Wookieepedia:Inq/Carnor Jax (second review)

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Check CSWE and other sources for info (We're looking at you, Xicer9 the semi-professional source hound)
- He's most likely mentioned in Kanos's Fact File entries, so those need to be checked as well. Xicer9^(Combadge) 05:14, June 10, 2010 (UTC)
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Check the audio drama for new information. Xicer9^(Combadge) 05:14, June 10, 2010 (UTC)
Other stuff: Some POVness (uses of "unfortunate" and "unfortunately" without attributing it to a person), underlinking (missing really simple stuff like Galactic Empire, also missing numerous battle pipelinks, etc), unsourced info exclusive to the intro ("Carnor Jax's death left Lumiya without a known apprentice for almost 30 years."), that first subsection is totally unnecessary, speculation ("Little is known of Jax's subsequent service in the Royal Guard, but it is assumed that he served with distinction as one of the Emperor's bodyguards." what the hell is this?), context issues (Palpatine's death isn't even mentioned in the "The death of the Emperor" section), Bts needs expansion. This article seriously needs a good copyedit. Xicer9^(Combadge) 02:49, July 10, 2010 (UTC)

It appears this article was FAed long before anyone added the audio drama to the appearances list, so one has to wonder if anyone's even checked it for new information. There are currently no refs pointing to the audio, and the only mention of it in the Bts is concerning the voice actor who portrays Jax. I can already tell there's missing information, the audio drama currently establishes that Kanos and Jax were in the same stormtrooper unit, and they were both reassigned to Yinchorr together. Who knows what else is missing? Xicer9^(Combadge) 05:14, June 10, 2010 (UTC)