection as Toprawa's objection in the nomination above yours.
  • I'd like to see the intro slightly expanded.
  • As with your Unidentified false Jedi nomination, check your image caption punctuations.
  • Ditto, this goes for the IMDb reference. It requires a backup link, which the template supports.
  • IIRC there's a category for droids by programmed gender. 1358 (Talk) 17:05, May 11, 2017 (UTC)
    • Not sure how I missed that—added. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
  • "Z9 was aboard the space station Valor along with Tarkin shortly before the Republic strategy conference on board the station was set to begin." Two -boards in the same sentence. Please vary your usage; personally I'd swap the first one with "present on".
  • The last sentence of the intro reads awkwardly, and I think the reason is the "while". Quoting the style guide of The Economist, "while" is best reserved for time-related usage. Please try to reword the sentence for better flow.
    • How's that? Cevan IMPpress (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
      • Still sounding a bit choppy. My recommendation would be something like "The Separatist plan to ram the Valor with the cruiser was foiled after a Republic squad managed to detonate the incoming ship, saving Valor and…"
        • How about now? Cevan IMPpress (talk) 15:40, June 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • Piggybacking my first objection, there's too many "aboards/on boards" in the body. Please vary.
  • Emdashes should be kept to a minimum as they break the flow of the text. You have two emdash clauses in the same paragraph in the bio.
    • Removed one of the emdashes. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
  • To say someone "possesses" programming doesn't really sound proper. 1358 (Talk) 21:24, June 5, 2017 (UTC)
    • Changed to "had." Cevan IMPpress (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
ToprawaEdit
  • Similar to my objection on your other nomination, the information regarding Industrial Automaton as Z9's manufacturer, and anything else from that source, requires a manual reference note, as Z9 is not mentioned within. You'll notice particularly the problem with sourcing such an explicit assertion as "Z9 was equipped with a repair arm" to a book that doesn't even mention the droid.
    • I've gone ahead and removed both bits of information sourced to that book. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 13:13, July 22, 2017 (UTC)
  • For the TCW episode's air date, please refer to the Star Wars: The Clone Wars: Episode Guide as a primary source that contains this information, as opposed to the unreliable IMDb. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:01, July 19, 2017 (UTC)

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